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Akilla

@Akilla

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Posted: 12 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: Laila2009
This is good. What will kill your story for me is if you turn Zoya into someone who is manipulative and Asad into such a jerk that he turns into a bully. I saw the story bordering in that direction.

You have a good foundation and I want to read more about their adventure. What type of accident did she have? And is Tanveer in the picture?

Good work. I like what you've done so far. From me that is BIG compliment; it means you're a stronger writer and you're moving a story at a pace that has not lost my interest - and most writers do a good job of losing me in the opening sentences.

I respond ONLY to good stories - if I am not responding it means your story is NOT worth my time. So please take this post as a good sign even if it comes with any criticism.

Please continue and keep me informed. 😃

thank you so much for the constructive feedback, it does mean a lot to me, i have gone about the second chapter trying to keep your suggestion of the characterisation in mind so i hope you ike it, and please keep reading and keep the criticism coming😃

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Akilla

@Akilla

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Posted: 12 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: sneaky-aj
nice!!!! so road trip will be made exciting by Asad's presence😉
do continue!!!
eager to read the next part!

well yesse you bet it will😉

thanks a lot for the comment, please dont stop, ill need all the encouragement i can get as well😳

anyhu thanks again and happy oreos😆

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Akilla

@Akilla

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Posted: 12 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: asadzoya-12
Amazing, plz pm me when you update the next part.

than you😳

please buddy for pm.s because its tedious pming individually🥱

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Akilla

@Akilla

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Posted: 12 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty
Ahahahah this was soo Asya-Licious 🤣

waiting for the update!

MISS.H.D!!!!!! thank you for reading, liking and commenting, always appreciated😛

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irene

@rennie

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Posted: 12 years ago

#25

loved it...pls do add me to ur pm list...

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Akilla

@Akilla

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Posted: 12 years ago

#26

To whom it may concern😳:

ohk ohk i know im really late with my update, and no im not gonna post chapter three today but just wanted to let everyone who is following this story know that yes i am still alive and i wil post the next chapter as soon as i can boost the word count on that, also with me you should know i just have the bigger picture outlined and the small things leading up to that is hard to track up.

plus its really hard for me to write romantic moments and the subtle romantics is actually crucial for the next few chapters, rest assured Najma is gonna go off in the next chapter so the rest of the story will focus on Asad and Zoya and the few characters they meet on the way before coming back home and then you guys will get to choose when i should end the story, rest assured i am still alive and will continue with the story.

im also really swamped up on school and all these surprise tests.

thank you to all those who got this far in the authors note, love you guys and keep on keeping on.

Mwah and...

Happy Oreo's😉

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webuser7

@webuser7

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Posted: 12 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: Akilla
To whom it may concern😳:

ohk ohk i know im really late with my update, and no im not gonna post chapter three today but just wanted to let everyone who is following this story know that yes i am still alive and i wil post the next chapter as soon as i can boost the word count on that, also with me you should know i just have the bigger picture outlined and the small things leading up to that is hard to track up.

plus its really hard for me to write romantic moments and the subtle romantics is actually crucial for the next few chapters, rest assured Najma is gonna go off in the next chapter so the rest of the story will focus on Asad and Zoya and the few characters they meet on the way before coming back home and then you guys will get to choose when i should end the story, rest assured i am still alive and will continue with the story.
im also really swamped up on school and all these surprise tests.

thank you to all those who got this far in the authors note, love you guys and keep on keeping on.
Mwah and...

Happy Oreo's😉

Nice story! Keep going. I was gonna ask why Dilshad did not go with them. Sounds like Najma is gonna be dropped off soon! So never mind. It will make for interesting AsYa moments!