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hey guyzz how r u all ???
im posting an os
im so nervous that would u like it or not as there are so many brilliant writers in the forum
especially the os are really ossum so i hope u like it ...
well i write 2 more ff's
LAT LAG GAYI https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dekha-ek-khwaab/3608309/manveer-ff-lat-lag-gayi-ch-14-updated-pg34-2-6-14
PYAR KA AFSANA (FOREVER WALA LOVE) https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dekha-ek-khwaab/3687079/ff-forever-wala-love-chapter-3-page-12
well here is my os
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THE LAMENTING LOVE
there are 2 things u should keep in mind while reading
1- there are just 4 charecters in the story --
UDAYVEER - CHIEFTAIN OF DEVGHARH
MANYATA - YUVRANI OF DEVGHARH
BRIJRAJ - FATHER OF MANYATA AND KING OF DEVGHARH
A BOATMEN
2. ITS NOT A HAPPY ENDING STORY ...IT WILL BE SAD IM TELLING U IN ADVANCE
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2 people coming running
man - jaldi karo ...run fast we don't have much time
women - i can't run ...main aur nhi bhag sakti !!!!
man- don't give up ...he closes is eyes took a dreap breath and open his eyes and continue speaking - agar mujhse pyar karti ho toh plzzz mere sath chalo...
women slightly looses her grip on his hands which she was holding tightly in her hands
man looks at her in shock
women tighlty inter winds her fingers with his and start running very fastly
they reach the sea shore
man - hey u ...pointing towards a guy standing next to a boat
suno idhar aao
boatsman points towards himself and says me ???
man- aur koi dikh rha hain yaha ????
boatsman - han bolo kya hua
man - jaldi hume yaha se dhur ...dusri taraf le chalo main tumhe bohot paise dunga
boatsman in hypertone - kya ??? pagal toh nahi ho gye bade saheb (sir )...itni tez tufan mein aap chahte ho ki main tumhe dusri taraf le kar jau ??? ho kon tum ??? han ???
man - im chieftain of devgharh UDAYVEER and pointing towards the women he says with proudness AND SHE IS HER HIGHNESS YUVRANI OF DEVGHARH ...
boatsman bow down and say - maf karna bade saheb ...lekin iss mausam main jana theek nahi hoga
uday - tum samaj nhi rhe ho ...hume yaha bohot khatra hain ...hum dono teen din se bhag rhe hain ...plzz do not tarry anymore ...
still seeing that boatsman was not convinced so he continues
horsemen of maharaj is behind us jaldi karo warna they will discover our footsteps ...
after taking a pause of 2 mins he continued - think who will cheer my bonny bride ?? when they will stain her love ??
after listening to the story boatsman say - i'll go my chief, i'm ready ...its not for your money but for your winsome lady ..and by my word my boat in danger shall not tarry ..though the waves are raging white ..i'll drop you to the other side
by this the strom grew loud quickly ...the water - wraith was shrieking
and every passing moment was growing dark ...
but still as wilder blew the wind
and as the night grew drearer
coming down the armed men their stamping sounded nearer
plzz be fast ..plzz be fast ...the yuvrani cries ...
though the tempests round us gather ...i'll meet the raging of skies , but not an angry father
finally the boat left a stormy land
a land of fear for yuvrani and chief
a land where the saw each other
a land where they fell in love with each other
a land from where they were running
but still a stormy sea was still to be crossed
the water was prevailing the human power ...the waves were conquering them
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maharaj reached the fatal shore
a deadly shore his wrath was changed to wailing
for, sore dismaye'd through strom and shade
his child he did discovered
one hand she strech'd for aid ..for help
and other was round her love
"come back come back " he cried in vain
and i'll forgive u and chieftain...
oh my daughter - my daughter
but it was all in vain : the loud waves lash'd the shore
the water wild went over his child
and he was left LAMENTING
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yes the lovers were no more
the deadly sea ...
the sea where they first saw each other ate them ...there they took their last breath in each other's arms ...there they were lying dead ...in eachother's arms with their beloved they spent their whole life in 3 days being together thogh they were hiding ...they were running but they were with eachother till the last breath .....
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so guyzz it was it i know it was really a bakwas sorry sorry if u didn't like it and i wasted ur time
but if u liked it plzzz atleast hit the like button plzzz ...
and plzz give suggestions too
LOVE ANMOL
Tum Se Tum Tak
Sampoorna
Jhanak
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