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Posted: 12 years ago
Hi Napster...Have been waiting for ages for the next chapters in Perfection. Can't begin to describe how much I'm missing the intense drama, compelling character portrayals, your amazing scene descriptions with dry wit & irony sprinkled throughout..😊

Please do update soon- it's been more than 5 weeks since the last update and I've been re reading all the previous chapters several times!

Cheers..
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Posted: 12 years ago
whooosh...m not sure what kind of breath i jus let go..😲

shaking,shivering,raging,exasperated,staggered,anguished,relieved,weighted...arghhh..ijus dont damn know wht was tht breath...🤪

m totally outta breath aftr this..tryin to suck life into my lungs...goodness..this has conqured almost my being girl...this is so insanely, catralysticaly, overwhlemingly ironic TRUTH of life in real sense...😊👏

i am dumbstruck with this masterpiece of urs...no words indeed...those next u may find below are foreign to me..dono whts tht...🤗

Arnav...

a real dark character,an wounded lion,an betrayed son of a father,an left alone son of mother,a weighted brother of a sole sister d only soul to proctect n hold on to for life,an aimless rider riding along d path of life unfocused,uncontrollabel ,unwilling to go on wt a life thts jus held on being a corpse..yet finally stalked to breathe that made him breathe for life KHUSHI...d only solace..!!


Khushi...

A pheonix...a real fighter..a small petite lighter than feather being, held in wt d power of a goddess to accomodate every being undr her wings to render peace...wherin underneth lies a shatterd soul hammred wt d events of past,crushed to not exist anymore...yet wt a rock hard cover wt d softest,pillowy feel over it..the owner of her own small world of peace she holds onto into a small corner of heart wt a tiny well blooming bud down her memory lane..d salvation of her ARNAV..!!!

Aakash...

A calm huge tree wt a huge trunk underneeth his soul wt a shade of peace...yet only seeming a fragile leaf serene n bestowing life...d man wt only communicative organ..eyes...calmer than a stream..yet stormy wave washing one out..bringing to life to peace...!!

Payal...

an enigma...idealistically serene,lovely,composed,poised...n wht not yet the tigeress...the soul wt a dignity n respect for self n determination to preserve of those whom she holds dear in life..fight for thy claim rightful things for those..by hook or crook...!!!!

NK...

A hopeless show of self...an indiffernt projection for everything around yet no stone unturned to revel into lives of loved n dear ones...d courageous insight of a happy go lucky cartoon..yeh a cartoon a clown a entertainer...with d heaps of grifs burried beneath those layers of a feathery heart bruised,crushed,strangled..yet tended instantly ignoring d pain n suffering for every moment in need to stand for d righteous of his dear ones... asoulful being..!!!

Anjali...

A mirror image of her own brother..a second half of a equally bruised n strangeled soul...but the tender d fixer d peace maker...jus picking n collecting n trying putting all the scattered destroyed cruely thrown away parts of self...them... by her othr half soul..her chote...all d way long..not letting any piece let go..not letting any piece being the last to be thrown away..jus collected n bundled those to her best possible way..jus for d day..when d unending rage of the other falls to remorse n they wud sit n put back in place those puzzeled pieces...!!



Flawless inhibition of every character..brought to life here...v never knew even existed or even possessed...!
n moreover...i relived every bit of it...indulged into d character itself..now i dont know how to vent out d weighted lump which m even scared to let reach my throat..
I never knew anything this soul piercing could affect my deep untouched layers of heart...m flabbergasted..hats off dEaR...u really are a napstermonster cornering me to dig out d deep holes into my being n letting life suck otta me..u r a sinner u know that...😵...but thts somehow tending my lightly bruised heart wt tiny bits of wounds i ever faced..those r not even a grain into this vast dessert...❤️


Perfection Personified...!!!!!


keep goin...update sooner from now on...as m a bugger..😛

care urself...!!!😉❤️
Edited by madhumi - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey came across your story and read 44 parts in one go and it is AMAZING is all i can say and perfect as the name of the fiction is😊 Clean cut plot!!!!! All the characterization were so good and the story intense much much higher in level of a perfect fiction😊

ARNAV's character in this story is what i wanted to see all along and here i get it!!! True to his character and his past is what He is behaving!!! Once their consummation thought i would miss this intense character and be filled with lighter one but then you proved me wrong by bringing the past and making him stay as his character should stay!!!!! Love it more!!!!! The way he is broken down and the way he is having the bad memories close to his heart and making him what he is and this truly brought a very nice plot to this story!!!!!!

