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Posted: 15 years ago
😲😲😲 Omgggg!! What A Surpriseee!!!
Purvi Is Pooja! Wohooooooo She's Aliveee!!!😆 Getting Too Excited😆
Update Soon x
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: kaasshh

chapter-----5

the train had arrived...huffling and puffling... arohi had been buying water for her journey so it took some time for her to reach it... bt she was careful nt to miss it this time.. before the guard cud give away the signal..she boarded the train. .... she verified her ticket frm the TT and then walked slowly along the corridor towards her seat..... to her relief it was a window seat... at frst she placed her bag on the berth above and then looked around her... only one person was there...and he was probably sound asleep covering his face with a magazine... arohi sighed----luks lik its gonna be soo boring..... she murmered to herself...... then she edged towards the window... it was tightly shut.. she tried to look outside thru the glass and found that it was raining.... she felt delighted.. and raised up the glass pane.....allowing a gust of cold wind to enter the compartment followed by the chilly rains... as the rainwater touched her face...she giggled.... it felt so wonderful...bt probably nt to her companion whu got up immediately and shouted----hey wat do u thnk u are doing...close the windows at once......
arohi turned back quickly and gasped-----YOU?
same was the case for arjun....his eyes became wide as soon as they recognized her------TUM? tum yahan kya kar rahi ho?
arohi faced him smartly-----excuse me..ye mera seat hain....
arjun----yeh tumhara seat hain? oh my god....iska matlab mujhe TUMHARE saath sari raat travel karna padega? SHIT....!!! he clenched his fingers into fists.....
arohi became really annoyed at his way of behaving with her-----oh hello...muhhe bhi koi shauk nhi hain tumhare saath travel karne mein....woh to bas meri majboori hain....
arjun grumbled...----woh jo bhi ho...iswaqt tum meri baat suno aur khidkiya band karo abhi......
arohi----tumne shayad suna nhi maine kya kaha... ye MERI seat hain...khidki ke paas...to ye main tay krungi na ki ise band karni hain ya khula chodni hain? tum hote kaun ho mujhe direct karnewale?
arjun----tum aise nhi manogi... he walked up to the window and tried to close it himself bt arohi struggled with him to keep it open... in the process the glass pane rattled down and hit arohi's finger.... she yelled in pain...----aaahh!!!!!
arjun was alarmed... he quickly took her hand in his and looked at it carefully..... her finger was bleeding....
arjun----am sorry...am really sorry... tum idhar aao... he made her sit down and took out his handkerchief to wipe out her blood.. she sobbed...... he tied his handkerchief around her finger and said agen----am soo sorry....
arohi----its okay.....galti meri hain.... mujhe istarah khidki nhi kholni chahiye thi.....
arjun----no...its fine...i thnk i over reacted......
arohi smiled at him for the frst time..... he smiled back.....
arjun-----am arjun....u?
arohi-----arohi Singh.....
arjun----isiliye...
arohi looked surprised----isiliye kya?
arjun----sikhdi ho na...isiliye itna zaban chalati ho.....
arohi giggled----wo to hun............
after almost one hour,armaan came out of the bathroom,rubbing his wet hair with a towel.
this was their room...
he noticed a stranger sitting on his bed and realised that he was his roommate... he smiled at him----hiii.....
manav looked up----hiii.....
armaan strtched out his hand-----am armaan mallik...ur roomy.....
manav-----manav sharma.. he shook hands with him.......
armaan---aa..manav if u dnt mind....u r sitting on my bed....actually am really tired and wanna sleep.....
manav smiled politely-----dekho...main yahan tumse pehle aya hun..aur ye bed mera hain..... tum us cornerwali bed mein kyun nhi so jate?
armaan laughed----dude....mujhe ek bht buri adat hain.... mujhe window side ke ilawa aur kahin neend nhi ati...aur agr mujhe neend na aye to tumhe bht prblm hogi...
manav---mujhe? mujhe kya prblm ho sakta hain?
armaan----wo kya hain...agr mujhe neend na aye to main logoko pakane lag jata hun...aur unhe apne boring love stories ke kisse sunate sunate puri tarah paka deta hun.....samjhe?
almost instantly manav stood up frm the bed....
armaan patted him on his shoulders---good... tum bht intelligent ho... okay dude.... gud nyt..see u in the morning...sweet dreams... he jumped onto manav's bed...turned over to the side of the window and closed his eyes......
manav sighed...he cudnt argue much with anybody....and hence most of the times people took undue advantage of him.... so this wasnt the frst time..... he walked over to the cornermost bed and laid down on it... in the morning he had to go to the station to receive arohi...so now he needed a good sleep..... he covered himself up with a bedsheet and closed his eyes......
