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Posted: 10 years ago
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{MEMBERSONLY} {NOCOPY}

Here is Part 1 People .. ** Fingers crossed **

As the dawn breaks and sunlight peeps into a room and there lies a girl,with an angelic face who appears to be lost in her dreamworld.Suddenly she is brought out of her reverie by a harsh voice screming out- " Pankhuriii ! chal ab uth ja ! arre manhoos.. tu nahi uthi toh saara kaam kaun karega ! . She shivers with the that voice which actually belonged her stepmother.
Pankhu : Jii ma ( Panicking)
stepmother: slaps her ! kitni baar kaha hai tere ko. maa mat bula mujhe !
Pankhu : Aah ! jii .. maaf kijiye maam.
Stepmother : chal ab jaa ! safai kar !

And this was a regular morning in the gupta household. A poor family consisting of aliya ( pankhuri's stepsister) a total replica of her mother ; spoilt , snobbish yet good at heart, mrs. gupta , and pankhuri who after Mr. Gupta's death was reduced to nothing but a maid in her own house.

After completing the day's work ' pankhu sneaks out to go to the lakeside as part of her routine .The lake side was the only place where she felt connected to her late parents.
pankhu: (looking at the dusk) : pata hai ma .. aap hamesha kehti thi ki agar main acche se rahun , sabko khush rakhun toh ek din mera rajkumar aayega , aur mujhe in sabhi dukhon se door le jaega . Voh din kab aaega maa ?! Kya mera rajkumar kabhi aaega bhi ?

The screen shifts to a posh bungalow with huge rooms and a hot ' young man sitting on the big desk in the study room having a meeting with esteemed clints.With a complete no-nonsense look on his face as he carries all the confidence in the world within himself.
Client : Thank You Mr Aditya ..that would be all. Hamein bahut khushi hai yeh contract aapki diwan industries ke saath sign karne mein, I'm sure yeh ham dono ki companies ko aur uchaiyon ki taraf hi le jaega.
Adi: My pleasure Mr. Agrawal. (with a smile )

As he walks out of the mansion , his driver rushes to open the door of his smashing red colour Audi . However ' adi simply tells him to leave .. removes his coat and loosens his tie and sneaks to the lakeside.
As he reaches there , he finds pankhuri sitting there lost in her dreamland. He just sits far apart from her and simply watches her without her awareness. This was his routine since the past 6 months ! from the day he had accidentlly discovered her sitting there.

After a while as pankhuri leaves from there and reaches back home she finds a 40-year old man with a lady sitting with her stepmom and sister.
Stepmother: (with fake politeness) are pankhuri beta .. Aa gayi tu .. dekh inse mil .. Shaurya ji .. aur unki ma .. gayatri ji
Pankhuri( confused) : ji.. namaste .. maine aapko pehchana nahi
Stepmother: pehchanegi bhi kaise.. pehli baar toh mil rahe ho.. beta yeh shaurya ji tera haath maangne aaye hain
Pankhu : shocked ! she just runs inside her room with tears in her eyes..
stepmother: ( covers up) hehe.. lagta hai sharma gayi.. aap log toh yeh rishta pakka samjhiye hamari taraf se ..
Gayatri jji : smiles cunningly.. aur aap 50 lakh pakka samjhiye

IN THE ROOM :
Pankhu is lying on the bed and crying her heart out over her fate..
Stepmother : oye ! chupchap tayyar ho jaa.. kal teri shaadi hai
Pankhu; par maam..
Stepmother: chup !! .. she locked her up in that room and went away..
Pankhuri hugged her knees and kept on crying ,.. :'(
She then looked towards the window which her stepmom had left open accidentally, and quickly rushed towards it wiping her tears..