KHUSHI's character is up to the expectations of how she has to actually act at her problems and i really love the way you din't miss the actual essence of her character from the serial and the way you wrote it in different manner of she staying strong is brilliant and thats what made me to read this story at the beginning!!!!!!

Payal's character is awesome unlike the one in serial and wish i could see this in the original!!!
I so wanted her to stay with Khushi through this and i get it here!!!!! Truly a sister and a strong girl i see in her makes me proud in some way!!!

Aakash's character is another brilliant work!!!!!! He at first torn between to believe his wife or listen to Arnav makes him tough and the outburst of him to Arnav clearly shows the concern he is having to his brother as well sister-in-law as well his wife and family!!!!! Truly gentlemen!!!!!

Nk,here comes the character of a person who cannot see his love getting tortured!!!! And making his best way to help her like a real man who loves truly does!!!! Loved him!!!!

Anjali is the charcter i actually want to speak because at the start of the story i felt her character not given an importance but you again proved me wrong and now i am damn sure that there is something in her brain much more than she seems to show the innocence or again it might change also depending upon you and how you take the story forward😉!!!!!!!

Shyam at last here comes the villian and i must he is the perfect bad guy for this story!!!!!!

my POV of this story-I loved the way you have given importance to all the characters revolving around the leads and how each one is different from others!!!
The way you showed us how we look at Arnav and how we look at Aakash and the changes of two persons giving different reactions to the same issue and this is the best i loved in this story!!!!!
The linking of the PAST is too clever and great to read!!!
The environment around us how it changes us and you showed in this story amazed me!!!!
The past of Shyam which led him to be what he is today and Arnav having his own past what led him to be like this!!!! All the characters having different past and they behaving according to that in the present situations is what is the highlight of this fiction and what i loved in this fiction!!!!

I want to know Khushi's POV when she was attacked by her love when he got to know that she is leaving o luknow!!!!

Also i want to know Anjali's POV that i am thinking would surely change her character what is shown and also make us readers sit at the edge!!!!

At last i want to tell you THANX for such well written plot and lucky me to find it!!! CLAPS and hats off to you👏👏

P.S-Do accept my buddy request as i wish to read this story further and also if i don't get this story then for sure i go insane😛
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CHAPTER 45

In the gleaming darkness of a full moon night, Sheesh Mahal came into its own, like the old stories about houses that came alive only during the still watches of the night. During the daytime, the hustle and bustle of the household muted the effect of the cavernous halls and the tinkling chandeliers, dulling the reflections of the antique mirror work that embedded the plaster walls. At night, with the slanting rays of the moon playing with the reflected candles lit in recessed holders, Sheesh Mahal trembled and shone. The moonlight played with the mirrors that were everywhere-- irridescent shards of flashing silver light revealing why this palace had been called the "Mansion of Mirrors" by generations of Malliks.


Khushi, who was terrified of darkness, somehow found that even without any of the hallway lights, the reflected gleam from a myriad tiny mirrors, and the sheen from the cut-crystal candles provided her with enough illumination to prowl the halls quite comfortably. And so she wandered, now climbing stairs, now darting into corridors and entering doorways, feeling as lost and empty as the halls she went through.

He was not here.

She could not sleep on a bed without his dark presence, could not breathe in a room without his breaths mirroring her own. Her body felt weightless without his arm, casually flung around her waist, to give it a ballast and an anchor. So she walked on and on, not knowing where she was going, nor why, but padded on, barefoot, her hair streaming behind her, another ghost in these ghostly halls.


She did not know why she had believed, all the while, right up until she had been shown her new bedroom, that Arnav would come for her. She had just---felt it. And when it came to him, her awareness of him had never let her down as completely as it had done this evening, when every sense had screamed that he was close by. And when her every sense had been wrong, in insisting on this. To be asked to sleep now was a travesty--- slumber would no more come to her, without him, than peace would.


One final twist had led her to a flight of marble stairs, which lead, as far as she could tell, to the roof. She climbed, up, up, up--feeling so weightless and unsubstantial, she felt as if she could climb forever. She reached a carved door, and pushing it open, emerged out onto the roof. The night sky above her looked as if someone had taken a lapful of diamonds and strewn them carelessly across a blue velvet cloth, while the swirling ribbons of clouds from this high vantage point looked close enough to reach out and touch. Khushi stretched her arms above her, staring up at the night sky.


