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minizz

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Posted: 12 years ago

Hi Guys,I just wanted to make it clear that I did not write this SS.I have just edited it.Aditi is the author.I am just posting it on her behalf.Please do read and comment😊

Introduction to the SS in Aditi's words

So here's the first Chapter based on the scene from the show Gulaal, as they say you cannot improve perfection,so this attempt is just to present an alternative take on the scene that was just so perfect that it was etched in our memory like a pristine picture...Mini my partner has edited the post for me.Thanks partner for your support and push to get this going...and there are others who have encouraged me but will like to remain anonymous,I am grateful for your support ...so here's the link for the scene

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KPKaXatOqrs[/YOUTUBE]

Past Meets Present

Part I

The doors closed behind him gently, quite in contrast to the havoc created by the wind outside, hell bent on unleashing it's might on the small, sleepy village of Talsagara, depicting the conflict that was playing mayhem in his mind. With wobbling feet he tried to find his way to his bed. Alas! It was proving as difficult as closing his mind to those internal turmoil and confusions. He had tried his best.His friends had said it was the best remedy to forget anything and everything, then why…why did he feel guilty trying to forget things, even for a while, why was his soul making him repent what he had said to Gulaal downstairs just a few moments ago…..

"Mujhe tere sahare ki jarurat nahi hai……",with those words he had wanted to make it clear to her that he did not need her anymore then why did his heart still desire for her to walk through those doors, holding him, guiding him to his bed, relieving him of those sufferings that he had been enduring for the past 10 years. Why did he still believe that whatever she would say to relieve him of his conflicting thoughts will be gospel to him.She had lost that trust 10 years ago hasn't she? She had broken that promise of being each other's kavach.She had sided with Dushyant to hide a terrible secret from HIM.How can he ever forgive her for what she had done? No…she was not the Gulaal he knew…She was not the Gulaal his Vasant Bha fell in love with…She had changed….but why? What made her do it? And why couldn't she confide in HIM, her Kesar…why?

He was almost there, he could feel it, He was just going to fling himself on the bed.He was sure that once he could sleep, he would get answers to the questions that tormented him.He knew he would.Just then he let out a big sigh realizing the futility of his actions.Who was he kidding?Wasn't he trying to do the same every single night for the last 10 years…was he near the truth anymore now than before?

He collided with the bedside table and the photo frame on the top of the table almost toppled to the ground when he managed to catch the same with trembling hands.He immediately closed his eyes as the smiling face of his Vasant Bha came into focus hazily.He knew he wouldn't be able to look him in the eye today. Still with eyes closed he started caressing the picture, slowly allowing himself to ease on the bed with both arms outstretched and photo frame lying on his bosom……

"Kesuda, arrey o Kesuda, ruk ja…kabse aawaj de raha hu sunai nahi deta……Janta hu tune kuch galat kiya hai…teri aankhein padh sakta hu main…ruk ja…nahi toh…aaj toh….", Vasant had shouted at the top of his voice reclining on a tree nearby breathing heavily.

He knew he was in trouble today.He had crossed all his limits in his quest to be one up on his friends.He had accepted a challenge to not only steal afeem balls from Dushyant Bha's room after being repeatedly snubbed and warned by Dushyant not to come near it, but he also tasted a few by popping them straight into his mouth when Vasant had caught him and he had run as fast as he could dropping the entire bottle on the ground….

He was ignoring his Vasant Bha's repeated shouts to stop.He knew all he had to do was reach the taalab and take a plunge.He still had those afeem balls in his mouth.He had not swallowed it as it tasted really bitter.All he had to do was spit it in the talab and act in front of his Vasant Bha that he never did put those in his mouth.This way he might not have to pay a very heavy price for his mischief……

He was almost there.He could hear the sweet music of the flowing water, chirping of the birds near by.He managed a small smile, readying himself for the plunge…his head but would have collided on a hard surface below if Vasant had not put his hand just in time to hold his head before he passed out imagining the soft caress of deep water……..

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Posted: 12 years ago

Interesting!!!😊 The bond Kesar and Vasanth share is very strong!!! Awww..He is torn between Gulaal and the truth which she kept away from all!!!

