FF Part 13 pg 31 May 27

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hi Guys,

Well this is my first attempt. This is my version of Jai and Bani. Please guys be liberal as I am extremely lazy and had wanted to write a fanfic for a long time. But if its boring please tell me and I'll just shut up.

Jai Walia- He is 22 years old. Studying in 2nd year of his college. Tall, dark handsome with rugged features. His walk just takes the breath out of everyone. Dashing, Arrogant, ruthless, athletic, loves challenges and flirts like hell. Likes to live life on edge.

Bani Dixit- She is 21 years old. Entering the same college as Jai. She is a TOMBOY, never wears salwar suits or other Indian ethnic stuff. Short-tempered, has loads of attitude, loves sport is just addicted to it but is very religious. Prankster and trouble-maker are just two of her names. She makes a panga even out of normal talk. A simple talk and she can convert it into fight and a matter of pride.

Rest of the characters will be introduced as the story progresses.

Part -1

It's a really a cold windy day and that too in summers which is rare sight. As if the nature is also saying something weird is going to happen and you can see a young dashing man clad in a black leather pants and a black jacket with a body hugging tee riding a Kawasaki-ZX-10R. But you can't see his face as he his wearing a helmet. He just racing down the highway thrileed with wind and his bike speed when he sees another roadie racing down on a Ninja matching his skill.

The roadie too is also wearing a helmet and looking damn cool. The roadie nods to Jai as if challenging him for a race down the highway and jai feels double the amount of adrenaline has rushed through his veins. He suddenly feels challenged and both feel as if the environment has just got an electric web around them.

Both just thrive on challenges and this was IT. The motorbikes just start racing down the curvy lanes of the highway as if ice-cream is melting in a warm mouth. (Sorry for the weird description).

While going down the curve, instead of decreasing the speed the roadie just increases the speed. This amazes jai to no extent and he looses his concentration momentarily. This is enough for the roadie to zoom past.

But its Jai Walia you are competing with, thought Jai.

He knew the highway in and out and took a shortcut which the roadie didn't seem to know. The roadie seemed quite new to the highway but looked very ZIDDI.

Zoommmmmmm…. Went Jai and he was back in competition but took the next left turn for his college and while the roadie rode past through him.

Jai was extremely late for his early lecture thanks to the roadie and his challenge. He said, Shit man, what a morning. I almost lost a bike race and now I am late for my class.

He quickly parked his bike. The parking lot was completely full except space for two bikes and Jai just parks of his bike and runs off.

Next you see the same roadie parking next to jai's Kawasaki. The roadie removes the helmet and long tresses of black silky hair fall out. She just jerks her head to another side to keep her hair on one side. Runs her fingers through her hairs, messing them more but she didn't care. She had been a tomboy and how she looked hardly mattered to her. There was an air of arrogance around her. She just couldn't or just won't give a second look to anyone.

She mutters, "Holy Crap, Me and my challenges what was the need for that racing challenge. But it was exciting. Yes, Bani it was fun and now first day in college and you are late. Just what are you gonna explain now.

Guys, I don't know how much bad it is . But if it is pretty bad please tell me and I'll stop. Waiting for all your bashes

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jnawaz thumbnail
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Posted: 18 years ago
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oooooo...bike race...wait til jai finds the person that challanged him was a girl...im sure he will be all 😲...lolz...i loved it...its different...update soon...cant wait to see whre this ff goes...i see lots of fire in the future...😉
JAZ
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Posted: 18 years ago
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second.............
its 2 good......continue soon..........n let me tell u this is d 1st tim sombdy has experimentd with Banis character.......2 good.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow amazing ff really exciting
pls do continue soon this ff
i'll be waiting for

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Posted: 18 years ago
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its good continue please
thanks i like your discripsion of girl
👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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hi guys
can sum1 tell me what has pia done, is she makin the pregnancy up.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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OMG! WOW! I LOVE IT!!! IT WAS AWSOME! VERY INTERESTIN! 👏
cant wait to read more!!
please continue ASAP!

lov ya
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: jnawaz

oooooo...bike raceI love racing bikes...wait til jai finds the person that challanged him was a girl I don't expect him out so soon buddy...im sure he will be all 😲...lolz...i loved it...its different...update soon...cant wait to see whre this ff goes maybe somwwhere different I'll try...i see lots of fire in the future...😉
JAZ

Thanks a lot for your comment .

Edited by msrk - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey, this sounds like a very interesting and new take on the Jai and Bani story! When I read the character sketches, I thought that it bared a slight resemblence to Zayed Khan and Amrita Rao from 'Main Hoon Na', but thankfully the story has already started off on a much better note than that movie did!

In fact, it's more like Dhoom! 😆 I'm looking forward to the next part already! Great start msrk! 👏

God bless.
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Loved it
Awesome ff. yes totally different.
plz cont. soon

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