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Raghu and Antara ran away from the basti. She was pregnant of Raghu's baby. They both decided to live together. They lived in a little house. Raghu took care a lot of her, he gave her everything that she wanted. They were living happily. Sometimes, Antara's mom came to visit them. She brought her fresh fruits as it's good in pregnancy.

Antara learnt Raghu speaking english, he did a course of business. Then he joined a company as a worker and did hard work. He forgot his past, all bad things he did..

It was night, Antara was laying on the bed, he entered in the room to check if she was fine. He sat next to her.

" How are you feeling? "
" I'm fine Raghu! I'm just tired. I want to sleep. "
" Ok! By the way how is my princess? " He pointed toward her stomach.
" Our prince is fine too " Both smiled to each other.
" Ok I'm going, if you need anything please ask me "
" Raghu! Why you don't sleep with me? "
" Miss Kaul! I don't want to cross again any limit before our wedding "
" It makes me feel so happy that you cared for me " They smiled to each other.
" You know it's my dream to marry you, kash ke yeh baby hone se pehle humhari shaadi ho chuki hoti but, mama said that when a women is pregnant we can't marry... "
" Don't worry Miss Kaul! Once this baby came to the world, we will marry each other. " Antara gave him a big smile. They hugged each other.

. . . .

Today, It has been 9th month to her pregnancy, She was having some pain in her stomach. He quickly took her to the hospital. Few hours later, he was surprised because they were twins' yeah they got twins' a girl and a boy. He was so happy. They named the girl " Sneha " which means love and the boy " Madan " which means cupid.

Few months later, they moved to Kashmir in Antara's old home. Raghu bought it. He remove the Naik from Raghu name, now he was known only from Raghu. Antara's family came with them.

The house was decorated with flowers like it was someone's wedding. They were a lot of guest. A beautifull lady came down stairs, wearing a red lehenga, she stepped toward the mandap and sat near a guy. They were Raghu and Antara, they did all the wedding rasms. And they got married.

. . . .

Few years later.. Raghu became a businessman, Antara was a nurse but in her free time she tought music classes. They kept loving each other a lot. Madan was like Antara and Sneha was like Raghu. Now Ishaan was elder too, he helped Raghu in his business. They were bestfriends too. Machmach and Rukhsana married each other, they lived with Rantara. He helped Raghu in office work. They are like brothers of life. Rukhsana had a beauty parlour just near the house.

Raghu and Antara fought against DM and she got arrested by police because she was a terrorist, she had been doing black work in Kashmir. Satya went back to England after knowing his mom's true face, he realised that Antara wasn't for her so he married another girl.

It has been 10years of Rantara wedding, Antara was again pregnant. They all were so happy. Especially Madan and Sneha, they were expection a little sister.

. . . .

Antara was seeing herself in the mirror, she was looking so relaxed. Raghu came and hugged her from the behind.

" I love you Antara! "
" I love you too Raghu! "
" Dekha humhe koi alag nahi kar paya "
" Haan Raghu! " They smiled to each other.

" Raghu! I think your are being late for office, you should go!! " Antara pulled him away from her.
" Aaj tere saath rehna ka man kar raha hai " He held her hand.
" And what about your meeting? "
" I will ask to my secretary to delay it. "
" Raghu! Yeh achi baat nai, apne office ke boss kya ban gaye aab apni marzi ke malik ho gaye ho? "
" It's all your love Antara! "
" Aab baas karo aur jao! "
" Thik hai! Jaa raha hoon " He stepped back. "But I want a kiss.. "
" Besharam! the door is opened, agar kissi ne dekh lia. "
" Koi nai dekhe ga! "

They were going to kiss each other but all of sudden Machmach interrupted like always. " Oh! I'm sorry. Tum dono chalu rakho, I will come later. " He went. They smiled to each other.

" Bola tha na maine! " Antara said. Raghu kissed on her lips.
" Dekha do second ka kaam tha! " He went. Antara smiled.

. . . . . . .

Do dil ek jaan end in my version 😳
Do you like it? it reminds me my old days here 😆





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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow loved it soo much amira
it was beautiful how i wished this happend in the show

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Honeybees: I was seriously not satified with the story that they showed, so I wrote something that I wanted too
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome awesome awesome!!!!👏
u solved all problems so easily...raghu has become independent...rukku ka parlor..mm ki hamesha wrong time pe entry🤣..dm ka game over..satya back to England..👍🏼
superb dear!!! rantara are do dil ek jaan..❤️
thanks fr lovely OS😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..Amira..

Honeybees: I was seriously not satified with the story that they showed, so I wrote something that I wanted too

me too they ruined it for 1 actor
i think u did the write thing by writing this something happy atleast
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thanks tsuchi, glad you like my ending <3


Honeybees: Yaar it feels like I'm note going to watch any serial now, I'm just broken 💔 bohot se indian shows dekhe aur appreciate bhi kiye, but Jaan was so close to my heart, it was simple but unique, 😭aisa laghta hai aab aur koi serial nahi dekhun gi . 😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..Amira..

Thanks tsuchi, glad you like my ending <3


Honeybees: Yaar it feels like I'm note going to watch any serial now, I'm just broken 💔 bohot se indian shows dekhe aur appreciate bhi kiye, but Jaan was so close to my heart, it was simple but unique, 😭aisa laghta hai aab aur koi serial nahi dekhun gi . 😭

same story here but i didnt watch any other shows before i only watched cricket that too on my laptop but one day saw a promo of jaan i was excited everything was well when satya enterd everything was ruined
i wil never watch any shows again wll only watch niyaz
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: honeybees22

same story here but i didnt watch any other shows before i only watched cricket that too on my laptop but one day saw a promo of jaan i was excited everything was well when satya enterd everything was ruined
i wil never watch any shows again wll only watch niyaz



I was a big fan of Indian shows, but it hurts me a lot, all my fav show were ruined 😭 😭
now I started to watch Hum tv shows 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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i wish this happened in the show 😔
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..Amira..



I was a big fan of Indian shows, but it hurts me a lot, all my fav show were ruined 😭 😭
now I started to watch Hum tv shows 😳

ny fav ruined as well now but niyaz r coming in YHA cant wait to see them romancing again in a new show fresh and new roles
really i dn have that channel which shows do u watch?

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