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NAVI55

@NAVI55

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#611

This was sooo dramatic and awesome👏

Hats off to dear, you are doing an amazing job with this story👍🏼

As i was reading this update my heart was going dhak,dhak,dhak😆 I was so engrossed in reading this and my face was so close to my pc i never noticed my boss come in and stand behind me...Oh dear, what an awkward moment

We had an eyelock ( not the mithwa kind, he looks nothing like asad)😆

The nerve of th man, interuppting me when i'm busy reading...hmmm...

anyway back to the update which was brilliantly written...I loved how zoya asked asad to leave her go because he has to take care of his ammi & najma...This shows how selfless zoya is...Asad's dilemma and then his race back to find zoya because he just can't lose her Mindblowing...

Do you perhaps think that we could get a kiss in the next update😉 after all they have been through so much already😉 They deserve it😃

Thank you for the pm🤗

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Tamara27

@Tamara27

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#612

Was wonderful, as always! I think you really captured Asad's emotions well. I mean, everything he was thinking, his memories of Zoya...was brilliant (even if you did take forever to update haha!)
Anyway, about that intern job...wouldn't you rather write novels?! Yeah, the serials are great and they have us hooked but a story...? A novel could live on forever and ever. Write us a bloody novel damnit!
Lotsa love!

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Sadie

@--starstruck--

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#613

Originally posted by: NAVI55
This was sooo dramatic and awesome👏

Hats off to dear, you are doing an amazing job with this story👍🏼

As i was reading this update my heart was going dhak,dhak,dhak😆 I was so engrossed in reading this and my face was so close to my pc i never noticed my boss come in and stand behind me...Oh dear, what an awkward moment

We had an eyelock ( not the mithwa kind, he looks nothing like asad)😆

The nerve of th man, interuppting me when i'm busy reading...hmmm...

anyway back to the update which was brilliantly written...I loved how zoya asked asad to leave her go because he has to take care of his ammi & najma...This shows how selfless zoya is...Asad's dilemma and then his race back to find zoya because he just can't lose her Mindblowing...

Do you perhaps think that we could get a kiss in the next update😉 after all they have been through so much already😉 They deserve it😃

Thank you for the pm🤗

haha i actually kinda imagined you leaning towards the pc while ur boss is standing behind with hands on his hips and eyebrow raised thinking dafaq is she doing? is she trying to eat my pc? 🤣

you are way too funny hahahah!

thank you so much for the comment! I'm glad u liked and felt that i did justice to asad's POV

Kiss? 😲 Mr tehzeeb-e-afta and kiss? 😆😆 lets see what i can do 😆

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Sadie

@--starstruck--

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#614

Originally posted by: nanand
Was wonderful, as always! I think you really captured Asad's emotions well. I mean, everything he was thinking, his memories of Zoya...was brilliant (even if you did take forever to update haha!)
Anyway, about that intern job...wouldn't you rather write novels?! Yeah, the serials are great and they have us hooked but a story...? A novel could live on forever and ever. Write us a bloody novel damnit!
Lotsa love!

haha yes i really am updating after ages 1 month to be precise 😆

I'm glad you liked it! and hello don't talk about updating after ages ive been waiting for the update of both ur fictions like forever 😆

yes i would rather prefer writing novels but being a script writer is also cool (gotta pay the bills eh? 😆) LOL kidding i'm only 18 i dont need to worry about bills but i thought that maybe if i could work as an intern then it would give me some experience and sharpen my writing skills cuz i know i can do better i just need someone to lead me to the right path 😊

thanks for the feedback hun, love ya!

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manognasai

@manognasai

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#615

Awesome update...Finally the grave scene!Its my favourite scene in QH.U have written it very well👏
The best part was Zoya asking him to go from there and Asad saying "I.Dont.Care" wen the person said he wil also have to die if he wil not leave her!And he needed Zoya as much as he needed air!
Asad crying wen he saw Zoya lying lifeless...😭Asad kissing her wen Zoya wokeup⭐️
Waiting for next update.Update soon:)

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akaswan

@akaswan

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#616

Just awesome udapte thank you for this a loved it 🤗

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Archana

@mysticlover

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#617

I just loved it when Asad said he won't leave Zoya... that he don't care if anything happens to him... I think I was stuck at that part for so long that it took me a minute to move forward to the later part... n I'm not exaggerating!!
I seriously don't know how to express my feelings about this part... it was beautiful... how Asad literally jumped out of the car n came running back to Zoya... it's the intensity of the person that matters...
N I'm so looking forward to the hospital romance... :)
About your aunt's best friend saying your writing is more applicable to a novel than a serial then I would say just take it as an incentive to publish your own novel!! :)

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mrs. varun dhawan but you can call me fari. :)

@daydream.

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#618

WOW. 😲 That was amazing! 👏 👏 👏

You did an awesome job writing this part! 👍🏼 All the emotions and descriptions, wow! 😃

Thank you for letting us relive Mangalpur, I miss it so much. 😭 😭 This made me so happy! 😳

Simply fantastic!

-Fari 😳 ❤️

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madhvi4gurti

@madhvi4gurti

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#619

the very much anticipated grave scene finally written n truly it was awesome...way better than the original one!!!

congrats for writing it so beautifully!!!👏

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Monica

@mochhug

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#620

RES!!!!!

Unres!

Wow, just wow.

Hun, you're truly a talented writer. You should take what that aunt of yours said as a compliment. Maybe it's not for serials, but that's because you should be a writer, like paperbacks. Really hun, you should.

You made me "relive" Mangalpur, literally. Although you changed a detail here and there, and rightly so, to follow your own story, I felt the same intensity as the episode I hold so dear from QH. My first glimpse of Qubool Hai, at it's prime.

I LOVED, that you had an actual conversation between Asad and Zoya. I thought that was much needed. Although I have NO complaints about Mangalpur and how it was done in the show, I love that you added this in. How after their bonding, he sees how well she understands things, and how mature she really is, when necessary. I really loved this. And Asad's hesitation, like in the show, was shown even more accurately here with his thought process, and his argument with her. Simply brilliant.

My only complaint 😆 (hey you wanted honesty 😛) is that the ending was too abrupt 😭

I wanted to see your take on that whole, brushing her cheek, hugging her from the waist and carrying her away.

Other than that, LOVE that it was a longer update and truly my second favourite update. I'm sorry but the one AFTER Zoya explains everything to him, is still my fave chapter

Continue soon hun!!! 😃😃

Edited by mochhug - 12 years ago