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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Onir

Second res

😊
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Mayyo... how love filled & romantic part this one was... 😳

It was?

Anya's family is so cute ... & so much like regular family, with all the spice & savoury in each member adding up to whole essence. Her mom, sisters are such a bundle of peppiness it must be appearing so lively to Geet & also a small part wanting to be with her family. Pia & Sia 😆... Yes as Avi said they did remind me of some of the readers drooling over here on Maan 😉... Their talks & discussions over some celebrity made me to feel it to be someone like HR. ❤️ they then proceeded to discuss on the same plane about Maan. I don't know why But I feel it was so much to be like this only (Are you getting what I'm trying to say..?) They could relate Maan with HR... something that I usually do ... Though for now it would be Maan for me as not married & let Sia + Pia take HR... at least till M-G move ahead form their tortoise speed.

I totally get what you're trying to say because I've always related Maan to HR myself. The scene where I feel these two resembled the most is the Laung Da Lashkara part where they're on the cycle. 😳

Anya - Geet's bond has grown from where it had initially started from. Sometimes it just takes few moments & few interactions to form strong bonds... & yet a lifetime of nurturing & delicate handling to keep the bond intact & always just getting deeper with time. Anya & Geet have achieved that type of bonding to greater extent. Almost on similar lines that of Anya, Ayush & Maan who know each other since ages. Just showing that time doesn't decide the strength of the bond but its foundation being love, trust & care and proper cherishing is needed whatever be the age of the relation Similar it is with all four of them ...But the whole selecting of clothes, decking up did subtly show the bonding of this nature between Anya- Geet.

I was about to highlight the parts I loved in this paragraph of yours and then found out that it's the whole of it! Very well-said, Onir! Time doesn't decide how deep a bond goes. Where it can take years to come to talking terms, it can take just a few moments to form the deepest of bonds. Very well-put! 👏

Maan welcoming the girls ... Hayee, loved how he was stumped seeing Geet in the new avatar, though not much but his inner voice so well spoke of his missing words & actions. Ranbir ... I like him for the ease in which he went & complimented the girls without much of a hesitation. While Maaan babu has to tread with caution & proof read what he is going to compliment Geet as he is afraid of losing out on whatever little progress they've done. Loved it how you showed that both Khurana boys welcomed their lady loves at the entrance itself. Also loved the progress how Geet FEELS & WANTS Maan to compliment her, was sweet. She wants to know that she is beautiful in Maan's eyes. It is as if every compliment feels incomplete without his words to add to it. Neil ne Jess ko busy kar diya... Chalo now Maan is saved. I liked the bonding between Maan-Anya- Ayush's families.

Ranbir is way too different from this shy Maan to have to think before complimenting a girl. 😆 Yes, Geet wants to know how Maan likes her but she still hasn't given much thought to why she wants to know it. As for Jess, yayy! Maan is free, free, free! 😆 (It sounded like 3 idiots wala scene! 😆)

Bechara Tortoise Maan wants to compliment Geet appropriately this time & not in relation to decoration or anything else. I love How 'G' was teasing him, & also testing his patience... She wanted him to try harder. I have told you before also I suppose that G reminds me of Nisha... Her actions, words are so Nisha-style. He did compliment her this time'. Though he initially goofed up little bit by bringing in Anya-Ayush talks but yet not bad. ..."You look beautiful..." Three words & so many changes, Geet has a glow & happiness of knowing she is beautiful for him... and for Maan quite a progress form the times when he used to just see her from afar. Sometimes putting words to the emotions felt however few they may be, does leave a greater impact, & is much needed.

Tortoise Maan doesn't want to keep standing in the shadows all the time. 😉

True, words - however little they are - sometimes hold a lot more importance than we can think...

Ranbir-Zara...😳. Loved his romantic confession & proposal. Those lines he spoke were quite simple & not OTT but held depth, commitment & spoke of true emotions. Also the way the whole family (As everyone there were a single unit happy with the love & bonding of two souls... ) was joyous with this new relation. Liked how Geet each time landed up trying to find the smile on Maan's face to feel the complete happiness.

