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Originally posted by: harinisriram39
Another update which left me speechless.
It was really very nice of you to give an update on new year.
A Very Happy New Year dearest Shreya

The update was so deep and touching that it left me with a heavy heart. Almost had the same impact like the 23rd May wala episode.
I am not good at commenting and it may be really tiring to read them. But cant help from commenting. You will have to put up with it

So far, I have read your OS, SS-MD, several updates of T&A and C&C and I can say that , you really rock in creating concepts and mold them into interesting tracks - be it romance or action, or drama or humor. Your writing skills are excellent. They communicate the point. They describe the person in general and the feelings in the respective situations, in simple conversations.
I should not be surprised at your writing skills after reading all your works, though your updates never cease to surprise me.
But what amazed me is the way you understand each and every character and you bring life to the character by weaving the appropriate dialogues into a well patterned track. Not everyone has this skill - of understanding the character. This is how, this person, in this situation, will behave, will communicate, will conceal, will express,will act, will react. I have seen this talent of yours in MD itself. But you still continue to amaze me with every update of your works. Every SS/FF/OS is different in its concept and you bring out the strength of the character accordingly.

OMG itna zyada praise..are you trying to make me an arrogant prat😆

Why PKYEK had been one of my most favourite shows is the uniqueness of the characters. The characters of Abhay, Piya, Chand, Haseena, Siddharth, Misha, Kabir, T etc. These characters, their dialogues, actions, everything was unique and consistent. These characters perfectly fit into the tracks which were segregated by order and method to give life into the concept.( I dont want to comment on the last tracks of the show as it was messed up due to the channel going off air)
You, in this fan fictions, not only depicted the characters in the same way as in the show (with exception to Alina), but also refined them (much better than in the show),perfectly patched up the missing links, and introduced them into the tracks and woven the tracks around in such a way that it is really difficult to segregate the characters from the tracks. It gives the feeling that the characters and the tracks are the part of the same system. ( I dont know if I am putting this properly because I have seen movies, shows where we get to see the star - doesnt matter what movie he/she acts, you get to see the same. But there are certain movies/shows, where you dont just see the actor but the character. The character and the show are inseparable)
The way you understand and portray characters (at this young age), my dear, you will go places, not just in these creative works but also in handling real life people, situations. My best wishes to you.

Thank you for that😳

Coming to the update, the reactions of the characters to the present situation is mind blowing

First, I was wondering how come Piya's people would keep quiet that its late in the night and she has not yet reached home and there you explained. Alina taking over charge and tells that they were attacked by some guys and Abhay came to their rescue. Hope Dobrials take notice of this. Once again Abhay to the rescue (Ofcourse Misha now knows that Abhay really cares for Piya)

The Piya-Alina conversation was totally fabulous. I can imagine Piya not letting to let go Alina to leave her even for a moment. The night had been a hell of night for Piya. She was almost killed. If that were not enough, she would have lost Abhay in the fight that followed. And above all she had killed a person whom she knows very well (To her Dipannita is still a a person). She may have recovered from the shock of the shock of an attempt on her life. She may have felt relieved that Abhay was safe after all. But the fact that she actually killed someone. That is a huge trauma which cannot easily overcome. No one can comfort her - not even Abhay. She had killed Alina's mother and she wants every assurance of Alina that its okay that she had not killed Alina's mother but a wolf which was about to kill Abhay. She only had acted to prevent the wolf from attacking Abhay but not with the intention of killing it.
The way Alina comforted her was even mind blowing. She could have been a psychiatrist (I mean you would really be a very good psychologist or psychiatrist if you chose to study medicine). The only way she could bring Piya out of the shock was to make Piya feel the loss of Abhay. She had not just said the words that Abhay would have been dead, but she made Piya feel that Abhay might have been lost for ever if she had not killed Dipannita. This one treatment is the highlight of the update (Not exactly, I find many things in the update worth to be highlighted)

Well, I don't know. Alina, well, she's not one to sugarcoat anything. She tells it like it is and so Piya got a dose😛

Originally posted by: harinisriram39
Coming to Sid Alina conversation. I dont think I can put into words my appreciation. I dont think words can do justice. But will try my best.
Siddharth - Cool, cunning, scheming person. Never liked to taste failure ( he may not be all evil now that he has changed - (I mean earlier he used to seduce females to quench his thirst and desires and he is not like that anymore). Siddharth understands the characters of people very well unlike Abhay. He knows what kind of person Alina is and knows the exact treatment to be meted out to bring them to his way. And he always had this sense of humour, even in the most dangerous situation. This line really cracked me up. "So..are you the clan leader now? " said Sid as the car purred smoothly past trees and houses. "Why are you interested?" snapped Alina. He shrugged. "I just wanted to know if it would affect your working hours." 🤣
I dont know whom to appreciate - the character of Siddharth or the author -Shreya . Yes the appreciation belongs to you. Its your creation.

I would like to differ here- it's Sid who deserves the credit, or the CVs of PKYEK maybe.

Siddharth always was observant of people around him. This was one of his greatest strengths. He knew the weak spots of people - whether he wanted to put to good use or to attain his selfish needs, he always knew about people.
He knew her middle name of Reina (R atleast from her files). Now does that mean Alina is Reina. I still dont think it is, unless you explicitly confirm. Reina is her middle name. Dipannita is her biological mother and about a decade or so Alina was a young girl when her mother punished her. So if Alina is not Reina, why does she have that name. Is Reina her God Mother. Someone who bestowed her with special powers which even a Luna wolf might not possess?
What was it he had seen a decade ago. And why did he have to come across Dipannita?
Whatever, by mentioning this, he had touched a raw nerve that the mere memory brought out such immense energy, enough to shatter a glass. If Siddharth had not distracted her, there is no telling what would have happened.

All I will say at this point is wait and watch. Coz yeah Alina has a past.

And even if Alina was Reina, how did she know the details of Piya's attacking him with her necklace. No one was there except for T. So unless someone watched it in a crystal ball, they would not have noted the details.
He caught her off guard on Piyali and Alina managed to get through.

Siddharth knew Abhay even more better. Sid had known long back that Piya got back her memories and acquiesced to her request of concealing the fact from Abhay. But now he knows how Abhay would have felt at the knowledge that Piya not only had got back her memories, but never gave any hint about it. Abhay might have felt better if Piya confronted him then and there.
All the time she was playing along with Abhay as if she never knew his identity and their relationship before she lost her memories. Can anything more than this hurt Abhay and Siddharth knew exactly Abhay felt at this time and he did not want to be in Abhay's shoes right now.

