Dil Mil Gaye Jab Miley Hum Tum Aur Qubool hoga FF

sucker4arhiluv thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 12 years ago
#1
Okay so I think im on a roll today. I wrote my first SS today and even started my first FF. Sorry for the title it was lengthy I know
Warning: it sis a mixture of hindi and English but mostly Hindi.
And writing Hindi words in English really hard so if you understand please just write the word in the comments and i will tell you the definition.

Chapter 1 - Page 1 (below)

Chapter 2 - Page 1 (its under)

Chapter 3 - Page 2!


Chapter 1

Mein, Asad Raizada Excel Collage ka sabse cool or sabse handsome ladka. Thoda filmy naam hai but mujhe pata hai, yeh name koi nahi bhool sakta especially ladkiyan. Aaj second year ka pehla din hai aur mera schedule toh already booked hai, kyun ki meri nayi girlfriend Rita hai. Rita knows ki mein itna serious nahi uske saath because I am waiting for only one girl.

Ek ladki jiski badi, badi ankein ho, aur woh ankein jin may sirf aur sirf mein dikhai doon. Uske lambe aur hasin bal jismain se sirf meri khushboo aaey. Ek ladki jo sirf meri ho kar rehjai, sirf meri. Aur usko dekhkar phool bhi phike lagne lage. Mein jab usko dekhunga toh violins bajne lagenge and that's when I will know ke voh agayi. I know ki ye thoda old fashion type shayeri thi but I grew up listening to my dad's collection of shayeri. Is vaja se mein bhi ek shayer type ban gaya hoin. Par mujhe pata hain ke aisi ladki bohot mushkil se milegi but milegi zaroor.

Aaj collage mein wahi teacher aur wahi subject but just harder. Meri childhood best friend Sharon just came uski pink convertible mein, and with her is her brother U-d-a-y Uday, jeetna chota naam use bhi chota IQ ("pyaar" se Sharon calls him dodo (like the dodo bird)). His only reason to come to collage is GIRLS. Usse kabhi koi ladki nahi patt ti but still woh har ladki pe line marta hai. That leads me to my buddy jo hamesha mere saath rehta hain my guy best friend Benji (Benjamin) hai toh apna hi desi but Christian. Benji bhi Uday jaisa hai line to marle ta hai par kabhi koi ati nahi aur mere pass sab aaja ti hai line mare bina. Aur iss vajai se, mujhe undono ne apna love guru banalea hai. Sharon aaj keh rahi thi ki uski koi cousins ane wali hai, and also ki voh koi chote village se I think it was called Morena. Well I guess ki agar Sharon ki family se hai toh phir hott honi chahiye.

But Then Sharon ne mujhe bataya ki voh apne cousins se nahi milna chati so now it's my job to get them back to Morena. So maine thodi information Sharon se layli hai the older one's name is Khushi Bhushan and the younger one who is our age her name is Zoya Bhushan. Par suna hai ki dono mein bada fark hai Khushi hates studying aur Zoya ek topper hai. Iss liye maine decide kiya hai ki mein Zoya ko uss ki tarikay se milunga, I will become a geek too par sirf kapdo se, not study in real and it's going to be the funniest ever. After becoming her friend I will make a fool of her par jaanbuch ke nahi (well at least uske nazron mein nahi). I know ki thoda sa mean hai but what can I do, aur maine apne aap se ek promise ki hai ke agar kuch bhi gadbaad ho jai then I will be willing to take full responsibility. Mujhe pata nahi ki older one ka kya karenge but agar younger sister nahi rehna chati toh phir badi kyun rehna chaheygi?

Ab to bas kal ka intezar hai.



Okay so the starting does kind of have the Miley jab hum tum touch but it was a great starting sooo...But i really hope you quys liked it


And please please tell me what you think

Edited by sucker4arhiluv - 12 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

13

Views

3.3k

Users

8

Likes

23

Frequent Posters

risingsea101 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 12 years ago
#2
OOO, sounds really interesting
Continue ASAP
I loved MJHT and now it's like a combo of 3 other shows
Imma enjoy this
Lol continue soon and PM me when you do
<3 Farhana
grad2011 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 12 years ago
#3
really nice pzz do continue soon!!!!
..vidhi.. thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 12 years ago
#4

wow combo of all my favourites...but plz bring in more of dmg...

continue soon!!

