Samarpan (An FF) Part 11 (Thread 1/Page 139) - Page 112

Originally posted by: ns1970

Another awesome update interest how yash is looking at aarti and trying to read her and getting more and more captivated by her.hoping this man who enter the gate is yash .waiting for the next update

Originally posted by: MelodiousDreams

Samarpan: Part 2

Overarching comments: Aayu the hurricane (hunter) was constantly making me laugh with his antics and concern for his chocolate mousse desert with extra chocolate chips. Payal's idealized impressions about love are common enough for girls at that age, perhaps, but watching Aarti verbally lash out at her daughter at the end of the part was painful to read. It was as surprising as it was confusing at the time I first read it...But then it all started falling into place little by little.

If you can't find it till then, then no gift and...," she walked past them on her way out, deliberately brushing against Yash, looking back to finish tongue in cheek, "certainly no dessert." Yash tightened his jaw at the hidden challenge, but didn't say anything except for giving her a smoldering look, which made her scamper outside. Aayu was right...she did always have the final word.

Oh, Aarti is so adorably cheeky! Such a tease! I adore how their own veiled messages are being communicated verbally and nonverbally right under the kids' noses. She brushes against Yash intentionally, gives him a glance, challenges him, and then runs off...And my question is, did she really have the last word there? She may have had the last verbal word and the final word in terms of that hidden ultimatum, but Yash's response was definitely an answer that said, "Challenge accepted." I'd like to think that there was more to that smoldering look than that, though...But yeah, I suppose Aarti did have the last word. Yash didn't really have much of a choice, did he? 😆

Yash the Genius decides to help his kids with the clue-solving while he allows himself to get lost in a maze of memories every now and then; it is wonderful how we get to learn more about Yash and Aarti's past through these little clues that are written in a code with an extra layer of significance for Yash, since he knows their journey and the meaning of each clue. I'm seeing little details jump out at me now: the snack shop, the appeal of Aarti's expressive, soulful eyes...

But then he didn't know who she was and had only spoken with her for a few minutes. Actually he had spoken, and she had just communicated with those expressive eyes of hers. Yash walked toward the front window of the sitting room and saw her sitting exactly on that spot, knees drawn up with arms around them, listening to Prateek who was explaining something. To this day he didn't know what had made him take out his phone and click her as she had silently watched him approach her. She hadn't reacted to his act...Later she had told him that she didn't know phones had cameras, never having had one. As if on cue, she turned her head, and on seeing him flashed a dazzling smile, making his insides constrict into familiar knots.

This. I love this! Because I have already seen this play out a little bit (more to come, the joys of retrospective reviewing!) coming back to this part and reading about it is even more amazing because these details are what weave this story into a tightly-crafted work that is seriously akin to a masterpiece.

- He had spoken, she had communicated with her eyes...

- The part about the phone camera: That elicited a sad little smile from me for some reason. Perhaps because I felt a twinge of sadness for the young Aarti's life prior to the day when Yash returned (and then returned again later) into her life...It also reminds me of that spray bottle incident - she didn't know what that was either, but you know something, I love this Aarti of yours so much because of these very circumstances and the way she grew up facing them, along with the fact that she apparently was comfortable enough later to open up to Yash about what she didn't know, given those living conditions of hers...

- Aarti's smile. I don't know why, but when I read about Aarti sitting with her knees drawn up to her chest like that, I visualized a young Aarti at the mandir, or in the garden of her backyard, sitting and listening to the things around her...How would Yash have reacted upon seeing that smile for the first time? I wonder, and I can't wait to see his reaction when that finally does happen!

Aarti had even pulled his leg at times, teasing him about loving his girlfriend of the picture more than his wife. The fact was that the pull of those large, hauntingly sad eyes had never left him...the hypnotic, heartrending pull that had drawn him to her from the very first moment. He had sworn once that he would never let that look back into those eyes...and by God's grace he had been able to so far maintain that. "This picture is a reminder my love...It never makes me forget the promise I made to myself," he whispered.

- "his girlfriend of the picture": Is Aarti, Yash's wife, really so different from the girl in the picture? Curiosity meter rises! But aww, Aarti teases him about that picture...How does she feel about it, really? Has she brushed that phase of her life off completely? I don't know if many of us can ever accomplish such a feat...especially in light of what Aarti has been through...If those eyes still affect Yash in such a way, how does the woman of the picture feel about that image of herself?

- "large, hauntingly sad eyes...hypnotic, heartrending pull..." and later on: "soulful" and "mesmerizing" - Needless to say, I love the descriptions of how Yash feels about Aarti's eyes because they did pull him to her in a way...They continue to do so.

- That promise...followed by Yash mentioning to naanimaasi something about "hurt," which piqued my interest again. What happened...? Ah, I'll leave that as a rhetorical question because I know we'll find out in good time.

This is such a long part! 😲 I didn't realize that until I actually came back to jot down the things I love about this update - I feel like quoting almost every other paragraph, but I'm having to pick and choose my most favorites. Not fair, Indu.

*Reserved! More comments to come soon! I don't know if that's a good thing or not.*

Originally posted by: InduG64

HAPPY BIRTHDAY, Barbie!!!!🤗

(Did I get that right?)