Correct. Abhay will be extremely hurt

Coming to Siddharth kissing Alina. Why did he do that. Did he already start developing feelings for her unknown to him. Or was she just a challenge to him. For over two centuries, Siddharth might not really met any woman who was not charmed by him. Mostly all the woman he met would have fallen for his charms. Piya may not have fallen for his charms because she believed Panchi to be in love with Sid and viceversa. But Piya never showed the "I dont care" attitude towards Sid. She always respected him. But Alina, she never fell for his charms instead turned him down (though not in romantic sense) at every opportunity. She was a challenge to him. He badly wanted her attention. He wanted her to feel for him just the way he felt for her. It may not be love yet, but some strong attraction, something which cannot be ignored. When words failed, did he resort to action (though not really intended).
"I won't be playing this game by your rules, anymore. Now, the rules will be mine."
Now what did he really mean by that. Is this the start of romance or did it mean something else.
Did he do any homework on finding out more about Alina?

Who knows what's on Sid's mind? Sometimes, not even me.😆

Alina's mind which was at it peak state after all the action had broke down with Sid's kiss. She too was on the verge of breaking down and luckily she had Dishu to comfort her and help her out with the emotions. That was also very touching.

Res. I have more to say on Abhay, Piya, Misha, Nicolas, Piyali Siddharth. Looks like this one will be a very long comment.

Originally posted by: harinisriram39
Coming to Abhay, my heart really broke at his plight. I felt the same ache which I felt (still feel when I see the episode) on seeing the 23rd May episode.
How did he feel right now - betrayed (perhaps not exactly betrayal but something close)
If yes then by whom.

He had wiped out her memories so that she could forget him and lead a normal life.

Even on coming back he did not want to give her back her memories. She was now united with her family and has every chance of leading a normal life.
Though she lost her memories, on seeing him, she demanded answers on their relationship and he successfully evaded. Then she suddenly disappeared only to return back as a changed person.
He could feel the change in her, but never imagined that she got her memories back and knew everything about him, about them.

And all these days, she had been with him carrying on his own lies.
So she got back her memories and what did she really think of him, what are her feelings for him.
She did slip up on a couple of occasions but again she used to distance herself from him.
His dead heart really ached at her indifference. He might have felt better if she confronted him immediately on return of her memories. But she didn't .
She also seemed to know that Siddharth is a vampire and how he had attempted to kill her for his own selfish needs. Still she seemed to trust him and work in his office. Even he was aware that she got her memories back. She trusted Siddharth but kept this fact from Abhay.

Then coming to his own parents. Haseena and Chand also knew that she got her memories and even they kept him in the dark what if they had their own reasons for not telling him.

Siddharth, Haseena, Chand, Alina, every one knew that she got her memories back except him. And everyone kept him in the dark.

I really felt bad for Abhay. But then, did he not conceal things, for his own reasons. I wish he could understand the turmoil Piya is also going through. She could have even ended her life as a way out of this mysterious misery (I liked it very much when she tells Alina that she could have used these tablets to end everything for ever). I wish Abhay would get to know her this state of mind. Of what he did to her.

Dont worry. He will.😛

Haseena and Chand's conversation with Abhay was also mind blowing. The considerate mother and the practical father. (Oh my ! Shreya, I really loved the way you wrote Chand's dialogue "I think you should not blame her for it. We all have our own..." He glanced at Haseena, "..secrets." How well you understood PKYEK characters and also portray them in a more refined way. My salutations to you)

I wanted to add "sssecrets" but I thought it would mess up the seriousness, actually.😆

Then Piya's self talk again was mind blowing. I really dont have words to express this (You are spared this time from my comment 😉)

Coming to Misha and Piya's conversation. Yes this was really needed. All the time, Misha was telling bad about Abhay and then suddenly she tells that she is in a relationship with him. That was bad. And Misha really felt that she had to apologize to Piya for that. (Something neither Panchi nor Misha felt necessary in the show). But I failed to understand why Misha thought that Abhay could have been the reason for whatever happened to Piya that night. Every one knew that Siddharth was a vampire and he took her to Maithli another vampire who wanted to kill Piya. Even when Abhay tries to call Misha, Maithili who pretended to be Piya cuts the call asking her not to involve Abhay as he is a normal human. Even when Piya insists on going back , she never mentions about Abhay. Then how did Misha think that Abhay was there that night and was somehow responsible for Piya's state. Ofcourse he disappeared all of a sudden and and there was no denying the fact that Piya cared for him and if she asked for him, he was no where to be found. But there was nothing that they could relate Abhay with what happened that night.
Whatever Misha, realized that Piya got back her memories and was excited to share this with her parents and others. Something which was never given importance in the show. But knowing Misha's character, this is how it would have been. That is why I repeatedly say that you not only refined the characters but also patched up the missing links in the show.

Piya, I think, told Arnab that she had to go because Abhay needed her. So...

Now why did we have Nicholas all of a sudden. Is this just a filler or does he have an important role to play, (in the supernatural world)?

And then enter again the psychologist Alina. She perfectly knows the spot she has to touch to bring Piya into action.

Siddharth - Piyali conversation is another mindblowing one. Sid may have lured many people into his confidence. But Piyali was one person where he opened up his true self. He considered her a friend. He is grateful that she had come back for him, giving him an opportunity to explain?
He opened up his heart on how bad he felt at the things that had gone and how wrong he was about Maithili. He had done everything for her, not even giving a second thought if he was doing right. He betrayed his own brother while he was human. After he turned into a vampire, he was against Chand and Haseena and his jealousy for Abhay was always there. He opened up all his guilt and sincerely confessed whatever he felt in his heart. But then why was there a gleam in his eye which confused and scared Piya. Alina wanted Piyali to make Siddharth feel guilty about what he did and he did feel guilty. So their mission for now is achieved. But why did Piya sense something fishy? Why was she afraid for Sid, that he would be harmed by Maithili some day?
And when she thinks to her self that Sid plotted to kill her, it was Piya last year, right and not Piyali. What does Alina and Reina want from Siddharth and does he have some other plan?
All I will say, is, read very carefully what Sid says...

Its not surprising that Abhay left home. He would never have felt this lonely in all his existence as a vampire that he decided to leave his parents and home. But it is surprising that Haseena acually called Piya and told her. I mean in all these years, Abhay would have had difference of opinion and would have left them then why did Haseena want to involve Piya. I think even she sensed the heart break of Abhay and felt that only Piya could convince him.

