Shilpa *hugs*
I read it! yay!!!
Character sketches
So many characters...Sab kaise yaad rakhoon gi mein! 😲
Ok...Loved the sketched of Shaan and Khanak duno opposite to RBO
Awwwieees I love HT/KW and Ahaana Khandelwal, the rest is BLEH! I mean the faces not the characters.
Shanak are parents and Ahaana is their kid ,Already intrigued to know why they separate!
Part 1-
First of all. I think you are a marvelous writer, I mean you successfully have kept all the characters intact with how you sketched them. So nice beginning to start with. 👏👏
Loved the start-Both characters are accomplished and successful in they own professions.
But kya howa? That's what I want to know.
I think Shaan doesnt know about Ahaana...Khanak left before.
Part 2
I'm a sucker for first meet and the attraction phase of a love story.
You described her reaction the Shaan as a creep nicely.She seems so timid.
What's with the 'I want to taste you'? How nasty! Shaan surely would have given me wrong impressions for a life time! But he is drunk never mind.
I'm already seeing the characters build up, Shaan seems like a Casanova while Khanak a silent mystery which might make him attracted towards her.
Beautiful start already!
Part 3
2nd meet adorable! Burthal! He is already intrigued by her.
Khanak's present is more revolving! She is by herself, independent! Kya howa!!
I absolutely am a sucker for train romance...It reminded me of Saathiya, I love that movie!
Oh you are going by flashback mode...Innovative idea!
Part 4
You are filmy so filmy! I love cliched romance! So not complaining.
Shaadi already in the 4th part. So quick.
I see trouble brewing, falling in love at first sight is one but sometimes hasty decisions we regret for life.Hopefully that's not in their case.
Shaan's sister is wild. I mean kya advice di hai?
Beautiful...the emotional scenarios of both sides Shaan's confusion of how to convince Khanak and Khanak sober over losing.
Part 5
Ok...They are married!
BUT
Using knife,pushing pulling! WTH!😲😲...😆😆
The ending got me shocked! OMG! It was so explicit! Hats off to you, I can never write something so intense and passionate.
It was too hot for me. That I stopped reading. I started getting all butterflies in my stomach.
I dont know what to say! Speechless.
Part 6
Girish seems arrogant. Glad Khanak gave it to him in her simple manner.
Ok...Loved the emotional side to you Shanak, lovely dialogues you interplayed in between them.
The morning after was nicely written...Dialogues tho I found some of them very Ahem! But That's how newly wedded couples are right?
Part 7
Saree/Shanak always does it for me!
His complaints were utterly cute! I agree with Khanak, no romance let's get back to some serious business! Be quick I want to know why both had seperated and I'm already on part 7!
Part 8
I loved Mrs Bhatra! Anyone would be envy of Shanak! Their relationship is so lovey dovey!
Shaan and his dad's confrontation was intense. I mean both perspective sided how their own reasons and egos. I agree with the fact that no-one bears the insult of their wife's.
And the suspecting is coming in the story, why do I feel someone is going to poison Shaan's mind? I mean the suspicion is already in his mind but he realized his mistake, but somewhere deep down it will irritate him.
Part 9
Oh god! A accident and you left everyone hanging after this! How mean! Lol!
Shall I say continue or not? That means I will have to carry on with the FF!
Just PM me the reason why they broke up! I'm interested in the present story! Sucker for judaai's!
Shilpa, you know you are maha filmy! 😆😆 I just hope your love story is as filmy as this too...I mean not the seperating part, the marriage and love!
You're a composed writer, knows it's characters well...Hopefully you continue this for your audience sake...I'm currently more interested in the judaai! I loved the scenarios where both
are thinking about each other presently not in the flashback.
Edited by -Saira- - 14 years ago
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