keshav singh felt really irritated and disgusted..... he had been trying arohi,his daughter's mobile for over an hour now...still it said not reachable.... he just saw it in the news that the weather was really bad in the north and it had been raining heavily since the past few days.... he was anxious.....
keshav-----uuf...ye arohi bhi na... ek fon to kar sakti hain....? pata nhi kahan hogi kaisi hogi..... mausam bhi bht kharab hain....
purvi,whu was preparing coffee smiled at her uncle's wrds.. she had been observing him for the past one year and she knew him quite well... he used to get worried over small reasons.. she said----uncle...aap to aise pareshan ho rahe ho jaise ki arohi koi scul ki bacchi hain....wo bht samajhdar hain...aur apna khayal khud rakh sakti hain...
keshav----haan haan...beta tum to hamesha hi uski side logi kyun? par hume ek baat samajh mein nhi aa rahi hain... ek fon karne se kya ho jata hain? bas ek fon karke bata de..ki papa meri chinta mat karo main thk hun...kyun? itna to kar hi sakti hain...
purvi----off ho uncle...shayad woh train mein hain... aur chalti train se network nhi milta..aapko to pata hi hain...
keshav sighed----shayad tum thk keh rahi ho... he sat down on his rocking chair while purvi came over to him with his coffee...----ye lijiye...coffee pee lijiye...aur befikar ho jaiye... jab woh train se utregi tab zaroor aapko fon karegi..... aap istarah tension karke apni tabiyat mat kharab kijiye...... main aapki dawai lekar aati hun...
keshav smiled at her-----tum kitni acchi ho...hamara kitna khayal rakhti ho.... aisa lagta hain ki tum hamare hi ghar ki beti ho..... pata nhi bhagwan ne tumhare saath hi aisa.... he checked himself all of a sudden and realised his mistake......
keshav---am sorry beta...main firse.....
purvi forced a smile----its okay uncle...main....main aapki dawai lekar aati hun... without a single more wrd...she ran into her own room.....and closed the door behind her...... his last wrds echoed inside her mind..."pata nhi bhagwan ne tumhare saath hi aisa...".... she hid her face in her hands and sobbed....
it had been one year since she had been living with this small yet sweet family... keshav singh loved her as his own daughter and considered her no less than his own daughters arohi and ashvini.... they also treated her as their elder sister and loved her vry much..... she was satisfied.... bt her heart wasnt..... she had evrythng bt yet her heart,her mind and soul longed for somethng....somethng wich she cudnt explain....cudnt understand....somethng wich she felt was terribly missing in her life...an important part of her life..... she had tried to remember it often... often she had ended up in becoming unconscious...for straining her brains to their extreame level..... ultimately she had to give up digging into her lost memories..... yes her LOST MEMORIES... she DID NT REMEMBER ANYTHNG BEYOND THE LAST ONE YEAR OF HER LIFE...... she had heard frm keshav singh... that his nephew whu was a doctor...came across her in his hospital....an year before in Shimla.... she was vry critical then.....and had minimum chances of survival.... she was found by some natives...on the bank of a river at the bottom of a cliff..... and they had brot her to the hospital in their small cart... she owed her life to those natives as if it wasnt for them...she wud nt have been alive...... Dr arun,keshav's nephew had almost done a miracle in saving her life...bt as her head had suffered a major injury...... and brain haemorrhage...she lost her memory permanently.... she cudnt evn remember her name...... after that she was brot to mumbai and treated on by many neurosurgeons...bt none cud do anythng...... keshav had become quite attached to her by then... and he was also worried abt her...so he adopted her and named her purvi.....
thus purvi got a family...a perfect one..with two pretty sisters...and a loving father... a part of her was happy.....bt another part of her longed for those years of her life wich had faded permanently into the darkness.... many a times she wanted to go to shimla to search for her identity bt it used to make keshav feel insecured.. he feared that if she comes to know abt her past...maybe she wud leave them.... it wasnt that he did nt want her to know abt her past...bt the old man had become soo accustomed to her presence..her beautiful voice and her pretty face that he cudnt afford to lose her.... and purvi understood and respected his feelings... she stopped worrying abt her past after some time...........
now the suspense......😆 this is purvi.....😳