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Piu Chatterjee

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Posted: 12 years ago

Hi Mini Thanks for posting this beautiful piece and editing it!! Ok coming to Adu,I really like how you have completely justified the wonderful scene with your equally emphatic words.Kesar was his EPIC best in this scene and all his memories ,dilemma ,his turmoil and his mannerisms are still fresh in my mind!!It just feel so great reliving the scene again through your Alterview.
Loved the confusion ,his angst his complain to his Vasant Bha ,that she was not the same Gulaal he knew ,not the same Gulaal his vasant bha fell in love with...
I like the imaginative scene which you weaved with the past,Young Kesar swallowing those balls and knowing his fault ,similarly elder Kesu admits to Vasant that he had committed a mistake.As the young Kesar falls in the water only to be shielded by Vasant,Kesar here seeks that shield ,that cushion that protection from his Vasant bha to help him out..Very thoughtful and Deep.⭐️.Totally loving it..Mini now eager to know what's next ..Pls update ASAP...

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minizz

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Posted: 12 years ago

Hi guys, Here is the second chapter.Do read and comment😊

Past Meets Present

Part II

"Kesu, Kesu'aankhein khol'dekh'Kesu'."

Vasant's frantic and faint voice was reaching his subconscious mind as if coming from a long distance.He tried hard to open his eyes and focus them on his Vasant Bha's worried and troubled face but all he could come up with was a feeble "Vasant Bha'"

He remembered being carried in two strong arms and gently put to bed before surrendering to the deep slumber.When he came to, he saw his Vasant Bha still slowly patting his forehead lost in deep thoughts.He could feel the tension in his brother's touch which made him uneasy . He wanted to apologise. Of course he knew he would be forgiven in no time. Unlike MB and Raman Bha, he always did manage to get away with Vasant and Dushyant so why would it be different this time?Buoyed by past experiences he held his Vasant Bha's hand and gave him a widest of the smiles.

"Kesuda tu theek hai na'..", Vasant exclaimed as a smile spread across his gloomy features. Overjoyed to see him hale and hearty, he ran his hands from his head to toe finally resting on his face.He was about to hug him but he suddenly stopped. Kesar could no longer see the relieved smile on his brother's face which confused him. Instead he felt a stinging slap on his cheeks...

Kesar was shocked and dismayed to see a stern and hurt Vasant.His beloved Vasant bha had never ever raised his voice against him let alone slap him. He did not even know why his mischief this time entailed this kind of reaction from Vasant. He wasn't worried about the pain caused by the slap. Actually what pained him was the fact that without intending to he had somehow hurt his brother so much that he had managed to bring tears in his eyes. This had shaken him completely and he had hugged his Vasant Bha tightly crying his heart out'..

Vasant bha had remained quiet for a while just hugging him back before he spoke in a calm tone'.."Kesu zeher na parkha na hoi'."(one cannot experiment with poison). At that time he had not fully understood what his brother was trying to tell him but that did not stop him from promising his Vasantbha that he would not touch anything ever until he was aware of the effects of using it''

"Vasant Bha maine apna vada nahi thoda,main janta hu sharab pina buri baat hai'..per aap hi batayie main kya karu,kisse mangu apne sawalo ke jawab,kisse kahu apne mann ki baat'main nahi janta sach kya hai,aur ek baar agar Gulaal keh de''.". He sighed heavily clutching tightly to the photo frame on his bosom.

The door opened with a loud bang and she barged in looking angry yet uncertain, determined yet wary, resolute still hesitant looking for any sign of a guilty and repentant Kesar. She knew he would be'.. she was certain of that. No matter how angry or hurt he felt, he was the one to realize his mistakes and then come and ask her forgiveness. So what if he had been away for 10 long years, so what if she didn't know what made him so angry and resentful towards her, so what if he would turn his face away the moment she tried to look at him, so what''''he was still her Kesar and she knew him as much''.

She had turned on the lights after locking the door behind. No matter what she couldn't have let anyone see him in this state. MB would not take it kindly and she was not prepared for anymore long term separation from him. This past 10 years had felt like the longest winter in her life. She can't afford to not have him in front of her eyes. She had been lonely'.. very lonely without him in her life'.

"Darwaza kyun band kiya'.", he had shouted out loud trying to mask his guilt with anger. He had just been wondering what took her so long. After all she never did miss a chance to remind him of his mistakes all the time covering hers. So he braced himself for some altercations with her. He was not going to let her get away with the pleasure of giving him yet another lecture about his "mistakes". He was no longer the 12 year old seeking or wanting her approval for everything he did nor was he a puppy that followed her wide-eyed everywhere she went. His illusions had been broken long ago. He was a grown up man who could look after himself and she had no business lecturing him over right and wrong''

He tried to sit up but couldn't quite manage to hoist himself up. Gulaal came around to help but he stopped her with his hand gesture, gliding down from the bed to the floor with his head lowered. He still managed to catch a glimpse of her angry, hurt face and it seemed to stir something deep within him. He wanted to ask her to leave at once, wanted to say something hurtful, something that would make her regret of entering his room unannounced'.but he sat there frozen with the guilt that was weighing him down heavily,his assumed victory over her getting away without answering her queries falling flat, before she had even uttered a single word remonstrating him'..