Haseena knows why Abhay has left, you see...😉

I always wanted Abhay to go to her and explain to her, his actions. But looks like she has to find him and he would take it out on her that she never told him about the return of her memory. Atleast for a short while, I wanted Piya to back off and Abhay to bring her back. But looks like it has to be the other way round and Piya has to make him accept his love. Otherwise it may not fit.

With Dipannita dead, Jeh gone and Siddharth changed, would Abhay feel that Piya is no longer in danger and therefore it is the best for her to be away from him?

😲how did you know I am planning this only?😲

And final question have you disclosed Reina's identity that she is none other than Alina or is the suspense still on?
If Abhay realised Alina was Reina then why did not he not confront her on what she did or intends to do with Piya?
He merely acknowledges her presence when he sees her as Reina and assures her that he will keep her identity safe.

He respects people's privacy unlike some other people...and no i won't clarify...see this is what happens when I twist something so much😆

Will we get to see Abhiya scenes in the next update? Any teasers?

Definitely. Count on it.

Thanks Shreya for a fabulous, mind blowing update.

My favourite line in this update - you sentenced Abhay to a lifetime of loneliness"
This one sentence speaks everything about PKYEK.. How a person sentenced to a lifetime of loneliness breaks it to be united with his true love.

Extremely sorry about the long comments. Couldnot help it 😳

Gosh yeah I think it's longer than the update but koi na😆

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Posted: 11 years ago

#112

Originally posted by: Bisweswar
amazing update di...loved alina-sid part...yeh abhay ka dimag kya ghaas chadne gaya hai?now why did he left?paagal kahinka..thanks for the pm di..

Acha, so Piya is the only one who can feel senti?

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Originally posted by: vmpy
chap37..
abhay wants to console piya but he is helpless
a heart touching part
haseena n abhay convo over da phone was a realistic one
abhay sensed something n then reina?
abhay had a glimpse of piya in danger
jeh came to bid good bye to alina n told her about piya being in danger n depanitta behind her fr trapping abhay
alina n dishu part n theen sid going after alina were also amazing
then coming to da fight part piya not willing to call abhay n abhay without caring fr his life goes dere fr his piya dis is da epical love impressive n un matchable dats da reason v love them like crazies as dey love each other like crazies
sid n alina were dere too
piya killed depanitta good nw going to read chap 38
loved dis chap to core
thanx fr pm shreya

Thanks a lot Aquib. 😳

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#114

Originally posted by: Bleak_House
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First of all i would like to say--after reading this update i was left with no words! This time i am literally at loss of words. Believe me i dnt know what can i say to make my thoughts apparent...i am searching for the right word..bt of course infront of your writing-no word can i express that would fit.
I just want to say you are 'Magnificient' in the true sence shreya! 👏

When i was in the middle of the update i was sure that i want to see your work in a binding formate-nt soon bt asap! And you know i dnt say things i dnt mean.
So yes-i mean it.

Through time your work has matured. It has cultivated, emerging as the most finest forms of storytelling. ⭐️

You know i will repeat it again-writers like you should write. Writing is actually for talented guys-like you!
Literature needs intelligent and intellectual minds to make writing more pleasurable and words impeccable!
And you certainly fall in that league!

Thank you very much Indu. It honestly means a lot to me but you should stop praising me so much. I mean, I love being praised, but too much of a good thing isn't good😆besides, this is just a fanfiction, based on characters created by others. So...😛

About the update-i dnt have to say much. Dnt mistake to think because there rnt any,bt there's actually so many that i dnt know how to begin n cmplete my comment in a compact way.
The point i like to mention-Alina and sidh convo. It was in single word 'Excellent'!! Truly truly excellent! Every word they exchanged and the way the situation was explained was truly..honestly brilliant!! 👏
And the portion that left me speechless was sid! The brief bt intricate detailing u gave on him was excellent! His dialogues, moves every action and reflex is incridibly well explained!⭐️👏

one hobby of the writer we have got long back n another we got now with the color!😉

Actually, no. My favorite colour isn't purple. But I think purple suits Alina more.😆

cuming to alina-certain thing-very few in number-am afraid-i certainly cnt encourage! Bt except that i would say she is one of the most balanced supernatural in their imbecile world. Till nw the way she has pulled off truly deserves an accolade!

In many ways, Alina's conduct certainly is reprehensible. But that's how she is.

And so does pia! 😊 i admire her for the strong nerve she had shown all thru this time. If she lost that a little nw she is nt to blame considering the circumstances she had to face!
Regarding Abhay -i feel here he behaved just the way he should have! Just the way abhay shud have. (i hope u get wat i mean!) a storm was cuming i knew that the moment he startd giving short replies. bt i hope it wnt last too long as pia will be on her way-i suppose,(if am nt wrong) n hopefully misunderstandings will be sorted out. 😉
abhay n sidh are diffrent frm eachother yet similar in so many ways!

I'm glad you think Abhay behaved as he should have. Let's see if misunderstandings get sorted out😳

Btw i forgot to point out that while reading sid's part several times i was forced to think of Damon. Though definitely it cudnt replce sid as his persona was strong and too powerful to be washed away by other influence! Really this time u explaind sid part so well that for the first time it even transends abhay !!great job!👏

Lol, many times this happened in the show too😆

well i guess i hav mre or less covered everything! N if i havnt then its ur fault-that i cnt think clearly! 😉
p.s. And last bt nt the least-i want to say that whenevr i dare to comment in your works-its solely as a reader because as i writer i have zero rights to comment !
p.p.s. Abt abhay's pov nt including here, u did the right thing. So dnt worry!😊
And the humour in dis updat according to me was perfectly balanced! 👍🏼
Now plz carry on-and thanks a lot for pm.🤗
and sorry 4 late,am outside.so it took dis long. :-(

For god's sake, comment. I don't care as what, but I want to hear from you, okay? And thank god the humour didn't go OTT.😆

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#115

Originally posted by: harinisriram39
Yes Shreya, I am damn sure you will feel a sense of achievement once you complete it. Please please do believe me just this once. Let your talents floe freely. I am sure this will be one if your master piece.

Please, you need to know that you do have readers who are waiting earnestly for you to update it.

Hmm. I guess I will. But this one is still my top priority for now.

