Asya TS: NYC Christmas - Last part, page 8 - Page 9

Originally posted by: GitaIyer

Beautiful end to a beautiful story. Who would not like Asad gift wrapped as a christmas gift?

Lucky girl, Zoya.

A yummy man makes a good present no matter the occasion.😉

Loved the way you incorporated the song and added pics. Actually could visualize the entire scene playing out. Very few writers can do that.🤗

Generally, when i read a story or novel, I visualize faceless characters in the setting and run a picture through my head.

But this time, the characters had faces and the setting had an apt scenery.😛

Thanks Gita.

I hear u on the faceless characters too. I read the same way too. I am glad the pictures helped with the story. I thought it would be helpful. Am glad you guys loved it.

The more she learnt of him, the deeper she fell in love with him.

Love, in its truest sense.

You. True that.

She rubbed away the tears as fast as she could, not wanting to miss anything.

Reminded me of my daughter when she was 2-year old. Whenever she had tears in her eyes and she didn't want to miss the happenings around, she used to tilt her head left and right since she couldn't see properly with tears. Then she used to cry more saying I can't see properly.

Well Zoya is child like. Isn't she? My kids do that too. My 5 year old when he is crying will suddenly starting laughing while he is crying coz I don't pay attention to his tantrums and try to tell him a joke instead.😆

She could hardly believe that her usually introverted Asad would go to these lengths to please the drama queen in her.

The only part where I found Asad and Zoya of QH.

I intentionally did not want them to be AsYa of QH. These two have a different life and are in a different space altogether. But you cannot forget the inspiration that easily, can you?😆

Asad sat on the sofa across from her trying his best not to yank the pizza away from her and the bed.

She could not bear to hear the anguish in his voice.

Both are made for each other.

Yup...true love. Opposites attract and all that.😆

She sent a quick prayer to Allah, thanking Him for all His blessings and mostly for Christmas.

Loved these words.

Thanks. 😃

Originally posted by: nautanki_anu

Rivs, sweetheart come here 🤗

Le me aa gayi🤗
That was so magical!!! Again very well written with simple words. What I like abt your writing is that you don't use jargon so anybody and everybody can read it and get interested.

Really? Thanks dear. I am glad u like it so much.

I loved the setting, the song, the dream and most of all the gift which I predicted. Lol. Actually I thot maybe Asad is Santa Claus. But immediately dismissed the idea and thot he must be the gift.

Oh you predicted it??? We spend too much time with each other na Isiliye. Acha gift tha na?

The pace was good and flow again was as smooth as a knife through butter. Well done babe!!!

Aww...really? I never thought through that part. Lol. I am glad it was so good. Thanks a ton.
Another round of applause from me 👏

Originally posted by: QueenOfMyCastle

Well I had to. I think it adds to the story.

I was not able to enter it coz it was not finished. By the time I left to my mom's place I had it only half finished and then I was barely able to spend time with the kids, forget a computer.😆

I did not get the dickensonian reference coz I have not read Charles Dickens before. Please elaborate.

Yes. Boxing day was horrible. But thankfully I was able to bounce back right away.

Rivs

Originally posted by: Oldestfan

Rivs, the way the story moved between past present and future brought thoughts of "A Christmas Carol" .. With Ebenezer Scrooge being shown different sights of Christmas by the spirit.

Originally posted by: --SH7_Sunny--

I totally loved it...😃

Do write something new soon... and pm me for that...

ur really a good writer...😊

Originally posted by: anushreemishra

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Finally I am here di..sabse pehle kaan pakad ke sorry and uthak baithak bhi lagaye maine

Yay..no worries Anu..I know u are busy. It will bother me when u won't come.

I wanted to write a long comment and I just didn't get time to sit in peace but finally I am here and since i am just leaving only one comment I hope this long one can make up for it...😳😳😳Ab se mera ek ghanta sirf aur sirf mere guruji ke naam😳😳

Haila...one hour to write a comment. Too much time u spend on it. And yes it makes up for the lack of two comments.😳

Omg i couldn't believe that I got the first spot😲😲😲I have been away from IF so long that I forgot how good it felt to get the first spot and especially when it comes to your stories...I did my happy dance that morning even though I was tired from not sleeping the whole night😆😆😆

Lol, you did surprise me by getting the first spot. I was not expecting that at all.😆

And before I go on to talk about the update I would like to thanku di for dedicating this to me on my bday...Thanku so much di...Even though i received this present late but I was very very happy with my present and i felt so loved and special...I am so lucky to have you in my life di..

Lots of pappis and jhappis for you🤗🤗🤗

I am so happy u liked it. I wanted to do a customized one for u, but could not get it done. Will send it to you in PM when I get a chance to work on it.

I think I have bored you enough with my nonstop nonsense so let us talk about the TS now...

you never bore me..sachi.

