JEET- a murat-karnika ff - Page 2

Originally posted by: shafy_MN

Awesome Start...

Originally posted by: sweetsanyo

her jagah sanata..evry wer tears, sadnes...aasun...

n tanhayii...

isme, aap muje ye bata ki kaun charcter kaun h...

n, background of the story is powerful...

i feel, u r looking for something diff. n biggg...

really, waiting to past to unfold...

happy lov tha is sab ki jindagi mei..

but no more...

they r repenting their loves...

pheww!!...

the man inn jail k saath i hav biggest sympathy...

gal in zubaida house...she is badly shattered too...

church wali girl ki past is sorrow wala...

n fisrt man ws badly shattered...

nuture ki her cheez hi cud see breaking like him...

update soon... n give more clues too

Originally posted by: tejjo

thnks 4 starting new ff
love u

res

wow what a start rudzzz

all four of them are in pain on different places...i think they had relation with each other h na???

murat to pata h but ye karnika??kya h

or in charo me se murat kaun kaun h

start is just wow

but eager to read more

pls update soon

n love u again for starting another ff on murat😉

Originally posted by: PariK

Yipeee one more RM ff [:D/]

Awesome start Ridzzi, full of suspense......thank u
We both r having same taste of serious stories....well i know...after reading ur story too...😉
This one is gonna superhit story... I M getting such inkling......just hope u guys will enjoy it...😊

Waiting for cs nd next update.
I know u will update cs very soon but I m aadat se majbur person,so my brain has guessed characters as below:......me too...adat se majboor isliye sabke story k cs pehle hi guess karne lagti hu...😆
1. Person near river bank - RT hoga (shayad)
2. Girl near church - MC hogi (shaya😕 )
3. Guy in jail - Karan (aisa socha qki in KMH me they showed him in d jail), 😎 so smart na......very much...😆
4. Nd dat Anarkali dress girl - Kritika (ye pure tukka hai...)

Mujhe pata hai ki mera popat hone wala hai,fir bhi... I'm aadat se majbur......na na na popat ni hoga...couz u hv guessed it right...


Arrey ha,mujhe pehchana ki nai??......kaise pehchnugi tumne bataya????????????...😕
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I'm Parineeta (aka samu_Khamkar). That account is shared by me nd my sister.
I'm RTMC fan nd she's Virman fan.
Dp, signature ko leke v do jhagda, ..thank god my di is not intrested in stories...
...so thought of opening new account 🤓 ......oh tabhi itne dino baad cmt aya...

Jab tak ye account acche se nahi chalta, I'll operate from dat account also...

Originally posted by: Arpimugfan

Dekho Mai Agai Jeet k pass :-D Apne Ridzzi Di k pass n n n n 53rd RTMC FF k pass 👏

Background was Powerful, Intro was Owesome, inshort The Starting was Outstanding n I am sure Full Story Gonna Be Mindblasting ⭐️

I think Jail mein Karan hoga, woh 1st guy Rajat hoga, Anarkali dress mein Mugdha Di hongi n Church mein Kritika hogi, kuch jayda hi tho nehi sooch liya na??

Do Cont Soon, LOVE YOU DI :-*

CHARACTER SKETCH + PART 1

BLOSSOM:- LOVE AND HATE

MUMBAI (ALMOST TWO YEARS AGO):-

Main jahaan rahoon,Main kahin bhi hoon
Teri yaad saaath hai

Kisi se kahoon,Ke nahi kahoon
Yeh jo dil ki baat hai
Kehne ko saath apane ek duniya chalti hai
Per chhupke is dil mein tanhaayi palti hai
Bas yaad saath hai
Teri yaad saaath hai
Main jahaan rahoon,Main kahin bhi hoon
Teri yaad saaath hai

Kahin to dil mein yaadon ki,Ek suli gad jaati hai
Kahin har ek tasveer bhahut hi dhondhali pad jati hai
Koi nayi duniya ke naye rango mein khush rehta hai
Koi sab kuch paake bhi yeh mann hi mann kehta hai
Kehne ko saath apane ek duniya chalti hai
Per chhupke is dil mein tanhaayi palti hai
Bas yaad saath hai
Teri yaad saaath hai

