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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Chapter 1:-

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I really wanted you to post the first part on page 13 or 14 or even further

And I am so glad that it is happening

😊

You deserve it though

You are an amazing writer

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Reserved!!

I know i said i'll read tonight and comment tabhi

But i read it first thing in morning

And commenting now

This update was awesome

Zoya understood Asad so well

She consoled him so well

Loved the way Asad was hurt thinking that she'll leave soon

I am so excited to meet this 'K' Zoya's New York friend

And i am sure ki Asad ke room mein Ayaan aaya hoga

Plzzz update soon

Luv u ❤️

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Fav Dialogues-

"But.. You almost died Zoya!", he said in a broken voice.
"But I'm fine now! You saved me!", she said as she held his hand.

"I mis judged her, shouted at her, accused her for being ill-mannered, yet she surprises me by being the most forgiving person! Ammi sahi kehti hai.. She has a heart of gold!", he thought to himself

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Chapter 2:-

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Read it

It was short 😡

But then for me all your updates are short

😳

And its not my fault cause i love your work

Well comming to the update

It was awesome

Asad and Ayaan were so cute

Asad smiling cause of uske wali was awesome

Then Zoya and Asad ka scene

Wow

The paste thing was so sweet

Typical Zoya

Asad going with Zoya to the airport

Wow

Can't wait for KG's entry

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Fav Dialogues:-

"Kaise ho?", he asked as he turned to the figure emerging from the darkness.
"Bhaijaan! Mere kuch bolne se pehle hi aap jaan jaate ho ke main hoon!", complained the guy.
"Ayaan! Ab tumhare aahat se pehchaan sakta hoon, Bhai hoon tumhara!", said Asad.
Ayaan grinned and hugged Asad. Asad smiled as Ayaan broke apart and saw his bhaijaan smiling.
"Aap smile bhi kar ne lage! Wah bhaijaan.. I like the changes...", said Ayaan with a grin.
"Shut up!", barked Asad.
"By the way ye changes aapki waali ke wajah se hai na?", asked Ayaan.
"Chup karo!", said Asad.
"Bhaijaan.. Batao na.. Miss New York ki wajah se?", asked Ayaan again.
"Haan... Ab tum jao yahan se.. Good Night!", said Asad pushing Ayaan towards the main gate.
"Haan haan.. Ja raha hoon bhaijaan! Bhagao mat! Ab to humein appointment lekar hi aana padega aapse milne ke liye!", complained Ayaan as he turned to walk out with a grin. Asad smirked at the retreating figure.

"Ye mera ghar nahi hai Mr. Khan.. Aap hi to bolte the.. Agar mera bass chale to main iss ghar ke baahar apna name plate lagwa dungi!", she said with a giggle.

Asad laughed at her childishness and stood next to her looking at her facial expressions which turned into a wide grin and someone exited from the Arrivals Gate.

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Chapter 3:-

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finally my most awaited part

monday turned to saturday

but vacation thi toh chalta hai

i don't wanna comment about the updates length

you know it will be short for me always

so its KG... Barun Sobti after many discussions

i think he was perfect

Zoya hugges KG... Asad was obviously jealous

Karan interupted Zoya and Asad's convo... gosh

finally a jealous Asad

btw loved the way Zoya praised Bhopal and her family

Zoya finally met Ayaan

lets see how the 2 react

and Asad ko bhi dekhte hai

i know you are planning to wrap ur other works

so i'll be patient

but remember my patience also has its limits

call me a stalker

i am no spammer

i post relevant stuff and necessary ones too

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Fav Dialogues:-

Asad stood there have a tornado of feelings. Confusion, anger, irritation.. He wasn't able to point out on that particular thing that he was feeling at that very moment. The sight of Zoya in another man's arms irritated him to the core for sure but he planned to ignore that.

"Yeah! I miss you guys too.. uhh.. very rarely because I have a wonderful family here. I barely get the time to miss anyone in NY! I love Bhopal and I love my family!", she replied with a smile.

"Waise Zoe.. You would have missed me sooo much na?", asked
"Yeah.. On Weekends, when I get up late in the mornings..", she replied with a giggle.
Asad looked at Zoya confused. Zoya smiled and said, "Mr. Khan! Karan used to wake me up on every weekend. Meri neend hi nahi khulti thi!"
Asad faked a smile and continued to drive. His imaginations went out of control and he started imagining Karan waking Zoya up in the morning.
"What the hell am I thinking? Asad.. Don't think wrong! Zoya bohot achhi ladki hai!", he thought to himself trying to convince himself.

"Aap kahan kho gaye the? You don't seem fine!", she said.
"No.. no.. I'm okay! Was thinking about office!", he said.
"Aap bhi na Mr. Khan! You and your boring office! Thoda to enjoy kijiye!", she complained.

