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angel_9

@angel_9

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#31

hey Mani di...🤗

wow superb update...

Edited

here goes my comment...

They decided to party ...with Sameer & jassi...

so shan dropped her home & then went to his appartment & then pick khanak ...so sweet ...

khanak is worried for him as shan spend 3 hours on road...lovely...

shanak convo ...excellent description...

shan too was worried that he will not be able to meet khanak when they will be in Delhi...

what...sameer & jassi broke up...? & they didn't tell them...Sameer was in bad state but helped shanak when they needed him...awesome description...

amazing convo between shanak & sameer...

i too adored shan when he gave advice to sameer for not giving up...

wonderful, fantastic description...👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

shan was having negative thoughts so he can't sleep & called her at 2:30 am ...& khanak she wanted that he can get off the insecurities which were build inside him...awesome description...👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

they can't see each other in office...but they met at dinner as she insisted to him that she will come by herself & she waited for him ...awesome description...

he asked her to move in with him...ohh he wants to spend more time with her as he thought he will not be able to spend time with her in delhi...wonderful description...

but she knew she can't accept the Offer...& can't explain him the reason for which shan was angry with khanak...amazing...

khanak wow she tried to impress him so that he can talk with her...loved the description...wonderful...

wow he gave her 48 hours for challenge that she will make him talk to her or she will have to move in with him...

now i want to know what happens next so update soon...

hats of...

wow amazing & wonderful the way u expressed their feelings...i am speechless

PS. it was short so will give detailed one next time...for sure... (sorry 4 updating my comment this late...was too busy...& i will be more busy in upcoming weeks...so please forgive me if i don't comment in detail later...)

loved both OS u wrote in MOTW...

Edited by angel_9 - 14 years ago

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Roshni

@Roshni_M

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#32

Mani diii... Hugs...

Im back wid a detailed comment...

The update was fantastically fabulous... Too good...

Loved it... Loved it... Loved it... Very very much...

The way shanak was talking to Sameer and consoling him... Aww... So cute...

And shaan's midnight call wid his insecurity... He is sooo cute... He trusts khanak but still...

The talk im the beach... Was just mindblowing... The way you explained everything was just too good... Loved it...

I just love angry shaan... He looks very very adorable when he is angry...

The talk in the office... Hahaha... Too good... Khanak tricked him and bought him to her cabin... Hahaha...

and ya 1 more thing... I loved shaan's conditions... He is way too smart...Loved the challenge...

Continue soon di...

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christmas

@christmas

Navigator

Posted: 14 years ago

#33

aw i felt so sad at the fight. its like my emotions while reading change as theirs do. it was so cute to see khanak turn it so positive and be excited that it was their first lovers tiff. i almost literally lol-ed at that.

you write so vividly...still distinctly remember the scene from the party at khanaks place after she gave shaan the letter and when they were in the living room and she had found the pendent and the conversation and their interaction event though they were with different group of people. it was as if i was there or that i was watching the scene in real.

totally love the characters that you've created!

as for the moving in...really interested to see how you pan that out.

and definately looking forward to moved to delhi part as then it'll also be that they'll have to face the music of her family knowing the truth and so on...

voicing everyone else before me...plzzz update soon?:)

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-Ray-

@-Ray-

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#34

Maniii , Congrats for the new thread 😊

Loved the update as always !!

Ur khanak is such nagging queen, pick up karo to problem ka karo to problem , perfect wifey matrial she is😆

Loved when shan calld her up in the midnight..awwwe, ur shaan is such cute 😳

wat I loved abt ur story is in every updated there is a issue nd the story moves on,there is nice flow , its never dragging ..:)

I so wish that they wll move together , of course for my own benefit 😉😳 but I loved Khanak's stand against it.

Now who wll win the game ? I m supporting Shan 😃

Update sooon..

hugs

rupa

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purvi08

@purvi08

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#35

mani di congrats for the new thread🥳

the update was fantastic and awesome

keep writing

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Ujjwala

@Ujjwala

Explorer

Posted: 14 years ago

#36

Loved it ...

Can't wait for the next update ...

I want her to lose the bet and move in with him ... 😃

Pls continue soon...

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Jessica

@jparker

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#37

Sigh... another little hiccup... that usually transpires when love is in question...

I have always maintained... love knows no boundaries. With love comes trust.. but love also brings its negativities... like fear, jealousy, ire, even hatred sometimes.

Sigh.. as Shaan feels this feeling of insecurity.. it is natural for him to hold on to her even more strongly. Yes, the tendency for love to become possesive is even more stronger and is such a natural emotion. the fear of losing can make even the strongest of lovers feel shaken!!!

Shaan's demand however right in his place, his suggestion pure.. is not acceptable in our society. Oh yes in this day and age, it might be done and a natural thing. But it still is the way of the west and not so in our culture. And she is so right in refuting that demand. So beautifully you projected his demand as well as her reply... Perfect were they bopth.. right in their places!! It sure becomes difficult to hold your head high up at the same time refuting someone you love. Upholding your culture, your true values.

I am a sucker for such values. And I love Shantanu even more strongly now as he feels these little fears that bring out the adamant child in him. While I praise Khanak for her brevity and oomph. Brilliant Mani... as she realises and stands up to the challenge.. The challenge here not agreeing or disagreeing to have a living relationship.. but the challenge here is convincing him that he need not fear of ever losing her... As she loves him to no ends like he does her...

As my heart races each time they look.. as they fight.. argue.. or even rush to make sure that the other is fine.. I sigh and wait for this never ending tryst with love... as I know that love will win no matter what...

I know Tresspassers are not allowed here... but Mani, you have forced me to tresspass here...

Beautiful update...😳

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