FF~Trespassers Prohibited~#2;Upd.49,50 - 120,121 - Page 93

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Posted: 14 years ago

Since you are likely to miss my comment on the blog and then pass sarcastic comments on me

I am reposting my comment...and a bit more added to it.

Sweetheart!!

How can you write Finale with exclamation marks?

😲😭

This story was so real, your writing was so real. In fact even the setting, the characters, from Shanak to Ragini to even that Nimmo Aunty!!🤣

We trespassed the lives of two characters so well woven. Almost seemed as if we knew them. I am actually crying writing this...this was the reason we became close, I teased you, pestered you with my childish stuff...and when the reason comes to an end. Well...

The very basic theme will remain as one of the most beautiful beginnings...loving someone so much, from childhood to mature adults...away from them. Near them...this idea always fills me up, magically.

It's something explainable.

☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

Another very remarkable thing abt the story was the relationship aspect of it. You always took care it was not some sappy romance. There was Ma-Shaan, Ma-Khanak, Jai-Shaan, Jai-Khanak, Madhavi-Jai, Akshay-Shaan, Madhavi-Shaan-Khanak...and Khanak-Shaan.

👏

Then the right all of them have over each other, whether it's to love or to fight. This thing was so esp. highlighted in the last few updates though the first time I felt it was when Khanak goes to his place, finds her scarf and urges him to speak up. That has been the most romantic update of this FF. honestly. I have cried all the innumerable times I have read it.

⭐️

Then another of your romantic updates was when he just looked at her getting ready. Whoops! It was so awesome!! Lekin mere ko pata hai, you were trying to show off your writing skills🤣

😳

Remember the time when you deleted all previous posts??LOL!! All of us were so devastated!! And then PMs!! I remember PMing everyone I knew who read your FF about your whereabouts!! Gosh!!And then this blog came as such a relief!! This will remain in my bookmarks forever. Gosh. I am gonna miss this.

And yes, no matter how much me and Kari kept pestering you, sat on your head, but you never gave us an adult update🤣😛

Well'you kept the sanctity of Shanak alive'as it is we can imagine well🤣

Am not mentioning anything about the last update..because well, it was too good to be analysed through words. Complete circle. In fact someone said, love does not begin and end the way we seem to think it does.😳

I will continue to savour this..and I hate you for making me everytime I open the thread, that its over.😭

A huge hug to you for this. Never thought would be so attached to a story. A fiction...and lol! You proved me wrong 😛😆

With love,

A jerk 🤣🤗

P.S. You have to find me a clone of this SK!! Yaad rakhna: P

Edited by vatsalya - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Awesome Update Mani
Loves the Whole Parts
all Parts are amazing and Beautiful loooking Pure Shanak
Thanks for awesome Written
Hope you write Another FF Soon..we all of them Waiting
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Posted: 14 years ago
hei mani,
ready for the comments for part 49..
description gorgeous n meeting shaan goes hand in hand with our khanak..her excitement in seeing shaan after 15 days that too after such situation..i'm very excited like her..so cute of her to go to her ma to say that she is leaving to see shaan..
ma didnt ask where she is going which she usually does..may be ma knows where she is heading to just seeing the way she is dressed up..really ma's reply left me wondering y did she reply that way..
everyone in home feeling bad for savita ma not sharing wat is going on in her..we too felt the same way..n they r sure that ma will release her pain to shaan..
yup..jai is the bestest brother in the world..n for his reply she related him n shaan n saying no one returns the compliment..khanak is so cute when she whines..
wow..when shaan wanted to know the reason for his mom's visit to the sharma's n at the same time hesitant to ask her she came by herself to him..the way she felt bad for not being there for her sons like savita ma did..she worried genuinely..really as vatty pointed out the bonding u have shown in each n every character is awesome..hats off for that..the madhvi talked to shaan n said all the things..really she needs a tight hug now..sharma's r really too good to understand abt wat happened n forgive her..
khanak's excitement spilled on the "hey" when she met him..just both of thm holding the hands n the way u have given lot of emotions in them..simply superb mani..
i so imagined the amphi-theater n the way both sat..the way both started analysing savita ma's situation..
wow..rishabh n sonya getting engaged..for her question reg where will "we" get engaged..really shaan said in some washroom..i laughed like anything reading it..
then when he said u stimulate all emotions within me n the explanantion for that was some..we too heve felt the same way imagining those..finally he stopping with "i feel..." later on adding he is always out of control..so true..n asking for a kiss..
finally khanak asking him to come n meet ma today n boosting him to do that..promised him that she'll be with him..their hug was sweet..loved it..
shaan is nervous to enter the hoouse..we were also equally tensed..waiting for ma's outburst..
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Posted: 14 years ago
hei mani,
comments for PART 50
the way u expresses jai n ma's surprise on seeing shaan behind khanak..i really inagined it..
shaan is determined to talk to ma..but really ma stopped on her tracks hearing him calling her "ma..".i loved it..
but when she said jai "ask ur friend if he wants to have coffee.."..wow..ma wat is this..he was like ur son some 15 days back n now u r addressing him as jai's friend..really ma??
finally ma started to talk to shaan..asked him do u know y i am upset with u..the way she asked will u stay away from khanak my heart started pounding erratically..wat is ma asking them..jai came to their aid..but ma wanted to know wat they feel..n her outburst on shaan saying he never cared for her..really like shaan we too were taken aback by this..
who is that at the door stopping ma from speaking more..n who do we see..its ragini with her bags..oh my gosh..she left the home for jai..the way rags vented out the reason for leaving home..poor thing..when everyone there tried to convince ragini to send her back to her home she was quite adamant n had her point to being here..
madhvi called shaan n came to know abt ragini's whereabts n they r coming there..shaan n khanak having their convo silently in the room of 6..so cute..
when ragini's dad mentioned as her being a lovesick teenager i loved the way she gave her explanations..n jai's reaction for that..it was not easy for him to believe that a girl wants him to be her husband..shaan feeling proud abt her..u showed the emotion each n every person in the room felt with her explanation..awesome mani..really i'll miss ur writing dear..pls write soon..
ufff..finally her dad got the msg she wants to deliver n ike a good father was concerned abt how he could support the family..she gave answers for that too..when they tried to ask abt his physical inability the way she reasoned is simply superb..felt tears..awesome to the core..finally her parents understood n they r going to be together..yay!!!! i'm happy for them like everyone there..
poor shaan,khanak n jai..still doesnt know y ma is not talking to them..my heart went out to these 3 now..madhvi n savita ma talking abt wat they felt n ma broke down when madhvi said "you managed to be a perfect mother for not only to your kids but mine too.."
that was enough for ma to break down..her worry abt her kids not sharing their feelings with her..n finally she let out wat was really bothering her..the way she said "he called me ma...but i was just another 'aunt'..." brought tears..the reason for her worry..oh my god..i'm feeling like crying a lot again..this is too emotional mani..loved it to the core..the way she said "u never shared ur pain"..ma took my heart away..ahhh..ma hugged the 3 of them..kushi ki aansoo..yay!!! so 2 engagements coming up..
the way shaan was hesitant to leave n trying to ask ma's permission to meet khanak..he is a true gentleman..really can anyone be like him..i wonder..n really he thought he must get satified with a phone call n left from there..
but he wonders where he placed the car keys..n our nautanki khanak had it with her knowing shaan very well..n she scared him..their convo in the car was so cute.."trespassers are once again prohibited"..lovely mani..
now i have done my part i ask u for an epilogue mani..pls one epilogue..

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