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Aquiline

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Posted: 12 years ago

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crazy4ArnavSR

@crazy4ArnavSR

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Posted: 12 years ago

#442

RES

***********UNRES**************

OMG!! OMG!! OMG!! finally i can breathe!

yeah...tht's the state i m in right now...heard a distant beak tapping at my window...and ran just as i was straight to the inn...

Phew! I made First! now...i can shout...Yes!! YES!! YES!!

and Dance like Crazy...*ok..ok.. don't give me those glares..especially u Soul & Mav...i know i u already call me Crazy*

so heading to read all the 3 updates i missed in past 4 days...Mr. Exams next time...please don't stop me from visiting Arashia atleast...don't know wat all i missed...ok will go now! 😉

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CH-144

first thing...I M...

...the sizzling chemistry...🤢...the burning candle..oops desires...😆 ... the Scorching tongue...the fluttering breeze... the playing curtains...the necklace...the EVERYTHING...i read...and read agn...and read agn...and god knows how many times i read tht chapter...because even after every read..i wasso dazed tht i ws still acting the same...-

Omg...i m definiely dead by now.

Awesome Lin...i really wonder why were u even so worried about this chapter in the first place? U have written ur own legendry Arhillicious scene here...and god...i swear i m literally dead after reading it. 😉

Loved the way...how u put in the effects their surroundings played..the breeze, curtains, flickering candle, the mirror reflection, the casting mooonlight, cold metal touching skin..and a lot other things all really beautiful.

for the lines-

And when she remained that way, with the candlelight caressing its golden touch on her rich black hair...her eyes and her red lips glimmering in the touch of the moonlight that seeped from the open balcony behind him...

here's a pic...

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CH-145

wow... wow...wow... i had thought Lady La and Master Aman are not going to paired up...OH MY!! I can't tell u how happy i m...I just can't stop dancing now...because Lin...now u hv taken us another step close to a perfect fairy tale...

Aman & La together...thats something most had dreamt of..during IPK days...all had a little hope till the end they may meet...even though. IPK ended...it's such a relief to see them come together just the way we all wanted to see them come together...ahh Lin...thank u so much!! I really wanna give u a big hug for tht! :)

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CH- 146

Ahh...General Shyam! he's back! And offcourse with the storm!

A lot of thoughts kept running through his mind but what dominated them was the awakening within him.

I wonder what sort of thougts? anyone got something? DECODERS HELP!!!

The General snorted amusedly, "Father, indeed!" and then he looked at ground and grumbled in a low voice, "I despise fathers."

Despise fathers...i doubt how it's gonna affect Lady Anjali and her child? I had this hope tht him sorting out with his curse will not atleast leave them in mess...but now tht hope seems to be withering away! 😭

"No one can stop me from having her," said the General, turning and walking towards Master Gupta and coming to stand before him, "Not even the man who claims himself to be her father."

"A falsified truth," said the General, "Throwing words like 'heart' and 'truth' will not distort the fact that she is not of your blood."

A falsified truth... HE may be saying truth..but such brutal choice of words...is really scary. His raging urge to own Khushi...sounds really trumpling. God... Scary Indeed!

And u r really really bad to end the chapter there...huh! 😡 but...it's ok...i m backing from killing u beacuse i just got to read three chapters together...but next time...keep ur savior close to u! 😛😆

Edited by crazy4ArnavSR - 12 years ago

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crazy4ArnavSR

@crazy4ArnavSR

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#443

ahhh...what's the use of reserving first...when there's no one to compete with!! 😭

I waited for ten minutes for someone to come and occupy this place...but then Mr. NoOne was constantly eyeing the seat next to me...

so...i decided to stretch my legs on the other seat too...LOL! i can't have him stay at 2nd place atleast...! 😉 neither...3rd...4th..or any where here...So common comrades and readrs...open ur windows...let Linny's poor pigeons in...and come join me to shoo Mr. NoOne away...maybe ward him off to meet Shiji in the cottage...😆...afterall...tht's the place where they date! 😉

****4 mins Later****

finally shazad joined me! 😉 thanx i can't have Mr. NoOne in the Inn atleast! 😉

Edited by crazy4ArnavSR - 12 years ago

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Annie12

@Annie12

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Posted: 12 years ago

#444

oh no!!!!! im all tensed now!

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anjs

@anjs

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

#445

yes Lin, definitely glad that you are updating daily...very scared for Master Gupta ...General is the true beast, isn't he ?

the way when he said i shall have her, i had goose bumps all over me... Master Gupta is so brave... i loved the way you have build his character... so endearing yet so logical...emotional yet practical in the right ways...

General hates Fathers, wow, there must be a back story to it, very eager to read that...

the story is blooming slowly, each petal opening one by one... its really enchanting and m bounded by its spell :)

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-memorable-

@-memorable-

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Posted: 12 years ago

#446

ma just fida over you for using italic words in this chapter

P.S. i quit like new editied ending of last chapter..i was thinking how can Lavanya got ready to wait for Aman...just like that after all she is in too much pain right now. 👍🏼

Edited by -memorable- - 12 years ago

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riti4u

@riti4u

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

#447

Hey lin,I just finished reading your last two updates.Firstly what an arhilicious update Ch 144. I cud literally imagine hot scene in front of me😳. Oh so khushi realised that Arnav had kissed her that day too when she got those marks..its interesting..she was so into the moment with arnav.. it will be interesting to see how story goes further from here...Does she realises how arnav is cursed...and how he feels about her...what made him kiss her ..and most importantly what made him keep that necklace..What also I look forward to is Arnav's reaction on loosing his control with khushi.. will he distance himself for obvious reasons or..will he discover why he gets attracted to khushi...

Edited: I missed one update - Lady La's and Aman's update- You edited the end..thus I dont know what was original but I feel this was quick..but lovely too. Aman sensed so soon that he had feelings for La and those feelings were named as Love...though I cn see from previous chapters..it was always Aman who had seen and followed La's breaking heart..thus could relate with this..seems like a lot is happenin on one night-very much like IPK😆

Second update sounds dangerous..yeah..Shashi is in tough spot..with General revealing his true self.General despise fathers,strange ..it will be hard for shashi to survive aftermath here..what a spot to put an end to the update.. Waiting for next part eagerly!

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Mouktika

@Mouktika

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Posted: 12 years ago

#448

Very nice and seems to be clear but a suspense filled one.very well written

U r creating more and more questions to raise in my mind with every update rather than removing them

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hoopoe

@hoopoe

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Posted: 12 years ago

#449

Rabba ve dear Aquiline... 🤗

Hmmm... Back to your "original track" with "your favourite character" of the tale... Its interesting to see how the charming protagonist of the tale distract you from the original plot of the tale and the much despised antagonist of the tale inspires you and guides you back to the right path of the original plot... 😉

But on a serious note, you are one gifted writer who can weave magic through words in various genre essential for any tale. But according to me your forte is "Mystery and Suspense"... atleast its true for this tale... You write your BEST when you give us a mysterious chapter full of suspense... Looking forward to get a glimpse of the unmasked face of a transformed General...