lovely chapter kashuuu!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!👏👏👏👏👏a big clap for u!!!!😳😳plz continue😊😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
OMG wht a twist yrrr 😃😃😃👏👏 LUB it 😃😃 thank God Pooja is aliveeee 😳😳😃😃 now am getting it 😉😆 chalo ab humre Baba akele nhi hai 😃😳 anyways nice part plzz continue soon 😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
hey Kaaaaaaaasshhhhhhhhuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu,
jz found out ur ff n read it in one stretch!!!!!!!!!!!!!i must say
MUAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH.....
u r sooooooooooo sweeeeeeeeeet as always!!!!!!!knw dat if u r writn mohabbatein den SRK n Ash'll defintly b KRIYA.at first i ws rlllllly sad dat Poojaz dead.it ws 1ly aftr readn d lst chap dat i regained my breath!!!!!!!!!!newys guuuuuuuuuuud gng...plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz update soooooooooooon👏.
PS:sry 2 say dat i cnt fix my mind on othr couple as i rllllllllly luv Kriya datz Arja.i dnt meant to offend u.wat 2 do.side effects of being a Kriya fan😉😆😆
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Edited by zash_sparkling - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: zash_sparkling

hey Kaaaaaaaasshhhhhhhhuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu,
jz found out ur ff n read it in one stretch!!!!!!!!!!!!!i must say
MUAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH.....
u r sooooooooooo sweeeeeeeeeet as always!!!!!!!knw dat if u r writn mohabbatein den SRK n Ash'll defintly b KRIYA.at first i ws rlllllly sad dat Poojaz dead.it ws 1ly aftr readn d lst chap dat i regained my breath!!!!!!!!!!newys guuuuuuuuuuud gng...plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz update soooooooooooon👏.
PS:sry 2 say dat i cnt fix my mind on othr couple as i rllllllllly luv Kriya datz Arja.i dnt meant to offend u.wat 2 do.side effects of being a Kriya fan😉😆😆
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are i understand.....😆 dnt wry..... and thnx agen for such sweeeeeeeeeeeetttttttt comments....😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
It was a very nice chp.Pooja as in Purvi is still alive!YAY!!😃Infact as I was reading about Purvi I could only imagine Pooja Gor and had a feeling that the Pooja in your ff would be a look alike or something but I guess that Purvi is only Pooja which is a good thing since Arhaan isn't alone😳I can't wait to read about how they react once they come face to face😛Looking forward to the next chp😊
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: shruthiR

It was a very nice chp.Pooja as in Purvi is still alive!YAY!!😃Infact as I was reading about Purvi I could only imagine Pooja Gor and had a feeling that the Pooja in your ff would be a look alike or something but I guess that Purvi is only Pooja which is a good thing since Arhaan isn't alone😳I can't wait to read about how they react once they come face to face😛Looking forward to the next chp😊

u know wen i had seen the film mohabbatein...i was actually feeling sooooooooooo bad for shahrukh so in my mohabbatein i wint make him alone....😳
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Posted: 15 years ago
that was very interesting update.arjun and arohi small fight was very cute.so they became friends now.armaan took advantage of manvav's simple nature.i am very glad that pooja is alive and living with singh family as their daughter.i hope she will soon meet with krishna .thank you for the lovely update.plz continue soon.
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: kaasshh

u know wen i had seen the film mohabbatein...i was actually feeling sooooooooooo bad for shahrukh so in my mohabbatein i wint make him alone....😳