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Originally posted by: Andromeda001
Shreya u were really thinking to discontinue it??😲 OMG here i was thinking u r d only one who wont let anything or anyone affect u!! D way u express urself in ur works, it seems dat u r writing to develop urself, 2 please urself, 2 say what u really feel about dat situation, not made up situation n description, i can really see Shreya through ur writing. Though Abhay is same 4 all writers bt yet i feel d diff b/w ur Abhay, n Abhay in other ffs, A basic similiarity yet difference. Ii hope u ve gave up this thought by now. This ff really gives words to our feelings n thoughts dat remained unfullfilled due to an altogether diff track in d show. Here we were pining 4 Abhiya, there they were introducing more n more crappy side stories, nothing focussed on Abhiya. So I hope u understand my attachment wid d story. I m sorry, i usually 4get after resing all coz of no net at home. Thru mbl i ve limited data n i keep myself on fb only dat uses less data :P bt i never miss any of urs or any other stupendous writer's update ever.

LOL not this one. I can't discontinue this one, it's my firstborn😳I was talking about the other one. As for Abhay, I don't know. I have always found Indu's the best.😳
And well, you are correct that I do write to vent..since this and singing is all I have😆

Coming 2 d update, I would come 2 my most fav yet shocking part. Abhay left???😲. I had expected by his rxn 2 whole thing in front of Chandeena bt not this!!! OMG I m so damn eager 4 this part now😭.

Well yeah. he's really badly hurt by the whole thing.

Does he know Piya is Piyali?? May be he guessed?

Loved d whole epi. So Dipu got killed. A shock as expected frm Piya's side as a human n on killing her best friend's mother bt did anyone notice how she killed Dipu? I mean she kiled her in a similiar way as Piyali.😲

Hmm..unlikely. People do tend to focus on the thing that's most important to them.

Sid-Alina convo was damn good. I m waiting 4 next part😈

😆
No SidLina in next update sorry

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Originally posted by: -Monayaholic-
awesome update piya's part was intersting indeed and yes really eager to know where abhay went ??

You will know that soon!😆

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Chapter 39

The mobile slipped from Piya's hands. Alina caught it deftly and put it to her own ear. "Piya?" came Haseena's voice. Piya s eyes were wide in shock and horror. Dumbstruck, she watched Alina talk. "Yeah. Yeah, got it. Yeah, I'm bringing her." She cut the call and handed the phone back to Piya."What did she say? Where's Abhay? Why-" began Piya at once. "Later," said Alina. "We have to get to the car. I'll drive you there, ok?" Piya nodded. "Thanks."

A few minutes, she was sitting the car, adjusting the folds of her dress as Alina pressed the accelerator. "Alina, my dress!" said Piya. "I can't meet her like this!"

"And we don't have time to change," said Alina, completing her unsaid sentence. "Hmm... How about this?" Piya's gown changed into a sparkly black dress which barely covered her thighs. "Hell, Alina, I can't go like this!" exclaimed Piya in alarm. "This isn't a party, for god's sake!" "How's this, then?" asked Alina.

Piya glared down at herself. She was now wearing a cotton white sari with a red border. "Are you freaking kidding me?" she burst out. But Alina was looking perfectly serious- almost too much so. "Okay, then..." Alina frowned as she appeared to deliberate. "Hmm...what would suit the occasion?"

Piya looked down at herself as Alina changed her attire for the third time. She was wearing a white sleeveless top with a knee length, blue denim skirt. "Fine,but I'll be cold," said Piya. Alina smirked. "Here you go," she said to Piya, making the sleeves full length. Piya stared at Alina. She had a feeling that Alina was enjoying some secret joke...but what?

"Here,"we've reached," said Alina, braking the car outside the Raichand Mansion. Both girls hurried inside. "Haseena aunty! What's wrong?" panted Piya. "Where's-Abhay-"

"I don't know,rightly," admitted Haseena. She was looking even paler than usual. "I've tried his phone- switched off."

"But-when?" said Piya, now confused. "When did he leave? And why?"

"He was in a terrible rage," said Haseena, looking away. "He just walked out the door and took off in his car mid morning. I called after him, but-"

"But why was he angry?" said Piya, ignoring the small voice that whispered inside her head that it was probably somethingshe herself had done. Haseena said nothing. Piya turned to ALina, who was looking unruffled. "I know where he is," she said calmly. "I could take you to him. He's in a bad temper, though."

Haseena came forward and gripped Piya's arms. "Piya, please. Please go and talk to him. I'm feeling terribly worried. If something bad happens-" she broke off. "Just please go and talk to him."

"But, but-" stammered Piya,"Why me? Alina could drive you, right?" she asked, glancing at Alina. Haseena sighed, pushing back her hair from her forehead. "I don't think I can go to him now, Piya. It's me he's angry at."

"Well I'm not going to go talk to him," said Alina. "I might attack him. And then we'll be worse off than ever."

"But why?" said Piya again, glancing from Alina to Haseena. "It's not like him to act like that. Why was he angry with you?"

"I don't know," said Haseena. "He didn't really tell me anything. Please, Piya, can't you do this much-"

Piya sighed deeply. "Okay then. I'll try talking some sense into him." Haseena smiled in relief. "Thank you, dear. I know he will listen to you."

"Oh yeah, he will," said Alina."Come on, Piya. It's not exactly next door where he's gone."

Piya followed her outside. At the door, she turned to looked at Haseena. Oddly , the worry was gone completely from her face. As though she was completely sure that Piya would somehow get Abhay back.

She suddenly a surge of pity for Haseena, accompanied by anger at Abhay. How could he just leave his house like that? Didn't he give a damn for his mother's feelings?

As Piya and Alina left, Haseena turned to Chand, who was hidden in the shadows. She smirked. "Perfect." "And what if it backfires, Haseena?" said Chand. "You know how they are. " "Yeah, " said Haseena. "Well- we'll have to take that gamble, I guess. Sometimes, lies can actually help..."

Piya was smouldering as she sat in the car.

"Are you angry?" said Alina inquiringly. "Yes," answered Piya. "Yes, I am."

"Hmmm," said Alina. "Why?"

Piya turned to look at her. "How can you be so calm?" she asked disbelievingly. "God knows what the hell's wrong with him. How could he be so indifferent to his own family? I mean, you can't just get angry at your mom and leave the house. You should talk to her and-" Alina snickered. "That's rich, coming from you. I guess you have the sole right to play Tom and Jerry, I see."

"And what is that supposed to mean?" said Piya, raising her eyebrows.

"Nothing," said Alina, her eyes on the road. "Just that, it's ironic you should be angry on him for leaving. Merlin only knows how many times you've done a PT Usha yourself. But of course he shouldn't get that luxury. Poor guy." She tutted.

Piya glared at Alina.
"Do you like taunting me every chance you get? You're like his bloody twin or something!"