Thank God it wasn't OTT! I don't have any experience with proposals you see, so I wasn't sure about it. 😆

@Underlined: Now that is a minute observation! 😊

Love is in the air ... A-A, R-Z. Hope something rubs off even on the tortoise couple. 😆

I hope! 😆

The diary features again, & this time she could actually pen down some very coherent & continuous thoughts about someone very special. It also showed how she has started enjoying the college life to the fullest with these new friends, all thanks to Maan. I agree it wasn't like first she never enjoyed college, but now it just feels she is enjoying & living each moment of her life with such friends around her. Her first Poem, ... It just spoke of everything, putting all her unconscious & felt emotions in few lines. You have great way with words. Those few lines spoke of everything ... Loved it so very much. The lines spoke more of Maan's characteristics, & how she feels for him after all the moments spend together. Each word in the poem was somehow a recollection of all their memories. 👏❤️

Ahh, yes, the diary had to come back to actually show Geet's thinking processes which she doesn't share with anyone at all.

Glad you liked the poems. They were meant to be a recollection of memories and somewhat a description of how she sees Maan. 😊

The urdu poem... What should I say, I guess I have already told you I'm in love with this rich language, only that I don't have much understanding of it & not that fluent, but yes it just feels so serene & connects so well.

Yes you have told me about your liking of the language. 😊

"...Jab kisiki aankhon ki gherayian mein tum apni parchayi dekho toh... "

These lines were so deep, mesmerising. When you feel & can see your image in the others eye it just means that you have started reading the person deeply, also that somewhere you want to be the person who will reside in his soul. As eyes are mirrors to the soul. They conveyed the depth of her feelings towards him, how aware she is of his presence & each thing related to him, showing subconsciously she has made peace with the feelings ' only now she needs to admit it to self & Maan.

Wow! I wouldn't have taken such a deep meaning to that line! I love the way you throw light on things the way I won't normally see. 👏

Yes, all she needs to do is admit to herself and to Maan. But will she, before she has to leave?

The end was a bit scary... But the whole part was good that for now I want to overlook it... & will leave it to you the actual progress & efforts Maan will take to confess & make even Geet to confess.

I'm scared of the end too. And even more nervous now, about how the story's going to move forward. 😕

Waiting for more... .. very eagerly!!!!

🤗

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: dqno1

I loved the scene with the girls dressing up for the party.

Mari, you made me miss my family so much... usually the bed is covered with clothes by the time we are done and though everyone has made up their mind we go through each other's clothes and jewelry a hundred time...

I'm sorry for making you miss your family so much! But these are the moments we miss when we can't saty with our family any more...

Such a cute scene with the little sisters drooling over the celebrity heartthrob... reminded me of Sheen and Sweety... and G reminded me of Nisha... telling Maan to go for it..

The similarities only came in front of my eyes when you pointed them out. 😆

Ranbir the confident at the door calling them beautiful where as your dhakkan Maan just not able to say it yet. Geet's disappointment when he does not compliment her and he was so getting ready to get a kantap from me...Haiye but when he did it was so cute... pulling dhakkan's cheeks now...

@Bold: How I wish that was true! 😆

You probably should give him a kantap anyway, after pulling his cheeks of course. Maybe he'll learn to speed up! 😆

So Jess has a new person to play with. 😆

Maan ki jaan bachi! 😆

The proposal was totally melty for me. I love the promises that are made, there is so much hope on that day and everyone pulling in the family as if to bless them and wish them the best. Loved it.

The romantic Avi speaking here! But I'm glad you liked it. 😊

Ayush, Anaya and the chocolates. ❤️

PDA...😳 Catching them in the act...☺️

you know I would love that...

You would love catching who in the act? Clarify please. 😆

Seeing that how they would run in the opposite direction is so Mari-ish here..

Can't disagree! 😳

The poems which were beautiful are revealing her heart to herself now and dear diary makes an appearance again.

Yep, the poems are her own way of putting out in front of her, what's in her heart.

Ayush reminding Maan that time is ticking was the only thing that became a wake up call in this super meltdown update...

It had to come some day...

LOVED IT...

