Saiyaara - The Eternal Love MG Part 6-Pg 32/16 march

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Hi guys... me back with another ff 😆
plz dont throw any chappals sorry but i cant help when it comes to Maaneet i just cant stop thinking of new ideas so here im again to present...
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So this is my birthday treat for all. I hope u all like it n support me as well.

Scroll down for character sketch n index
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Character Sketch

Maan Singh Khurana :
Prince of Jodhpur. Arrogant but caring for his family. MD of the royal business - Khurana Constructions.
Geet Rathod :
Daughter of Radha. Stays in Kashmir with her mother and brother. Sweet and loving.

Radha Rathod :

Mother of Geet. Very sweet n loving but is tensed that anyone may find her, Abhay and Geet.
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Abhay Rathod :

Son of Radha and Geet's brother. Very protective about Geet. Working in Delhi.
Iqbal Khan

Priya Chouhan/Rathod :

Geet's best friend and Abhay's would be wife. Her father Mr. Mohan Chouhan shifted to Gulmarg with his wife Megha and daughter after being thrown out of the family because of his relatives cunningness.


Raja Ratan Rathod :

King of Udaipur. Very evil minded n cruel. Wants a Waaris n go to any extent to get his Waaris. Afraid of Vikram Singh Khurana.

Zeb Khan

Vibha Rathod :

Maa sa of Raja Ratan Rathod. More evil, cruel n wicked minded than Ratan Rathod. Wants a Waaris for her son.


Vikram Singh Khurana :

King of Jodhpur. Very loving n caring King. He is the same in front of people as well back of people. Cool as ice but hot as fire as well. If he gets angry which is very rare no one can be saved from his brunt. Loves his family a lot. Very brave n started Khurana Constructions.

anup soni

Aashta Singh Khurana :

Queen of Jodhpur. Very sweet, loving n caring. Loves her family a lot but due to some problems her family has been shattered.


Savitri Singh Khurana :

Maa sa of Vikram Singh Khurana n Dadi sa of Aryan n Maan. Very sophisticated woman. Royality oozes out of her. Very sweet n loving.


Aryan Singh Khurana :

Prince of Jodhpur. Very loving n caring son n brother but his one mistake took him very far from his family. Lives with his wife Sunaina in Delhi.

Mohit Raina

Sunaina Singh Khurana :

Aryan's collegue n love n now wife. Vert sweet girl but is a orphan. Feels very bad that she is the reason for Aryan getting separated from his family. Pampers Maan a lot as he is like a brother to her.

Mouni Roy

Edited by hinal_maaneet - 11 years ago
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Edited by hinal_maaneet - 11 years ago
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Part 1 :

Udaipur,

A small boy of about 9 years is running around the palace in glee.

"Baba sa... Dadi sa... jaldi aaiye... dekhiye aaj meri behen anne wali hai" (Father...Grand ma... come soon... see today my sister is going to come)

Dadi sa faked a smile n said, "Nahi kuwar... Humare ghar ladki nahi ladka hoga." (No Prince... We will have a boy not a girl)

Kuwar "Nahi Dadi sa Maa sa ne mujhse vada kiya tha ke woh mujhe ek behen hi degi" (No grand ma mother promised me that she would give me a sister)

Baba sa who had just finished his meeting n came n saw Kuwar n Dadi sa fighting shouted on Kuwar, "KUWARRR... Aapko kitni bar kaha hai humne ke Maa sa se behas nahi karni chaiye." (PRINCEEE... how many times have I told u not to argue with Mother)

Kuwar who got afraid of the shout told meekly, "Par baba sa..." (But father...) but couldnt continue as Baba sa continued, "Aur ab aapko iski sazaa milegi." (And now u will get punishment for this)

Kuwar started shivering hearing that n said, "Hume maaf kar dijye Baba sa. Aage se phir kabhi aisi galati nahi hogi" (Please forgive me Father. I wont repeat this mistake again)

Baba sa, "Nahi Kuwar aaj kal aap bohut galti karne lage hai isiliye aaj toh aapko sazaa zaroor miegi" (No Prince now-a-days u are making too many mistakes so today u will have to be punished) n started pulling him n was about to lock him in the room when he heard a scream, "Aaahhh Maa saaa..." (Aaahhh Mother...)