Aww.........that's so sweet😳Good going Kaash! Update soon😊
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Posted: 15 years ago

chapter----6

arohi got down the train..carrying her bag. she stood serching for a coolie in the midst of all the scurrying people bt cudnt find one.. it was chilly and she was shivering.... the woolen shawl she had over the shoulders did nt seem enuf to cut out the cold.. suddenly she felt a hand on her shoulder..and turned... immediately a pleasant smile appeared across her lips---tum? yahan?
manav smiled back---papa ne bata diya tha ki tum kab aa rahi ho..to bus hum chale aye tumhe receive karne... aarohi---thats soo sweet of u..thnk u.... manav took her bag----chalo tumhe apne cousin ke ghar tak chod dete hain....
aarohi---nhi..nhi..manav uski zaroorat nhi hain.. tumhe classes ke liye der ho jayegi... tum yahan aye.. yehi kafi hain... main khud chali jaungi....
manav did nt force her----accha thk hain... par station ke bahar tak to chod du.. chalo....
aarohi smiled agen and followed him silently...
though she felt lil odd bt she tried to make herself understand----aarohi.. ye wohi ladka hain jiske saath tu apni sari zindagi guzarne wali hain... to tujhe itna ajeeb kyun mehsus ho rahi hain.... are tu usse baat to kar sakti hain....
she cleared her throat----umm...to tumhare classes kaise chal rahe hain?
manav-----huh? kuch kahan tumne?
aarohi bit her lip----maine pucha tumhare classes kaise chal rahe hain?
manav----bas thk thak....kyun?
aarohi turned red at once----nhi...wo aise hi... suddenly she tripped----ouch.. manav caught her arm quickly and saved her frm falling down....
manav----r u okay?
aarohi----hmm.. she adjusted her dupatta...and lowered down her eyes.. she was feeling too conscious of herself.. is this feeling common in arranged marriages? god knows...!!! she sighed....
outside the station manav offered to escort her to the taxi stand bt she rejected this offer...
aarohi----manav.. tum pehle hi meri wajase bht late ho chuke ho.. plzzz main thk se chali jaungi..pehli baar thodi na aa rahi hu.. she grinned...
manav handed her the bag-----accha thk hain.. mujhe ek fon kar dena.....okay?
aarohi was moved by his wrds----sure... she smiled warmly....
manav shrugged his shoulders and took his leave,whispering a small BYE... while aarohi headed towards the taxi stand.... she was abt to hire one taxi wen suddenly another guy got inside the same... she shouted out in irritation----hey..... i hired it frst..!!! the guy turned..... it was none other than arjun.....
aarohi's eyes became wide in shock-----TUM?
the same reaction was there on arjun's face as well-----OMG...i shud have expected....!!!
aarohi----wat? wat do u mean?
arjun----aur kaun ho sakti hain jo mere piche piche har jagah pahuch jayegi?
aarohi----hey... arjun...or watevr... u r goinf out of ur limits.. get out of my taxi at once....
the taxi driver spoke at last----madam aap dono hi baith jnaiye...waise ye sahab to gurukul mein hi utar jayenge.. fir hum aapko chod denge... chaliye baithiye...
aarohi wore an irritated expression on her face and got inside... arjun stretched his hands and lega deliberately and pushed her to the corner...
aarohi-----apne haath payer apne paas rakho na.....!!!! idiot..!!!
arjun----huh? did u say anythng...
in reply she sneered at him... he smirked..... disgusted aarohi luked out of the window......
arhaan walked his bike to the repairing shop.... this was his bike...
the mechanic was known to him...he smiled----are aap? firse kharab ho gayi kya?
arhaan nodded---haan kya kare... iski umar bhi to ho gayi hain....
the mechanic-----to aap ise badalkar ek aur neyi bike kharid lijiye na....?
arhaan smiled-----aab... ye to iski galati nhi hain na jo iski umar ho gayi hain....waise bhi.... he paused and patted the bike...----ye pooja ko bht pasand hain..... main uska dil nhi tod sakta....
the mechanic looked at him with a puzzled expression then quickly changed the topic----umm.. aap ek kam kijiye..aap ise yehi chod dijiye.. hum ise thk karke apke ghar pahucha denge.... aap gurukul jaa rahe hain na?