"So I've been told," said Alina wryly. "But actually, I like having some fun sometimes. And you two are fun to tease."

Piya threw her a look. Alina heaved a long-suffering sigh, then smiled at her. "Don't worry, Piya. Everything will be okay."

Piya said nothing, but her face showed frown lines. Why had Abhay acted so oddly? What had happened between him and his mother? And why was Alina acting so weird? Granted, she always acted a bit strange, but this time, it felt different. Irritation and anger rose up in her at Abhay, for being so darn irresistible, for protecting her every single time, for standing by her in the times she had no one, for making it so impossible to stop loving him, and at herself, for being unable to resist him, for being so damn interfering, for being unable to say no to anything concerning him. Why couldn't she have a nice, normal life, with normal problems? No, she had to fall right in Abhay's arms within days of getting into a college. Resting her head on the glass of the window, she thought again about Abhay, his eyes, those rare smiles, his lips, his anguish, his fury...she cursed herself. But the images wouldn't stop. They replayed over and over again in her memory.

"Piya, are you getting out?" came Alina's voice. Piya came back to herself. At least an hour must have passed, because darkness had fallen and the car had stopped, in front of a rather large house. There was only a single light on , somewhere on the first floor. But there were no people or houses nearby,

She opened the door and got out, slightly confused as she stared at the huge building.

She stood in the cold, shivering slightly. Alina joined her. "This is one of the many estates owned by the Raichands," she told Piya. "And Abhay is inside." She nodded to the sleek black car that stood proudly in the parking lot. "Okay," said Piya. "and..and you won't be coming with me?" Alina snickered. "No. But don't you worry. I'll pick you up when you're done- if you need me to."

"Okay then," said Piya. She took a step forward, then stopped. "The door'll be locked, Alina. Do I ring the bell or-"

"Don't worry," said Alina again. "It'll open if you just push it open."

Piya nodded. Tucking a stray curl behind her ear, she hugged herself and walked forward towards the door. She pushed it open and entered the dark living room.

As she glanced back at Alina, she saw her take out her phone and plug headphones in her ears.

"Abhay?" she said timidly. No response. It was pretty obvious that he wasn't in the living room, at least. Brushing aside her reservations, she walked further in, glancing. Then Piya switched on her phone for light...and she somehow made out that there was a staircase winding upwards on her right."Abhay?" she called again. This time, too, she didn't get an answer. Nor did she she see anyone...but then she heard something. A crash, followed by a thud, above. Piya's heart thudded, though she was not sure whether it was fear or excitement. Abhay was up there, her instinct told her. But...what did those sounds mean? She deliberated for a few seconds on whether she ought to call Alina to come with her or go up anyway. She decided she wasn't afraid of Abhay. Abhay had never hurt her, nor would he ever hurt her. The most he would do was yell at her, probably taunt her a bit, but she could deal with that. She wouldn't leave without him. Making up her mind, she strode forward, and climbed the stairs. The bangs and crashes continued, more distinct now, with brief pauses in between. Was Abhay throwing things around? She discarded the idea as quickly as it got into her head. He wouldn't be so immature.And then, as she reached the landing, she heard a snarl. She froze, unable to even scream. What if Abhay wasn't here after all? What if there was something really horrible- like Maithali? Alina's voice rang in her head. "Coward. Coward. COWARD!" She braced herself. She was NOT a coward. Screwing up her courage. She walked through the corridor in pursuit of the sound, her phone screen the one illumination in the darkness. The bangs and crashes continued steadily.she reached the end of the corridor to see a shut door. There was a thud that reverberated from within. Then silence. Fear and curiosity warred within her. Curiosity won out in the end, and holding her phone aloft, Piya pushed open the door- and found herself in a huge room that seemed to go on and on. But her focus was on a dark shape near the middle of the room. In the dim light, she couldn't quite see what it was. Then it raised its head and she saw a face- a face that should have been human, but looked like a dangerous monster, with eyes that gleamed scarlet and a horrible snarl etched on it. It was only when she registered the fangs that fear overrode every other emotion and air surged into her lungs- and she screamed. "Abhay!"

"Shit." cursed a female voice. The lights came on, blinding her by the sudden brightness. It was then that Piya realised that the beast was actually a pair of duellers- one pinned to the ground- and who were now extricating themselves from each other. The one on the ground had been Abhay. She opened her mouth but before she could say anything, Abhay spoke. "And what, exactly, may I ask , are you doing here?" The anger in his voice made her own die down.He walked forward, every step echoing in the now silent room.She recoiled as she saw his face.It was a cold mask, his features stony. "I- I-" she began shakily. "Is this her?" said another, unfamiliar, male voice. Her eyes flickered sideways, and it was only then that she registered the presence of two other people in the room.The male vampire, standing near Abhay, his eyes still gleaming red. So this was the face she had seen, Piya realised. There was another woman on her right,who was probably a vampire too. "Don't be silly, Luke," said the woman, smiling. "Of course it's her- can't you tell?" Piya stared at Abhay's cold face, only half listening. "Hello," said the male vampire- Luke- extending his hand to Piya. She hesitated, still looking at Abhay, wishing-hoping- he would say something, but he wasn't even looking at her now. He was glaring at the female vampire.

"Oh, don't worry, I won't bite you," said Luke. But Piya still stared at Abhay. "Abhay?" she managed to say. "Won't you- say something?"

Abhay turned to her, and she flinched at the rage- and something else- on his face. "Go to hell, Piya!" he snapped. Then he turned , and stalked out of the door on the opposite side of the room. "Abhay!" she called, but he slammed it shut, leaving her alone. And Piya wondered if it was her she was angry at and not Haseena. Had she messed up something again?

"Hey-" said Luke. "Gosh, Natalya, the human's crying- do something!"

Piya found a handkerchief offered to her, and she pressed it to her cheek, still in a state of shock. "So basically, my name is Lucas," said Luke, "..and this is Natalya. We're pleased to meet you, Piya," he bowed slightly. "You're Abhay's mate, aren't you?" pressed Natalya."Please excuse Luke. We didn't know you would be a human, but of course, we don't really mind."

Abhay.

Feeling surged into Piya's legs, and she ran forwards. "Abhay!"

Natalya was in front of her in a second, holding her shoulders. "Please- please let me go. I need to talk to Abhay. You- you are his friends, right?"

"I'll go find him," said Natalya. "You wait just a bit, all right?"

She was out in a trice.