She allowed the soft wind to smooth her hair from her face, taking in the twinkle of the city lights in the distance, enjoying the whisper and murmur from the fountains in the courtyards. She stood there for many minutes, absorbed, looking at nothing in particular, as her mind refocused, thinking about what to do next. She would call him, Khushi decided, as she leaned against the carved stone balustrade, looking into the distance. She would pick up her phone and call her husband. Tell him she missed him, ask him to come to her. She would try again; give their love a chance again. The truth was simple, really. When it came to her Arnav-ji, no matter what he did, what he said...She would always try.


Khushi now feeling calm and centered, had made up her mind, and she turned, ready to go back down to her bedroom. Thinking to herself that she would perhaps try and get some sleep, Khushi glanced casually at the far side of the roof.

Time froze.

There, seated on a bench, facing her, silently watching her out of hooded eyes was Shyam Manohar Jha.

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In retrospect, it should have been obvious. Shyam was in Lukhnow. This much both Arnav and Aakash had deduced while tracking Shyam's activities, given the fact that he maintained a law- office here in this city, and that he was NOT at his office in Delhi. This much was an educated guess. NK's work on Shyam's blackberry had revealed that he often came to Lukhnow to meet his friend or partner Druv, to do something in connection with that person here in this city. And the Raizadas had this residence, this Mahal right here in Lukhnow. A place where they normally never came to stay, but which was always kept ready for them, or for their family.


Where else would a man like Shyam stay, while he did his mysterious business in Lukhnow, other than at his wife's palatial home,the Sheesh Mahal? Anjali probably even knew that her husband usually stayed here while doing his work in this city, but no one had asked her anything. The Sheesh Mahal servants were too rigid and proper to speak or gossip to their newly arrived guests about their other, older guest.

Obvious.

And yet the shock was horrific, like a blow to the gut that emptied the lungs of all air, that created a rushing sense of fear where, moments ago, nothing had existed but peace. Shyam watched her face dispassionately, as Khushi struggled to breathe, fear and shock having robbed her momentarily of all her senses. As she recovered, she saw the slight smile on his face, as he sat enjoying the effect his unexpected reveal had had on her. His lips curled up in a smirk, his eyes hot and hard with malice.


Somewhere, within Khushi, her spine stiffened. Cleansing anger enveloped her, as she faced the man whose last encounter had left her at death's door. She would not back down, she would not show her fear to a man who thrived on hurting others, on giving pain. Khushi was a fighter. Sometimes, that entailed showing strength when one felt none, sometimes it meant cloaking fear with courage, even when one felt nothing but pure terror within. So, to Shyam's shock, Khushi turned and instead of bolting for the open door leading to the stairs, she came slowly upto him. Khushi greeted him with a nod and stiffly sat down next to him, right onto the bench where he had sat for long minutes, watching her.


Admiration flooded Shyam as he looked at the pale face and stoic expression on the beautiful woman he had savaged. Nothing but the soft trembling of her clasped hands betrayed the fear he could amost smell coming off of her. But frightened or not, here she sat, so very vulnerable, and yet so full of a kind of simple courage that was both foolish and endearing.


Sometimes, Shyam could dimly feel sensations and emotions that normal people felt and experienced, and right now, he thought he could feel--pity. So young, so innocent. If only he had not seen her, if only she was not Arnav's key, his damnation and salvation, both. If only her own future death was not the path to Arnav's own demise !! In another lifetime, had she not come across Shyam's path, he would have wished her well, he would have wanted her to be happy, to go through life untainted. He would have allowed such bravery and goodness to go on, unchecked. But here she was, and here he was. One fated to die, and the other fated to be the one to kill. It did call for some kind of pity.

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Khushi was the one who broke the silence.
"Anjali Di is here, Shyam-ji. Downstairs. She misses you, and cries at night, waiting for you to call. Her morning sickness has become better, Nani-ji was saying, only yesterday, that the time will soon be here for complete bedrest. But you know her. You know your wife, well don't you? She came to spend some time with her friend before she is confined to her bed. Did you tell her you were here?"