Baba sa left Kuwar there n ran towards his room. As he reached he saw Maa sa pacing outside.

Baba sa, "Kya huva Maa Sa? Rani sa kyu chilayi?" (What happened Mother? Why did Queen shout?)

Maa sa smiled n said, "Raja sahib chinta ki koi baat nahi hai todhi hi der main aapko khush khabri milegi ke aapko beta huva hai." (Nothing to worry King. In sometime u will get good news that a boy is born)

Baba sa smiled n waited there. Kuwar who heard Dadi sa ran to the small temple in the palace n prayed.


Kuwar, "Krishna Bhagwan mujhe ek behen hi dena mujhe bhai nahi chaiye bhagwan plz" (Lord Krishna plz I want a sister not a brother)

As he was praying he heard Maa sa's angry shouts, "Rani sa ne phir se Ladki ko janam diya hai." (Queen has again given birth to a girl)

Kuwar was filled with joy n said, "Shukriya bhagwan." (Thank u Lord) n ran to Rani sa's room n saw his mother n sister sleeping.


Kuwar shaked his Maa sa n whispered so as to not disturb his sister, "Maa sa dekhiye humari choti behen kitni choti hai." (Mother see my sister is so small)

Maa sa who heard it smiled n took her baby in her hands n kissed her whole face n said, "Dhanyavad Krishna Bhagwan iss baar humari khook suni na karne ke liye." (Thank u Lord Krishna for not giving me a still baby)

Kuwar smiled seeing his sister who had just opened her eyes n was looking everywhere with her hazel eyes. Baba sa entered the room along with Dadi sa with red face full of anger.

Dadi sa, "Kuwar aap jaiye aapki talwar baazi ka samay hogaya hai." (Prince u go. Its time for ur sword fighting lessons)

Kuwar, "Dadi sa hum todhi der baad jayenge. Hume abhi humari behen ke saath khelna hai." (Grand ma I will go after sometime. I want to play with my sister right now)

Baba sa, "KUWARRR... Apne suna nahi Maa sa ne kya kaha?" (PRINCEEE... u didnt hear what did Mother tell?)

Maa sa shivered hearing Raja sahib's angry voice n said, "Kuwar aap jaiye." (Prince u go) n started calming the baby who had started crying hearing the loud noise. As Kuwar went out Dadi sa locked the door n went to Maa sa n took the baby n kept her on the bed n turned to Maa sa n caressing her hairs said, "Rani sa iss baar toh apne hume zinda bachi janam di hai." (Queen this time u havent given us a still born baby) n then pulled her hairs harshly n said, "Lekin ek ladki ko janam di hai." (But u have given birth to a girl)

Maa sa started crying feeling pain as Dadi sa continued pulling her hair harshly.

Maa sa, "Maa sa hume chod dijye." (Mother please leave me)

Dadi sa, "Chod de aapko Rani sa chod de??? Haan hum aapko chod hi denge lekin usse phele aapki bachi aur Kuwar ko Krishna bhagwan ke pass poocha de uske baad aap bhi chali jayega unke pass." (Leave u Queen shall I leave u??? Yes I will leave u but before that let ur baby and Prince reach Lord Krishna n then u also go to them)

Maa sa cryingly, "Nahi Maa sa aisa mat kijye. Raja sahib aap Maa sa ko kehiye na... Yeh bachi toh aapka hi khoon hai toh aap isse kaise mar sakte hai Raja sahib..." (No Mother dont do this. Ur Majesty plz u tell Mother... The baby is ur own blood then how can u kill her...)

