OS- Angry Shan, Innocent khanak

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

dtu

@sampar

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#11

👏👏👏...superb....it was beautifully written .....well done .....soo want to see something like this in the show.......superb 👏

Quote

NinjaInPyjamas

@NinjaInPyjamas

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#12

Wow yaar!! Srsly wow!! Very life-like....I am extremely impressed!!

*hugs*

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

iluvmanar

@iluvmanar

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#13

OMG shilpa..tu to chupe rustam nikli...maine yeh kaise miss kardi...pls aglibaar se OS likhkar ek PM mujhe jaroor bhej dena......luv u and luvved it.....

Quote

IluvYashran

@IluvYashran

Beginner

Posted: 14 years ago

#14

gr8 wrk dear👏..........want to see sumthin lyk diz in d show😍

Quote

rafia rashid

@rafia 24

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#15

wow kya baat hai shilpa lol, another amazing writer has entered the ranks- we are soooo spoilt on this forum. I loved it from start to finish it had me gripped. the beginning with shaan in a full on romantic mood and reaction to the mms was so realistic and natural. Both of their anger is just in natural. never liked sam soo much, glad she cleared up the galat femi😃.

khanak's speech was sooo strong, powerful and emotional. its soo true, its always easy to make a mistake and then say sorry to it, but harder to try to control ones feelings at the time and think things through before saying something you might regret. the following lines were very powerful and impactful👏👏

Lekin, aapke sath ne mujhe zindagi ke nayi matlab sikhaya. par, yeh sab dekhne ke baad, aisa lagta hai, ki kash main us waqt hi mar jati aur aaj aap Natasha ji ke sath shadi karte, kumse kum khush to rehte

loved it!!!!!!!

hahaa whenever khanaks upset shaans answer for that is to want to kiss her and more....

omg another one of those writers lmao, so blunt phir shuru ho jata hain🤣 and ras leela/ dono ka dingdong 🤣🤣🤣🤣 kaha se laate ho yeh shabd 🤣

and in all these ff's and show our khanaks becoming bold 🤣🤣

Khanak(in Shan 's arms)-"Shantanu, agar Suraj ke naam lene pe aap mujhe aisi saza doge, to main hamesha uska naam loongi"

Shan looks at her, she was smiling after a long time, kisses her on d forehead-" Tumhare , is smile ke liye kuch bhi meri jaan, I love u..........

loved the last sentence made me smile, yaar for your first OS youve written amazingly well, im a new fan. honestly. cant wait to read more of your material.- aur besharmi bhi chalega- ding adong 🤣🤣joking whatever your comfortable at writing.👏👏👏⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Quote

Anu80

@Anu80

Navigator

Posted: 14 years ago

#16

wow... totally captured the essense of the husband-wife relationship...
Khanak the true woman of substance, not just the touch of her husband melts down...
Shaan the possesive husband, the impulsive outburst and then the repentence... very well captured...
And the dialogues... yaar where do you people get time to think of such powerful yet subtle dialogues...
And end mein... OMG kya garmi thee...

Nice work, hope to read more from you!

Quote

Urooj

@rooj-i

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#17

OMG I love the OS....it is too cute....

so u want to take revenge on Rahul through our Sunny...

I hope our SS get together....

is there another part to it? I love it!

sorry for being late...i almost forgot....

Quote

priya

@priya_cool_123

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#18

oye shilpa.. i shud get some credit for tormenting u to change the title.. otherwise nobody wud have read this amazing work of yours

Quote

sweetsute

@sweetsute

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: priya_cool_123
oye shilpa.. i shud get some credit for tormenting u to change the title.. otherwise nobody wud have read this amazing work of yours

of course honey, sari credit to tera hi hai........thanks for ur suggestion

@rooj, thanks, but i myself have no idea iska next part kya likhu, abhi my mind is busy wid some other things rather than rbo, agar fursat mile to phir sochungi............abt taking revenge on rahul through sunny, i think woh to sirf plan kar raha hai, implement to shanak and sam ko karna hai

Edited by sweetsute - 14 years ago

Quote

Jessica100

@Jessica100

Beginner

Posted: 14 years ago

#20

AWWWW !!!! SO SWEET !!!!

Quote

1 2 3

OS- Angry Shan, Innocent khanak - Page 2

Related Topics

Explore Topics