AsYa SS: T.L.C. Chap 16, pg 100 - Page 20

beautiful ,lovely, superb play of emotions. love it.

Awesome part.
I just loved it to the core.
Asad's anger and raw passion was shown amazingly.
I feel bad for Zoe.
Asad should have given her a chance to explain itself.
Ex-fiance-Ayaan.
OMG!! I wish Asad may know the whole truth soon and misunderstandings between Zoya may disappear.
You are a brilliant writer Aditi.
Plz update the next part soon.
Take care!

Originally posted by: adeeti10

Hey Laila, good to hear from you girl! Thanks for the comment about my writing. I haven't really edited or proofed it so I was hoping there weren't any errors! And now I see there are typos 😊

All overlooked - I like your style of writing - you can write - you have masterful use of words and the wonderful ability to describe people, thoughts and situations. This gives the reader a very rich story to read.

Regarding how the characters are evolving, I never believed it when I read authors' forewords mention how their protagonists took a life of their own as the chapters developed.

It's funny, like bringing up a child. You have this vision for them, but there's no guarantee that that's how they will turn out. And that's the case with my Asad and Zoya.

Asad:

He started out in my mind as the quintessential gentleman and as the story developed, he seemed uni-dimensional. I found that behind his flawlessness and control lay hidden the inability to trust easily, and to doubt easily... because of past life experiences. Yes, he's insecure, at one level all of us are' and that's what makes us human ' we're not infallible heroes. How we rise above these flaws, that's what makes us heroes.

That is true, but it seems that in Indian dramas men tend to be very insecure when it comes to women. Over-the-top and possessive.

His jealousy and possessiveness - interestingly, this trait is universally depicted not just limited to Indian men. I've read romance novels ' both old fashioned and modern, and I find that this is one of the commonest flaws used by authors to create conflict. So age-old tactic there, nothing specific to Indians 😊

In this story, I've used this trait because at some point, I wanted Asad to realize he wasn't perfect - wanted him to do something stupid, irrational. More importantly, I wanted Zoya to realize he was human ' we tend to idolize the people we're falling in love with, and I thought a touch of grey would be good.

Zoya:
About how I'd pictured Zoya initially ' she's today's girl. I remember having this discussion with you and we both thought differently about it. So when I finally sat down to visualize the plot, I realized I couldn't see her as someone who's never been in any relationship in this day and ageJ

When I put myself in Zo's shoes while writing this chapter, I saw a woman who's attracted to a man for a while now, who thinks of him as perfect and then his actions of the previous night only reinforce this perception. She's bedazzled by this side when suddenly she encounters his irrational anger and aggression. She fights back first but that doesn't change his behavior, and then she's in despair. Her tears are of disbelief as she realizes the man she's attracted to, is not perfect. For all the courage that women display, when faced with aggression from someone they know/ like/ love, they're in shock and despair.

True, but she's from a Muslim household and this is an India drama. Past relationships are a bit strange...but this is your story and therefore I am not here to tell you what to do...I just expressed what I felt and why it was not working for me.

The plot development:

As for good ol' romance and passion, life is not a bed of roses always ' love is a roller coaster ride, so it's going to be interesting to see how these two overcome their challenges.

Originally posted by: blueflames

beautiful ,lovely, superb play of emotions. love it.

job well done .. bravo!!!

😊 really appreciate it!

Originally posted by: crazy4KASH_AR

Awesome part.
I just loved it to the core.
Asad's anger and raw passion was shown amazingly.
I feel bad for Zoe.
Asad should have given her a chance to explain itself.
Ex-fiance-Ayaan.
OMG!! I wish Asad may know the whole truth soon and misunderstandings between Zoya may disappear.
You are a brilliant writer Aditi.
Plz update the next part soon.
Take care!

Thanks much! I hate misunderstandings too and I hope Asad sorts this out before its too late 😊

Love hearing back from you guys. Happy that you liked it cos I had a tough time writing this part.

Originally posted by: Laila2009

<font color="#660066">Once again, this is YOUR story and I want YOU to write it. I just gave you my feedback as to how the story left me feeling.</font>

Thanks for writing back, love hearing from you 😊

You're really generous in your praise about my writing. With encouragement from you folks, hopefully it will get better as time goes by.

It's always nice to hear back from a reader cos it gives me a sense of what works, how they visualise my characters and the plot... Especially as there's so many ways of viewing the same thing. And not everything works for everyone.

So any constructive feedback is welcome! I was just building up on our past discussions about the story... Since we hadn't spoken in a while.

I start out writing every chapter like its my story to tell, but I'm often surprised at how my characters often "spoil" my plans for them... And I end up rewriting actions, responses and change how scenes play out! I never thought of writing as being like this

😊 😊

Originally posted by: 1D_D3-Crazy

Nice update :-)

Nikki <3

Hey Nikki,
Glad you liked it and took time out to write back! 😊

just read this story!!! realyy great!! please continue!

Loved the update! Ha, Asad really needs to stop and listen to her before shooting his mouth off...poor Zoya...I loved that she held her own against him. Hope to see more fight/love scenes between them.

I absolutely enjoy your writing. Can't wait for more!

Originally posted by: hellomotto369

just read this story!!! realyy great!! please continue!

Thank you! Yup, will do 😃