Shyam replied, just as politely: "No. I haven't seen her, she does not know that I am here in Lukhnow. I didn't know you had all come until this evening, after dinner. I will be leaving tonight. I will see her when I need to. How have you been, Khushi-ji? I hope you have recovered well? And how is that friend of yours? Sarita? I gave her a fright, I'm sorry about that. Is she well?"


Khushi answered him, all the while her senses cramped and pulled within her, screaming for her to move away, to flee. It was a primitive, atavistic response, her skin crawling, the same sensation that one felt confronted when with a snake. That same wariness, that same desire to escape, the same careful backing away from a sleeping tangle of evil lying across the path. She tamped down the rising bile in her throat as she responded to suave, honeyed questions, to barbed enquiries about Arnav, Payal, herself. She responded to Shyam, as if this man had never sliced open her veins, never left her weltering in her own blood for her crazed husband to find and save. She did not know quite why she did this, she only knew that she would not run, and hide, she would not give him the satisfaction of seeing her terror.

Shyam looked at her, marveling at the strength he was being shown by this tiny slip of a girl. He amused himself by asking her probing, cruel questions, enjoying her self-control. He looked at the flashing eyes that refused to break their combined illusion that they were anything more than relatives, enjoying an evening outside, talking politely about their families. She was truly Arnav Singh Raizada's bride, Shyam thought, an ugly twist on his lips. That bas***d had, like his father before him, found himself an incredible woman, and then twisted her so that she saw nothing but him. He had bewitched her so that she could not even see the danger to herself as she tried to live for him, to be proud and strong and fearless for him.


Shyam felt the old hatred bubble up, here, within the home of the Mallik clan, the home where he had never been wanted, or accepted. Where he was the son-in-law, but where he would never be the son. Here he was, sitting with another woman who---like his mother---was destined to never see her own child roam these halls, accepted and loved like Arnav and Anjali had been. Shyam spoke, lazily, watching Khushi cringe away from him, feeling appreciation for the control it took for her to not run away:

"Do you know what I am thinking right now, Khushi-ji? I am thinking that I could pick you up, right now, and throw you over that low, low edge. Watch you scream, as you shatter and die on the cobblestones below. You are so small, so light. So easily finished off, Khushi-ji. You should never have married him, you know. And fallen in love, as you have, despite the terror of what he did to you, on your wedding night. In spite of his monstrous actions, his cruelties.

I can tell, by your eyes, by the expression in them. Love, Khushi-ji? For Arnav Singh Raizada? You should never have loved him. I didn't think you would, you know. I knew he would love you, go mad from wanting you, how could he not? You are...you look like...there is no way he, a man of his bloodline...no way that he would not have loved you. But I never thought that you would fall that far, as well...Like her...If you had waited, I would have made other...arrangements... for you.

Oh, don't look disgusted. I would not have married you, actually.

Though of course your entire family thought so. It might not seem like it, but I know I am a married man. But I needed you to feel love for me, to believe I was serious about marrying you. It would have been easier for you, and if you had fallen in love with me, I would not have hurt you. You remind me of someone, someone who was, once, very special to me. I would have asked you to help me with Arnav, and then I would have made...arrangements. Why didn't you wait, Sonali? Why didn't you let me help you???"

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As if he was speaking to someone else, Shyam's voice modulated, changed, becoming, to Khushi's terrified ears, younger, more child-like. Innocent that she was, Khushi still knew that she was in real danger right now. Somehow, in speaking about her and Arnav, Shyam had changed, becoming more agitated, more intense. Gone was the suave questioning, the toying, drawled cruelties that had cloaked Shyam's insanity on the roof for the past few minutes. Something had shifted. Khushi knew, right away, that that facing her now was a madman in the disguise of a man. The cunning of insanity, of some deep purpose too twisted to comprehend shone in those flat eyes, the eyes that reflected the moonlight like polished pebbles in a swamp.


She knew, suddenly, as if someone had written it out for her, that Shyam Manohar Jha was irretrievably mad. And somehow, for some purpose, he had fixated on her as essential to his plans, to his needs. A madman's plans, that culminated in her death. Khushi, careful to remain neutral and calm, got up, stretching her arms casually as Shyam continued to mumble, almost to himself, asking her over and over again why she had not waited.


As she moved back, until she was close enough to the door to push it open, Khushi could feel her heart beat pounding in her ears, sickening her with pulses of adrenalin. He would do it, as soon as he stopped talking to himself in that odd, sing-song voice. She knew this. He would kill her. Shyam's voice, behind her---calling out her name---arrested her for a split second, before Khushi bolted.


