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Hello my lovely darlin's! As you guys know I am completeeely fida over Adibear and PaYA, and they are the first couple EVER to inspire me to write an OS. I have not written before, except for my first OS.. But I have had a couple thoughts in my mind and I wanted to expand on them and share it with you guys. So pleaase tell me if I'm just thinking highly of myself by thinking my writing is decent.. Pleaaase give me your alls feedback if I should continue with my other ideas or I should just stop writing.. I should probably stop rambling now. Lol.


So about the OS, just a cute PaYa moment. Adi finds out that Pankuri really doesn't have a boyfriend and she lied. How he found out is not necessary to know.. hahaha


Enjoyyy.. I hope..


It has been days since Adi has spoken to Pankuri. After he realized that Pankuri lied about having a boyfriend, he got angry and frustrated at Pankuri, and due to his stubborn nature, decided he will not speak to her. The silence has been killing Pankuri! She wished he would rather scream and shout at her, but the hurt look in his eyes every time their eyes meet, stabs her heart like a fresh wound each time.

When she is alone and it is quiet that conversation flashes before her eyes each time.

"Why Pankuri why? Why did you feed me this huge lie?"

" For so long I kept thinking you have a boyfriend and I respected your decision and I didn't pressure you when you wanted your space. But now I find out you lied?! Do you know what I went through each time I wanted to call you to make sure you are okay, but resisted thinking, you are probably with Shivam and he wouldn't like it if I called so much? You distanced yourself because you said you had a boyfriend, but you don't. So did you do this because you wanted to stay away from me?!"

The truth hit him hard. On the exterior, he seemed nothing but angry, but his voice and his eyes gave him away to how truly hurt he had been. In a mere second the pain was gone, and a new resolve took on.

"Teek hain! Agar tum mujse ithni hi na pasand karthi hoon, ki tumne ithni baari joot bola taki mein tumse door raho, tho teek hain. Mein tumse aab se koi baath nahin karonge."

Before Pankuri could justify her reasons, or at least try to, Adi stormed out and that was the last of his voice she has heard since.

*********

It's been 3 days since she has not heard his voice. She knows that his stubborn nature will make him stick by his decision more than anything, but how could she explain why she did this? How could she tell him how much anguish it caused her to separate her from him? How could she tell him that describing another man as hers made her recoil at even the thought, when the only person she ever considered wanting was right in front of her? But no' she cannot even consider it.

"I have no right to even think of wanting Adi. Mami was right." she thought.

I do not belong here; I don't fit in with his world or in the Deewan mansion. I can't tell Adi any of this, but I have to explain to him somehow why I lied about Shivam. I have to appease his frustration.

"Muhje kuch karna hoga ki Adi mere baath sune aur muhjse phir baath karne shuro kare.. Par mein kya karu??"

OH! I think I got it! Pankuri remembers few weeks back when she made breakfast for everyone and even then Adi wasn't really speaking to her but he still devoured her pizza. She remembered how much he enjoyed the pizza she made, and especially that she made it. With that thought in mind she decided to make something special for him. Hmm.. Adi loves Frappe's, she thought. She decided the idea was good but there were a few constrictions ahead she realized.

Pankuri has never worked with coffee before. While she was at home, no one ever really drank coffee, they were more of a tea kind of family. It doesn't matter she decided. For Adi, she will do anything. If Adi likes it, she will make it!

But' she hesitated again. She realized that Avantika has restricted her from going into the kitchen. That one time she went in was a different matter. Shanky kaka was sick, so she had to go in to make breakfast. Pankuri fell in a dilemma. She doesn't want to go against avantika's orders, but she also really wants to make the frappe for adi to try to pacify him.. she missed him greatly. With great difficulty Pankuri defies authority for the first time ever and takes the help of Shanky kaka.

She finds him and tells him of her plan, who is immediately thrilled at the idea and guards the kitchen area making sure no one especially Avantika is around while Pankuri makes her frappe.

After what seems like an eternity Pankuri finally finishes making her frappe.

Uoff! I can make biryani and parathas in a heartbeat, but this frappe.. this has me beat!

Meanwhile, Adi in his room is pouting away at his stubborn decision to stay away from Pankuri.

"STUPID ADI! STUPID! Why did you make such a stupid move to stay away from her.. AGAIN!?! You and your ego!" He scolds himself.

After his anger and frustration at Pankuri has calmed down, he has started to think more clearly and now is mentally kicking himself. On one hand he wants to resolve things with Pankuri, but his ego comes in the way. He starts thinking of how he won't be the first to apologize. After all, it was Pankuri who lied and moved herself away from him.. But why would Pankuri do that? After countless times, hurting her feelings in the past, he knows Pankuri is sensible and will not do anything without a reason... but then again why does she want to stay away from him?! Can she not see how much she means to him?

Adi continues this internal war between himself when Pankuri timidly approaches his door with shaky hands.

She gently knocks and comes in. Trembling, she starts approaching him.

"Calm down Pankuri, she tells herself. He's not an animal, he won't attack you' At least I hope not'"

With one look at the nerve-wrecked Pankuri, Adi's resolve falters. He completely melts at the sight of this innocent, trembling woman with the cutest expression on her face, a combination of fear, but determination. The look in her deep brown eyes tells Adi she is determined and she will not leave until she has her saying. Ohhh, how he missed that innocent face, he thinks.

