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.Dilwale.

@.Dilwale.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#51

@yumna

yumna, yumna, yumna! i absolutely love the 3rd part yaar! i love that you showed us what both shaan and khanak are feeling. and the dialogues where each of them is thinking to themselves, a hundreds questions raising in their minds. I LOVED that part! i always like a shanak FF/SS/OS which creates a balance between the shanak and tells the story from both their perspectives, the best. you did that sooooooo well!👏

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Amritha

@OlicityFan

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Posted: 14 years ago

#52

awesomely written....

im feeling quite depressd now... :(

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priya

@priya_cool_123

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Posted: 14 years ago

#53

Yumna... loved it... beutiflly penned...

reality indeed......

Doctors can cure the physical trauma... the mental one.. nobody can..

waiting for ur next part to see how shnak do that..

Awesome writing

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roadsidejunky

@roadsidejunkey

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#54

Hmmm...wat a part!!gud indeed...handled d issue wid Maturity nd Aplomb!

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saaaz

@saaaz

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#55

👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

fabulous writing. To be able to write "grief" over the death of an unborn child from both the parents' perspective is really something else...

Talent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Sonali

@adventure_gurl

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Posted: 14 years ago

#56

👏 Yumna that was so sad, the way you described it was well done, both fear of losing each other in the aftermath of losing their unborn child, that was so heart wrenching for both of them, awesome job describing it all, hope they can start to heal in the next part!😭

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iluvmanar

@iluvmanar

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#57

so sad yaar...😭,...but nicely written...

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rafia rashid

@rafia 24

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Posted: 14 years ago

#58

omg yumna talk about pulling on a girls heart strings, yaar i could understand shriya's reaction but it is a harsh reality for a lot of women😭😭😭😭, man i think after all that we deserve another part full of happiness. the fear, concern, reactions from all were well depicted, seriously hats off, i especially liked the subtle reactions e.g. after coming back from hospital all go to dadi then into own bedrooms finding comfort in each other- beautiful and so real. i loved the khandelwels throughout this ff- a big thankyou for their inclusion,

as for the leads im speechless (wow thats a first lol) it felt so natural like i could actually picturize them doing that and khanaks pain and anguish brought tears to my eyes and shaans helplessness is soo true bechara no guy truly knows how to help their partner in these situations.

again loved it pls write another part i know in reality this happens but dont finish it with us crying⭐️ 👏👏👏👏👏👏⭐️

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dtu

@sampar

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Posted: 14 years ago

#59

wht is this Yumna .😲 how could u do this....oh man this is sooo heart wrenching yaar..never expected this but it is a harsh reality ....but beautifully written dear.....really felt their pain of losing their unborn child......ur truly r a talented writer..applaud for that girl 👏👏....

loved the emotional trauma that they are going through ....i loved how u explained pain n anguish from both perspective 👏👏

waiting for next part.. continue soon ...n thanks for the pm dear

shai

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Aditi S

@aditee

Inactive

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Posted: 14 years ago

#60

Sys,

TOO painful it was to read........... for me.

I cannot imagine even in fiction, how some one can go through this.

You have written beautifully

I had no idea what was coming.......... I thot it was one o those cute nok jhok moments (I did not read the prelude)

I had to go back and read the sheets soaked thing, it didnt register at first...........

Very painful and real

Well written

For being so awfully young and guessing not a parent or never having experienced such athing yourself, your expressions and narratives are quite vivid

Incredible!

The "emptiness in the womb" struck me!

At a few weeks except for the emotional "fullness" there isnt any physical change.

But ur line said it all

Very nice!

Please go on.....