Kahin to beete kal ki jadein,Dil mein hi utar jaati hai
Kahin jo dhage tute to malaayen bhikar jaati
Koi dil mein jagah nayi, baaton ke liye rakhta hai
Koi apni palko par yaadon ke diye rakhta hai
Kehne ko saath apane ek duniya chalti hai
Per chhupke is dil mein tanhaayi palti hai
Bas yaad saath hai
Teri yaad saaath hai

EXCEL COLLAGE (ALPHA PLUS COMPETITION):-

East or west, Excel is the best

East or west, Excel is the best

The cheer girls were continuously cheering for the players playing in basket ball court. The whole hall was filled with the students of excel n x-viers collage for the final basket ball match between these two collage and everyone's eyes were stuck to the two best players of these two collages who were continuously trying to get the ball for each other.

He was continuously dribbling the ball escaping from the hands of the other player who was from x-vaiers and within a moment, no one got a chance to understand that how and when he jumped and hurl the ball and directly did a basket and hung himself with the basket clearing out his all sweat turning his head to and fro and then after a while he jumped down.

''AND IT'S A BASKET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...and with this last basket excel again became the champion for the 3^rd time in the history of basket ball match competition'':-the commentator shouted first with the excitement and then he announced excel being the winner.

As he announced the half hall who probably belong to the x-veirs collage became sad and hopeless as they have lost the match and on the other hand the students of excel collage jumped with happiness and together shouted on winning the match for the third time and becoming the champion in basket ball match.

''WE LOVE YOU ESHU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'':-some of the crazy girls shouted from far away in between the crowd and then he turned...

[ESHAAN KHANNA:- sports captain of excel collage, one of the handsome hunk of his collage, only his one sight is enough to make girl's drool over him. His father was a librarian in the city library of Mumbai, well he was not capable of making his son study in a high profile collages like excel but somehow he manages so that his son can be able a big person and will able to fulfill his all dreams. But with his hard work, talent and concentration he was able to make his image in collage and got the position of sports captain of the collage. In this whole collage there is only one person with whom he had hatred from the core of his heart and that one person is the collages cultural secratory. ]

He turned and smiled at them while shaking his head in amusement, well it never affected him, he was use to it. He moved out towards the changing room leaving behind a huge crowd shouting and celebrating their victory.

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He was running and continuously looking at his watch, he had promised his best buddy to meet him at cafeteria after the match sharp at 10 but now he was late, he is really going to kill him, chop him and then eat him raw. He was just going through the corridors to reach cafeteria when suddenly his eyes came to a sight. There was a little crowd gathered around the parking lot. A boy was standing on the bonet of a jeapse holding a mike and was shouting something.

''we are not going to tolerate this, how can our collage authorities do this with us. We will protest against it. Mrs. Dsouza is our teacher, she had given her 25 years to this collage and now our collage authorities are asking her to resign just because she had denied to co-operate with them to pass the son of a famous business man. Guys you yourself think she is the same women who had inspired us at every stage and now when she needs us we will leave her in problem?????????????":- he completed while the others just agreed and supported him:-''you are right we are not going to tolerate it, we all are with you'':- one of the students shouted in between the crowd and then rest of the students hooted with him.

''WE WANT JUSTICE, WE WANT JUSTICE'':- all together.

Eshaan shook his head in negative while passing his hundred dollar smile, he was scared that he is going to be dead and here his friend was not even bothered about him. He knew it very well that how he is, thinking that he moved towards him and stood just infornt of the jeapse folding his hands towards his chest and then he annoyingly slapped him on his legs making him to loose his balance a little bit but soon he manages and again stood at same place and looked down...

[TEJ MALHOTRA:- student union leader, well he is known as the savior or we can call mr. jugadu, if you had any problem regarding anything related to collage only, students directly went to him for their problems or just ask eshaan because if eshaan will ask him, he will never denie at any cost. Even sometime's the collage authorities also seek for his help. He lives in a chawl with his mother who was employee of a well known company, she was not capable to pay the fees of the collage but it was her desire that her son will study in excel collage and for that she has to compromise with so many things but she never complained, she was a fun loving and jovial mother.