Raja Sahib, "Haan hai toh humara khoon hi lekin hum aisa kyu nahi kar sakte balke humne toh phele bhi yeh kiya hai. Pichli 3 baar apne hume ek ladki hi di hai aur humne unhe Krishna bhagwan tak poocha diya. Hume WAARIS chaiye bhoj nahi samjhi aap Rani sa lekin ab aapko samjhane ka koi faida nahi hai Rani sa ab aapko bhi aapki bacho ke saath bhagwan ke pass jana hoga." (Yes she is my own blood but why cant I do like this infact I have done like this before as well. Before 3 times u had given birth to girls only n I had them sent to Lord Krishna. I want a successor n not a burden so u understand that but no there is no use in making u understand so now u will have to go to Lord along with ur kids Queen)

Maa sa, "Yeh aap kya keh rahe hai Raja sahib? Aap aise kaise keh sakte hai?" (What are u telling ur majesty? How can u do this?)

Dadi sa, "Sahi keh rahe hai Raja sahib ab aapka koi naamo-nishan nahi hoga iss rajya main."(The king is telling right n now soon ur identity will never be there on this kingdom) n ordered some maids to keep an eye on Rani sa.

Rani sa held her baby close to her bossom n cried, "Kyu bhagwan aap humse humari bachi cheena chahte hai? Nahi iss bar hum apni bachi ko kuch nahi hone denge aur na hi Kuwar ko." (Why Lord do u want to snatch away my kid from me? No this time I wont let anything happen to my baby nor Prince) n wiped her tears n went to the washroom n put some clothes in a small bag which she hid under her dress pallu as she came out. She then asked her personal maid to get some food as she was hungry. As the maid went out she filled a small bottle with water n some clothes to cover the baby. As the maid came she sent her to call Kuwar n packed some food n put it in the bag.

As Kuwar came she told the maid to go out n stay there as she wanted to breast feed the baby. As soon as the maid went out Maa sa took out the bag n then told Kuwar, "Kuwar hume yaha se abhi bhaag jana hoga. Aapki aur aapki behen ki jaan khatre main hai." (Prince we will have to run from here right now. Ur n ur sister's life is in danger)

As Kuwar was about to ask Maa sa closed his mouth n said, "Abhi humare pass waqt nahi hai Kuwar. Jaldi chaliye." (Right now we dont have time Prince. Come fast)

Maa sa then opened the back door n checked if anyone was there n as she saw no one they ran n hid behind a pillar as they saw few guards entering the palace. They soon reached the main gate where few guards were there n Maa sa then looked around to see if she could escape n saw a low wall n pulled Kuwar towards the wall. She first told Kuwar to jump who jumped expertly as he had been given training n then Maa sa held her baby n prayed to god to save both of them n jumped. As she fell she hurt her hands n elbow but thankfully nothing major happened. They then ran to the main road where they knew they would get some help n soon they reached the main road n got help from a truck driver.

Precap -

Jodhpur

Hope u all like Part 1. This is a complete fiction nothing related to any kingdoms of India n it is set in the 20th century so everyone knows english as well.

N I hope the names dont confuse u n if any confusion or any other mistake plz do pm me. I'll try n correct it. Plz ignore grammar n spelling mistakes.

Love,
Hinal
Edited by hinal_maaneet - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice cs...

eagerly waiting fr d nxt prt...

continue soon plz...

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wow lovely start dear.. very interesting.. so tat baby is our cute geet.. then next my maan ki entry...i loved it
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Congrats Hinal!!!!!!!!!!! for your new FF!!!!

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nice update
so geet dadi sa nd baba sa want to kill all three
how can they be so cruel
but i didn't understand
that if they want waaris then kunwar is there then why they want another boy as a child
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Congrast on New story...Loved the CS n concept

Awesome Start...Loved it Very Much👏

HAte that Raja sahib n dadi sa😡😡...poor Rani sa

felt bad for her😭

Kuwar is abhay n new born Gal is Our Geet?

waiting for Maans family intro

continue soon

Thank u for pm 😊


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NICE START CONTINUE NEXT UPDATE SOON

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