forever and always-rishabala os

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Forever And Alwayzz



He hated the smell of coffee.By the time he realized this, it was too late. He had already stepped into the coffee shop. The dark, nutty smell was so strong that it could knock his socks off.
His upper lip curled unstoppably. He sat down in a free table and waited. Ever since he'd gotten in that damn car accident, his life had revolved around waiting. Waiting for his doctor. Waiting in the kitchen, eyes squinted shut, temples throbbing, as if he was about to sneeze. That everlasting feeling of reaching but not grasping,frustration. He would moan: a tiny bubble of a sound. Orgasm without the pleasure. Oh yes, he had certainly changed since his accident.

He leaned back in his chair. His foot tapped restlessly. His doctor made him carry around a tape recorder to record his thoughts. During their sessions, they would wind back the tape and listen. He would always be surprised at the things he said,psychotic things. Crazy things. Together, they would listen to his rumblings ("My mother's an impostor...wheres my drink...no one will put her out"). His head hurt. The smell of coffee didn't help. And sometimes, he would forget things.It made everyone angry, which in turn made him angry, too. He was jolted out of his thoughts as the chair across from him squeaked. A woman sat down and waved over the waitress. She wore a deep red anarkali suit that complimented her milky skin. "Excuse me," he said as politely as he
could. "But I'm waiting for someone." She looked over at him, red eyebrows arched. Then, she smiled. "I'll be out of here soon." "But-" The waitress arrived, looking very smart and eager in her white shirt and black apron. "What can I get the two of you?" "One latte with a shot of hazelnut and
one hibiscus tea," she ordered crisply, glancing up at the waitress. He regarded her suspiciously as the waitress hurried off. She was familiar with this place. When she looked at him, he quickly looked down. He wished he brought something to read. "I ordered for you," the woman said.


Her hands were folded neatly on the table. He looked up and frowned. "You didn't need to."
"Do you like hibiscus tea?" she asked tentatively, looking like she had hoped to please him.
"Better than coffee," he grunted. She nodded. "I'll pay," he added. She smiled. He noticed that she did that a lot. It made her face look nice. "So this is kind of like a date," she commented.
He hadn't offered to pay for hers. It was a misconception that he didn't bother to correct. It would have been rude to. "I'm waiting for someone," he told her purposefully.
"I'm waiting for someone, too," she nodded understandably. This surprised him. "Then why are you sitting with me?" "It's good to have some company while we're both waiting, isn't it".she said looking at him smiling brightly "You looked like you really weren't enjoying yourself."
Their orders came on a round, black platter. The hibiscus smelled sweet and familiar, like a perfume he had once loved on someone. He paused, eyes squinted as if about to sneeze. His lips thinned in concentration. A small moan, but no release.


"Is something wrong?" Her eyes looked especially wide over the rim of her
latte. "I'm trying to remember something," he told her truthfully. Her words had broken his concentration. He shrugged and sipped the tea. For a few moments, neither of them
spoke. "It's a beautiful day outside," she sighed. Her face was reflected in the glass window of the shop. "It is kind of nice," he nodded, looking outside, too. "If you're into that gray, misty weather type of thing." "This kind of weather is a little grouchy, but it has its charms," she grinned,
looking at him. "It's a bad day for driving. Kind of foggy ,bad visibility. All types of accidents
happen in this weather." He took another sip of tea. It made him feel better and forget that the person he was waiting for was very late. "Spoken from experience?" she asked conversationally. He nodded. "I was in a car accident last year. It was pretty bad." "I was in a car accident, too, last year. A big one. My husband almost died in the crash"He raised his eyebrows. He felt oddly sulky at the mention of a husband. He wondered if they were still together. She was rather pretty. "How is he now?" She shrugged, taking a gulp of her latte. She breathed in deeply the scent of it. He wondered how she could do that without throwing up. "He's neither here or nor there." "I know how that feels." She smiled. "I don't know how you can stand it. Sometimes, I feel like I can't even stand him when he feels like that." "It's nothing we can help," he said, slightly defensive. "Oh, I know that." She set down her mostly empty cup. Absently, she ran her
finger along the rim. "You know, we were supposed to get renew our vows this summer." "Winter weddings aren't bad, either," he said. She looked up at him. "You really think so? Don't you think the winter weather's a bit gray?" "You said yourself the weather's beautiful today."


"But what do you think?" she pressed. "I think the weather doesn't have anything to do with the wedding, frankly. A wedding is about love." She smiled, though she looked a bit sad. "Well, I think I'll wait until next summer anyways. He'll be better by then. I want the wedding to go smoothly.because when we got married for the first time..geez it wasn't all pleasant. and u get married only once"she said remembering that day with a faint smile. "Unless you get married a second time to another person" he pointed out. She finished her latte. "I don't think so. I really love this guy so I think I'll stick around." "He's lucky to have you," he told her sincerely. "Is he the one you're waiting for here?" "Yeah," she nodded, then sighed softly. "But I don't think he's going to show up today." She pushed back her chair and stood, smoothing the wrinkles on her suit. She brushed her bangs as she said, "You promised to pay, right?" He hesitated, but nodded in the end.


"Yeah, sure." "Thanks." Smiling, she turned and walked out of the coffee shop. He watched her jet back hair move as she did. The bells on the door jingled. There was a faint scent of hibiscus
flowers. He finished his tea. After waiting five more minutes, he called for the bill.
As he flipped open his wallet, he noticed a picture inside of a pretty woman flashing a smile . He squinted. Moan and release. Quickly, he put some money on the table and ran out to the street. There were some busy Christmas shoppers,
but no sign of her. Finally, far down the street, he saw spotted her. "Madhu" he called, chasing after her. He used his elbows mercilessly to get through.
The woman turned around. He paused to catch his breath, then leaned forward and kissed her. "Sorry I'm late." She just looked at him lovingly and said "and my husband remembered the date after all" .And pressed herself more against his chest. And the angels watched from above showering their blessings on them.



and this was a total random os :-).hope you guys liked it .
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DevilClan thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Aww... It was too cute n sweet. Gud one dear.
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Awesome ! Beautifully written
loved the convo between RM
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loved it, but it was tough to understand
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loved it, but it was tough to understandloved it, but it was tough to understandloved it, but it was tough to understand
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A v well written and well carried os.it was awesome and da end was fantabulous.great job.
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ill work on improving that..
the basic concept was that rk had a accident and the sideeffect of that is ..he cant recall things ...
so he and madhu meet for coffee ..but later he forgets why hes there..
at de end of the convo ..when he luks at her picture ..he realises she is his wife and he was supposed to meet her :-)

my first time ..will improve on it :-)
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Very Nice OS on Madhu and RK
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😊aww it was tooo CUTE!!! So sweet! 👏
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Originally posted by: niki_09

ill work on improving that..
the basic concept was that rk had a accident and the sideeffect of that is ..he cant recall things ...
so he and madhu meet for coffee ..but later he forgets why hes there..
at de end of the convo ..when he luks at her picture ..he realises she is his wife and he was supposed to meet her :-)

my first time ..will improve on it :-)


I don't know how to word it but, here is how I feel. I saw it coming but, I wasn't quite sure till the end. The suspense element made me read through the entire story. So, I would say stick to whatever you did. Keep the surprise element.

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