Racing down the stairs, blindly making the twists and turns, through the endless passages and across the echoing rooms, Khushi ran. All she could hear, above her pounding heart were her footfalls slapping against the marble floors as she raced as if a hound of hell was behind her, snapping at her naked feet, trying to drag her to her death. The sounds of her breath, hewing in and out of her body as she turned and dodged behind this pillar and that alcove seemed to hiss and ring in her ears. Her blood pounded, making her almost dizzy with its roaring. Her terror and need to escape the monster on the roof gave her the accuracy and sense of direction to find her room that normal, sensible thought would never have granted her.

Khushi burst through the doors of the Bara Kaamra, and the sight of a shadow rising up to greet her entry was the final shock to her overwhelmed nerves. Khushi fainted, not gracefully, but like a log falling in the woods. As she crashed down, the floor coming up swiftly to meet her, she was caught up right into Arnav's arms. The last coherent thought that flooded Khushi's mind, just as her husband's scent announced to her darkening mind who had caught her was a puzzled question...
"Who is Sonali?"

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Edited by napstermonster - 12 years ago
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Oh.My.God. Reswa!

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I'm saying this again...you seriously have magic in your writing.The capability to produce imagery in the reader's mind is not something every writer is gifted with...but you...you have that talent.
And I could imagine everything playing out perfectly.👏

I love Khushi. Such bravery she showed up there on the roof...at a point when anybody else..would probably have either run out, or would have pretended to NOT have seen anyone and tried to forget the whole episode. And Shyam noticed that quality in her too.

So she got a peek into what drove this madman. Not to mention the hard-hitting fact that she realized this man was never going to let go. He was going to pursue her either till he was dead...or she was.

Brilliant writing Naveen!! Hats off to you.👏
I totally loved this update.❤️

Edited by raomedhz - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
YOU UPDATED
Let me read
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well come back honey i am really glad that you update
and what an update but please continu sooon don't leave us like this😭
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res. will edit later tonight.

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Okay so I had reserved so that I could fawn over this one with leisure...it's been a while with this one.😳

I am in awe of this Shyam you have created, more than any other character in this FF. Real jaw-dropping awe. It's intriguing. Does Khushi actually look like Sonali, or is it just Shyam's twisted mind seeing things? I have always wondered how Shyam figured out all this stuff and predicted Arnav's feelings about Khushi so correctly when everything in that relationship itself was so murky and turbulent? I am beginning to see the light now. So is it Khushi's looks and Arnav's genes which are the real tells to Shyam? Wow. Who knew? I know, you did.😆

Khushi, my girl. Proud as I am at the bravery she showed, I couldn't help feeling Shyam-ish and pitying her a little too, for desperately, blindly loving the man so completely wrong for her. She will forgive him anything, isn't it? Though I'm glad this time Arnav did show up to catch her. Something tells me he has finally seen the light somewhat, or is close, at any rate.

So, Sheesh Mahal and its ghosts. Arnav, Anjali, Shyam all present here, drawn by the shared past that haunts all three. Khushi, the pawn cum lynchpin, with her glimpse into the insanity that makes Shyam - Sonali. all the Raizadas in attendance too ( I dearly hope Akash is here too...he won my heart with that lashing to Arnav). Which dog's day is it going to be? Napster, you've set this up beautifully. I wait with bated breath for the grand finale now.

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WOW! NP. That's was a terrific Stephen King type update! Reminded me of the Shining, a movie that terrifies me even to think about. Shyam's insanity is terrifying.

Felt so, so sorry for Anjali.

Can only admire Khushi's faith in ASR after all that he has done to her. In a sense their love for each other is a kind of madness! So is Anjalis' for her brother, for the dog, for Shyam.

The past has such a strong grip over ASR, Anjali and Shyam, there is no hope for any of them unless they find a way to break free of the stanglehold of their intetwined pasts.

Khushi is the unfortunate lynchpin, holding them together, who is their salvation. Hope their collective insanity does not destroy her.

Brilliant update, worth waiting for all these days and weeks. 😊
Edited by Japonica - 12 years ago
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That was a damm scary update.
Thank God Arnav is here.
I hope nothing else goes wrong!
I want them to be safe from the madman. I want the end of Shayam Jha for once and all

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