Khwahish!!!! update 4 on pg 1!!!

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hey friends i liked the idea of posting updates in one single page iin Rdiz ff ....so im gonna do tht in my ff too.....keep refreshing 😊

okay frnds inspired by my dear friend chandni n raminda dii.....i dared to write an ff!!!! i know i know itz going to b a reall hard time for all of u to bear wid it.....but hey u can atleast try!!! 😳

i'll giv u a touch of it now n letme know if u guyz like it...i'll continue wid the next part only if u want me to....criticism... praises all awaited....😊

plz note in my FF Iqbal is Mr Shiv Kapoor

so here it goes:

Character Intro:

Gauri is a doctor n she is very devoted to her profession.....she is a self reliant and confident person.......

whereas shiv is a very good looking and well built man and he belongs to an upper class family but he is not at all ready to b known by his father's name...he wants to make his own identity so he lives away frm his family.....he has this strange charisma that attracts girls and they are always ready to do anything just to spend some time with him but he never bothers to look around. Most surprisingly he is a police officer ...... and he hates liars!!!!! 😉

khwahish

It was late in the evening and it was raining heavily n gauri was as usual busy wid her patients n also with the new book she's been writing lately on the phychology of dying cancer patients....

she suddenly realized it was getting really late n she should be going!!!! she packed all her stuffs up...and checked the lock of her office.she sat in her car and left for her home which was a bit far away from her office. she was driving very carefully coz it was raining really hard......but suddenly she saw something on the road and stopped her car.........she couldnt see anything properly coz of the rain so she was trying really hard to find out what it was...but to her horror it was a man lying injured at the corner of the road!!!! she came out of the car and ran towards that man n turned him to see his face and was shocked!!!

Update 2

Gauri was shocked to c shiv lying injured like this.......

Shiv kapoor....the man who once loved her like crazy but fate had sumthing else stored in for her......

It was raining so hard .....Gauri felt helpless for how shez gonna take him with her........she stood there for quite a long time crying for help....but nobody seemed to notice her.....everyone was busy for themselves to escape from the rain.....but at last two men came down to help her . They took him up ....which was not a very easy task coz he was one of an enormous man.... and made him lie on the back of her car.....she sat on the driving seat in a hurry .....thanked them and drove back to her house...

Gauri was sooo shocked and worried about the whole incident that her brain stopped working.......all her old wounds and memories were back......she felt a srtange numbness in her....as if she had no idea of what was happeneing!!!!

Gauri looked straight towards the road without blinking her eyes even for second and drove restlessly as tears rolled continuously down her cheeks......

Shiv was stabbed at the right side of his stomach and was bleeding.....she brought him to her house and changed his clothes....and made him lie on the bed.

Gauri ran down towards the other room and came back with her first aid box to give his wounds a dressing......

she felt a bit of uneasiness wid him lying infront of her like this but moved ahead with the dressing ignoring her feelings. Gauri knew very well that she was in the same pain just as him.....

As soon as she touched his wound, he grabbed her hand reallly hard.....and gave a small shake with pain.... he lifted his body a little bit and came down again. Gauri ligtly placed her hand on top of his wid a lilttle bit of hesitation but then she too grabbed it tightly and swallowed her cry folding her lips inside .. pressing them really hard.... Gauri placed her hand gently on his forehead and tried to calm him down.....as he was suffering tremendously while she gave him the dressing.....shiv was given a sedative to give him momentary relief from the pain and exaustion.