"Par aapko samajhna chahiye.. Main aapse miley bina nahi reh sakta!", came the voice. Zoya's eyes popped out.
"Par we cannot meet.. Ammi also does not like it if I meet you often!", replied Asad.
Zoya's mouth opened in the form of an 'o'. She could not control herself, she quickly jumped into his room.
"Mr. Khan!!!!! Aaap.. Aap aise hain????", she shrieked.
Asad threw a confused look at her.
"Aise? Aise kaise?", he asked.
"Mr. Khan.. You know.. Uhh.. swinging the other way!", replied Zoya.

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Chapter 4:-

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Wow Finally an update after ages

I waited so long for it

Comming to the update

AsYalicious

Just amazing

The Ayaan-Asad misunderstanding clear scene was so cute

Aaha the ice-cream scene was the best

Najma ko shak... So happy

AsYa lost in each others thoughts... Wow

I feel the person who disturbed Asad was Najma

P.s. wat abt the shooting stars preview

P.p.s. it was very short

Luv ya

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Fav Dialogues-

"He is mad. Pagal hai poora Mr. Khan.. And you and him.. uhh... I'm so sorry for barging in! I think both of you need sometime alone!", she said and rushed out of the window.

"Mr. Khan! Aap yahan? See.. I'm really sorry for barging in. I just felt you were tensed so I came to check on you! It's okay Mr. Khan. Main phupi ko kuch nahi bataungi. I promise! I will keep your secret safe. But you know.. I never thought you would swing the other way!", said Zoya.

"Oh shit.. I'm so sorry Mr. Khan! I didn't mean to hurt your feelings. Mere liye shayad ye normal nahi hai but aapke liye to normal hai.. I shouldn't have said that! But agar aap uss leechad ke saath khush hain, then I'm happy for you too!", she completed.

"Relax! Let's go out for some Ice Cream!", he said.
Zoya's eyes popped out. "What did you say Mr. Khan?? Please repeat!", she said not being able to believe the words that left his mouth.
"Let's. Go. Out. For. Some. Ice. Cream!", he repeated.
"You are not Mr. Khan... Mujhe mere Mr. Khan waapas kijiye!", she shrieked.
Asad smirked at her statement.
"Mere Mr Khan? Aapke Mr. Khan kaise hain?", he asked with a smile playing on his lips.
"Uhh.. wo.. Sadu hai.. akdu hai.. boring hain aur emotionally challenged insaan hai!", said Zoya with a grin.

"Ummm.. This is yummy-licious!", she moaned in delight.
"Stop it Miss Farooqui..", he said curtly.
"Mr. Khan.. You should try this.. It's with chunks of strawberry! I love it!", she said extending her cone to his lips.

Asad's Room
He went to his cupboards and took out Zoya's Ammi's Earring that he had kept with himself.
"The best day I have ever spent! Why can't I see her hugging her friend and I wanted her to hug me today! I just keep thinking about her all the time! I just want to be with her. Smile with her, laugh with her. And damn... I will make sure I cancel all the planes from Bhopal to New York.", he spoke to himself unknown that a pair of eyes were looking at him and listening to what he said to himself.

Edited by MjhtFan_Mahima - 11 years ago

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Chapter 5:-

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Mine

Read... Will edit tom

Have been yawning for past half an hour as I was waiting for the update

😳

Editing-

Najma heard everything... Yipee
Loved the way she teased Asad
😊

Oh gosh... Zoya in bathwrap...
Asad was feeling so embarrased
😳

Then Zoya entering in Asad's room
Six packs and her usual ranting
😆

And yup the shayri by Zoya
It was superb

The ranting related to names
Totally enjoyed it
😃

And the kiss on the cheek

Update soon

Luv ya

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Fav Dialogues:-

"I will make sure I cancel all the planes from Bhopal to New York!", said Najma repeating her bhaijaan's words to which Asad looked away.

He walked over to Zoya's room and knocked. When he did not get any reply, he carefully opened the door and peeped in.
He heard the shower run and close. He waited. After a few minutes the washroom door opened. Zoya came out wiping her hair, wearing a bath wrap.
Asad stared at her.
"Mr. Khan! Aap jaiye yahan se!", she shreiked which got Asad back into his senses. He quickly turned around and walked out of the door shutting it.
Asad's POV
"Ya allah! Ye maine kya kar diya! Zoya mere baare mein kya soch rahi hogi! And what was wrong with her left arm?"
Zoya's POV
"Allah miya!!! Mr. Khan ne mujhe iss haal mein dekha!!! Agar mere haathon ko dekh liya ho to? And he saw me in a damn bath wrap! WHAT THE HELL!!!! Ab to mujhe lecture milega hi milega.. Par galti unki thi... Sorry bolna to unhe aata nahi hai.. Upar se mujhpar hi chillaenge!"