And tej too never let down her mother's efforts and wishes, apart from being student union leader he was also the second topper of the collage after eshaan. There is also a secret of him which is only known by eshaan that he secretly admires someone in his batch, well a friend of eshaan's biggest enemy.]

''oye what are you doing??????????, what if I had fallen down???????????'':- he shouted while looking down at his furious friend.

''idiot you have asked me to wait in cafeteria and I was running like an scapegoat to reach their thinking that you will be very angry on me and you are here, doing your all time favourite work'':- he snapped while giving six-seven continuous slap's on his legs and making him loose his balance every time.

And finally understanding that if he will continue to stand their then eshaan will make sure that he will fall down, he himself jumped down from the jeapse and justified himself:-''oh no yaar, actually I was just going to cafeteria when mrs. Dsouza came to me and asked for my help, our collage authorities are forcing her to resign because she failed a student who is a son of a business tycoon, that's why I couldn't reach their, sorry'':- he shrugged while completing his justification.

''oh, it's ok but now what will you do??????????'':- eshaan asked while looking towards the retreating figure of their old favourite teacher.

''well right now I don't know, I suppose I personally have to meet to the authorities, if they will got convienced then it's ok otherwise I have to take the same step-THE PROTEST'':-he told while bending his middle and side figure of his hands in air.

''ok we will see it later on, let's go I have to discuss something about the exams'':-eshaan said and then they both moved from there towards cafeteria.

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They were just on their way to cafeteria when they heard the loud noise of the huge crowd, well most of the students have bunked their classes to attend the concert of their rockstar and most of them are boys and was shouting.

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They both halted their steps and curiously looked in the direction of noise and found a huge bunch of student shouting and almost dancing, jumping, all in all enjoying the voice of the person on stage.

Chocolate boxes, men on horses
Valentine's day, party is on Saturday
Teenage popstars, filmy filmstars
Gulaab ke phool, people think these are cool

Ye sab to hai 4 on 10
Achhe lagte hai now and then
Mere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10
Kaise main kisi ko de doon 10 on 10
Mere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10
Kaise main kisi ko de doon 10 on 10
Mere jaisa koi kahan ten on ten

A girl wearing the hot pants with sleeve less top and curly hairs and shoes was standing in the middle of the stage and holding a mike surrounded by the musician like a drummer, a guitarist and many others too. She was singing on her full note while jumping, dancing and sometimes holding down the mike to the crowd to co-operate with her.

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Meri zid bhi, aadatein bhi, meri baatein attitude bhi, 10 on 10, 10 on 10
Main jo bhi hoon, jaisi bhi hoon, jo chahti hoon woh karti hoon, 10 on 10, 10 on 10
Chalo tum bhi ho 6 on 10
Acche lagte ho now and then
Mere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10
Kaise main kisi ko de doon 10 on 10
Mere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10
Kaise main kisi ko de doon 10 on 10
Mere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10

Her hairs was fully covering her face and sometimes the crowd was blocking their view. But eshaan knew that who must be the person where as tej was just trying to see her and in curiosity he asked eshaan :-''wow who is there????????'':- to which eshaan annoyingly replied with furious eyes:-''who must be????????, that spoiled brat and who'':- he informed and kept on glare at her where as tej just silently grinned at his furious friend and that was the moment she turned, flunging her hair in air...

[JANNAT SINGHANIA:- cultural secratory, the collage diva, hot, bold, sexy and straight forward. Princess of one of the business tycoon of india. Without any arrogance but with a little bit of attitude towards different type of people. She is a believer of TIT FOR TAT. She is too polite to the sweet ones and most deadliest girl for the arrogant one. She has a soft, attractive and mesmerizing voice, that's why every year in alpha plus she presents excel and was making it win from last three years same as eshaan. She is hard working and very responsible and with her abilities she got the position of cultural secratory of their collage. In their whole collage she only had hatred towards one person, the sports captain ESHAAN KHANNA from the core of her heart.]

She jumped down and sung with the crowd co-operating her with full enthusiasm and excitement and she too was enjoying in middle of them.