Gauri went on doings things that were necessary to cure shiv but her heart was getting heavier n heavier as time passed by. she gave him a sponge bath wid luke warm water....all the way lost in the memories of her past...as a tear rolled down her cheeks which fell on his numb hands....his hand shook a little with the touch of her tears ....Gauri took notice of that and couldnt bear any longer....she then sat next to him very cautiously making sure that she doesnt disturb him....she gently took his hand in hers....rubbeb her hand gently on his for while n placed them on her cheeks.....her eyes closed as if she wanted to forget all the incidents from her past. Gauri gently kissed his hand....placing it on the bed......she ran to the other room crying as it was getting intolerable for her. closing the door.....she leand against it and sliding down she sat on the ground holdin her knees close to her and gave out a loud cry..... placing her hands really hard over her mouth so tht she doesnt make any noise......she sobbed as much as she cud.....

kyun....mere saath hi kyun?

kismat ne hamesha mere saath khel khela hai......

mai thak gayi hu....aur kitni pariksha loge meri....

mujhse aab aur nahi saha jata....

sun rahe ho aap....mujhse aab aur nahi saha jata.....mai kya karu?!!!

kaisey saamna karungii uska ....kaise?

kya mujhe iitna bhi haaq nahi k mai do pal k liye khush reh paou.....?!!!

Gauri kept on repeating those words....mai thak gayi hu...mai thak gayi hu....aab aur nahi saha jata mujhse...and rested her head on her bented kneees....

she kept sobbing ....as the taers wouldnt stop..... suddenly some noise came out of the room wher shiv was lying........

update 3:

Gauri ran down to the other room to check what was wrong......to her horror it was shiv....he tried to get up but fell down......gauri ran down to him n made him lie on the bed again........she rubbed her hand ovr his hair.......and then to his cheeks ....kept it there for a while.....and she almost whispered

gauri: shiv...mai aaj bhi tumse utna hi pyar kartii hu......as tears rolled down her cheeks......

lost in her past she rested her head on the bed side holding shivz hand.....and didnt realize when she fell asleep........

Gauri is sitting on an open air cafe having her coffee......and doing some writings......she saw a tall and handsome guy wid a very good physique.....standing at a distance from her ....but he was somewhat facing her......he wore a blue denim jeans n white shirt....with sleeves half folded .....and his goggles on ...there he stood leaning against his car looking at some papers ......gauri looked at him once and then tried to concentrate on her work but couldnt as she was feeling a little awkard coz she felt as if he was looking at her......suddenly he came running towards her.........she got all scared...and stood up from her chair.....but he just ran past her....and she was like....*phew* men can b soo strange at times

she sat down and started lookin through some papers again and suddenly she heard a husky voice coming from her back....

shiv: dhyan kahan tha tumhara ?

she turned back to c and it was the same hott guy.....

gaurii: jee?

shiv: jee....tumse hi baat kar raha hu...dhyan kaha tha tumhara?

gauri: aap se matlab?

barey hi battamiz kisam k aadmi hai aap!!!!!

shiv: what?!!!.....dimag check karwao aapni....

gauri: uhhh....aap...aap hote kaun hai mujse is tarha baat karne wale....?

shiv: dekho mujhe koi shauk nahi hai larkiyon se baat karneka

gauri: achcha toh shayad mai aap k peeche ayi thi baat karne k liye....

shiv placed his index finger infront of gauriz lips...almost close to touching them......

shiv: ssshhhhh.....

he continued....

shiv: uss larke ko dekh rahe ho....poiting at a guy whoz been taken to the police van....woh tumhara bag lekar bhaag raha tha

gauri: kkkyaa? !!!!

she turned to look at her back to check out and was stunned to c her bag was not there

gauri: OMG!!! mera bag!!!

shiv giving out a loud laugh....

shiv: ha ha ha

aab dimag theekane ayi tumhari....ha ha ha.....

he handed out the bag to her and was just about to walk away

gauri: suniye

shiv didnt say a thing just gav a "now what" look!!

gauri: lagta hai....aapke haath mai kaafi chot ayi hai....

shiv: ohh yeh....yeh kuch nahi hai ...kuch kharochein hai bas....

gauri: agar aap bura na maane toh .......maai kuch dawa laga deti hu....

mai ek doctor hu....meri chamber yahi paas mai hi hai....

shiv: yeh toh roz ki kahani hai....agar mai roz doctor k paas jaaney laga tab toh ho gaya na !!!!