Piya turned to Luke, who was smiling ever so slightly. "I've met a human after a long time," he said. "You're quite cute. Well, see you around."

He sketched her a half salute and sauntered out of the room.

Now alone, Piya surveyed the room. Surely it had once been very grand, but now ...it was wreckage. Chairs and tables, a bookcase- she could only tell what they were by looking at the splinters of wood strewn about. Chandelier crystals lay broken at her feet. Her eyebrows knit into a frown as she stared at destroyed room. What had Abhay been doing here, with those people? What could have happened to make him so angry? So angry, that he hadn't even told his mother when he left his house? More pressingly, had Natalya caught up with him or had he left again?

The door opened and Natalya came in. "He's outside, in the garden. I didn't talk to him...come on, I'll take you."

Piya hurried to her . "Please be as quiet as possible," muttered Natalya. "You won't be able to match his speed if he decided to make a break for it again."

Piya nodded. The pair of them tiptoed downstairs. Natalya guided Piya through a maze of rooms and corridors in the darkness , finally stopping outside a door. "There you go," she whispered. With a parting "Good luck," Natalya, too , left. Piya inhaled deeply and gripped the door handle. It opened easily.

She found herself at the threshold of a garden.

Abhay was standing roughly about ten metres from her , with his back to her. She walked up to him and tapped him on the shoulder. "Go away," said Abhay tonelessly, without looking at her. "Abhay, for God's sake," she said, frustration colouring her tone. "You need to come back home. Your mother's going insane-"

Abhay whirled around to glare at her. "Oh, so my mother is worried, is she?"

Piya's eyes narrowed. "Don't talk about her like that, Abhay. She said you were angry at her-" "Really?" he said scornfully. "I know it's probably something to do with me," said Piya. " But that doesn't mean you have to take it out on her. You're angry with me, take it out on me!"

Abhay's eyes flashed. "I don't think we have anything left to say to each other."

Anger licked through her veins. "But I think we have plenty left to say to each other," she said.

"Leave," he snapped. "Leave before I do something I'll regret."

"Really?" she shot back. "What will you do, Abhay? You want to yell at me?You want to hit me? Go on then-go on and do it!" Her voice had risen to a yell. "But before you do that, I want to know why. I want to know why you left your house, with no explanation to anyone, meeting strange people like this, and exactly what I've done , that entitles you to talk to me like this!"

He crossed the space between them in a trice and gripped her shoulders roughly."On, so you want explanations from me now?" he hissed through his teeth. "Are you seriously so obsessed with yourself that you think everyone should now bow to your demands? Or are you just a freaking HYPOCRITE? Because it's rich you should demand explanations from me!"

He released her shoulders : she jerked backwards, bumping into a tree behind her.She stared at him in confusion. "What the hell are you talking about?When have I been a hypocrite?"

"When haven't you?" he bit out "All these days, you make me feel guilty for hiding things from you when- surprise, surprise!- you're way better than me at it. Not for a single moment did I ever think-"

The blood drained from Piya's face. "What have I done?" she asked, her voice shaking."What did I do?"

Abhay laughed out loud. "What haven't you done, Piya?" he said. "You've lied better than anyone I've ever met. No doubt, you took advantage of my own guilt to act the part convincingly, to act all innocent and naive when you got your memories back weeks ago!"

Piya went white. She stumbled backwards in shock, holding onto the trunk of the tree for support. Lightning flashed overhead. "Nothing to say," Abhay taunted. "Go on. Deny it, Piya, I dare you!"

Piya could not breathe. "How-how did you know?" was all that she could say. "Shouldn't I be asking you questions, this time?" he retorted. Piya swallowed. No. She could not let him dictate her decisions. She would not let him break her. She wanted to snap back at him. Tell him why she had done it. She opened her mouth to speak, but words failed her and she closed it without speaking. The action seemed to anger him more, and he shot forwards and grabbed her chin, forcing her to look directly at him. "Tell me, Piya," his voice, though quiet,was strained, "-Why did you do it?"

She could not answer.

"Tell me," he repeated, giving her a shake. "Tell me why you wanted to be just friends with me. Tell me why you trusted Sid with your secret- but you couldn't trust me enough to tell me. Tell me why you went to work for him, Piya. Did you really want to get away from me so badly?"

"Abhay-please-" she choked out. "You're hurting me-"

He withdrew his hand as if he had been burnt.She saw horror cross his face before he turned away. But his last sentence had opened something in her. Timidly , she said, "I wanted to tell you. I know it was wrong of me- but I was too afraid..."

"Yeah," he said softly. "Afraid of me. But not of Sid, or my mother." He pushed his pockets. "Why can't you just walk away and be done with it?" His voice was still quiet, almost pleading. "You don't trust me- you don't want to be with me- but you give me your blood. You kill for me...I don't get it, Piya. You lie to me- you act like-" He broke off.

Piya stared at his back. Then she tugged his arm, forcing him to turn around. He looked broken...lonely. She felt herself smile, though she didn't why. "You know something, Abhay?" she said. "I used to think I would never be able to understand you. But you- you actually sounded like me back there."

His eyes narrowed. "Really? I don't think so. I'm not half as brutal as you."

Suddenly, Piya was angry. Furious, actually. "Brutal? You're calling me brutal? I did everything I could to make this easier for you!" His disbelieving snort goaded her further.

"I won't let you take my memories again. I'm doing my level best to help you walk away- but you keep pushing me two steps back!"

Abhay's brows knitted. What on earth-?

"You should have let me die!" she continued, her voice steadily increasing in pitch and volume. "But you- you have this hero complex, and you make it so difficult for me!" Abhay said nothing. He had an odd expression on his face...as though he was solving something.

She turned away, sick of everything. "I don't blame you, Abbhay! It was my foolishness which caused heaven knows how many problems- I get that, okay? And that's why I didn't tell you, because I realised- I realised I didn't want to force you to ...just because I love you doesn't mean you have to love me back..."

"I see," he interrupted, voice clipped. "And how did you reach that conclusion?"

"It was easy, once I got back my memories," said Piya , hating that overly patient tone in his voice. Was he mocking her? "You'd told me earlier that you only pitied me, that there was nothing but physical attraction between us- well, why aren't you happy? I got your point, all right?"

"Did you even get back all your memories?" he replied, and this time she was sure of the sarcastic tone in his voice. "We were in a relationship that-"

"-might have developed into something more, if I hadn't smashed it, yeah I know," she interrupted. "And I want to say I'm sorry for everything I said that night, I didn't mean any of it.I was out of line- I wasn't thinking-"

"Piya-"

She steamrolled on without stopping.