Galti se jo muskra doon ik hassi mein sab bhula doon
10 on 10, 10 on 10
Kadamon pe bhi gir jaayega phir bhi mujhe na paayega
10 on 10, 10 on 10
Even if I break your heart, even if you fall apart

''I don't know how she suppose to gather that much of crowd, I have tried a lot but never got success, how she does it man?????????'':-tej asked in bewilderment while fully lost in the concert.

Eshaan turned his furry glares from jannat to tej and getting close to his friends ear he shouted:-''I DON'T KNOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'':-he shouted and then moved out from their and tej too followed him in hush.

She again climbed on stage and then while packing her performance she ended and then ran out from there.

Tere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10
Kaise main kisi ko de doon 10 on 10
Tere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10
Kaise main kisi ko de doon 10 on 10
Tere jaisa koi kahan 10 on 10

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She opened the door of the auditorium while heavily panting and moved inside where the dancers were performing a little far on the stage, she slowly moved and took a seat in the fourth row and then waited for the entry of her one of the best buddies in collage.

A group of dancers were performing the Indian kathak on stage, two were at back on left and two were on right and a girl was dancing in middle. She was wearing an anarkali white suit with brown embroidery and her dupatta was tightly tied on her waist clearly visualizing her tiny waist. Reaching at the end of their performance she started to take rounds in circle and then she stood in middle holding her hands up in air and ended her performance.

[EDHA SHEIKH:- collages event organizer , sweet, shy and a bit reserved type person but only for others and for the people around her, she was one of the most talkative one. Belongs to a middle class family of police and lawyers. Though she is the event organizer, she has to perform on the stage as she is the only best dancers of collage, well jannat to was a dancer but western, when it comes to the classical one no one can stand infront of edha. She had a secret liking for tej which is only known by jannat and no one else but because of eshaan's and jannat's hatred towards each other she never got a chance to get close to him but every time she got an advantage in their fights.]

As the their performance completed everyone stood up and gave a big round of applause to the performer and jannat too praises by clapping in full excitement and then slowly the curtains came down hiding all of them from the audience. As the curtains got down jannat took her bag and moved outside the auditorium to wait for edha.

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After sometime edha came out and saw jannat standing in the corridors resting her hands on the walls of corridors. She smiled and came running to her:-''so hwz it????'':-she asked coming closer to jannat.

As she heard edha, she turned with the confusing wrinkles on her fore head:-''what???????''.

''my performance and what, I know you were there I had saw you while performing, so how was my performance'':-edha again asked excitedly to know her point of view.

''nice'':-jannat replied casually to which edha gave her a ''WHAT WAS THAT MEAN??????????'' type look before asking her again:-''just nice'':-she again asked while making an unexpected face.

Jannat saw her down face and released a deep sigh while rolling her eyes:-''ok fine your performance was mindblowing, amazing, outstanding and bla bla bla, just add some nicer points by yourself in your praise''.

As she completed edha gave her a huge smile and tightly gave her a side hug:-''I know you liked it, thank you so much for being there on my request'':- as she finished jannat grinned and said:-''dramebaaz, let's go to cafeteria I havn't eaten anything since morning because of this concert, I am feeling too much hungry'':- she confessed while getting out of her hug.

''ok boss'':-edha obeyed while saluting her and then both the friend headed towards the cafeteria.

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Jannat and edha both were on their way of cafeteria while discussing something very important, well not actually the way they were discussing it only seems like it was very important when suddenly something fall down from edha's hand and she got down to pick it up and jannat didn't paid attention and moved a little ahead and when she realized she turned and gave a unbelievable look, well she was use to of edha's these kind of incidence, it was destiny that every time when they were engrossed in their chats something got fall down from her hand whether her bracelet, her papers, her pen or anything. Well these are less, edha had got herself into a situation's which were not expected by anyone and because of that many around her denote her as a TROUBLEMAKER. Jannat shook her head and when edha got up and moved to join her jannat turned to move ahead but got bumped with someone and was about to fall when someone holded her from her waist.

Getting a little scared she closed her eyes but as she felt that her body was hanging in air and only her legs are on the earth, she hadn't fallen with this thought she snapped opened her eyes but as she saw the face, her eyes got wide open with anger and shock.