gauri: plz....mujhe achcha lagey gaa.....aur waisey bhi mai aap k saath.....kitni rudely pesh aayi....pplz

shiv: itz ok .....tumhe taqleef utha ne ki koi zaroorat nahi......

gauri: agar aap nahi chalenge toh mujhe lagega ki aapne mujhe abhi tak maaf nahi kiya.....aur mujhe aapka sukriya aada karneka mauka toh dijiye.....

shiv: okk...ok....

guarii: thanx...chaliye....iss taraf

shiv walking behind her....n grinns...GIRLS!!!!!

gauri told him to sit in one chair n she bought her first aid box.....and sat infront of him......

shiv who never bothered to look at girls....and always treated them as flies...felt something inside when gauri gently lifted is hand placed them on her's .......he felt a shiver inside but tried to ignore it....and looked away.....gauri gently did the dressing.....

all the way shiv kept on looking at her.....at times cool breezes from the window came in and lifted the lock of her hair.....

shiv: isssssssssss

gauri: ohhh im soo sorry.....jyada chot toh nahi ayi....?

he shook his head meaning no......

she gave a few gentle blows ......he stilll was looking at her with astonishment.....he was left stunned by her beauty......

but he knew how to controll his emotions.... so he tried to look away.....in a way as if he was looking at the office's decorations.....

gauri: ho gaya.......

shiv: thanx

gauri: aap kuch lenge.....

shiv : no thanx.....i shud leave now....

shiv left arrogantly without showing the weakness he felt all the way through the dressing......and was a little mad at himself for why he felt like this......

gaurii: aajeeb aadmi hai!!! and gave out a cute smile ........

Update 4:

the lovers were so close now as they always wanted to be........the cold wind blew inside the room and moved accross the two lovers as though a blessing from God....trying to protect them from any harm.....as the sun's rays came inside the room.......Gauri woke up..... n saw shiv lying infront of her.....she gave out a cute smile but at the same time it disappeared when she realized nothing was normal....a sigh came out of her heavy heart.....

shiv still lyed unconsious because of the sedative he was given. Gauri was quite relieved about this fact coz she was very scared to face him.....she got herself ready for the hospital....and before leaving she checked if shiv was ok.......his body temperature n alll.....and left for the hospital.......

it was a hectic day since morning....some serious patients took admission.....so gauri didnt even have time to breathe.......just about 5 o'clock she was lil free so she came to her cabin for she felt torn out n needed sum relaxation of both her body n mind.....she sat on her chair n closed her eyes........

EMERGENCY!!!

we have an EMERGENCY here......

move ...move.....make way.......

Junior doc: Dr. Gauri we have an emergency case...a woman is here...accident!!!

Gauri came running......

Gauri: okay get me to Dr. Jai.....HURRY....!!! and inform her family!!! now quick!!!!

she ran towards the Emergency ward........

Gauri is shocked to c how badly the lady was injured....

Gauri: Oh my God!!! we hav to operate her....get the OT preapared.....QUICK!!!!

that lady is taken to the OT......

A nurse was asked to inform her family.....

Shiv was on his way to the police station coz he had some files to colect......suddenly his phone rang...

Shiv: Shiv kapoor!

Nurse: ummm Mr. Kapoor.....im afraid u have to come to the City hospital right now.....Mrs. Nikhila Kapoor?!! unka accident ho gaya hai.......

Shiv: WHAT?!!!!!!!!

he hangs off the cell....skidds his car n drives his way to City Hospital.....

Shiv comes running to the hospital n rushes to the reception in search of his mother...Mrs. Nikhila Kapoor!!!!!

Shiv: excuse me......this is Shiv Kapoor...ummm Nikhila Kapoor....??!!!

someone calls him from the back: Mr. Kapoor....

Shiv: uhh yes....

Lady: Mrs. Nikhila Kapoor is in the OT right now.......woh kafi buri tarha injured thi...

Shiv: how is she right now?