Thank you for such a lovely review. You will get your answers in Part 12.😃

Indu, I read through Part 11 today and, once again, your storytelling is such a great read! 😃

He saw her expression change to surprise and then to confusion as she deterred. He realized he was being irrational as he insisted she give him company. Excuses came naturally as he made up a plea regarding the day being his birthday, which actually was still a couple of months away. With great relief he saw her relent. Yash had no idea what was driving him to act in this manner.

He waited as he took a bite of the burger….Nothing…not a word. If he was expecting her to suddenly turn into a chatterbox, she was certainly not forthcoming, so he continued nonchalantly

He was astounded…Is it even possible that a girl could have so much empathy in her? That too for a complete stranger?

When she looked at him quizzically, he repeated, "Promise you'll come back?" She nodded, and he saw her walk toward the girl in the counter. He really shouldn't be doing this…making her pay for his food. But the situation was beyond his control at the moment. He would find a way to pay her back later. He saw her now, talking gently. There was a fragile softness in her entire bearing. She had on a pale yellow churidar suit, long silken hair, face devoid of any make up, except for eyes lined with kohl and lips glistening with light pink lip gloss…so simple yet so deep. The way her expressions danced across her face told him that there was no guile, no ulterior motives, and certainly no duplicity there.

Love these opening paragraphs! Yash's awareness of Aarti, his inexplicable identification of her with his mysterious journal writer, and his subsequent earnestness make me smile and, on occasion, laugh. His chattiness confounds her and unnerves her a little bit, lol, but I especially enjoy those parts that I re-quoted and bolded. For me, the haunting sadness he perceives in her eyes earlier is her personal understanding of humanity and pain, which taught her the empathy he sees and makes her the soulful woman he perceives. Without a doubt, this immense/intense soul connection Yash feels with Aarti is turning his brain upside-down and instead of fighting it, he's just riding it out.

I love seeing the way he notices little details about her that help him define her -- her empathy to his comment about not being paid yet, the simplicity of how she wears make-up, the gentle way she speaks, and the transparency of her gestures and expressions. As I read, I thought it amazing that he finds this definition in spite of his cynicism about women in general because he doesn't yet have confirmation that she is indeed the writer of the journal. That's why I also really like that you allow him to double-take/to wonder if he could be wrong about her and fooled once again. His natural draw to her understandably counters his natural caution after his long bad run with women. Nice inner conflict. I like, I like.

Just as he's processing his fascination with Aarti, he thinks he has competition in Sameer Singhania! 😆 After noticing Aarti's avoidance and Maansi's deflection, his subtle jealousy and intrigue are a strange mix of obsessive and endearing to me. He clearly doesn't understand what's prompting his immediate attachment to Aarti, but I love how instinctive his reactions are.

As he waited, he saw the back door open and Aarti step back into the shop and immediately looking at the table they had sat. He saw her gesture toward it and ask something. Maansi stepped forward and responded, at the same time giving her the jewelry box. He saw Aarti take it and listen to whatever Maansi was saying, which was obviously about that Singhania fellow. "Give it back, Aarti. Throw it. Prove me wrong." Yash found himself muttering under his breath. He staggered back a step as he saw her look at the box in her hand and then keep it her handbag.

Oh, I see! On his utterance in bold, this is his first quasi "test" for Aarti based on his experience with money-hungry women. Patience, Yash. Everything in its right time and you'll understand it all.

Re-enter Prashant who is still beating that very, very dead horse about marrying Aarti. And he wants to take control of Nannimaasi's house. I suspect we'll see more trouble with him. On the plus side, it's so great to see Naanimaasi quickly and sharply throws his true agenda back at him. Hopefully, Naanimaasi and Dadima will meet in the future. I think they'd be a riot together. 😆

So much love for this whole scene. ❤️ I love how strong Naanimaasi has inspired Aarti to be. She's the kind of mother to Aarti that I think Shobha would have been if she had lived. The way she recounts Raj's memories tugs at my heartstrings. Aarti's openness with her heartwarming as well, and I'm glad she knows about Singhania. Naanimaasi gave Aarti a chance to live, not only survive. Nevertheless, the stark differences in her present living remind her of where she's been, how she's been defined, and how she's been scarred. Truly, time doesn't heal wounds, but people's love and compassion can heal wounds in time; that's why I think I understand Aarti's train of thought here:

Ah, Indu! You pull me in and hook me with your endings every time. 👏 Looking forward to seeing your next update.

Originally posted by: pvejani

wow...superb update👏👏👏.loved very much👏can't wait...continue soon..thanx for update and pm.

Originally posted by: kdsubs

Huh - I though Naanimaasi had got rid of Pareshan-T - but like a bad penny here he comes again. And i so don't like his last thought to himself...does Arti know martial arts??? My mamma-bear hackles are up and vibrating like crazy 😆.


I know everyone is focused on Arti and Yash - but you know me pal, i see the forest for the trees 😉 - or maybe here i am seeing the trees for the forest 😆. So i am going to talk about the little incident where Naanimaasi talks about her "Raj". You know what that whole scene reminded me of? DDLJ!! Not that anything like that scene was in the movie - but i could so see SRK and Kajol reprising Raj and Simran in the "scenes" Naanimaasi talked about. Haiii - love those two characters and they are who i visualize as Naanimaasi and Raj . What is Naanimaasi's name btw? Is it, by any chance, gasp - Simran??


Lovely update Indu and beautiful detailing. This tale is becoming more and more visual for me 👏 👏.