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Posted: 12 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: -Yaz-

Is it bad that I can't seem to feel a single bout of sympathy for Asad? I mean this was wonderfully written and my heart is breaking for Zoe after hearing about her past but when it comes to feeling sad for Asad, I can't .. Instead I'm just rolling my eyes, because isn't this a ritual for him now, hurt her then regret it? It kind of becomes difficult to feel for a person when they repeatedly make the same mistake and I think I'm at a point where I just don't give a shit if Asad is hurt because quite frankly no one but himself is to blame for his misery, so why should I feel bad for him when he seems to not want to change his life around when the opportunity to do so is handed to him.


Zoe is going to be okay, I know it but I sincerely hope the two have a break from each other after this. Both need a good reality check, Zoe needs to realise that she can't just let a man walk all over her no matter how much she loves him, because at the end of the day no amount of love will bring you back from the despair that a relationship like theirs will entitle .. one where the man constantly degrades, humiliates and accuses her. She seriously needs to find herself again because I think that she has lost herself after falling for Asad and falling in love doesn't mean losing your identity.

And Asad needs to realise that he can't just treat the girl he loves like shit and expect to be forgiven without truly earning it. He need's to realise that loving her isn't the only thing that will make their relationship successful he needs to trust and respect her, which as of now he doesn't. He keeps on ranting on about how he will hurt her because he is Rashid Ahmed Khan's son but I am sorry to say, he's not hurting her because of that he's hurting her because he's a judgemental, archaic asshole - and that's completely on him, because Rashid is not like that, so he can't put the blame on his genetics.

I sincerely hope that you make Asad redeem himself, and make Zoe regrow her backbone. I don't think I can digest romance without seeing some sort of respect growing in the relationship.

Anyways, you've got a great story going on and I am looking forward to read more.

-Edited-

Also, Zoya's mum is Zeenat's aunt, not sister - therefore Zeenat will be calling her Khala, not Appi.


Long reply to a long comment😉

It is not bad that you don't feel sympathy for Asad.😭😆 Here goes:

Hi!

That was wonderful of you to reply in long. Thank You. I think it is for viewers like you and me that Gul has kept Ayan in store. I am sorry you didn't feel the pathos in the story. I guess it depends on how much one is willing to forgive. The thing is, Asad has not repeated the same mistake ever. He makes new mistakes, assuming Zoya is imperfect, because on the surface, that is who she is. Even her aapi knows she is not a man's idea of a graceful woman- like Zeenat pointed out on Friday. And he has enough instances to believe she is scatterbrained and downright careless, though these may have been fabricated by Tanveer.

When we come to the root of it, Zoya has not confessed her feelings either. OK. He is emotionally challenged. She knows that. What is her excuse? Instead of getting him to confess his feelings, why doesn't she come out with hers? If she believes a woman is equal to a man in every way, why does she expect him to make the first move? Why doesn't she sort out her feelings and walk up to him bravely or even a write a letter explaining her feelings? Why play hide and seek when she is not emotionally challenged/

As regards Tanveer, what is the one clue Zoya has against her that would convince him that a girl he knew and played with as a child, would turn a villain? Zoya has seen her in suspicious circumstances, not Asad. Tanveer is not anything to her at all. Why can't she follow her heart, and try to decode this woman? Asad is one who is clueless and with blinders, not Zoya.

I might come across as a big Asad supporter. Actually, I just love seeing it from both POVs. Zoya's POV is all too clear for us, because she is Gul's baby. She makes us see the story from her side, more.

Falling in love doesn't make you lose your identity. You have a great point there. The thing is, even in the show, I cannot imagine Zoya putting her foot down for herself- it is not that she has no sense of self- worth, SHE HAS NO SENSE OF SELF.

IT IS NEVER ABOUT HER. If she feels something is wrong, she will stand up against it. She did not want to marry Akram, because she was not prepared to get married right then.She was here in search of her Abbu, and he seemed to be the wrong thing for her. Her abbu took preference over everything else.