HR-DMG4life thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 12 years ago
#5
Nice concept :-) please pm me when you continue
sucker4arhiluv thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 12 years ago
#6
Okay so I am really happy that you all loved it and so i have another chapter for you to hopefully enjoy and sorry its really short but chapter 3 will be up really really soon I promise

Chapter 2


This morning maine apne fellow classmate Jignesh ke extra glasses borrow kar liye, ek purani shirt jo maine kabhi nahi pehni who pehan le aur pants me tuck bhi kar li, and last but not the least maine apne bal billkul chapatt kar liyen hai. And my new name is Asadisharya. Nice na? I decided to try it on my own friends first

"Mere priya mitron kaise ho aap?" Meri shudh Hindi itni achi nahi hai but it will work. The first one to talk was Sharon.

"Um Hello? Are you talking to us? Kya aap ko patta hai ki hum koun hai?"

"Ji hum ko patta hai ki aap loag ye kakshala ke shisya ho na?"

"Kakshaka? Shisya? Shukla sir aur iski Jodi bohot jamegi right Benji?

"Pehli baar tu ne kuch sach kaha hai "DoDo" hahahahahaha"

"See guys Asad ka plan kabhi fail nahi ho sakta"

"Asad?!?!?!" Sab ke chere itne shock ho gaye the ki even I was shocked by their reaction. I didn't know that they would freak out this much. But it was funny to see their faces.

"So how do I look? Convincing enough ki who mere jaal mein phaas jaai?"

"Ya definitely yaar. Okay so mere liya khuch kaam?"

"thanks but no thanks mujhe thumhare zarurat abhi nahi padegi but there is a part for you. I'll tell when the right time comes. Oh and Sharon mein soach raha tha and I think ki hume ek party rakh ne chahiya so that they feel "welcome" or intro bhi wahan he hojaye ga. Kyun?"

"That's a great plan Asad and I'll get Sonia to help me with the decorations"

Sonia: A cute girl and Sharon's best friend not always with us but Sharon ko woh worship kar ti hai.

"Or mein kya karon Asad?

"Tu sabse syaada kya like kar ta hai?" Benji ko pata tha answer phir bhi Uday ko sattata hai.

"Ha That's an easy question I love food the most."

"Kyun tumhe ladkiyan nahi passand."

"Nai passand hai par food se thoda less"

"HAHAHA. Ok stop Benji. To phir Uday why don't you help Sharon with the catering in the party?"

"Hey that a great idea Asad! See benji isse kehte hai dost."

"Ya okay Uday watevaaa float your boat"

What this girl was supposed to look like, I had no clue but one thing I knew for sure was that we were making a lot of efforts for her so she better like it, and also fall into my 'jaal'.

Edited by sucker4arhiluv - 12 years ago
risingsea101 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 12 years ago
#7
Uh-oh I smell trouble
lol, nice part
Nicely written
Continue soon and thanks for the PM <3
sucker4arhiluv thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 12 years ago
#8
Okay so i realized that chapter 2 was a bummer and it wasnt as good so i decided to make a chapter 3 that will be longer and more malase dar!

Chapter 3

So yahaan mein is ladki ka wait kar rahan hoon, and she still hasn't come! I feel like mere baal mein jo oil hai uske wajese all the flies are making homes in my hair. How do these nerds handle all this oil!