"- but even then, it would have anyway ended, right? You would have turned me back human and gone away anyway. I mean- you were forced to be with me just because you lost control and bit me-"

"Correction," he said. "I bit you to stop Sid from biting you. He would have had you completely at his mercy-"

"What?" She couldn't see his face completely in the darkness,but he nodded. "I didn't have much choice. I'm sorry."

Piya said nothing, biting her lip as tried to swallow her anger.

"You're angry," he guessed correctly. "You're right," she replied, realising her fists were clenched. "You could have told me then. I asked you, Abhay! And you never told me a thing! And you say I didn't tell you about my memories? You're calling me the hypocrite? You-"

"Enough!" snapped Abhay. "I didn't tell you because I was trying to protect you! I wanted to protect you from all of this! What was your reason, Piya? Revenge? Did you consider this a form of payback?"

She stayed silent. He caught her wrist and jerked her towards him. "You said you were afraid. Of what, Piya? Me? The monster? Why is it that you can accept that my family are vampires, but I get to be labelled the monster? Why, Piya, why?"

"Yes, I was afraid of you!" she almost screamed as she tugged her wrist away. Thunder roared overhead, making up for the dead silence in the garden."Yes," said Piya. "yes, I'm afraid. Of you. Of what you could do to me. And I wanted to protect myself from further heartbreak. What would have happened if I had told you, Abhay? I'll tell you. One, you'd take away my memory again, or two, you'd feel obliged to be with me. Ad I don't want your charity, Abhay. I don't want your kindness and I don't need your pity. And I really don't want my memories of you taken away again. Not again, Abhay. Please."

Abhay stared at her for a long time. Then he said, his voice surprisingly gentle, "And who told you that, Piya?"

Piya glared at him. There it was, that pity again. "No one needed to," she snapped. "I figured that out on my own!"

"I see," said Abhay in the same tone. "And you figured I have no feelings for you?"

She stared. Was he feeling hurt? "I didn't mean mean to call you unfeeling," she said placatingly. "I'm sure you care for me, a bit.More than most humans."

"A bit." He repeated. "And what if I told you that you were wrong?" he emphasized the last two words. "What if I said,that you were completely and utterly wrong, because most regretfully, I'm in love with you?That you are the reason of every truly happy thought I've had in..what, two centuries?"

Piya stared numb. I'm in love with you. The words crashed over and over in her head, making her heart thump.But then...she remembered Maithali, and the happy bubble in her chest was punctured as soon as it had started to grow. "Piya?" His hand went to cup her cheek. "I'm so sorry. I-"

"You can't love me," she blurted out. "You're in love with Maithali. I don't want to be the shadow of the woman you loved, Abhay. I can't-"

"Oh, god."

Abhay couldn't believe what he was hearing. What had happened to Piya?Where had she picked up so many erroneous conclusion about him? A sick, shameful feeling swept through him as every action of hers was explained fully-her offer of friendship, her pretending to still have lost her memories, her lies about why she had come to his house, her outburst on him about Misha, her surprised happiness when he had given her gifts...

He stared at her, cursing in his head and hating himself, hating every angry look or word he had sent her. How may times had he broken her? Why, why hadn't he let her in? Why hadn't he given back her memories the same night she had set him free? Why hadn't he just told her? His chest ached with the knowledge that she had been carrying around with her all those weeks.

"I-I'm sorry."

Piya had noticed how his eyes became torn with pain at her words- at hearing Maithali's name, probably. But now, he blinked and stared at her as though she had said something very strange.

"You're apologizing?"

Piya's mouth trembled. "I-I didn't mean to hurt-"

"Shh." He placed three fingers on her lips, silencing her. He leaned in closer. "Not one word more, Piya, you hear me? Not one word of apology. Damn it, Piya, I-" He broke off, glancing upwards as a particularly loud roar of thunder reverberated. Then his eyes locked with hers again, and she was trapped, like a sparrow before a cobra. "You're wrong, Piya."

And it was the, when he bent his head, that the clouds burst, and the downpour started.

The large drops of water fell directly on her face, making her close her eyes - or was that because his lips were millimetres away from hers?

"Piya, you were so wrong,"he whispered, as he brushed his lips against hers in a soft, quick kiss that sent her nerve endings tingling all over. Piya's eyes flew open from the unexpectedness, and she raised her eyes to his. "I love you," he said quietly. "I'm not good at this, Piya- you know that.But believe me when I say you were never an object of pity. In the beginning, maybe. Before I knew you. And now- pity is the last thing I'd feel for you. Everything- whatever I've done- I was never being kind. I was being selfish. Saving you wasn't just saving you- I wanted to live, through you.. I didn't want you gone from my life.The week you were gone- it was hell. I couldn't focus on anything, Piya. It's me who needs you, not the other way round."

Plop. Plop. The rain pattered down, creating little pools in the paved walkway in the garden. The rain pattered down, seeping into Piya's skin. She stared at him, wondering. "This isn't real," she said out loud. Abhay pushed back a damp tendril of hair from her face, cupping her jaw. "This is real," he said quietly. But Piya shook her head. "But- but I'm just a lookalike. You- you loved her for centuries!"

Abhay nodded. " Yes, I did. I loved her till I found you. Till you pushed her back. Till you became so much more than a lookalike. I know I've hurt you- and I don't deserve any forgiveness. You have every right to hate me- but believe me when I say that it's been just you- for a long time now. And god knows I'm being selfish now, Piya, but I'm tired of fighting, and going around in circles. If you want to walk away right now..." He dropped his hands. "You're free to go, you know."

Piya stared at him, uncaring of the wetness of her clothes. "I love you," he said again. "Against my better judgement, I do love you. But you deserve so much better than me. And I know that, but-" He shrugged helplessly. "I can't help but want you anyway."

Piya stared at him. "You - you really mean that?" her heart thudding. "You really- it's me you want? But - but- I thought-"

"What do you want me to do to prove it?" countered Abhay. "Why must you hold such a low opinion of yourself?"

Lightning flashed, and the downpour intensified, making her shirt stick to her skin, but she felt warm as she saw the look in his eyes. He loved her. Abhay loved her. She ran over his words in her head, again and again.

"You really could leave, you know," said Abhay. "After everything I've done to you- I don't really deserve anything. You have a choice, Piya..."

