AkDha OS: ~You Won~ (Based on promo) Part 2

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Hey Guys! I am back with part 2, hope you all like it but please feel free to correct me & criticize me. 😊 Enjoy!

OS: ~YOU WON~ (Part 2)

The moment Jalal said that he has every right over her & he could do anything he want made Jodha so frightened that words stop spilling out of her mouth, she was'nt frightened this much even when Amer was in danger. This make Jalal's smirk more powerful & evil. He was making steps towards her, finally Jodha gets back to her senses & realized he is coming closer & closer. Putting her hand on his chest, she said:
Jodha: Yahin ruk jaiye! Aapke or hamare darmiyan ek seema (limit) hai jisse na to hum par karenge na hi apko karne denge. (Her words left him with meaningless expression)
Jodha: Hum apko humein kisi bhi halat mein chune nahi denge.

After saying this all that expression vanish away & bring a smile or better say trouble ring his face.
Jalal: To app humein rokengi, Kese or kyun? Dunya ka harQanoon (law) ek shauhar ko apni begum pe pura haq jatane ki ijazat deta or agar nhi bhi deta deta to hum nhi mante. Kyunke hum jo kehte hen wohi qanoon ban jata hai.
Jodha tried to run but she could'nt, Jalal holds her chunari tightly pulls her near him & did'nt allowed her to move an inch. She was helpless. She wants to shout, wants to scream but will it going to help her? NO! no one here will listen. Jalal was enjoying every bit of it.

Jalal: Apko kya laga humne apse shaadi apko ghar ki, is watan (Country), iss Sar zameen-e-Hindustan ki Malika banane k liye ki? Ya humein apse mohabbat hogyi thi? Yahan dekh rahin hain (He pointed towards his chest) yahan dil nahi hai, na hi reham ki koi jaga hai.

Jodha: hummm...(before she could complete Jalal puts his finger on her lips to make her stop)

Jalal: SSsHhh! Humari baat abhi khatam nhi hui or beech me kisi ko bolne ki ijazat nhi. Apko laga Jashan ke doran sabke samne gaa kar aap humein neecha dekha dengi, humein Shahenshah-e-hindustan ko. Jiske samne log sar uthane se darte hen uska sar jhukana chahti thin app?
Jodha was left with no choice except listening to what he was saying, she was waiting for a miracle to happen & somehow this worst nightmare ends. Her face was covered with fear.

Jalal: larai ka maza tabtak nhi ata jabtak dushman mazboot na ho, yeh khel apne shuru kia tha par wada hai isse anjam (end) tak hum phonchaenge.
Saying this he freed her, this make her more shocked & confused anyways she took her chunari back from him & moved away, only then he pulls her by her waist & threw her on bed. Jodha was moving back pleading for mercy, pleading to let her go. He hold both her hands & make her lye on bed getting inch by inch close to her. She was crying, pleading, shouting but this does'nt effects him a little, her hand was badly bleeding. Her eyes was full red, full of tears but something that was more hurtful was that fear, fear of loosing everything, fear of Jalal. He was coming closer & was about to kiss her & then he felt something, her tear touched his hand, he saw her face & realized that he is hurting her badly. For the first time he felt something, but did'nt know what. All he know was that he can't do what he was about to.

Jalal: BAS! bas yehi darr dekhna chahte the hum tumhari aankhon me.
Saying this he freed her & stand up to leave. Jodha opens her eyes which was full of fear, hatred & anger. She stood up & block his way by hand saying..

Jodha: Badhai ho (Congratulations) Saying this she wiped her tears. Aap jeet gaye yehi khof yehi darr dekhna chahte the na aap hamari ankhon me, dekhiye. Par afsos hota he, taras aata he humein aap par ke aap jeet ke bhi har gaye or hum haar ke bhi jeet gaye.
Jalal was just staring at her & not showing any interest in her speech.

Jodha: Aap yahan humein sabaq seekhane ya badla lene nhi aye the aap yahan yeh sabit karne aye the aap mein kitni takat he. Aap bhale hi dhan dollat, takat, shaurat har cheez me humse upar hon. Par ek cheez jo inn sab se kahin upar hai wo hamare pas he.
Jalal looked confused as if he was waiting for her to tell what is it.

Jodha: Usse pyar, usse jazbat, usse dil kaha jata hai. Jisme me aap, Shahenshah-e-Hindustan dunya ke gareeb tareen insan hain. Aur haan zor azmane se kisi ki ankhon me khof to paida hosakta hai par kisi ke irade kamzor nhi hosakte.
This made Jalal angry, he moves forward holds her hand tightly against her back, giving that aggressive look. He was hurting her, her injured hand but this time she was not tensed. Infact she was smiling, she was smiling because she knew this time he won't do anything. Jalal freed her & walk out of the room in anger. And Jodha was satisfied of all she said & sat on bed.

Leave your comments & let me know how was it. Please do give feedback! 😊






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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice...will this have a part 3?
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Posted: 11 years ago
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oh I loved your character of Jodha...awesome!
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Very nice...👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
Thank you for the pm...😊


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Super Kool

Very nice...👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

Thank you for the pm...😊



Anytime dear! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Okay dear! But it also depends on how many of you want it 😊
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Thankyou all for giving positive feedbacks 😊..This was my first ever attempt & really happy to see you all liked it 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome
u have written it very nice
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well written...👏👏⭐️

do update soon...👍🏼
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Originally posted by: Ayesha_Kreya

well written...👏👏⭐️


do update soon...👍🏼


Thankyou & sure I'll do as soon as possible 😊

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