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poo_j

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Posted: 12 years ago

Loved it!!!😊 Awww..Kesar got a slap for his act..😆 The promise showed the trust and love he has on his brother!!!

Kesar conceded even before Gulaal spoke..😳 Cool!!!

Looking forward and thanks for writing an awesome update!!!😊

P.S: Unres for part 1 done in the same page!!!

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SRJKiShraddha

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Posted: 12 years ago

hi mini how r u😃

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will rchg my net and than like n comment, right now annoyingly it's really slow😡

edit

wow aditi loved the bond of vasant and kesar, and u brilliantly wrote kesuda's emmotions [ i know ur expert in this]

thanks mini for wonderfull editing, both of u made it beautiful

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minizz

@minizz

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: poo_j
Interesting!!!😊 The bond Kesar and Vasanth share is very strong!!! Awww..He is torn between Gulaal and the truth which she kept away from all!!!

Originally posted by: poo_j
Loved it!!!😊 Awww..Kesar got a slap for his act..😆 The promise showed the trust and love he has on his brother!!!
Kesar conceded even before Gulaal spoke..😳 Cool!!!
Looking forward and thanks for writing an awesome update!!!😊

P.S: Unres for part 1 done in the same page!!!

Thank you so much Poo🤗Your comment means a lot.I will post the last chapter as soon as I finish replying😊

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minizz

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Hi Mini Thanks for posting this beautiful piece and editing it!!Piu🤗I hope you don't if I reply to your comment here😊 Thank you so much for the wonderful comment.

Ok coming to Adu,I really like how you have completely justified the wonderful scene with your equally emphatic words.Kesar was his EPIC best in this scene and all his memories ,dilemma ,his turmoil and his mannerisms are still fresh in my mind!!It just feel so great reliving the scene again through your Alterview.
I know right ...this scene to me is very special cause this was the first time I was able to connect with the grown up Kesar on an emotional level.Until then I was leaning more towards Gulaal's pain but this scene made me feel for Kesar's condition for the first time.Neil acted the hell out of this scene na.The raw pain and frustration that he expresses in this scene is just heartbreaking😭
Loved the confusion ,his angst his complain to his Vasant Bha ,that she was not the same Gulaal he knew ,not the same Gulaal his vasant bha fell in love with...
I like the imaginative scene which you weaved with the past,Young Kesar swallowing those balls and knowing his fault ,similarly elder Kesu admits to Vasant that he had committed a mistake.As the young Kesar falls in the water only to be shielded by Vasant,Kesar here seeks that shield ,that cushion that protection from his Vasant bha to help him out..Very thoughtful and Deep.⭐️.Totally loving it..Mini now eager to know what's next ..Pls update ASAP...

Hope you read the 2nd chapter I will be posting the final chapter right after this.I would love to hear your thoughts on the chapters.Thank you so much for the beautiful comment Piu😃

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minizz

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: princessofkesar
hi mini how r u😃
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will rchg my net and than like n comment, right now annoyingly it's really slow😡

Shradha🤗so good to hear from you.It's ok...take your time...absolutely no problem at all😃

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minizz

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Hi guys,here's the final chapter of this SS.I would love to know your thoughts so please do read and comment😊

Past Meets Present

Part III

"Kesar tujhe pata bhi hai tu kya kar raha hai….."

There she goes again, he thought. Instead of enquiring what was bothering him, what is it that is making him do things he couldn't imagine he would ever do, why did he always keep his distance from her, her Kesar keeping away from her……No….. here was the Gulaal who was just interested in being ideal daughter of the house, keeping everyone and anyone happy except HIM, bending to and pleasing the likes of Dushyant who was responsible for……He took a deep breath as he closed his eyes briefly for a moment to regain control. No, he thought as he exhaled…She was not his Gulaal….