Lady: ohh im sorry...hum abhi kuch nahi keh sakte...operation k baad hi kuch kaha jaa sakta hai.....letz just hope for the best.....

she leaves saying those things....Shiv doesn say anything....he is too worried.....he keeps on just walikng through the lobby.......and looking at the watch at times!

as Gauri comes out of the OT....shiv anxiously walks down to her...

Shiv: how is she right now?!! is she alright?!!

Gauri: The operation was successful.....but we cant say anything right now....we hav to keep her under observation for the next 48 hrs. aur jabtak unko hosh nahi ajjati tabtak....

Shiv covers his eyes with his left hand n lifts his face up n gives out a loud sigh....

Gauri: i hope everything will b fine....lets hope for the best....

Gauri leaves with the other doctors.

Shiv calls Machan and informs him about wht happened and tells him to sort the works for him for some time......machan consoles him and says he'll handle everything.....

Itz getting late at night and Gauri is about to leave when she finds shiv sitting on the sofa next to nikhilaz cabin......his hands r joined wid his fingers bent n he is moving his thumbs on his lips.....Gauri felt a little bad for him.....and walks away to the other side....

Gauri: Coffee?!!

shiv lifts his head and finds Gauri standing next to him holding two mugs of coffee in her hands....

Shiv takes one of the mugs from her hands...

Shiv: Thanks....

Gauri smiles and sits next to him.....

Gauri: Ur mother was bought here in a very critical condition....i had no other option but to operate....is tarha k cases mai internal injuries ya phir brain hamerages ki kafi chances hoti but we didnt find any sort of injuries like that par abhi bhi kuch nahi kaha ja sakta....we have to b very much carefull till the next 48 hrs...isiliye unhe under observation rakkha gaya hai!!!! but dont worry......i hope she'll b okay......lets pray and hope that this 48 hrs pass safely.....

Shiv listend to her all the way bending his head down and looking at the floor.......Gauri places her hand on top of his....and consoles him...

Gauri in a whispering soft tone: Dont worry....she'll b fine.....

Shiv looks at her......and smiles a little folding his lips inside......Gauri smiles back and gets up to leave.....

Shiv: Gauri!!!

Gauri turns with a little surprise...

Shiv: Thanx

Gauri: kis baat k liye?

Shiv: For everything....!!!!

soryy friends i could only make upto this.....i was feeling a little lazy actually.....😳.....i hope u like it......summy i decreased the amount of suspense a lil bit in this update😛 plz leave ur comments...advice...criticism...brick bats...all awaited. 😛

Enjoy

Naz

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Posted: 19 years ago
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please do continue with long updates 👏
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really interesting....very different from the serial...continue soon 😊
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👏 continue my baby looking forward to it...kisses x
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Nice ne..its osunds different...keep us updated...
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haayay meri jaan, A damn good start, so looking forward to what is coming, and btw never thought i cud be an inspiration to anyone so for the honour, I am so very much obliged, U r a dear and hope this FF rex the sox of us Readers, this is the only thrill we get nowadays, btw she's surprised, who she knocked????????? tell, tell 😆 😆 😆
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Oye hoye meri Nazu jaan... Tu bhi? Wow... wunnerful beginning... Pehle hi episode mein hero ka accident? 😆... My poor Mirchi ... But Gauri will nurse his physical and his spiritual self... 😳 Looking forward to this!! 👏👏

Btw, lovely title. 😳

Cheers,
dc
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Posted: 19 years ago
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cool start!!! 👏

miss bandaid brigade is here to do a patch up for shivy arrrhhhh so sweet

pls continue with long updates

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Posted: 19 years ago
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he is a police officer??? 😆 😆 i never imagined tht in my wildest dreams 😃 !!!but then IQ can pull off anythin!!!its great shippy!!u better contniue soon, and don't be lazy, like how u leave ur picfic half way thru!!!so continue soon!!
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waah waah!!!!!!!!
kya start hai
continue karna bhool mat jaana
waiting for the rest if this 😉 😉 😉

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