Before Adi could say a word, Pankuri delves into a long rambling speech which honestly seems like she rehearsed it a good few times. Adi missed just about the entire speech, too busy just lost, admiring the face he adored so much, getting overwhelmed with feelings he didn't realize he had. Was she always this dang cute?! He caught bits and pieces of her rambling.. "I'm sorry" "Mamiji" "Latika" and more " I'm sorrys" He then noticed what she had in her hand.. Was that a frappe?!

I tried.. I made this for you... she hands him the frappe. It's the first time I've made something like this. I know how much you love frappes so I thought... Please try it?

Adi takes a sip of it.

How is it? Is it okay? Please tell me, I'm so anxious! Why aren't you saying anything?? She keeps inquiring.

Adi laughs at her nervousness. " I'll speak if you give me a chance to! You've gotten quite chatty in these past few days, haven't you?! Been saving you words for when you'll talk to me again huh?" He teases

Adi notices Pankuri blush and his smile broadens.. how cute.. he thinks. He then takes a step closer to her and replies to her worries about the frappe.

He locks his eyes with her, in a stare so overwhelming that Pankuri thought her entire body would burn up from the heat. "It's perfect, Pankuri."

Hearing this makes Pankuri instantly ecstatic. "Really?!" Before Adi could say or do anything, Pankuri takes the drink from him and tries it herself only to spit it out!

"EEW! Yeh kya hain?! It's so bitter! I added too much coffee and not enough sugar! Adi!" She goes to throw it out, but before she can do that, Adi takes the drink back from her and drinks the entire thing.

"You made this for me Pankuri, personally made it just for me. It's the sweetest thing I have ever had."

The look in his eyes told Pankuri that he wasn't just saying it to make her feel better. He truly believed it. Pankuri felt her flush return as his stare became so intense she thought he could look right into her eyes and into her heart, and see the truth she was hiding from him.

From the door, Preeti witnesses these two "friends" lost in each others eyes..

" Sirf dost hain kya? She says mischievously. Adi betaaa, mano ya na mano par tumhe kuch tho ho rahe hain.. aur mein tho patha laga ke hein rahoongi!!"

She giggles as she leaves. Good work Pankuri.. I like you!



Okay, I am nervous.. PLEASEEE do comment! Anything, feedback. Good, bad.. ?

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shesherkobita thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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WOW how do you guys write so well? Did you take creative writing classes. You are sooo good at this.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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res.
will update l8r

hey what a lovely thought
brillient...
wooowww... so cute...
its always a pleasure t see couple manofyin each other...and some time they do maste for that too...
i was totally in lala land...
you brought out some memory..long lost...
well whtevaa...
i have read it 2 times...and yet some scenes cant be geting out of me you wrote... 👏
perfect...
well i hope as you ahve writen you ahd couple of thoughts and wanted to share it wiht us and expand it..so in lue with that i hope this was only one thought and rest are still untouched and want you to touch them as soon as posible..as i cant w8 to imagine whats next in your brillient head tank thinkinr about your ADIBEAR😆(thou qut a funy name yet cute one)🤢
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Great work Sharna

Frm wer u get such creative plots?
sudi_4m_kol thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow ,,,,,,,,,,,


amazing yaar ,,,,,

its vry sweet ,,,,

carry on ,,, ,,,paya rockz,,
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Amazing OS 👏 👏 Loved the PaYa depiction to the hilt. 👍🏼 👏 The scenes could be easily visualized through you lucid and vivid description. All in all it is quite a marvelous OS ⭐️ ⭐️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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superb.. so when is the next update
sharna2k6 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: payalibm

res.

will update l8r

hey what a lovely thought
brillient...
wooowww... so cute...
its always a pleasure t see couple manofyin each other...and some time they do maste for that too...
i was totally in lala land...
you brought out some memory..long lost...
well whtevaa...
i have read it 2 times...and yet some scenes cant be geting out of me you wrote... 👏
perfect...
well i hope as you ahve writen you ahd couple of thoughts and wanted to share it wiht us and expand it..so in lue with that i hope this was only one thought and rest are still untouched and want you to touch them as soon as posible..as i cant w8 to imagine whats next in your brillient head tank thinkinr about your ADIBEAR😆(thou qut a funy name yet cute one)🤢



Aww Payal! Thank you so much for the sweet words! I love hearing your thoughts, they are too funny and adorable.. like you?! 😳😃
Did I bring out some personal experiences?! DO TELL! 😉 I do have one other thought that I am thinking of.. playing around with it in my mind.. but I want it to be good. I'm still thinking of it, but don't worry, PaYa and especially ADIBEAR.. ( yes yes its a funny name.. but myy adibear! 😉) have inspired me to write! Its a complete first I tell you.. I usually do not write at all apart from my long posts on IF hahaha. But thank you for your sweet words of encouragement.. you guys make me want to write.. Now I hope everyone else thinks so too! Or are you biased? Hmm?! HAha 😆😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: shesherkobita

WOW how do you guys write so well? Did you take creative writing classes. You are sooo good at this.



Thank you! 😳 Haha, no no creative class.. This is actually the second time I've ever written.. First was another OS for PKDH and now this.. I actually do not write.. but somehting about PaYa makes me want to write. I'm so glad you liked it! 😳😃

Btw, you are new here.. Welcome to the forum! And look forward to many more posts from you! 😃 I am Sharna, if you need anything, any questions, don't hesitate to ask! Have fun!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: anusha.cochin

Great work Sharna

Frm wer u get such creative plots?



Thank you Anu! 😃😳

Adibear came into my dream and gave me this idea 😆😉 Hahahaa

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