OS: Uninvited; #2 on Pg 3

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The shamiana was set. Beautiful fairy-lights plastered on the walls, and hung on the huge trees in the yard, enclosing the huge bungalow, shone, unblinkingly. Yards of cloth cut and draped around, outside and inside, gave the feel of a palace, and royalty as guests poured in and out of the huge building.

Nikhat sat staring at herself in the mirror, wondering about nothing. Thousands of thoughts pushed through another crowd of thousands in her mind, confusing her to no end. She picked one, and saw herself watching a segment of a movie, where she was being teased incessantly by her sister and cousin. Her vision cleared, only to realise the two had gone out to attend the guests, as ordered by Humeira's mother. She remembered how Imran had talked to her all these days. She smiled coyly, not able to look at herself in embarrassment, remembering those sweet words, and the faith he had in her as he revealed about himself. That had given her strength to reveal about herself.

She looked down at her left hand, staring at the solitaire Imran had given her for their engagement. She blinked to see an image devoid of her Badi Ammi, elder brother, and younger sister. Suddenly she felt a tickle in her nose and proceeded to sneeze, in the process taking a tissue and covering her nose.
As silent as her sneeze, the evening was too. The sounds of the shamiana, slowly drifted in through the space beneath those closed doors, but they did nothing to calm that turmoil in her.
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Dilshad walked the living room to and fro, squeezing her fingers, and biting her lip. Her thoughts went back to Ayaan, who had come a week ago to invite the whole family for Nikhat's Nikaah. She remembered the softening of Asad's face and the glowing smile on Najma's face. They were genuinely happy for their sister. But the moment had been broken, when Asad had to bring up the topic of the presence of his father. She blinked in exasperation and sighed heavily, as the image of a broken Ayaan tried to glue those pieces with his pleads and begs.

She knew her son was right in his own way and Ayaan the other. Trying to change Asad's mind was next to impossible, because when once she had tried to do it, for the sake of Rashid, it had failed horribly, with the prolonged absence of his when so cordially invited by her, with the push of Asad's permission.

Seating herself on the couch, she tried to reason with herself.

He isn't going to know. If I go now and come back, he will never know. No one will ever know.

Her eyes drifted back to the clock that hung on the wall, above the LED screen, propped up in the centre. There is still time, swallowing. Her hands jerked up to pick up the phone on the tea-table.
No! If somebody else picks up then.. Nodding her head in negative, she put it back down.
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Looking up at the young moon, just out of those clouds that cradle it, she thought, Allah Miyah. Why is it so hard? Why is it so complicated for all of us? With your grace, I passed my examinations very well, and have been given permission by Imran himself, to continue my studies. Today being my Nikaah, I had prayed all along for the presence of my whole family. And by that, I mean Badi Ammi, Asad Bhaijaan, and Najma. Aren't they my family too? Don't they have any right to attend my..., resting a hand on her chest, My Nikaah? I know things have.., she closed her eyes. But you know what is right and what is wrong! And you know that by not inviting them, it's a bigger sin.. It is, because they are family.. Right? Allah, I ask of you only one thing and just one thing today. Today is my Nikaah, and I want them to attend it too. I know it's not possible, but you can at least try. At least a glimpse...?

Letting her hands touch her head, face and neck, she turned to the sound of the music changing to another rhythm, but not before giving a last look to the white ball of light, washing it's serene silver on everything it shone.

Something told her to open the door, and she did as she was told. Craning her neck, she saw the rainbow of colours beneath forming a sea of its own, crest-trough-crest-trough, as the men and women walked and talked and danced to the sounds booming out those loudspeakers set at every corner of the house. She looked to her sides, to find no one here. The groom was yet to come, she remembered, as she looked down again.

She walked, taking noiseless steps across the corridor, lit by golden yellow lights and fairy lights too, adorned by drapes and flowers. She tried to stay out of sight, as much as she could, trying to lift the sharara she wore, that brushed against her thighs and feet. The heavy sharara, masked the tinkling sounds of the payal she wore. She sneezed again, and in fear of getting caught, turned to face the wall and glued herself to it. Trying to calm her breathing, she opened her eyes, wondering if her make up had been damaged. Thankful for the mirror that hung on the adjacent wall, she checked herself and turned to continue her quest, satisfied.

She reached the other far-end of the house, where not a soul was present. It lay decorated but deserted. The walls were somehow soundproof, and she breathed in relief at the reduced sounds of the music.
The heavy door to the hall stayed lock, so she let herself slide down to the seat beneath the window..
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Want me to continue?

Annie

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Posted: 12 years ago
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definitely want you to continue :D
Your a fabulous write <3
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Posted: 12 years ago
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superbbb...
wanna read more...
plz pm me when u update
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Posted: 12 years ago
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beautifully written.you described the whole atmosphere so well.made me want to read more.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome OS!!
Pls pls pls continue :P
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Posted: 12 years ago
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please do continue
awesome intro

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Superb part dear! Please continue!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thank you so much for your encouraging comments!😃 It's a delight to write about this family. So near, yet so far. Or is it the other way round?😳

Any way, I love it! Tomorrow, I've got a test, so am going back to studying.
Will update latest by Friday.
Thank you all again!😳

Annie
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Teaser

"Asad?", her voice barely above a whisper.

Swallowing slowly, turning himself fully to face his mother, he let his hands grip his mother's tender elbows.
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Swallowing hard, his hand rested on his mother's, lacing his fingers through hers, gripping onto it tightly, as he brought it to his lips, to drop a wet kiss on her palm, and let it stay there a moment longer.


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Loved the teaser! Now I'm excited! Good luck with your test Annie! 👍🏼

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