She barged into his room as usual and turned around immediately after looking at the sight of Asad in his jeans and white shirt with his buttons all undone. His six packs showing.
"I'm sorry.. Maine kuch nahi dekha! Apki chest bhi nahi aur aapke six packs bhi nahi!", she squealed.

"I mean.. I thought ke aap mujhe tameez aur tehzeeb pe lecture denge and also me wearing a bathwrap.. I thought you would shout at me for all that!", she said sincerely.
"It was an accident Miss Farooqui.. And bathroom mein aise kapde nahi pehenengi to kya salwar kameez pehenengi?", he questioned indending it to be of a slight humour.
"Mr. Khan??? Aapne joke kiya?", she questioned in a shock.
"Joke nahi tha Miss Farooqui.. They were sheer facts! And waise bhi.. You're my friend now! Dosto ke saath to joke kar sakte hain right?", he asked.
"Well.. Of course main aapki dost hu ab.. But I didn't expect you to pull off a joke!", she said.
"I did not pull it off Miss Farooqui.. You didn't laugh at it did you?", he replied.

"Isi baat pe ek sher arz hai..", she squealed.
Asad rolled his eyes as he smiled and she narrated.
"Butter ke saath Jam hota hai.. Jam ke saath hota hai Toast!
Butter ke saath Jam hota hai.. Jam ke saath hota hai Toast!
Ab to Miss Farooqui chhodiye.. Zoya bulaiye mere dost!"
"Shukriya Shukriya!", she squealed feeling proud of herself.

"Wah wah kahiye Mr. Khan!", she ordered.
"Wah wah Miss Farooqui!", he said sternly.

"Maine uss sher mein kya kaha tha Mr. Khan?", she asked irritated.
"Butter ke saath Jam hota hai.. Jam ke saath hota hai Toast! Ab to Miss Farooqui chhodiye.. Zoya bulaiye mere dost!", said Asad repeating her sher in a stern manner.
Zoya laughed her heart out.
"Aap has kyun rahi hain Miss Farooqui?", he asked confused.
"I told you to call me Zoya Mr. Khan... Ab aap mere dost hain! This sher was for you!", she replied controlling her laughter.

"You know what Zoya.. I have a name.. It's Asad!", he said as a matter of factly in a husky whisper.
"I know your name is Asad Ahmed Khan!", she replied in a low whisper.
"Even I know my name Zoya.. But now that we are friends and I have to call you Zoya.. Then you have to call me Asad!", he whispered in her ear sending shivers down her spine.

"Now you better continue to call me that Zoya!", he whispered and dropped a kiss on her cheek. He winked and walked out of his room leaving Zoya stunned at what just happened.

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Chapter 6:-

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Res

Read but will comment tomorrow

Btw next update page 100... Pakka???
😉

Finally unreserving

First of all luv u Mina di

All hugs and kisses for you

This was the best part so far

I loved this a lot

Words are less to describe it

The shooting stars scene ⭐️

The flashbacks 😊

The confession ❤️

The kisses 😳

Totally enjoyable

The dialogues 👏

Perfect work

Half way through... Can't believe that its already here

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150 likes reached on prologue

I was keeping a taboo for it

⭐️

Yipee

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Finally time to select dialogues for chp 6

Ummm... Can I copy the whole chapter

😉

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Chp 6-

Seriously can't choose

It will be the whole chapter for this

And I don't have too many colours too

😃

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Realization just dawned me

That the number of posts I have on this thread of yours

Is definately more than the number of posts you have

😳

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P.s. I had the max comments after this chapter 😳... can't copy all

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Teaser for chapter 7:-

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Yipeee

Mina Di

I love you

❤️

🤗

I love the teaser

Looks like AsYa had a naughty night

Waiting for the update now

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Chapter 7:-

U played a trick this time

Next update on 130+

😉

Cheating

Huh

But I love you for this update

I was blushing while reading it 😳

Well I don't have many words to describe it

But it was so hawt

So passionate

So AsYaLicious

But totally not what I had expected from you

Cause it was way better than what I had anticipated

I loved this side of Asad and Zoya

Intense Asad and Shy Zoya

👏

To be true

I know you are

❤️

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Some of my highlights before teaser of chapter 8:-

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and the most honest confession

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Chapter 8- New Thread

Its decided

Teaser around page 130

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This is my 15000th post

I have covered 1/3rd of my path from Sizzlerz to Stunnerz

I am in love with Stunnerz colour

❤️

Waiting for you to come up this much way too

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Heartbeat
Heartbeat, heart, heartbeat
Heartbeat, heartbeat
Heartbeat, heart, heartbeat