arhaan nodded...
the mechanic---thk hain..aap chinta mat kijiye... hum ise thk se pahucha denge apka ghar...
arhaan---shukriya bhaiya.... he started walking....leving his precious bike in the garage.....
after he had left another mechanic came over to the previous one and said in a sympathetic tone----yaar.. aab ise kaun samjhaye ki iski biwi aab is duniya mein nhi hain... pagal ho gaya hain bechara..... jabse woh accident huya na...bas...tabse...bechara... he clicked his tongue sympathetically and went back to his work......
arhaan walked down the street towards the market..... he felt lil tired.... the mechanic's words rang in his ears----to aap ise badalkar ek nayi bike kyun nhi le lete?
he stopped walking and sat down on a bench at the side of the road..... he covered his face in his hands and let out a deep sigh..... some long lost memories came back to him.......
pooja was busy wiping the bike with a wet piece of cloth.. she used to do that evryday... she was soo engrossed in her work that she didnty notice arhaan whu slowly crept up behind her and grabbed her tightly frm the back.... she almost jumped up in shock.....
pooja turned and slapped him lightly on his arm-----arhaan kya karte ho....? maine kitni baar tumse kaha hain ki mujhe istarah daraya mat karo.....
arhaan tightened his grip around her waist and placed a quick kiss on her forehead-----kya karu..tumhe darane mein mujhe bht maza ata hain.....
pooja turned red at his kiss and looked down...trying to hide her smile..bt arhaan saw it.... he raised his hand at the back of her head and pulled out her hair clip letting her hair go loose over her shoulders.. he loved her that way.....
pooja tried to push him away----subah subah ye kya kar rahe ho? khud to kuch kam nhi karte...mujhe bhi karne nhi dete....
arhaan smiled and edged his face closer to hers....the essence of her loose hair turned him crazy.... ------pooja.... he whispered in her ears......
pooja----hm?
arhaan-----tum humse zyaada hamari bike se kyun pyaar karti ho?
pooja giggled.....
arhaan luked disappointed-----tumhe hasi aa rahi hain? kabhi to hamari itni seva nhi karti jitna iska karti ho?
pooja ruffled his hair with her fingers in a loving manner----bapre...ek bike se jalan ho rahi hain tumhe?
arhaan moved closer to her...she moved away....ultimately stopped by the bike at her back.. thus she was trapped in between him and his bike....
arhaan-----ha ho rahi hain.... to..? kya karu bolo?
pooja----dekho.... main is bike se bht pyaar karti hu..pata hain kyun? kyunki iske saath bht sari yaadein judi huyi hain... tumhari yaadein.. yaad hain tum kaise chup chup kar mujhe milne ate hain mere ghar pe? isi bike mein hum dono college bunk karke ghumne jate the... yaad hain ekbar tumhara accident ho gaya tha.. aur main kitna royi thi.. do din se khana nhi khayi thi.. tumhare liye..... lekin jaise hi tumhe hosh aa gaya pata hain tumne sabse pehle kya kaha tha?
arhaan pretended nt to remember-----kya? kya kaha tha humne?
pooja-----hume bhuk lagi hain... tumne yehi kaha tha....
arhaan laughed out loudly-----sachmein kya? oh my god....
pooja grinned too----mujhe iutna gussa aya na..kya batau..... yahan main tumhare liye bhukhi pyaasi baithi thi aur in janab ko sirf khane ki padi thi.....
arhaan cntinued laughing.....-----i cnt believe this....!!!!
pooja----haan..... aab samjhe.. is bike se main itna pyaar kyun karti hu? kyunki ye hamari pyaar ki nishani hain....
arhaan lowered down his voice-----accha? aur hamare asli pyaar ki nishani ka kya hoga hmm?
pooja pushed him away,blushing----tum bhi na... mujhe bht kam hain..... jao tum yahanse......
arhaan lifted his face frm his hands.... his eyes had no tears...bt his face looked so pale... so lost...... he wiped his face in his sleeves and got up.... then in slow,scattered steps... he agen started to walk towards the market.........
Edited by kaasshh - 15 years ago

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