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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks people for reading and liking and responding too😃

@ vatsalya - thanks dear.....but I a still lost in the scenario you created in your FF !!😉

@ Manju - wow....loved the detailed comments....quoting sentences shows that you actually read it and not slept through it....😉😆......kidding,.......bad joke, I know !!

@ May - Even I have always wanted Shaan to realise their love all by himself.....someone else stepping in is actually weakness....nah !!

@ Saaaz - thanks darling....thanks a lot !

@ rooj - thanks dear....u all are awesome writers yourself....have been reading all recently and have responded to people when I have read all the parts.....and I am still in the process of reading ur FFs.....will write in detail when I finish reading......but one thing I say here-- you are definitely a gifted writer....

@ Vandu - thanks sweety.....glad you liked it !! sequel toh plan nahi kiya.....this one I simply wrote to give my two cents on their mutual trust😛

@ Sweetsute - thanks dear.............rahi baat Rahul ko slap ki😳.....toh tum Vandu ka OS pad lo....😆😆....doesn't feel nice for him to get a slap in every OS nah....😉😉😆......but thank you so much for commenting !!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ Manita: are u trying to make me feel better?🤣

thanks for the compliment yaar but i doubt i am that good...i see so many talented people here and then im just an amature (see i can't even spell right🤣).

thanks and take ur time yaar
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ ankita -- thanks darling.....loved ur comments !!

@ ShanakMeet4lyfe -- I have been watching your VMs and will respond when I see all...thanks for commenting here and my VM too.....it matters !!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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manita di,
i think I am lost in my own ff too!! 🤣🤣🤣
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Posted: 14 years ago
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this is it! the way it should happen! awesome job!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey Manita; 😃

I must say you're simply fab!👏 I enjoyed the fact you included the Akshay and Boo into the scenerio,that's what families are therefore.

Also really loved how you brought the the fact that Shaan always was always driven by someone whenever Khanak left home and this time shaan has to do it himself and he did! It shows of groW*H in his character beautifully👍🏼. This is how I want it to be played with anyone interference.

It was brilliant,I'm looking forward to read more from you ;-)

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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG...manita dear..it's 2 good yaar......kash aisa hi hi jaye...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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omg manita AWESOME, what an OS, all the emotions, conversations and actions were spot on. near the beginning when they're both lying in bed loved the fact they both wanted to reassure the other of their love but couldnt bring themselves to do it, sometimes our own pride or hurt prevent us from doing this, the whole meeting with everyone in the lounge, khanak being strong and resiliant despite knowing someone had intentionally played such a cruel act on her. rahuls shame and the way he felt helpless was brilliant im glad khanak didnt let him off the hook so easily and made him suffer actually understand the vastness of what he did and the line where she says u succeeded in breaking us up was wicked. loved akki's and boo's involvement and evryone trying to make khanak understand that shaan is a burthal and he needs to know the truth otherwise the distance and cracks will grow but khanaks answer is justified and correct shaan needs to be able to trust her for himself not as a result of being told the truth, otherwise even then he'll still have doubt bcos some1 else could have lied, and i loevd how you aknowledged the fact that everytime khanak did leave shaan didnt retreat her on his own accord but on someone elses bidding and khanak needs him to do this on his own to show his love for her is true as well as strong.
later in shaans scene love dthe line where he says kya meri pyaar mein koi khaami tha, and then how how tries to logically analyse the situation and realises that his khanak is his and only his and that he completely trusts her, but the following passage especially reminded me of the golden RBO and the os reminded me of the rbo i fell in love with so thank you

He turned immediately and again rushed upstairs to get his stuff…. tears rolling on his cheeks, his words trailing back,"Yeh ladki kya samajhti hai apne aap ko?….jab dekho apni petti utha kar dhulwaadi ke liye nikal padti hai….kya samajh rakha hai?…Shantanu ko aur koi kaam nahi siwaaye apni biwi ke aage peeche ghoomne ke?…...Akshay and Khushboo looked at each other and smiled……!!

typical shaan reaction and dialogues filled with emotion.
👏👏👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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o yeah pls update ur ff im in the mood to read more of ur stuff lol
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Posted: 14 years ago
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WOW!!! manita u are really awesome yaar
khanak ko wohi izzat shantanu se bhi chahiye
u said it all in just one senetence..YUP loved it dear..
This is .the best one on the current situation one can hope for 😃

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