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B-onesie

@B-onesie

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Posted: 8 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: sass8

😊 its the lazy effect

It's finished now. Don't know the name.

Something wiht Reese Withersppon

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Tessaloni

@Tessaloni

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Posted: 8 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: sass8

😊its the lazy effect

yes apparently you lazies are too lazy to chat tonight...

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

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+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#43

Thanks Sassy for the feedback on the remainder of the chapter. That was the only happy scene so far in this whole story 😔

Hey, you didn't say anything about the opening scene. What do you feel, should I keep it or remove it? Tess and I feel that it's redundant at this point but like I said I wrote it for other readers.

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Tessaloni

@Tessaloni

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Posted: 8 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: B-onesie

It's finished now. Don't know the name.
Something wiht Reese Withersppon

apparently not too impressive 🤔

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B-onesie

@B-onesie

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: Tessaloni

apparently not too impressive 🤔

It was actually quite nice.

Apparently it's called just like heaven

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sass8

@sass8

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Posted: 8 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: lovely_nikki
Thanks Sassy for the feedback on the remainder of the chapter. That was the only happy scene so far in this whole story 😔

Hey, you didn't say anything about the opening scene. What do you feel, should I keep it or remove it? Tess and I feel that it's redundant at this point but like I said I wrote it for other readers.

I think it could be reduce to the comment about the 4 years because, Aarti asks the question that I was asking myself at the end of chapt 3. The rest is redundant with the flashback.

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lovely_nikki

@lovely_nikki

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Posted: 8 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: sass8

I think it could be reduce to the comment about the 4 years because, Aarti asks the question that I was asking myself at the end of chapt 3. The rest is redundant with the flashback.

Not just you but even I'm asking myself the same questions 😆. That was another reason why I wrote that scene. I guess it was to convince myself more then convincing the readers

Yes it's my story and I try to give as much logical reasons as are possible for me but then at the end of the day it's only a fiction and I also end up showing illogical things 😳

Okay I'll check it again and see what I can do about it 😳