DIWAN MANSION :
Adi was resting on his comfortable and luxurious recliner when he suddenly opened his eyes feeling restless when his phone rings .
Adi : Hello , yes aman
Aman : ( his personal assistant ) Sir voh Mr. Sharma ki dates mil gayi hain finally .. voh bhi aaj ki
Adi : what ? matlab ?!
Aman : Ji sir.. actually voh aaj indonasia jaa rahe the par kyunki unki flight cancel ho gayi hai and mere request karne pe voh aaj hi aapse meeting karne ke liye maan gaye hain
Adi : That's fantastic Aman ! Good Job
Aman : ( Surprised at the compliment for his sadu boss ) Tthhanks Sir..
toh ab aapko unse aadhe ghante mein milna hai.. at the kempinski lounge..
Adi : Theek hai.. tum files ke saath vahan pahuch jao.. i'll come there directly..
Aman : Ji sir

As adi gets freshened up quickly and eaves the palace he sees his chauffer who comes running to him to open the door of his car , but he stops him
and says : Rehne do kaka.. Aap ghar jaiye .. gaadi main chala lunga
Kaka ( Driver ) : Par sahab..
Adi : koi par var nahi .. aap chabi dijiye
kaka : ji ..

SCENE SHIFTS : Pankhuri jumps through that window and runs haphazardly with the only aim of getting away..

After 10 mins ,
Adi is driving hurriedly and is shocked when he sees a girl running towards his car and he puts a sudden break in order to save from dashing into her as the car comes to a screeching halt ...
Adi : OH shit ! ( He rushes out to see the girl who is lying on the floor on her stomach.. He sits down and turns her around to see her face and is shocked !!

Precap : Adi : Ab tum yahin aaram karogi chupchap
Girl : Par saheb..
Adi : yeh sahab na bulao mujhe .. mera naam Adi hai .. " Adi "
Girl : jii par Adi saheb main.. aapke yahan kaise reh sakti hun bina koi kaam kiye ..
Adi : ( shouts frustrated ) Mere ghar pe rehne ke liye tumhe kisi vajah ki zarurat nahi hai !! Ab chupchap pehle yeh soup piyo ! Not a word more now !

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shaily1008

How did my name change to "sweety1008"??😕 😆😆

Fine...can't wait for the OS!!!

Haha some typo error ! so sorry .. Have updated the first part .. hope you all like it .. A li'l different it is though.. :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey guys .. have posted the first part .. please do gimme feedback :)
The next part i will be posting hopefully by this friday :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow yar its very good!👏 A bit like Cindrella it seems...😉
Plz continue can't wait for next part! :))))
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Surprisee ! Here is part 2 ! :) :)
Part 2 :
He turns her around and sees that it is pankhuri .. and is completely shocked !!
Adi : Angel !! utho ! please ankhen kholo.. please..( shakes her desperately and taps her face .. )
Pankhuri remains stil..
Adi lifts her limp body and places her softly inside the car and drives back home.. He reaches diwan mansion ' lifts her in his arms and places her on the bed..
and then sprinkls some water on her pale face ..
Adi : (very softly ) Angel utho .. please please utho...
Pankhuri : gradually opens her eyes due to the water droplets and clutches her head in pain.. : Aah..
she then after a few moments becomes aware of her surroundings and looks at adi.. seeing him so close gets panicky ..
Pankhuri: kaun ho aap ?! yeh ..yeh kahan hun main
Aditya : ang.. umm.. i mean tumhara naam kya hai ?
Pankhuri : ( scared ) ji.. Pankhuri
Aditya : (to himself such a sweet name ) toh pankhuri.. tum ghabrao mat.. voh darasal tum meri gaadi se takrane vaali thi sadak pe... aur phir behosh ho gayi...toh main tumhe yahan apne ghar pe leke aa gaya ..
Pankhuri : ( then remembers the circumstances she had fled from and starts crying ) Ji .. shukriya saheb.. Main aapka ehsan kaise chuka sakti hun ..
Aditya : Arre ang.. i mean pankhuri .. tum pls pehle to rona band karo.. aur yeh sab kya keh rahi ho tum.. koi ehsan nahi kiya maine tumpar
Pankhuri : Nahi saheb.. aap nahi jaante aapne mujhe kisse bachaya hai ..( still crying )
Aditya : ( gets angry because of her tears but tries to control seeing her state ) Accha bas dear.. shant ho jao.. rona ekdum band .. aur aaram se batao mujhe .. kya baat hai
Pankhuri : ( though she has met adi for the first time she feels as if she knows him since years and feels so secure and comfortable with him. ) jii ..voh.. narrates the entire incident ..