Everything made sense to her now. His outburst at her earlier made complete sense. He'd been hurt too...and he'd had no one, because she was busy wallowing in self-pity. How could she have been so stupid? Abhay was not Abhayendra. Abhayendra had loved Maithali, but Abhay...Abhay wanted her. And she had hidden things from him..no wonder he had been hurt. And now he thought he didn't deserve her. She raised her head, unable to stop the smile. "But I don't have a choice, Abhay," she said softly. "I never did, as far as you're concerned." She took a step closer. His eyes flickered to her lips, and she noticed it. It sent a thrill through her. "I knew I've been stupid. But I can't walk away from you. You know that, right?"

She saw him smile, and she fell for him all over again. "I'm not walking away, Abhay- I'm yours- if you'll have me."

His hand reached to stroke her cheek. You really are stupid, Piya...because I don't think I'll let you leave now."

His arms were around her, pulling her closer to him. She felt him on the back of her head, on her back, as they stayed locked in an embrace. She was completely drenched and she knew he was , too, but neither of them cared very much. "God, Piya," he muttered. "You'll drive me insane."

"You, too," she whispered back, holding on to him for dear life. "You've been doing that for years now."

He made no answer, except to tighten his hold on her. And then suddenly, his hold on her loosened, and he cursed under his breath. "What?" said Piya, looking up at him. "You're going to catch a bad cold," he said apologetically. "God, I can't believe I got so carried away. Come on."

"I'm fine," she protested weakly, but his fingers closed over hers, and then he was tugging her inside, away from the rain. He pulled her into the dark room, and shut the door to the garden. "Hang on- I'll get the lights." He left her side.

The chill hit Piya suddenly, and she shivered. There was a click and the lights came on. She blinked in the brightness before her eyes adjusted.

"Here." Abhay picked up his jacket from the sofa . "Take this.". "I'm fine," she protested. "I don't need this."

"Yeah, probably, but I'm not," said Abhay wryly. She stared at him in confusion. His eyes skimmed down her drenched figure pointedly. She looked down at herself and blushed fiercely. Her white top wasnow almost completely transparent, sticking to her skin and revealing every curve in too much detail. "Damn Alina." She muttered.

"- which is why I think you really need this."He was by her side, holding out the jacket to her. "Plus, it's dry. Good thing I didn't take it outside." She put on his jacket awkwardly, feeling as though she was swimming in it. The sleeves fell way past her wrists, and the thing itself was huge. "Yeah, you look even smaller in it," said Abhay, sounding amused. "Don't worry.None of the press is going to see this. It can be out little secret."

"You-"

"Come on, " he said. "Let's get you home."

Alina stared outside through the window in her bedroom, watching the rain fall on the pavement outside. Some of the drops hit her face, and she could taste them on her lips. She closed her eyes.

"Hey." Dishu had come to stand next to her. "What are you smirking about?"

Alina's smile widened. "Nothing, Dishu. I love rain." "I know that," said Dishu. "You've done something, haven't you?"

"Of course not," said Alina. "Just...thinking of all the people who'll have got wet..."

Dishu raised her eyebrows. "Are you now. And why does that make me wonder if you've done something..."

As if on cue, Alina's mobile rang. "Hi, Piya," she said cheerfully. "Did you need something?"

"You- you-" spluttered Piya. "Alina- you wait till I get hold of you. You knew it was going to rain, didn't you?"

Alina grinned to herself. "Well, they did say it on the weather forecast...why? Is there a problem?"

"Oh, Alina, I will kill you!" Piya squealed. The line went dead.

Alina turned to Dishu, smirking widely. "Can we order something? I just feel like- you know- celebrating tonight."

PS. So.Hands up those who expected that?🤣Seriously though, I'm very happy to be posting this, and terrified, too. I'm super nervous and super excited, because plotwise, this is something I've been waiting to write, but now I'm not sure if I've done it properly. Please , please let me know. Pretty please with a cherry on top?

Gosh. Zipping up now.

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Anon

@raintrifle

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Posted: 11 years ago

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*hand raised* a question - who were those vmpy frnds of Abhay ??😆
As for the update it was eventful , for Alina it was a peaceful day and a day to cherish her victory , for Abhiya the day noticed one of their memorable, passionate intoxicated moments , where they finally cleared all the misunderstandings , promised their love, life and soul to each other for eternity . I love u for this hearty abhiyalicious update 🤗. Alina was fun this time 😆 ,and their was haseena and chand , finally they umm actually haseena took some action regarding abhiya 😛.

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@Paint.It.BlacK.

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First i wish i had someone like alina! Saves time-you know?😉
and 2ndly Wow Wow Wow!!what an update!!! I got so many things in my head-to mention but ...i'm losing words here. Dnt know where to start-what to say-what to nt-just 2 overwhelmed! You know this reaction-right? The reaction that cums after reading ur update where-when i want to bt dnt know how to say-because ur writing has shut me up! amazing amazingly u have dne the whole thing!!👏
see i'm blabbering so much bt yet i havnt got to the point.! Well blame it on u! Nw n then Ur updat does this to me! Nt fair! 😛 U shudnt write so well-!😛
jokes aside well dne! Very well dne!👏
you know the part where pia walks into the room all nervous and unsure abt what was in there..? Ya the picture quite strangely reminded me of HPGOF! Yep where poor old Frank went into the room and there it was-u knw who-! I knw i knw it was quite strange on my part to envision that scene bt it just happened! 😆 I donno why..maybe because the tension-silence-darkness was explained so well by you-⭐️ that my mind riveted right at it.😉👏

and nw the centre plot-ok let me take a little break. Am little short of what to say! Need to organize my words first-!😆

ok here, Finally found words back!😆😉
The words were formed so wonderfully to describe the situation! Abhay's acceptance and both of their confession-emotional outpour was soo beautiful and appealing that the whole scene leaves its imprint even after long it has been read. B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L..!!! 👏
the pattern in which you wrote this so fabously is exclusive!!! Writing a particular picture-bringing down the emotions can be done in many ways--bt very rare does that have the capability to shake u from inside-and here that exactly has happened. You have done that and with such deftness that it cant be mentioned as anything else other than brilliant!!!👏 ⭐️
the rain pouring down and the things that followed after-were too mesmerizing to explain! I am still in that phase where i dnt know how to exactly say the things i felt. Before coming to the end all i will say is I loved the dialogues!❤️each n every dialogue!! I do it everytime though but this time even a bit more! 😳
and those astonishing similarities -😆 i told u-nw you already might know what are those-right? 😉

P.S. Ok anyway i hope this story isnt ending anytime soon!?
I love this one among all your works so please keep updating dear. 😊 Waiting for the next part. And thanks very much for the pm.😳

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