"Mere jo jee mein aaye main wohi karunga,Tu kaun hoti hai kuch bhi kehne wali…." He had blurted out defiantly wanting to hurt her. He was in complete agony.His mind was a mess right now which could be credited not just to the effects of alcohol but also the ongoing internal conflicts.He had kept away for 10 long years trying to make her understand that he was her world.He had separated himself from her so that she would suffer as much without him as he did…..but it seemed all in vain because she had turned into someone strange…someone he could no longer could relate to…

"Yeh mujhse nahi apne aap se puch…..Main kaun hu……" ,she had thundered before picking up the glass full of water and throwing it on his face. Shocked by her sudden act, he had tried getting up from the floor with every intention of strangling her. That's when the photo frame slipped from his hand to the floor and with Vasant's eyes on him, questioning, probing, penetrating his very being he slipped back on the floor ashamed, head lowered, closing his eyes to escape the guilt that was tearing him apart……

"Agar meri khater nahi toh MB,PB aur Vasant unke liye toh tere mann mein kuch aadar hoga…unke liye aaj ke baad aisi koi harkat mat karna……."

"Kitni ummedey thi tujse hame,saari ummedo pe paani fer diya hai tune,kitna bada dhoka kiya hai hum sabke saath……"

He could feel the extreme pain and sorrow in those final words she spoke before leaving the room. His heart slowly grasped the hurt in her voice….a shaken voice that had transformed itself into a pointed arrow resting just over his turbulent heart. He couldn't manage to lookup from the constant stare at the floor which he wished would open up for him to disappear within. This reproachful stare from his Vasant Bha and the hurt, quavering voice of Gulaal was proving too much to bear for his traumatized and distressed soul, tired and exhausted body, conflicting and contradicting mind…..He wanted to escape from it all….into nothingness…..

"Kesu, tu janta tha na tere dost ne Giga kaka ki chappal ko Goshala ke charo ke beech chupaya tha… ….fir tune bataya kyun nahi hame..….galat ka saath dena bhi utna hi galat hai jitna ki galat karna….yaad rakhega na meri iss baat ko Kesu…….."

He had slowly managed to look at Vasant's picture,a small smile escaping his lips….

"Yaad hai Vasant Bha,galat ka saath dena galat hai…phir kyun nahi yeh baat aapne Gulaal ko bhi sikhayi…kyun de rahee hai woh galat ka saath….kyun chipa rahee hai itna bhayanak paap..…kyun….."

He slowly placed the frame on the table and wiped his hair with the bed sheet, sitting up straight on the bed still staring at his brother's picture trying to recollect something that had not made any sense to him when Vasant had said it….

"Kesu, woh paani bahut ghera hai uss taraf kabhi nahi jaana, jab tak tu bada nahi ho jaata tujhe uss taraf tairna mana hai samjha….."

"Per Vasant Bha, agar jaunga nahi toh sikhunga kaise, kabhi na kabhi toh ghere paani mein bhi tairna shikna hi padega na….."

"Haan lekin tabhi jab tu itna bada ho jaaye ke uss gehre paani mein jaane se se tujhe koi kasht na ho, kuch baatein isliye maan leni chahiye Kesu,kyunki jo tumse yeah baat keh rahe hai,hamesha tumhaara hit chahte hai…."

And he had accepted his Vasant Bha's order never to cross those barriers until he was old enough to do so….

"Per ab toh main bada ho gaya hu na…..paani kitna bhi ghera kyun na ho,mujhe usme se niklna aata hai Vasant Bha….Aap samjhayie na mujhe…maine kahan dokha diya hai aapke vishwaas ko….dhoka diya hai USNE ….aapko aur mujhe…….hamari bhavanao ke saath khilwaad kiya hai usne….kyun nahi…bataya hum sabko…kyun chupaya ham sab se…kyun…"

"Vasant Bha main vishwaas karna chahta hu uspe,uski har baat pe….uski har uss wajah pe….jisne usse yeh zeher pine pe majboor kiya hai, per aapne hi kaha tha na "Zeher na parkha na hoi…." toh kyun nahi yeh wajah mujhe hi batati,kyun nahi yeh samaj paati ki……jis zeher ne uski zindagi ko narq bana rakha hai usne mujhe bhi nahi baksha…bas ek baar mujhe woh wajah bata de…woh jo bhi kehegi wohi sahi hoga…Hai na Vasant Bha…."

His tired and exhausted body had now taken over his querying and questioning mind.He was drifting slowly into nothingness.His subconscious mind still searching for answers from his Vasant Bha…."Kis pe vishwaas karu kispe nahi…jo dekha aur suna hai usse sahi samjhu ya meri iss adag aur atoot shraddha ko…jo kabhi bhi Gulaal ko doshi nahi maan sakti….."

And with the question still ringing profound…."Aap mujhe chod ke kyun chale gaye Vasant Bha…..", he drifted into dark stillness of the night….