Thanks for updating...
Thank you Avi, for being here, for your encouraging words. 🤗

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: palindrome

Finally caught up with both the chapters..oh god, alot had happened when I was not here..

I missed you being around, Palin! 🤗
Mrs. Khurana sudden accident,her recovery, anaya's anger, ayush's efforts to get her back to herself, finally their patchup, and a "big progress" in maaneet's relation..but ayush-anaya's kissing moment surpassed maaneet's progress...They have progressed most ...🤣
They sure have progressed the most! 😆
There were so many people introduced from anaya's siblings{they were really cute}, to zara and her bro neil..I am happy finally that mutant jass got someone to stick with other than maan...😃
Yes, so many people that I think I had a hard time keeping track! 😆
Ranbir's proposal took away my heart..He was sincerely cute...
He definitely is cute! 😊
Maan's attempt to praise geet's look was really endearing..loved that "maaneet" moment in kitchen..I could actually visualize it...😊
Glad to know that you liked it! 😊
But my most favorite are "geet's poems"..totally loved them yaar...
Ayush is right...Maan should tell geet about his feelings asap...Delay gonna complicate things for sure...😊
The poems were her way of expressing what she felt...
Yes, he should confess but will he be able to do it...?
PS-sorry for late comment dear...😛
Are you serious?! Mujhe sharminda kar diya ye keh ke because I think these days I'm so slow in commenting!

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Trisha4evr

awesomeness at its best... Loved all bit of it...

the poetry was sooo good...
Lovely update!!!!

Thank you! 😳

Originally posted by: Sheen-Coolkiwi

Awesome Update Mari 😳From Line 1 to Last 👏
Urdu Poetry was too Gud 👏
Hats off to you 😃

Thanks Sheen! Glad you liked the poem! 😊

Edited by mayyo13 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: heytal



Someone was saying that
I am not very good at Maaneet moments
Liar liar
Nope. I'll still say that! 😆
Fabulous update
😃
Thanks Heytal!
Geet makeover😉 Maan checking out 😎
Anaya thanks yaar for the much needed help😳
Ha ha! Maan would've liked Geet even without the makeover. 😳
Anaya's sisters Ooh la la
Geet ke saamne Maan pe drooling😲
Lekin Geet ko toh koi khaas farak hi nahin pada. 😛
Aayush-Anaya😛
Maaneet want a private moment and Jess😡
Neil aa gaya Bali ka Bakra😆
Chalo Maan bach gaya
Neil doesn't mind being the bali ka bakra. 😆
Of course Maan bach gaya! 😆
G😉
surely Maan is a easy target
lage raho😆
Itna push karne ke baad
'You look beautiful Geet'
😲
Hey Bhagu
Maari thoda toh dhakka laga
Aash ki tarah mat karna ke wait hi karte rahe🤓
Bechara Maan! Kuch na kahe toh bhi sab usko koste hain aur kuch kahe toh bhi. 😆
I'm not planning to make this story as long as Aash's so stay relaxed about the wait. 😊
Totally well penned down update
perfectly blending each character and their moments
be it Aayush-Anaya, Neil-Jess, Ranbir-Zaara and ofcourse Maaneet😳
Thank you Heytal! 😳
Aayush-Geet convo was superb
I just loved it
😊

Ranbir's proposal
Maan better work harder man
U have to out do this😉
Maan never promised to out do his brother, did he? 😆
Aayush-Anaya caught ☺️
Maaneet bhaag gaye🤣
Wo dono wahan khade reh ke unn do love birds ko toh stare na karte rehte na! 😆
The poem is fantastic
so apt yaar😊
Geet sharing her feelings
her acceptance yet her denial and...
And?
Glad you liked the poem. 😊
And Aayush giving Maan a much needed reality check
So are we in for some serious action in the next update😎
Are you really in some serious action? You know he's such a slow person ke maybe he won't say anything in the next chapter. 😆
Waiting now
Continue soon
😃
Will do soon. 😊


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Posted: 12 years ago



Originally posted by: lehr

lovely update dear


Thank you! 😊
Edited by mayyo13 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Koolsmile

