Karlo romance Notice pg 55- suspended :(

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Posted: 19 years ago
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Ok guys heres my first proper fan fiction i know there are loads already but closed my other one and did make a post on it.

Characters are the same as in kasamh se and will introduce new ones has needed.

Scene: Bani, Rano and Pia have just come from mumbai a few months ago from mumbai after there fathers death to stay with mr walia. So no raashi, rohit as such yet. Bani and Jai have fallen in love however none of them have confessed their feelings as such to each other. Jai however today is gonna propose to bani after persuassion from pushkar and tarun.

PART 1

Jai is in his study and is thinking about bani and how much his life has changed since she came into his life. He still remebers the first time he saw her in the drive standing in the rain and remebers how radiant she looked. She had become such a inportant part of his life and could not imagine his life without her. He however had still not told her how he felt yet. There was a knock on the door of the study and puskar , tarun both walk in see the darkness and Jai drinking. Puskhar looking concerned looks at Jai asks mr walia whats the matter ? are you still going to propose to bani tonight' Jai looks worried about what the day ahead is gonna bring however has made up his mind yes i am still going to ofcourse but i am scared of losing her i cant live without her in my life anymore and dont want her to leave because she does not feel the same . Tarun starts to laugh at the condition of his friend jai i have never seen you like this in all the years you the big business men getting worried , if you dont tell her how you feel you could lose her' . Jai was worried about tonight but had decided to do it , bani worked for him as a way of repaying him for letting him stay and tonight he is using the excuse of needing her to come to a function to propose to her.

Bani meanwhile is in her room with rano and pia, is cleaning up pias clothes which are scattered everywhere. Pia seeing this starts to tease bani di let my clothes be if you like cleaning so much you should go and clean up mr walias stuff' . Bani begins to blush , knowing how pia knew about her feelings for mr walia and wanted her to tell him pia ! i told you i am not gonna tell him i love him hes so much older and richer than us why would he want someone like me when he could have anyone' . Rano who is sitting there doing some college work being her usual abrupt self you should just tell him theres no harm in it . Bani now is being to get irritated look.... then she hears mr walia calling her and runs out to see him. Pia begins to again laughs at bani reaction to mr walias voice. She herself begins to remeber the party from last night and pushkar. .......

Other parts will be longer than this but this part is just setting the story for the rest of the parts also had to rewrite it has it accidentl got deleteed, hope you guys like it!

Part 1-page 1

part 2 - page 12

Part 3- pg 17

part 4 - pg21

Edited by Ektas_Angel - 19 years ago

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Posted: 19 years ago
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That is really a rocking way to start. 😊

Please continue soon with much longer parts .
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Posted: 19 years ago
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superb start............... do continue 👏
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hey hunni...wanted to be da first one to comment laikin msrk jee did it b4 me...i dint read it yet.....will read and comment in a while!!
😉
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: msrk


That is really a rocking way to start. 😊

Please continue soon with much longer parts .

thank you yeh will whenever i get a chance 😊

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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: loka

superb start............... do continue 👏

thank you 😃 yeh might continue

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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: sughra2

hey hunni...wanted to be da first one to comment laikin msrk jee did it b4 me...i dint read it yet.....will read and comment in a while!!
😉

😆 yeh you got beat koi baat nai yeh comment when you read!

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Posted: 19 years ago
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Originally posted by: AMAL722

Nice Start 👏 👏

thanks 😳

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Posted: 19 years ago
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thanks 😳 nice way of describing it

Edited by Misangelic - 19 years ago
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Great start!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Lovin it!!!!!!!!! 👏 👏 👏

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