Rise Of The Fallen - a DFL OS - Page 2

Originally posted by: Paint.It.BlacK.

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wow wow wowww! !!!! that was something mandy!!! what an update!! 👏

you sure---think it was an average one? because what i've just read was completely well knitted--perfect--representation of Rehan's tale! i dnt know how else it could have been more perfect! Perfect 😲 U r way too kind to me 😆 but thanks a lot 🤗

Halfway into the story and I could already visualize a vulnerable Rehan--a boy who is soo completely different from an image we are so used to have of him!! That was the point. In DFL we only got a glimpse but I was not sure if many had really understood his pain. They got mad at him when he tortured Pia and did many other stuff but not many cared to see what had turned him into a monster

His immensely passionate love for Zaisha was intriguing enough to cherish the innocense and beauty of his love! ⭐️ Thank u for pointing that out 😳 His love was indeed innocent but in a cruel world like that it is nothing but a curse

what Zaisha did is completely detestable and impossible to pardon. even as a character it's out of question to give her any chance to explain why she did what she did. perhaps a OS from you on a deeper take into her character can rend us some answers! Some people don't feel any remorse for ruining another person's life and trampling all over their heart and Zaisha is one among them. So there is no other explanation to it. Perhaps you may (I am not promising anything coz I am yet to write 😛) I may have a tiny glimpse but that will only be to show her true self. Not y she turned into a heartless vampire.


Avni--she took a small part of the story, and yet her persona lingers even after the story gets over. it becomes impossible to get it out of our mind, her love and the sacrifice she had to make for her son! I am surprised that many noticed Avni 😆 But from the looks of it she happens to be the show stealer here 😆 There was not much about her in DFL but I assumed that a woman who could raise her child all by herself despite being shunned by her own clan and betrayed by the man she loved is no weak being. And a mother always loves her child and she will do anything to protect them and thats what I showed here.

I dnt know which part should i name as more beautiful. ..weather the picture of a love lorn boy---or the portrayal of a treacherous lady love Zaisha--or the merciless cruel face of an ungrateful woman--a son who loves his mother--cries for his love thinking she is dead---or girl who mocks at being truly loved instead of acknowledging its worth--or a mother who fights to save her son--i dnt know which one to praise more! I see each emotion a gem of reflection of the characters here. 👏 and every part i read gives me satisfaction and i feel proud as a reader that I'm here to read anything you write! Awww ☺️ Thats too much of a compliment coming from a prolific writer like urself and it means a lot 🤗

the end is overwhelming! i almost felt tears in my eyes! It was an heartfelt moment to see a mother dying to save her son! Rehan motionless..unable to do anything and begging to end his life to Zaisha -is an even bigger heart breaking sight to watch! yes watch--because i dnt read, with such great write up--all i do is see! and i loved every part of it. 👏 I wouldn't call it begging but Rehan was in a state of shock and the only emotion he felt was guilt. True it was Zaisha who killed her but if he had never let her in his life his mother wouldn't have been killed in cold blood. And he probably wouldn't feel the pain of it. Maybe he thought it was only right that he die since his mother had paid with her life for his folly
need i say more? :p please please write more! u remember the deal--dnt you?😉 so dnt dare plan of anything else! Ok ma'am 😛

and yeah since you mentioned--lady i dnt do charity. and i stay honest. but you know that already! right? 😉 Point duly noted 😛

ok. anyway, now update the next part asap! I wn't let you be in peace unless you do. 😛 Am afraid u gotta wait dear 😆 SL is up next and after that yes, it is this one 😳🤗

Originally posted by: ..Bournville..

very nicely written Mandy.

finally we get to know Rehan and Zaisha's story. No wonder Rehan turned out to be what he was when he was betrayed so royally by the one he loved most.

waiting for part 2 now.

Originally posted by: ..juhi..

mandy...wow!! just amazing superb...loved it ❤️ Rehan really suffered alot...there was no fault of his in all these...he also lost his mom...mandy...was waiting for so long for an update from u and finally its here...will be waiting for more...

So I am here with my long overdue comment😆

It was awesome manasa👏👏...absolute written perfection⭐️( and you wrote splendidly, the writing matched the tone and feel of the story, and I'm never going to agree that you can't write...be aware!😈)

For starters, you couldn't find a better quote to go with this chapter, it kind of captures rehan's story's essence..⭐️

and now for the first part itself...

As soon as I started reading...the feeling of heartbreak started to set in, you know...because I know how it ends...and then when I am reading of all the love, all the genuine heartfelt love rehan had for zaisha, how he didn't care about werewolves and vampires in his love for her, how innocent and trusting he was while loving...and my heart breaks a little more.

Rehan cares about protecting those he loves, his mother avni, and zaisha...and he has his heart shattered on both their accounts- on his mother's account because of the guilt he feels on her death, and on zaisha's account because of her betrayal. He ran away with zaisha because it believed it would protect them all, and it only ended in his mother's murder and the betrayal from the one person he lost his heart to.

You have built up and showed his past wonderfully here...the reason he has become what he is-is aptly portrayed and justified. He has become so heartless because he once cared too much. You can't help but feel for him, and that crippling helpless sadness you brought out in me while reading proves how perfectly you nailed rehan and his story without a doubt.👏

Avni's story is the story of the epitome of a mother's love😊...that line where she says that rehan is all she will ever have hits so deep...and I loved her story as well and I admire her for her fierce love and determination to protect her son at all costs, right till the end.

This OS was stellar on all fronts...the development, the dialogues..everything...👏👏

So yes, now I am eagerly waiting for the second part to see how you bring this OS to a closure.😃