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On the other hand eshaan and tej were just returning back from the cafeteria engrossed on the topic of mrs. Dsouza's as now what step they will take against authorities if they didn't got convienced, and while discussing eshaan was also going through some papers related to their sports team members and he didn't paid attention and got bumped with someone and his file got hurl in air but was caught by tej and in next moment tej saw his friend was holding his biggest enemy from her waist with wide horror open eyes.

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''YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'':- they both exclaimed together.

''how dare you to touch me like that, leave me, leave me, leave me'''''''I said leave me, CHODO MUJHE'':- she shouted on him and in next moment she found her bump burning with pain.

''are you mad how can you leave me like that??????????'':-she asked in shock as he left her instantly she shouted on him while keeping his fingers in his ears to escape from her dangerous voice.

''oh I am mad or you?????????, at one time you say leave me and in next moment you say how can I leave you like that, did you have brains or the top floor is fully empty'':-he said while his full mockery tone.

She stood up and pointed her finger towards him:-''you are a big moron, how...how can you leave a girl LIKE THIS???????????'':-she again asked greeting her teeth in anger.

''you don't know????????, well it's related to science, I will make you understand, see we both got dashed to each other and then you were about to fall but UNFORTUNATELY I caught you, then I saw your UGLY face and then I realized that I had helped a witch so I just removed my hands from your waist and then you were pulled by the force of gravity and your bump directly dashed with the floor'':- he finished and then giving a thought he asked her with a fake shocking expression:-''didn't you paid attention in your science class???????????''.

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Mean while In between their fight two people were just lost in each other, they were not even bothered that the most dangerous enemies of their collage are now confronting each other. Tej and edha never got a chance to talk to each other and very less cases are their when they actually got a chance to get lost in each other and that very less chance they got mostly during the fight of jannat and eshaan. They were just sharing the number of glare with each other when their eye lock session got broke when their friends marched forward.

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''well how much I had paid attention in my science class, I will tell you right now'':-she marched towards him and he too, she was about to make him fall down when suddenly edha and tej jumped in between and dragged them away with themselves.

As they left the crowd which was gathered to see the free show of wherestling match also dismissed themselves towards their respective class, well it was a very common incidence for them to see jannat and eshaan fighting or arguing with each other.

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''what were you doing man??????????, she is a girl'':- tej said when finally he was able to drag eshaan out of that place.

''girl??????????, who says that she is a girl, witch, I don't know what is her problem man, bloody spoiled brat'':- eshaan took out his frustration on her.

''hey dude mind your language, you are talking about a girl'':-tej said sternly while eshaan just regretted:-''sorry yaar, I was just out of mind''.

''it's ok, leave her let's go to the class otherwise professor shukla will throw us out of the class, we have very less presenties in his lectures'':- tej said and eshaan just got agreed and then they both moved to attend their lectures.

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''jenny behave yourself, what were you doing??????????'':-edha shouted making her stand properly instead of just trying to free herself from her grip.

''you know what he is a...a...a'':- she tried to find the words:-''a moron'':-edha completed knowing very well that she is not going to leave him until she will abuse him till her heart's content. Well edha had made a list of abuses which jannat use to give to eshaan and whenever jannat came to the note to abuse eshaan, edha just remind those abuses and completed jannat's word.

''ya moron and a...'':-she agreed and again tried and again edha completed:-''a rascal''.

''ya rascal and a...'':-''a donkey'':-edha again completed and jannat just looked at her for a moment and then while forcefully nodding her head in yes she spoke up:-''yes donkey and a...a dot dot dot'':-jannat finished before edha will suggest her more names:-''you will fill these dot's by your own'':-she said keeping her both hands on her waist and furiously looking to the ground and approving her words.

Edha giggled on her thoughts and dragged her along with her:-''let's go to the class otherwise professor shukla will throw us out, we have very less attendance in his lectures because of this alpha plus'':- while walking jannat gave a thoughtful look to edha and asked:- ''didn't we insulted donkey's while saying him donkey????????????'':-edha plainly looked at her and then both the friends brust into piles of laughter while jannat just ran towards their class room escaping from edha's playful slap's.

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