Aisa wait to maine sirf ek ladki ke liye kiya hai, aur uska naam bhi Zoya tha. And woh ladki ka main abhi wait kar rahahoon. Woh ladki who was so close, ki so sirf meri friend hi nai meri soul mate bhi hai ya shayad thi.

~~~~~

"Asad! Kidhar ho? Asad! I need to talk. Abhi! Agar tum bahar nahi aaye toh main chali jayungi!"

Hiding from Zoya gave me the best feeling, because jab woh mujhe dundti, I can hear the fikar and care uski awaz mein. And I loved that! Uss feeling ke liya main kuch bhi karta. "Accha baba main aagaya. Bas?" As I steepped out maine dekha ki Zoya ki beautiful smile gayab!? Woh smile jo uski identity thi, woh smile jiske ke bina sayad main smile nahi karta.

"Zoya? What happened? Kisi ne kuch kaha?"

"Asad, tum kal chale jaoge and tum chate ho ki main smile karoon?"

I could see she was sad her hands were a bit shaky and she was fidgeting with her dupatta. Zoya was a girl who hated to wear jeans. Jab maine pucha she told me 'main to sirf salwar main comfortable hoon. Atleast mujhe fikar to nahi karni padti. I can sit in whatever position.'

"Haan I'm leaving..but tumhe aisi rahogi then I will only take bad memories. Tumhara rotlu sa chehra."

"Asad!" She said smacking me on the shoulder. I felt like taking her in my arms and holding her there forever'but forever never lasts long enough

"Zoya tumhe to pata hai na ki Dad wants us to leave. Kash main ruk pataa." Immediately I regretted my words, I had to make her stronger not weaker.

But jaane se pehle I had to say something that I been dying to say ever since I was 10. Five years mujhe andar dabana padaa.

"Zoya, mujhe tumse kuch kehna hai, and I want you to take it seriously okay?"

"Haan theek hai."

"Zoya'I Love You"

No Reaction. 30 seconds abhi no reaction sirf statue Zoya.

"Oookayy. Main tumhe 2 hours deta hoon, before meri flight take off hojaya come to the airport aur main samjunga yes otherwise'" I couldn't say it, jo sayad na ho usse kehne ki kya zarorat hai.

~~~~~

That day I waited for her. Maine last call tak wait kiya, but woh nahi aayi. After that I have never heard of her. Although somewhere inside mujh me abhi hope hai. Pathetic right? Main to woh majnu types sound karta hoon. Iss liye no one has heard this story, aur koi sune gab hi nahi.

Anyways enough of my sobby, ugly si stupid kahani, and on with the master plan. So jab woh dono aayigi dono ki band bajanege!

"Hey! Asad! You ready? Woh aagaye!"

"Ya Benji main to ever ready hoon! Aayi toh hai haske but jayegi rote! HAHA."

As me and Benji rose our hands hi five ke liya, unki entry hui.

Jo pehli aayi woh confident thi. Dono village se hai and soo unki fashion, that had to be from the village too. But no...pehli jo undar aayi usne to dark blue denim, aur olive green blouse pehna tha! Now that was a shocker! I thought ki meri job easy ho jaye gi but it just got harder. But look se yeh Zoya nahi lagti. Yeh zaroor Khushi hogi, five steps agay leyi and then she turned around uske lambe baal swaying with the wind.

"Zoya!" She called out behind her. So she was Khushi!

She spoke very fast, like woh Rajdhani Express jati hai waise, but ye toh Morena Express hai, maybe a little faster.

As I saw another figure walk out of the crowd, I was stunned! Zoya? Zoya! Woh bilkul meri Zoya jaisi hai! Long hair, which would feel like silk under my fingers. Uski badi badi anken, itni badi ki sayad main dub jauoon inn mein. Uski ankoon sai I could tell ki woh bahot scared thi, sayad yahan hona bhi nahan chati thi. And she was the opposite of Khushi, uss ne toh salwar pehna tha! It was a dark navy blue color giving her milky white skin the perfect glow. Ye meri Zoya hai! Meri Zoya! Woh Zoya jo mujhe uski diary maan ti thi, woh jiske saath main kuch bhi sahare kar ta tha! Woh Zoya jisne mera dil toda tha. Woh Zoya, jo mujhse pyaar nahi karti...



Okay so hopefully you guys like this one a bit more because it is a little longer and a little more Masala, and please please tell me how it was...Your comments inspire me to write more

Edited by sucker4arhiluv - 12 years ago
sucker4arhiluv thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 12 years ago
#9

Originally posted by: risingsea101

Uh-oh I smell trouble

lol, nice part
Nicely written
Continue soon and thanks for the PM <3


Lol np I love when people comment and this was an important piece of writing for me because i had written it like 3 years ago but didn't have a chance to show it to anyone or post it anywhere (i changed the names though) but the next part isn't written so the story will process with a lot of twists and jokes, and so hopefully my writing has improved 😃
Edited by sucker4arhiluv - 12 years ago
risingsea101 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 12 years ago
#10
They knew each other from before?😲
Getting more interesting
lol, continue soon
Thanks for the PM <3

Related Topics

Qubool Hai thumbnail

Posted by: jyoti06 · 7 years ago

Qubool Hai C r e a t i o n s G a l l e r y # 21 _______________________________________________________________ Please post all your creations

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".