But you're stealing my heart away
Yeah, you're stealing my heart away

Stop tryin' to steal my heart away
Stop tryin' to steal my heart away

I don't know where we're going
I don't know who we are

I can feel your heartbeat
I can feel your heartbeat
(He said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(Running through me)
Feel your heartbeat

I can feel your heartbeat
(She said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(She said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(Running through me)
Heartbeat, feel your heartbeat

Stop stealing my heart away
Stop stealing my heart away
Stop stealing my heart away
You're stealing my heart away

I don't know where we're going
I don't know who we are
Feels like we were floatin'
High above the stars
(Stars, the stars, the stars, the stars)

Heartbeat
Heartbeat, heart, heartbeat
I can feel it, I can feel it, I can feel it
I can feel it, I can

I can feel your heartbeat
(He said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(He said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(Running through me)
Your heartbeat, feel your heartbeat
(She said)

I can feel your heartbeat
(She said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(She said to me)
I can feel your heartbeat
(Running through me)
Your heartbeat, feel your heartbeat, beat, beat

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Finally comment on teaser for chapter 8:-

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Aap meri biwi hain.. Haq hai aapka!", said Asad with a smile. Zoya mustered courage and looked up at him with a gentle blush.

this scene came into my mind

how do you read my mind always

just today i was wanting an Asad shirtless scene similiar to yours in the show

but i got it at my favourite writer's story

just love you ❤️

can't wait for the new thread now 😳

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Comments for thread 2:-

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*Editing*

This work of yours is very special for me... because of obvious reasons 🤗

1) It's your first AsYa work

2) The story is dedicated to me

And we are finally on a new thread

You totally deserved deserved it

*To Be Edited More*

*Editing*

About the special shout out ❤️

I know I am crazy... but that is cause I love you

I know I am a spammer... but that is cause I love your works

I know I make you mad... but I also know that you love it

Ours is relation which started 5 years back and will never end

cause we are sisters forever

*Editing Done*

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Mahima

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Chapter 8:-

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read but will comment in a while

going to get fresh😊

Finally ready to comment...

Loved the Asad-Zoya-Nahma scene before breakfast

Breakfast scene was such a joy to read

Asad nodded and they moved out of the room. Zoya helped Dilshad in the kitchen while Asad sat on the dining table with Najma. Asad's eyes were fixed on his newly wedded wife. She looked ethereal in the baby pink suit.

"Ab teri dieting ka khayal main rakhungi subha! I'll make sure I empty all the chocolates from the fridge jot um late night chori chori khaati ho!", said Zoya and winked.

The way Asad eyed Zoya... Aww

Asad eyed Zoya and signalled her to come till the door.

"Jao Zoya.. Tumhare shauhar bula rahe hain!", teased Dilshad and retired to her room.

Zoya blushed and walked to the door with Asad.

Wow... The scene at the door... Superb

"Bye!", said Zoya.

"Itni jaldi bhi kya hai Mrs. Khan?", winked Asad and snaked his arms around her petite waist.

After Asad returned home... Loved the scenes

Zoya smiled and said, "Lijiye! Aapki black aur bitter coffee!"

"Aapne banayi hai to ab tak meethi ho gayi hogi!", replied Asad to which Zoya giggled.

"Aapne itne cheesy lines kahan se seekhe?", she asked furrowing her eyebrows.

"Wo kya hai na.. Jabse aap meri zindagi mein aayi hain.. Meri zindagi to gulzar ban gayi hai!", replied Asad.

"Mr. Khan! Stop it!", she said with a slight laugh.

"Aap has kyun rahi hain? Yehi dialogue agar aapka wo TV hero bole to achha hai.. Main bolun to aap has rahi hain?", sulked Asad.

"Aap to mere real life hero hai na!", she replied with a wide smile and a wink.

Zindagi Gulzar hai... Wow... Perfect

Then the kiss... Heaven

"Really!", she replied and pecked on his lips.

"Ye kya tha?", he asked scrunching his brows.

"Kiss!", she replied as a matter of fact-ly.

"Kiss ye thodi na hota hai!", he said.

"To phir?", she asked.

Asad swooped down to her lips and brushed his hard ones to her soft petal like ones. He sucked onto her lower lip. Soon she responded and started sucking onto his lips the same way he did. She parted her lips further to gasp for a breathe and Asad plunged his tongue into her mouth tasting her sweet corners. Soon the kiss turned into a passionate one. They kissed each other with all the love, the desire and the passion. Finally they broke apart panting for breathe. They rested their foreheads together.

"Ye hota hai kiss!", whipered Asad.

Update soon

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