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Nishaya

@Nash..

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

Awesome prologue
Thanx a lot di
Very interesting C/Sketch
oh! Thanx again
Do continue soon,
i will try to
would love to read more
i will definately pm you!

Edited by nishaya... - 12 years ago

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Nishaya

@Nash..

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

Woah u write really well
THANX A LOT
Promo was confusing but interesting
Well it was meant to be confusing dear but glad that you liked it
Plzz do update soon
I will try to
and add me In ur pm list if possible
yes for sure i will add you
Love Anmol
awww! Luv ya too

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annesha kapoor

@_Annesha_

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

hey nishaya
it was awesome
i truly loved it
both the cs and prologue
aha looks like there will
be some threesome romance
i mean manyata uday and karan
urghh her brother should
not be so cold towards her
so both families are involved in
black things ok but
i really loved the concept
something very unique and special
do update asap
thanks for the pm

Edited by annabh - 12 years ago

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saakhi01

@saakhi01

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

Hey awesome start... Cont soon n do add me to ur pm list... Vaise dere is one thing iwanna ask ki iss story mei ladke teen n ladki only one (badi na insaafi h 😉 ) i m in a filmy mood today 😆

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Nishaya

@Nash..

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Hey awesome start...
THANX
Cont soon n do add me to ur pm list...
I WILL TRY UPDATING ASAP AND YA I WILL SURELY ADD YOU TO THE PM LIST
Vaise dere is one thing iwanna ask ki iss story mei ladke teen n ladki only one (badi na insaafi h 😉 ) i m in a filmy mood today
😆
DONT YOU WORRY DEAR ITS GONNA BE A FULL ON ROMANTIC THRILLER WITH THE ENTRY OF TWO OF THEM !

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Nishaya

@Nash..

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: annabh
hey nishaya
Hi partner

it was awesome
Thanku

i truly loved it
both the cs and prologue
Really! Am glad

aha looks like there will
be some threesome romance
i mean manyata uday and karan
urghh her brother should
not be so cold towards her
You guessed it write away dear and ya i assure you it will be amazing
so both families are involved in
black things
Yup
ok but
i really loved the concept
something very unique and special
Thats what i wanted to write

do update asap
I will try Annie partner

thanks for the pm

Tujhe pm karna bhul jati, marna tha kya mujhe?
Thanx for your insistence dear that i have done it!

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Humairaa

@humairaa1

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

Hi di,
How u? 😊
Wow, amazing, superb prologue n cs
Very eager to read more
Thanks for the pm 😃

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angleroops

@angleroops

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

hey nishaya the prologue is good

but little confusing

pls update soon

if possible add me in ur pm list

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Nishaya

@Nash..

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

Hi Guys! thankss to all of youwho liked and commented on my work. it really meant a lot to me. so here is first chappy of my ss... Hope you will like it😊

CHAPPY 1

THE SHOCK THE WHOLE MANSION WAS DECORATED IN BLUE SIGNIFYING THE WATER LAIDED THEME. SHE WAS HAPPIER TO THE CORE AS IT WAS NOT ONLY HER BROTHER'S BIRTHDAY BUT THE MOST AUSPICIOUS DAY FOR HER AS WELL,"RAKSHABANDHAN". SHE WAS VERY WELL AWARE OF HER BROTHER"S ADVERSI0N TOWARDS HER BUT STILL SHE HAD DONE ALL THIS FOR HIM JUST TO GET A SINGLE ATTENTION FROM HIM. SHE WAITED WHOLE DAY AND NIGHT TO RETURN BUT HE DIDNT.
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HERE IN THE OFFICE, MANAV WAS SCOWLING OVER THE MENS TO FIND ADITI WHOM HE HAD SENT AS A SCOUT IN VEER GROUPS OF INDUSTRIES. THE NEWS OF HER BEING FOND OUT WAS A BIG SHOCK FOR AND MORE THAN THAT IF THEIR COMPANIE'S LAYOUT PLANS WERE TO BE TOLD BY HER TO THEM THEN IT WOULD LEAD TO A MAJOR "PROBLEM" AND "CLASH" BETWEEN VEER SINGHS AND THE SINGHANIAS. MANAV:I HAD TOLD YOU TO GET HER ALIVE OR DEAD THEN WHY HAVEN'T YOU YET. THE MAN:WE TRIED OUR BEST SIR BUT KARAN VEER IS NOT IN THE COUNTRY RIGHT NOW WE ARE NOT UNDERSTANDING AS TO IF NOT HE THEN WHO IS THE ONE WHO HAS GOT HOLD OF HER <MANAV:WHAT? HE IS NOT IN THE COUNTRY. THEN WHERE IS SHE AND UNDER WHOM?
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MANYATA SAT IN HER ROOM CRYING HER HEART OUT. SHE COULDN,T UNDERSTAND, WHAT HER FAULT WAS THAT HER BROTHER WAS SO DETACHED TO HER. WHILE SHE WAS LOST IN HER THOUGHTS OF HER MISERY A MAID CAME RUNNING UP. MAID: MADAM THERE WAS A CALL FOR SIR THE MAN SAID IT WAS URGENT TO TALK! MANYATA DIDNT KNEW WHAT TO DO SO SHE THOUGHT ATTENDING IT HERSELF. SHE WENT TO HIS LOUNGE AND THE PHONE RANG AGAIN. SHE PICKED IT UP BUT BEFORE SHE COULD SAY ANYTHING, CAME A VOICE "SO THIS WAS YOUR LITTLE GAME! CHH CHH CH WHAT A SHAME, I THOUGHT YOU WERE A PLAYER BUT SADLY YOU HAVE NO IDEA OF RULES. " THE GUY SPOKE WITH SUCH ACCOST THAT MANYATA COULDN'T CUT ADMIST. "BUT YOU KNOW WHAT SINCE YOU HAVE DONE SO MUCH OF HARDWORK THEN YOU WILL DEFINATELY BE PAID OFF WITH THE MUTILATED STATE OF YOUR SO CALLED ONE WOMAN ARMY " SANA CHOPRA", THE MAN ON THE OTHER SIDE SAID ANGRILY STRESSING ON EACH WORD. MANYATA WAS LEFT STONE ROOTED . SHE FELT THE WHOLE WORLD GO LOOMING IN FRONT OF HER WHEN HE MENTIONED SANA'S NAME MANYATA:" WH-WHOO ARRRE YOUUU?"
SO GUYS DONE WITH THE CHAPPY.
PLEASE DO LIKE AND COMMENT! YOUR CRITICISM OR APPRECIATION BOTH ARE WELCOMED SO PLEASE DO

Edited by nishaya... - 12 years ago