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Oblivion

@Oblivion

Inactive

Posted: 18 years ago

the precious thoughts you have given me
i always relish them and smile
i live those thoughts everyday
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

your memories bring tears down along with the smile
how i wish you were still mine
the words that dropped from your mouth
were like the petals falling from a rose
i can still remember them well
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

Your thoughts have disorganised my mind as such
cant think of anything else
even today;its one year after i lost you
still cant get any sleep .no way
thinking again of your precious thoughts
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

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datspreets

@datspreets

Voyager

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Posted: 18 years ago

What struck me about this poem is how genuine it sounds, its not fake at all. I love the poetic tool of repetition that you've used here.
Great work!

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Anjali

@amisra

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 18 years ago

I agree Preets, this is coming straight from the heart...really very touching!! 👏 👏 👏

Cheers,

Anjali

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dreamgirl93

@dreamgirl93

Explorer

Posted: 18 years ago

really touchy dear excellent dil se nikli hui

keep posting more love to read them 😊

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Oblivion

@Oblivion

Inactive

Posted: 18 years ago

actually, this was posted in the memory of someone...

and i never intended to write a poem.. i just couldnt sleep that night , had immense feelings and i had to write to take them out...... it took just 2 mins to write my feelings down...... never edited it .......

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Anjali

@amisra

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 18 years ago

It's still very beautiful Oblivion!! Feelings coming straight from the heart don't need any editing. They are a masterpiece in their own way! 👏 👏 👏

Cheers,

Anjali

Edited by amisra - 18 years ago