When it comes to Asad, even as she knows they are different in every possible way, there is one big fact we all tend to forget. He has been there for her, always.He saved her from Akram, from Mangalpur goons, from the electrified bath tub...it is a connection they both can't shake off.

When there are misunderstandings in a relationship, you can either walk out, or you can try to mend it. It may take a few years, but if it is worth it, then it is worth it. Zoya does not throw herself at Asad, I find that self respectful enough.

Coming to my FF- actually, I had not planned it this way, not the way you suggested it either- you'll see with the last part...I brought in Aapi's conversation for that one line...'she is the kind of girl who...gives herself up for others...'.I had left it incomplete. It was for Asad to read and he did. He finally understood who Zoya was.(I left it for the readers to complete it as well.😉Love giving out exercises.😆))

Zoya's mom- I did write her as a distant cousin of Zeenat's mom. I made Zeenat call her Aapi, because I figured they'd be nearer in age, considering Zeenat's parents don't seem to be around. The aapi is respect for a sister, as they are more of family friends than relatives.

Sincere thanks for taking the time out to read and comment at such length, and *hugs* for the appreciation. I can't believe this. I am not just yapping about the show, I am even yapping about my FF!😲 Hope I didn't offend you in any way.🤗


Edited by chicksoup - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#52
awesome and plz do continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#53
Heart wrenching part...Waiting for CH 4 eagerly!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#54
Lovely. 👏 I so want to see something like this in the show.

And I have to make a special mention of these lines which I loved,

"I know she is attracted to you, and you are too, probably to an extent. But I have observed both of you over these days. You are not willing to give your hundred percent to her. I am not talking about the little things about her that irritate you, that is understandable for me. But TRUST- I value that a lot in a relationship... You don't trust her judgement, do you?"

Asad swallowed hard. Had they been so transparent or was it a sister's sixth sense when it came to her little sister? Zeenat continued.

"I am not angry with you, Asad. But, please think about it. She is too precious to be an experiment or a substitute or a contract or whatever you have taken her to be. She deserves far better. She is the kind of girl who...gives...her...self...", Zeenat had not completed her sentence. She had bitten her lips, and looked at Asad pleadingly with tears in her eyes, and walked away."


I want dialogues like this in the show. Though I loved Aapi-Asad's conversation when she addressed Zoe's fear of fire to Asad but I wish we had something along the similar lines.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: chicksoup


Long reply to a long comment😉

It is not bad that you don't feel sympathy for Asad.😭😆 Here goes:

Hi!

That was wonderful of you to reply in long. Thank You. I think it is for viewers like you and me that Gul has kept Ayan in store. I am sorry you didn't feel the pathos in the story. I guess it depends on how much one is willing to forgive. The thing is, Asad has not repeated the same mistake ever. He makes new mistakes, assuming Zoya is imperfect, because on the surface, that is who she is. Even her aapi knows she is not a man's idea of a graceful woman- like Zeenat pointed out on Friday. And he has enough instances to believe she is scatterbrained and downright careless, though these may have been fabricated by Tanveer.

When we come to the root of it, Zoya has not confessed her feelings either. OK. He is emotionally challenged. She knows that. What is her excuse? Instead of getting him to confess his feelings, why doesn't she come out with hers? If she believes a woman is equal to a man in every way, why does she expect him to make the first move? Why doesn't she sort out her feelings and walk up to him bravely or even a write a letter explaining her feelings? Why play hide and seek when she is not emotionally challenged/

As regards Tanveer, what is the one clue Zoya has against her that would convince him that a girl he knew and played with as a child, would turn a villain? Zoya has seen her in suspicious circumstances, not Asad. Tanveer is not anything to her at all. Why can't she follow her heart, and try to decode this woman? Asad is one who is clueless and with blinders, not Zoya.

I might come across as a big Asad supporter. Actually, I just love seeing it from both POVs. Zoya's POV is all too clear for us, because she is Gul's baby. She makes us see the story from her side, more.

