SS-Mr&Mrs Asad Ahmed Khan's Room lst prt ch8 pg51 - Page 4

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Posted: 12 years ago
#31
very nice,seems interesting
pls continue & pm me when u updated
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Posted: 12 years ago
#32
jst wait 4 chapter 3 & 4 spcly..u will get the highest intensity...😳😳
😳😳😳 i cn bet..😳
pari

Originally posted by: kabhimitwaasya



No yaar, u write well. By improvement I meant u can be more intense😳😳...There is no problem in the writing department😊

Edited by princeegoyal - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#33
update chapter 1

Chapter 1

A Child 'yes a god most loveable person over this earth..his name is Ali'.a boy of 8-9 yr of age'

Ali saw asad..on d sand dunes..lying lifeless'with no motion in his body'.like a dead corpse'.ali ran to him & said'dost..zoya' zoya'pls use bacahooo'

Asad when he listen her name..with in seconds come to his senses'wht happen to her ?'.who is this boy?'hw he knw abt zoya?''why he is so scared'?..wht happen to her?...where is my zoya?...

Asad- tum tum kaun ho?..(who r u?)

Ali'mein zoya ka dost hun'ali

Flash back*

Ali is actually a boy who give flowers to people who visit at tht hotel'.

When zoya reaches hotel room'she try to get ready because she knw tht her asad is innocent'.she is more thn happy''asad's words'. are echoing in her heart tht asad loves her'his confession makes her smile'.she is blushing with the thought tht..soon she will be in her jahapanahas arms'she will never let him go anywhere''she come out of her room & reaches to the lift..

But tanveer has her another plan ready..she already have made sm changes in the lift..as a note is there tht lift s not working..she remove tht note from zoya's floor...so .tht when zoya's is going to touch the lift button & get herself into it'.. she will get an electric shock & she will be dead'.people will thought it mst be an accident..as lift is not working'

When zoya was about to touch the lift button..ali came to her..

Ali- dii yeh gulab ke phool logi(dii will u take these red rose flowers)

Zoya- with a wide smile on her face'..waoo wht beautiful flowers..as she reminds of her & asad beautiful moment at walima'when he gave her red rose'.when she ws thinking abt asad''her eyes has a twinkling shine..& tears too..

Zoya-jst a word comes out of her lips'.ASAD..

Ali'understood the situation & smile at the love'& he sadi'

Ali- dii aap ja ke unhe yeh de do

Zoya(come out of her dreaming session)'.hmmm..kise?..with a blush on her face

Ali( with a smile)..wahi..kya kah tha abhi aap ne'haan..ASAD''.jise itne pyar se yaad kr ke..muskura rhi hoon'.'jisko yaad krte hi apki ankhon mein ek sitaro jasi chamak aa gyi hai'

Zoya-try to hide her blush'.woh actually''.!!

Ali- dii..mein samjh gya'naraz ho ek dusre se'.yeh red rose de do..aur keh do I love u..bas wo maan jayega'

Zoya-love this kid..he is so cute & innocent'whts ur name?

Ali with a smile- Ali'.aur apka'dii?

Zoya- Zoya'

Zoya- tum bohat pyare ho'thnks 4 ur advise give me this flower'..I will give it to him'.dost'

Zoya- thnks ali'

Ali'all d best dii..

& zoya left'.run through stares case to meet asad she can't wait in fornt of this lift to open up'.'..

Tanveer saw this get irritated..before asad zoya come face to face..she call asad & said she want to go back to Bhopal so she is leaving''asad..half listened to her. & cut d call'...as he doesn't want to listen to or talk to anyone '... & he reaches at deserted place..

Zoya reaches at hotel near reception area & went near cliff''but while going her earing fall on ground'& ali pic it up'he run after her'but she doesn't listen to him & run to meet asad'.'.

Flash back ends'**

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.ali-----pls dii ko bachaoo..wo use kisine cliff se dhka de diya hai' wo maar jayegi'.(smbody as pushed her from cliff..she might be dead'..pls save her)

Asad- shocked..he can't believe wht he jst listened'..

Ali- yeh dekho'..(jst c..)he show tht video potage to asad..asad ws shocked on seeing the tanveer true color will be an understatement..he burst out with anger'& but he is more worried abt zoya right nw'.his zoya..wht if smthing happen to her'.he can't live'

Asad- ZOYAAA '.and he run like a maniac'.

Precap'

Mangalpuriyan Asad-& Zoya's'BANG' confession of her love to asad'

pari..
i knw bohat chota sa hai..pr pls..forgive me...i ws jst little busy...next part will be a big one..promise..KISS...do u want it...??😳😳.wd little intense scene😳😳
Edited by princeegoyal - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#34
nyc... W8ng 4 next loggg update...!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#35
Wow! awesome one...gr8 work...loved it.

thnx for pm n update soon!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#37
very nice..ali is so cute..loved ali & zoya conversation!!!!!!!!!
precap interesting!!!!!!!!! continue soon!!!!!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#38
Very nice
please continue it soon
Thx for the pm
:)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#39
Awsome update like ali smartness now waiting for the nxt part so update asap and pm me when u update...😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#40
Wow..awesum nice concpt..luvd it..definltly v wnt it...waitng 4 nxt prt..uodate soon..plz pm me n add me ..i hav sbd u requst..

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