Res:)
***EDIT***
ok first of all...I am so sorry for not unresing earlier. I was caught up with some school work and also other things. And hey, I am not that bad. I stayed up extra late last night to read the whole SS!...i mean if you can give me the loveliest dedication, then even i can stay up late for you...and i dont care if you get mad at me for that😛
ok ok enough of my pre babble, which i tend to do very often!..
like this one time...* SMACKS FORHEAD*
SORRY SORRY...im not gonna get off topic anymore...LOL
THE SS:
Saiyu, ab tum batao... where do I start from?
like i have no idea how to start my actual comment!
ok ok...lets do this!
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG
SAIYU BOO...I SERIOUSLY AM IN LOVE WITH YOUR WRITING...LIKE IM NOT JOKING...pakka!
I just loved the entire SS, from the beginning till chap 15!...hahah yaa im reading and unresing late, and you have already updated another chap after my res for chap 14...SORRY BOO!
Ok lets start from the beginning. Arnav and his affairs and Anjali wanting him to settle down. Well haha thats typical of her to do that but but...our Raizada is a kamal banda...obviously he wont be like " ofcourse my dear Di, your wish is my command!...i will do as told right away!..." uuhhh nooo that is not him. Now what does our Sahibzada do?,,,,he goes all Entrepreneurial and BAM POPS UP A FAKE GIRLFRIEND, WHO IS A TALKING FIRE ENGINE IN DISGUISE!
I like loved the way he describes to Akash, the type of girl he wants as a fake girlfriend that Di would want him to have. And the part where he goes " Di has long hair, so she would want my girlfriend to have long hair as well.." wasss sooo cute..hahah HATS OFF TO YOU SAIYU FOR YOU AWESOME IMAGINATION. The way you wrote made me literally visualize arnav and akash in the office with arnav closing his eyes and imagining his girl...wooo *fans myself*
hahah and Akash pounces on Khushi when he goes BHAABBHHI...lol...i wish i could see something like that happening in the show...but alas!
I also loved the fact that you added comedy in this, and also the funny parts kept me awake to read your SS so that was good. Actually, your SS in whole was soo awesome that i wasnt able to sleep anyways hahah. It was like the right amount of comedy and right amount of romance. Sort of balanced you know!..and i liked the SS for that!...
In whole, i really enjoyed the light hearted SS that you wrote using your awesome and creative imagination. I wish I was like you *sigh*
Chapter 11:
hahah man oh man...did i laugh hard or what!...the scene with NK AND HP 🤣
oooh and I love it when people reference Harry Potter in their work, because i am a huge potter head haha and so I love you for that!
rofl...NK AND HIS CHIPS!
Some scenes reminded me of the epic scenes that were delivered in the actual show, but ofcourse you added your own spices to make it more epiclicious hahah
Now the romance, and that means specifically Chapter 13:
I loved the way you wrote the types of emotions Khushi was feeling in the party; jealousy and anger being the main points here. And what does the red siren do? SHE TAKES HER EMOTIONS OUT BY KISSING HIM😳
SAIYU...doll... DO YOU WANT TO KILL ME HERE?😆
The Jalebi scene was soo cute, and also you ofcourse added your own twist to the familiar scene which made it my fav!...and that is when they have their official hug!
hhaha UH OH...buaji and Payal catch them in that position...?hahha but in the end...rishta final hua...
man if my mom or dad saw me with a guy in that position and that too at mignight..haha... in the end...murder final hua😆
I cant forget to mention the scene where Khushi corners Arnav in his office...like with both her hands on either side of his head..ahaa and the dialogues she spoke in the scene were initially said by Arnav in the show, and vice versa...haha and i can also visualize this scene very well.ROLES SWITCHED I SEE😆
chapter 14 was really awesome...it kinda related to me in some way. I mean the part where the youngsters are sitting in the cool night, drinking away different sorts of drinks and other food. It reminds me of how me and my cousins/friends would meet up every other weekend and hangout like this...specially in summer<3
hahaha shyam and LASSI?...i see what you did there!😊 added a punjabi touch to it!
I LOVED THE ENTIRE SS...AND NOW I WANNA SAY...i hope you update soon!
I love you soo much for acknowledging me so lovingly. The dedication touched my heart!...I LOVE YOU SO MUCH FOR THAT<3:*
THANK YOU SOOO MUCH ONCE AGAIN<3
XOXOXO
~Simran ( aka your Sim<3)
Edited by -HoneyBoo- - 12 years ago
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