A romantic play!! : KriYaansh OS

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pallavi.14

@pallavi.14

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+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#21

i liked this whole concept of thoda-play- thoda romance...

its kinda fun reading something like this... and when its u i can blindly say that u have done a fabulous job in writing romance...

those starting lines when rey was all grumpy and pouty about his fall out of basket ball game...they were hilarious i can imagine that very well...

seductive kriya mode, poor rey...

i was smiling wide when rey says paas matt ana... buwwwahhh... it was like durr hatto main bharamchari hun type... ( i know main extra pagalpan likh rahi hun)

then that settling of scores ek toh beach sand ka background diya tune deetha or saath mein rey shirtless woh bhi boxers mein... hayyee... mereko abhi dostana ke john se zayda yeh rey yaad ayega...

but then u done it effortlessly while explaining each and every move of their naught or nice basket ball play... i so loved that part where rey was meddling with her bare waist line... when it comes to showing how wobbly and stiffening a man can make his lady love by his touch, hickey and any expression.. deetha u score high points on that explanation.. i seriously like it...

this followed a sweet, shy first kiss by kriya...and rey reaction was really lovable reminded me of confession scene...

awesome OS...

i am sorry for late comment... but pinky swear read twice because its really refreshing... hope something of this kinda actually happens in D3...

love-
pallavi

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@CrazyGirl.21

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#22

My fav part was the peck... Such a sweet and innocent os... i mean sweet playful nd innocent KriYaansh. My favourite kind. Do write more and PM me when you write! I simply loved it. :)

Edited by Ash.TanHa21 - 12 years ago