Adi's blood boils listening to all the things he has been through .. and vows to punish all these sinisters..
Adi : ( hugs her tight ) Tum ghabrao mat dear... ab tumhe kabhi in logon ke paas bhi nahi jaana hoga ..
pankhuri is a li'l stunned with the hug and realises that he actually is a stranger and so isn't able to reciprocate ..
Adi then realises what he did .. and pulls back ..
Aditya : Umm.. Sorry .. main voh .. mera koi irada nahi tha aisa ..
Pankhuri : nnahi saheb.. Aisa mat kahiiye .. i'm really thankful to you.. Aapne bahut bada ehsan kiya hai mujhpar ..main ek anath ladki.. jiska iss duniya mein koi nahi hai .. aap toh mujhe jaante tak nahi.. phir bhi aapne mujhe bachaya .. thank you so much ..
Adi : Bas bas.. ab yeh thank you speech band karo .. aur pehle aaram karo.. halat dekho apni ..
ramu kaka ! ramu kaka ! jaldi soup leke aaiye ..
ramu kaka: Ji saheb..
Pankhuri : par main yahan kaise reh sakti hun..
Aditya : kyun... kyun nahi reh sakti yahan ?!
Pankhuri : Ab tum yahin aaram karogi chupchap
Girl : Par saheb..
Adi : yeh sahab na bulao mujhe .. mera naam Adi hai .. " Adi "
Girl : jii par Adi saheb main.. aapke yahan kaise reh sakti hun bina koi kaam kiye ..
Adi : ( shouts frustrated ) Mere ghar pe rehne ke liye tumhe kisi vajah ki zarurat nahi hai !! Ab chupchap pehle yeh soup piyo ! Not a word more now !
Pankhu : ( scared of his loud voice as she remembers the flashes of her stepmother shouting at her , gets tears in her eyes) jii..
Adi then realises how he shouted ..as for him it was normal.. he was a short-tempered .. people around him and his employees were all aware of his nature ..
Adi: ohh.. sorry sorry .. ro mat angel..
Pankhu : Angel ?!
Adi : umm.. voh sab rehne do.. tum chuphap soup piyo aur aaram karo.. main tumhe kal subah milta hun.. aur haan agar kuch bhi chahiye ho toh yeh intercom hai.. yahan par kitchen ka bhi number hai aur mera bhi .. bejhijak phone kar lena
Pankhuri : ji .. par..
Adi : glares at her..
Pankhuri lowers her gaze and quietly starts sipping the soup
Adi smiles at the innocent gesture and leaves for his room .. He enters his room and lies down on the bed exhausted.. (to himself)
Mrs. Gupta ..how dare you do this to my angel ! you all will pay for this ! He calls someone and the coversation goes in mute..
Precap : Adi enters Pankhu's room and is surprised to find the bed empty .. and calls out Pankhuri ! Pankhuri !
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Totally loving this attempt of yours! Can't wait to read more! 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I've read both parts...you've kept me interested all the way through!!!😛 waiting for the next part!!!😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow yaar this update is really a surprise! I guess you couldn't wait to narrate this story on PaYa!😉
Coming to the story, I love it! I really love it! 😳
Haha...Adi keeps calling her angel...love it!

Continue soon!👍🏼


P.S - I think this is an FF you are writing, not an OS as OS means One Shot and it has only one part..you can change the name to Paya FF.😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shaily1008

Wow yaar this update is really a surprise! I guess you couldn't wait to narrate this story on PaYa!😉

Coming to the story, I love it! I really love it!😳
Haha...Adi keeps calling her angel...love it!

Continue soon!👍🏼


P.S - I think this is an FF you are writing, not an OS as OS means One Shot and it has only one part..you can change the name to Paya FF.😊


Well .. I actually meant its not as long as an ff .. So i 'll turn it into an SS :')
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I'm really depressed.. Just this li'l comments :'(

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