Falling in love doesn't make you lose your identity. You have a great point there. The thing is, even in the show, I cannot imagine Zoya putting her foot down for herself- it is not that she has no sense of self- worth, SHE HAS NO SENSE OF SELF.

IT IS NEVER ABOUT HER. If she feels something is wrong, she will stand up against it. She did not want to marry Akram, because she was not prepared to get married right then.She was here in search of her Abbu, and he seemed to be the wrong thing for her. Her abbu took preference over everything else.

When it comes to Asad, even as she knows they are different in every possible way, there is one big fact we all tend to forget. He has been there for her, always.He saved her from Akram, from Mangalpur goons, from the electrified bath tub...it is a connection they both can't shake off.

When there are misunderstandings in a relationship, you can either walk out, or you can try to mend it. It may take a few years, but if it is worth it, then it is worth it. Zoya does not throw herself at Asad, I find that self respectful enough.

Coming to my FF- actually, I had not planned it this way, not the way you suggested it either- you'll see with the last part...I brought in Aapi's conversation for that one line...'she is the kind of girl who...gives herself up for others...'.I had left it incomplete. It was for Asad to read and he did. He finally understood who Zoya was.(I left it for the readers to complete it as well.😉Love giving out exercises.😆))

Zoya's mom- I did write her as a distant cousin of Zeenat's mom. I made Zeenat call her Aapi, because I figured they'd be nearer in age, considering Zeenat's parents don't seem to be around. The aapi is respect for a sister, as they are more of family friends than relatives.

Sincere thanks for taking the time out to read and comment at such length, and *hugs* for the appreciation. I can't believe this. I am not just yapping about the show, I am even yapping about my FF!😲 Hope I didn't offend you in any way.🤗



Couldn't agree more. Thank you for this. What I've highlighted in bold that's precisely my concern too.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: chicksoup

Puking rainbows? Now that is one sunshine girl of the forum!

Ek aur naam bhool gayi..Minnie Mouse...who is in love with cats.😆

Thanx, Ankie. I hope I can update l8r in the nite...🤗


i like cute things, be it cats otters puppies what not, nay but not reptiles, they are NOT cute. 🥱 😆 😆 😆



Thank you noodle, its you who encourages me and motivates me to continue my stupid vellagiri gutterpanti 🤗



THANK YOU 😳


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Look guys, i wanted a part on my Mangalpur craving. Nothign could have been better than this, cause this is EXACT


what i wished for. Nothing more nothing less just PERFECT

LIKE THIS


noodle, where's the part next? I am waiting yaaa 😭
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Awesome! Waiting for the next part!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#59

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty

its 12:45 monday btw *yawns*


GAWD, Ankie! Not by IF times! Gotcha!😆

I am so sleepy, and ...I need to re- read it...and reply to Shreya..am too tired now. Be a good girl., smile in your sleep 4 me and go to college in the morning. I'll post it by noon tomorrow, pakkaaa...🥱
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: s120

Lovely. 👏 I so want to see something like this in the show.


And I have to make a special mention of these lines which I loved,

"I know she is attracted to you, and you are too, probably to an extent. But I have observed both of you over these days. You are not willing to give your hundred percent to her. I am not talking about the little things about her that irritate you, that is understandable for me. But TRUST- I value that a lot in a relationship... You don't trust her judgement, do you?"

Asad swallowed hard. Had they been so transparent or was it a sister's sixth sense when it came to her little sister? Zeenat continued.

"I am not angry with you, Asad. But, please think about it. She is too precious to be an experiment or a substitute or a contract or whatever you have taken her to be. She deserves far better. She is the kind of girl who...gives...her...self...", Zeenat had not completed her sentence. She had bitten her lips, and looked at Asad pleadingly with tears in her eyes, and walked away."


I want dialogues like this in the show. Though I loved Aapi-Asad's conversation when she addressed Zoe's fear of fire to Asad but I wish we had something along the similar lines.


Wow, Shreya! You and Ankie loved the same part.

I loved that convo btn Asad and Aapi too..she is so eager to set things right btn them..even said that she did understand he was frustrated...my dialogue was inspired from the show.😉

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