CHAPTER 1

Omg di this had to one of the best works i have read so far...I love how much detailing and describing you do in your stories but you outdid yourself this time...The way you described the christmas festivies in the opening couple of paras I could imagine and picture everything like i was the one sitting in central park and sipping that Gingerbread latte...

Thanks dear. I was hoping that it was descriptive enough. I wanted the reader to get a feel of the environment.

Wow bumping into each other in the Bakery...zoya will remember those sweets forever😳😳

They bumped into each other at Danny's house. 😆

Asad Ahmed Khan or A-sad A-mad Kaan as Danny called him

Omg this was brilliant🤣🤣

Well that is honestly what an American would call him. I had a friend whose last name was Ahmed and all his teachers call him A-mad. But I see why u think its funny.

I loved the whole Asya being each other's secret santa stuff...😳😳😳

Again tum reading mein gadbad kar rahi ho. Asad was Santa's. Zoya was someone elses. dhyan kahan hai aapka madam?

So both zoya and asad were smitten with each other from the very beginning😳😳😳

Yup u got that right.

"Hmm, woh, can I ask you something? You don't have to answer but I have been wondering if you know, you and Danny, I mean, are you guys...?" Asad had not even finished the question before Zoya jumped in remembering her earlier conversation with Danny.

"Oh no no nooo. We are not. Never. Impossible. Not in this lifetime. Not ever." She spoke, vehemently shaking her head in the negative and trying to laugh it off.

"Oh good...good" he smiled to himself before he realized what he had said. "Woh...I mean... good night." He said and quickly turned around to leave.

This was classic Asya...I could totally imagine Asad trying to enquire about zoya and Danny's relationship status and being very uncomfotable and hesistant in doing so and zoya trying not to sound very over excited to deny any such possibilty😆😆

Awesome. I am glad it came out the way I intended. I do put in a lot of thought into my choice of words and hence I am happy that it came out right.

CHAPTER 2

Can i say i loved how beautifully and smoothly the transitions between the different Christmases have been...Not for a second i felt they were sudden or did i lose the connect with the present...It was as i mentioned above like I was Zoya sitting in central park and seeing flashbacks of my past and imagining my possible future...

Awesome. Thanks for saying this. I am so happy that you felt this way.

I especially loved how Zoya sees a pregnant couple and then we see a possible future Christmas of Asya and then when we are back to present the way zoya tears up seeing the family with two kids...Very beautifully written and very touching di😳😳😳

Thanks.😳 I am just lost for words reading these comments.

Wasn't being in love all about this? Growing old with each other and still being in love? Did it really matter whether that would be in US or in India or for that matter in Timbuktu?

These were such simple lines di but the story had me so engrossed and when i read this it was like I was questioning myself and discovering love is all about being with your loved one.

😃 Happy happy happy...so happy.

She made a decision on the spot that when the next opportunity arose, she would let Asad know how she felt. She did not want to dilly dally on this matter anymore.

Omg this was so perfect.The moment zoya decides to tell asad about how she feels he will surprise her with the best Christmas present ever😳😳😳and you were absolutely right the romantic in me absolutely loved this chapter😳😳

I knew it when I was writing that Shona will enjoy this TS a lot.

Omg omg omg this was such a perfect proposal...I had a huge smile while reading it...It was as if asad was proposing me😆😆😆The flash mob idea and everyone from Franks' dancing was so so so sweet and i loved the song😳😳

You missed Aapi and Jeeju dancing??? Lol Shona tum kuch jyada hi studies kar rahi ho.😆

I know this wasn't Asad but i loved your version of extremely romantic asad😳😳

I know...I want Asad to get romantic too...and he doesn't. People in love change, they don't play wishes games. Well they do...but not to this extent.

Ah and zoya gets a solitaire...WOW...now i wish it was indeed me whom asad was proposing😆😆😆

"Zoya, my love, I am really sorry. Please don't cry. I thought you would like this, but I guess it was too soon. I am sorry for springing this up on you like this but I just had to take my chance. Maybe I should not have..." she stopped him midsentence by placing her hand on his lips. She could not bear to hear the anguish in his voice.

"Shh...I am not mad at you. I am just too happy. It's a yes silly. Now put that rock on my finger." She ordered him, smiling through her tears.

Aww this was so damn cute and realistic...anyone would be overwhelmed by such a grand gesture and specially zoya and i loved her reaction and Asad's character was spot on too with him doubting himself and not wanting to hurt zoya by being hasty...

Yes I wanted them to be AsYa we know..yet different.

Loved it loved it I absolutely loved the proposal..It was like a dream but still felt so real😳😳

Aww...thanks dear.

Di thanku so much for writing this brilliant piece of work..I loved reading it and re rereading while writing my comment...

And thanks for the long comment

And i absolutely loved what this Christmas had to offer me even if it was a little late...

Love you loads di and sorry for being so late❤️❤️

Don't worry about being late. I love u and I am glad u loved this TS🤗