OS-2 part COMEDY in 21st century-Mr.Jalal, Mrs.Ruqaiyya & Nanny Ma - Page 4

Originally posted by: prejudiced

Thank you for the PM!

Loved reading the OS. Very creative! JA creative team can take some input from u folks who write so

beautifully in this forum! Trying to use these same characters in a modern era is something. U preserved their characters well like Maham's repetitions.

Few things I loved...

Amul Gold Homogenised milk 😆

The choice of the company name - JA- JA Steel Company 😆😆

Jalal in an Armani and them exchanging IPhone5 texts

Bairam Khan a Professor ! Nice elevation!

Originally posted by: lashy

UPDATE finished😊

Originally posted by: sashashyam

But why, Lashy? It is an absolutely delightful, impeccably done spoof, and there is not a single false note in the whole. Complete with the hamaam and the Amul Gold toned milk, you wicked girl!😉
😆thanks aunty...

I laughed and laughed at the One woman down! and then Both women down!

Oh...this Jalal is a tad bit different to the one in the serial...where for starters he cannot be manipulated by dimaag per hukumat or doodh ka karz😆 a proper bad boy, if we should call him that!

Why can't you do more? I want you to give it a serious thought. As it is, I am edging dangerously close to diabetes Type A with all the hyper romantic gushings in the forum over Jalal and Jodha, and I desperately need a break. So think about it, there is a good girl!

Aunty writing a spoof/comedy is much much tougher - requires a lot of thought and even a single flat note can bring the whole scene down...romance is a much more forgiving genre (and my favourite - just beside comedy!)😆..

Also, by the looks of it, the forum is definitely here for romance...this piece hasn't been very well received - even compared to my daily take on Ekta's episode😆

You also have to PM more of the kind of people who would not insist on being drowned in mush all the time, and would appreciate such mischievous takes as they should be appreciated.
I did pm the 4-5 members I thought would enjoy comedy...I thank my stars at least they managed to get through to the end...😆

Shyamala Aunty
Awww thank you so so so much aunty...its a pleasure to be ready by you🤗

PS: Does your Ruqaiya not like Manolo Blahniks?😉 Not that I wear them; I like flats.
Aunty, I'm no brand-girl...I buy/wear what is comfortable...will it come as a shocker to you that I don't even know the brand you're referring to...😳

Originally posted by: lashy

Originally posted by: sashashyam

But, my sweet, you have all the other names down pat: Armani. Ferragamo, the works! Manolo Blahniks are ridiculous 5 inch heeled shoes for ladies at astronomical prices.I am glad that you don't know what it is!

And I was pleased that your Jalal has impeccable taste in clothes as well, and prefers Armani's classic elegance to, say, the in your face brands like Versace.

I am not surprised at the lack of response to such wickedly intelligent stuff. You know, I am continually surprised at the readership for my decidedly unromantic, at times didactic, at times sarcastic, often tongue in cheek, and invariably over long pieces. It must be a hidden and widespread streak of masochism!

But I loved this one, my dear. Really loved it. What does JA stand for? You could bring in an Ayesha instead of Jodha, and of course your Jalal would still be allowed 4 wives!

I wore saris for all the 39 years of my diplomatic career, obviously, and I have a very good collection of Kanjeevaram silks. Now I wear old jeans and tops!

Shyamala Aunty