Comment 4 both chapters 13 n 14 😳
Finally, Em reading 14, phewww 😊
Geet must b thinking k apart frm that one tym that I dreamt about Maan shirtless, I never called him so hot n all n look at these two 15 n 17 year old 🤣

Did she even call him hot then? 😆
Btw who was that celebrity in ur mind ? 😉 😆
None in particular. Who came to your mind? 😃
I never mentioned but Em loving Ranbir 😉 of course Maan se kam 😆 but his caring calm somewhat carefree n jovial nature attracts me 😳 Zara was sweet 😊 In the last chapter , I absolutely adored the scene between the two brothers, trying to hide about their love interest from each other yet at the same tym confessing to each other wid their gestures only 😊
We're both attracted towards his carefree and jovial nature. 😳
More to Zara in the coming chapter...
coming back !
Have yew imagined anybody as Ayush, Anaya, Zara, n the latest flirt entry Neil 😆
I had blurred faces for Ayush and Anaya, but you're free to give them whichever faces you'd like. 😉
Is Jess-nama over 4 Maan ? 😆
Probably, yes. She began irritating me with her chipku nature so I gave her a shiny new toy. 😆
Maan must have gone in a khwabon ki dunya wid Geet due to which he didnt react that tym ,just stared 😉 Em thinking positive, yew know 😆
Good good. Stay positive. 😆
Dekha , wasn't I right ? 😆
Yep! 😳
"You know what I mean, smart guy" 😆 Man, he must b embarrassed 😆 ya phr garden garden 😉😆
Embarrassed I'll say. Poor guy! 😆
Not all r conspiring against you Maan, em praying, yew can do it.. buck up ! 😆
Nobody's really conspiring against him, just pulling his leg. 😆
Yayy! he said that 😃 😆
Finally! 😃
Larki to ek hi tareef me go went gone hogai 😆
Uska toh bas itna sa khwaab tha! 😆
Ayush-Anaya settled , pheww 😊
A sweet moment shared by Ayush n Geet 😊
Haye Ranbir's proposal was sweetest today 😊 absolutely loved 😳
Glad you liked it! 😳
had hai Maan, poor Ayush-Anaya n Geet too 🤣
🤣 Poor them!
Poetry was awesome Mayyam, esp the one in eng 👏
Thank you Naureen! 😳
Mayyam, plx thori strength Maan ko de de , so that wo bhi kuch dhang se confess kr de 😉 😆
Pehle mujhe koi strength de taa ke main usse confess karne ke liye raazi karun! 😆
Samachar samabt hue 🤣
Lekin maine TV off nahin kiya. 😆

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Posted: 12 years ago
@underlined: Maan and Geet of course...😆
Edited by dqno1 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: dreamy4ever

Awesome update. Maan was so shy and nervous to give compliment to geet tat she is lookg beautiful Wat will happen wen he goes to propose to her 😆 😆 G teasing maan Ranbirs proposal seq everything was cute in this update.

Thank you! Glad to know that you liked it! 😊

Originally posted by: april12

awesome update

geet looking beautiful for the party
maan literally sweating over on how to compliment her
cute moment when he held her wrist and said, "You look beautiful"
Maan beta u learned ur lesson from 1st time
Ayush Anaya are official
Ayush reminds Maan of his promise
so...maan what r u gonna do?

Thanks! 😳
Yes, what will Maan do now?

Originally posted by: tushti-kiran


romantic proposal by Ranbir to Zara...

Aayush and Anaya resolved their issue and now all lovey-dovey...

but Maan's love story is still pending...

awesome update...

thanx for pm...

Thank you! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: amks



Pyar bahut hai iss dil me,
Bas kahne se main darta hu,

Achha lagta hai sath tera,
Par chup-chup main rahta hu,

Chahat mera ki ikraar karu,
Par tere inkaar se main darta hu,

Kaash bata paata tujhe ki,
Tumse Pyar bahut main karta hu,


Reading maan's state these lines came in my mind.

Talking about update , update was simply awesome. I loved your way of writing simple and superb whether it was Ranbir proposal or ayush and ananya romance or decreasing distance between maan and geet. And not to forget your poetry in both languages which was simply great.

Waiting for next update


Your poem is great!
I'm glad you liked the update. 😊

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