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Vibhishna

@Vibhishna

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

#181

Originally posted by: JiyaPiya

My opinion/points

Team indrajit

I LOVED your entry.. it brought smile on my face.. beautifully rhymed
but like mahi said.. it was suppose to be a sentimental poem..
i loved the last stanza.. specially the rhyming words "yagna - yudhya"

i would like to give you 9/10

Team kumbhkarna

WOW, i m speechless.. Very touchy poem.. I thought this would be one of the best
way to describe the relationship between the two brothers.. every line
describes the feeling b/t those two. Its like the their journey of life.

it deserves 10/10

- w/ love
Jiya

Thank you. Thanks for the coments, encouragement and wishes. It spurs us to perform better.

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@chatterbox

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+ 15

Posted: 16 years ago

#182

Originally posted by: godisone

Nice Poem Guys!❤️ I could tell it came from your heart. Very nice job!👏 As soon as Team Kumbhakarna posts their poem, I will alert the judges and post the rules for the Third Task while we humbly await their scores.😉

thank u lalitha

we wait now for third task😆😆

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@chatterbox

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Posted: 16 years ago

#183

Originally posted by: MusicalAiswarya
Wonderful job Team IJ!!! 👏

thanks aish

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@chatterbox

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+ 15

Posted: 16 years ago

#184

Originally posted by: MusicalAiswarya

A small message to Vibhishna: I'm sorry I couldn't consult you first about posting this, but the deadline was just coming too quickly 😳 One more thing, all the credit goes to Vibhishna for this one! 👏

This poem is also from Vibhishan's point of view

Here is Team Kumbhakarn's Entry:

Brother . . .

I remember the times we spent together when we walked the earth hand in hand,
The same arms that had held my hand fell before my eyes to the sand.
I remember the times when you looked after me with your lips curved in a smile,
The same eyes that saw you smile hath now seen you die.

I remember, brother, your brave laughter whenever you faced a foe,
I remember the strength and might when you dealt your enemies with a blow.
I remember, brother, your humility in spite of your gigantic frame,
I remember your thoughts of justice to be ever fair in game.

I remember, brother, your happy face when you brought home your blushing bride,
I remember the ecstatic smile when your sons were born - a father's pride.
I remember, brother, your hearty wishes when my marriage was done,
I remember your gay laughter when my daughter played with your son.

With deep sigh I turn away from the spot your carcass lay,
With my head towards heaven I sincerely pray,
"If only time could give us another chance to be together
I wish to be born again as your younger brother."

wow thats amazing entry vibs and aish

well done

👏

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Vibhishna

@Vibhishna

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#185

Originally posted by: chatterbox

wow thats amazing entry vibs and aish

well done

👏

Thanks Chatter ji.

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@chatterbox

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+ 15

Posted: 16 years ago

#186

Originally posted by: -Mystery-
Hey guys,

You all are just fantastic! I am really happy with the kind of effort you put in all of these tasks, it shows!

Great job and keep it up! Your entries make me a lot more knowledgeable of Ramayan! So thank you so much for that!

Now time for the scores. The poems are judged to the best of my ability.

Team Indrajit - 8.5
Comments - I was reading the description of the Task and it wanted a very sentimental poem. Something that you make you cry. Although the poem is well written, I thought some lines brought in a bit of a humorous tangent. But most lines were emotional and really touched your heart. The poem was well written!

Team Kumbhakarn - 10
Comments - Superb!! This was a brilliant entry! I could really feel the pain of losing him. This was a brilliant attempt!

-Mahi

thanks mahi

i know u all wanted sentimental poem we r like indrajeet only funny but with bit of sadness too that he is gone now

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@chatterbox

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Posted: 16 years ago

#187

Originally posted by: JiyaPiya

My opinion/points

Team indrajit

I LOVED your entry.. it brought smile on my face.. beautifully rhymed
but like mahi said.. it was suppose to be a sentimental poem..
i loved the last stanza.. specially the rhyming words "yagna - yudhya"

i would like to give you 9/10

Team kumbhkarna

WOW, i m speechless.. Very touchy poem.. I thought this would be one of the best
way to describe the relationship between the two brothers.. every line
describes the feeling b/t those two. Its like the their journey of life.

it deserves 10/10

- w/ love
Jiya

thank u jiya for ur feedback too

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Janaki

@RamKiSeeta

Achiever

+ 6

Posted: 16 years ago

#188

Thanks so much Jiya and Mahi for posting your points. I really appreciate you taking the time to do this!😃 And Great Job once again BOTH TEAMS! Your Poems are really excellent!👏 And now while we wait for Chhilt to post her points, I will announce the Third Task.

Third Task: SONGS

This is something much easier than the 2nd task I'm sure, and hopefully more enjoyable.😊

1. Choose 3 songs already composed by someone (anyone).

2. The songs can be Hindi or English or any language, but if they're from a language other than English, the words must be translated (so that our judges can understand).

3. The songs can be of any genre, not only religious (of course, religious is welcome as well😉).

4. The 1st song must remind you and the judges of your character, but it cannot be about them. The 2nd song must remind you and the judges of the wife of your character (Sulochana for Indrajit and Vajramala for Kumbhakarna), but once again, it cannot be about them. The 3rd Song must remind you and the judges about the death of your character. Try to make the 1st song more about the life in general of your character, so that it differs from the 3rd song. The 3rd song has to be an incredibly sad one, that may talk about the feelings of the family of your character during your character's death, or something like that.

5. Please remember that your characters were on Ravan's side, and that it was Shri Ram and Lakshmanji who killed them for the sake of Dharma, so please try not to choose songs that talk about the killers of your character or something like that, okay? I know none of you would ever intentionally say something inappropriate, but sometimes we get carried away when having fun. I'm just saying so we don't transgress the boundaries of having fun with the Rakshaskul Family. Please don't get offended that I said this.😳😭

6. When posting your three songs, you must give the Title of each song, its composer, and the lyrics. The actual audio song does not have to be posted. Points will be given based on how much each song reminds us of your character, his wife, and his death. Each song can be given 5 points maximum, so altogether, you can get up to 15 points for this 3rd Task.

7. Deadline: February 16, 2009 (by 8:00 PM India Forums Time)

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Mallika113

@Mallika113

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#189

Vibs and Aish, great poem about Kakashri! Thank you judges, Mahi and Jiya, for taking the time to give us your opinions! We really appreciate it! I think we still have 3rd judge left! Then on to the 3rd task!