AAOGE JAB TUM SAAJNA |XXdiscontinuedXX| note pg 24

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Manveer OS: aayoge jab tum saajna'.

(part 1)

The music cud make any1's heart go thumping.So was with him'.nothing diff. But it was escorted with a troublesome voice'just like a chudail'.she was blabbering something..but he was deaf towards her'. He cud here nothing."common lets dance" she said pulling him towards the floor' he reluctantly went towards the floor'.she was dancing before him and he was standing like a beautiful statue of a greek god'."nacho na dumbo'" she said trying to move his hands'he just threw his hands hard from her grip and "just shut the f**k up rishika'(the music stopped)go to hell..die..i don't care for u'.. kathputli nai hu jao tumhare ungliyon pe nachunga..leave me alone for gods sake'plz'I neva cared for u neither will I eva'let me confess I hate u to the hell'" he roared with anger'.

The anger which was filled rite from the start of their daily soap was pored out today'he didn't care wat wud happen to their on screen chemistry then'.he didn't care wedr his role wud be wid him den'.he was happy to pour his heart out'

Rishika just hid her face in her palmes and ran away from there crying like anything'.he didn't even turned towards her then'..he apologized to the crowd' and they started to swing to the beet as if nothing happened'.uday went to the counter and ordered a drink for him'as it came..he didn't even allow it to be touched down he drank it in one go and then only kept it down' approx afta 10 min. his every wound was healed as he cud hear the sweetest voice he had ever heard'he looked up to wher it came as the voice approached the same counter'his glass fell and broke to thousand pieces'.she turned and looked at wher dat noise came from. uday was still looking at her, his lips moved"manyata" but his voice hadn't any guts to cum. She saw him and said to her friends"girls time to make a move'lets go sumwher else'" the gals were shoked at her antics..they asked why, to which she said"becuz I say..its my party I'll decide wher to go" as she moved uday shouted "Manyata'" but she was very far to hear and his voice dissolved in the club's'she came out and told that she was in no mood of partying and told her friends to drop her'not wher she lived but wher she was telling

The bell ranged and the door was opend'"shri'" manyata screamed and just hugged her with full force and broke down'anna was sitting back and she saw manyata's face.."Manyata'" she screamed' shritama moved back as she heared ankita saying manyata' she held Manyata by her shoulders' she looked at her friends milky white turned red face' "babes'why are u crieng..wen did u come from London'just come in'".Manyata had came back from London afta four years..she had went wen she was 20'afta the horrifying incidence her life had showed her.Manyata shritama and ankita had met on the sets of their debut soap'where Manyata and uday were leads' as priyal and ashish'the trio hugged and Manyata sank in the couch'."now that's called being at the rite place at the rite time'"shri said in a blank tone'

Anna poked her saying"pagal aandhi hain kya'dekh nai sakti she is crying so bad'" "sorry na'"she said irritatedly"Manyata why are u crying??..." Manyata said sobbing even more harder "UDAY'."

Shri's face was fuming with anger'"that asshole..he was there again..kutta kahin ka...firse kuch kahan usne''that dumb dog'jindagi bhar rote rakhna chahiye tha Manyata use'" as Manyata heard this she started to cry even hearder'"just shut up shri..dekho aur rulaya mannu ko'don't u noe she still luvs uday..kyu aisa keh rai ho..plz'" "oh plz..anna..he deserves dat..jhoote khwaab dikhaye..bhaad main gaya wo kutta..y Manyata..?? y didn't u muv on..usme kyu atki ho'" "4 hafton main shadi hain meri'" "what?????" shri and anna shouted at top of their voices as Manyata said it'.anna sat down next to Manyata.."theek kiya tumne..gud u muvd on'fir kyu ro rahi ho uske liye'he deserves dis'" shritama said

"shri'pyaar sirf ek hi baar hota hain'u hav dated many boys and now u hav got ur lucky boy'I founded him in 1st chance'.manyata ne kisi se pyaar already kiya hain..dil ek bar de diya hain'poore dilse shaadi nai kar rahi'.bhool nai sakta koi kisiko'tum bhul gayee pehle ladkonko cuz u neva luvd them'u just wer attracted'" shri ki bolti band ho jaati hain..as she sum what understands wat anna wanted to say"mannu bolo kya naam hain uska??" anna said consoling her.."rawat'akash rawat'" "eeyu'mrs. Manyata rawat..it wud suck..mrs. Manyata Udayveer singh' aaawww..it wud hav been perfect'" shri said."shri..plz'manyata..mrs Manyata rawat bhi kuch bura nai hain" anna said giving death glare at shri' Manyata was still sobbing'"Manyata..we were having a sleepova'cum u also sleep here..i'll giv u my dress'"

Manyata felt that idea was awesuma nd she immediately agreed'."hmm..london main bahot sexy ladke honge na..tumhe dekhke idhar udhar gire honge'" shri said cheering her mood'Manyata giggled at that thot. And the friends continued to chat dumping uday and akash'

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Uday went to the marine drive '. This was the place wher they used to hang out in d free time'.(after a couple of days wen Manyata and uday encounterd once again)

Flashback:

Manyata was crying on uday's shoulder as the tv flashed "the end" signifying the end of their debut soap. Uday consoled her'.and others including shri,anna,kunal,and mark looked at the couple and thot in der mind how beautiful they wer togedr.. they had sleepover at uday's house'Manyata engulfed herself in uday's arms as they went to sleep late night'uday let her do it happily'he too enjoyed it..afta all they luvd each odr'.for the whole world'but not for uday and mr.sisodiya.

(a bit before'.manyata and uday room scene stops here')

mr.sisodiya was the channel head on which the serial aired'.the crew noticed that Manyata was in deep luv wid uday'mr.sisodiya took its advantage..once he called uday in private'.he asked wedr he luvd Manyata or not'at that moment uday hadn't felt anything like dat for Manyata so he said no'mr.sisodiya narrated to him his plan'.there soap was the second best. Mr.sisodiya wanted it to be at the top. Uday and Manyata as ashish and priyal wre already the most fav. onscreen and ofscreen'there chemistry was awesum'.so mr.sisodiya thot of bringing them in a relationship ofscreen 2 so that there are chances of the show being top.'.he explained uday his plan..uday being a playboy accepted it easily'they signed a contract'.of ending the relationship as soon as possible afta the show.then after the show..uday wud immediately be stared as the lead in the channels next venture wer mr.sisodiya's daughter rishika wud be starring opposite uday'uday was gala happy as he was getting a new soap and a new girl'.. par'kal kisne dekha hain???

(Uday was reminded with the beautiful scenes he and Manyata spent togedr and how Manyata was diff. from odr girls'how much she was commited'

Then uday got reminded of the day wen he broke up wid Manyata' )

usually on the day wen 1 gets into a relationship'.a year after, they celebrate it wid a gr8 pomp'but here uday had decided to BREAK UP'..

he called Manyata at the marine drive Manyata came in very gud mood and hugged uday..at that moment'.uday broke down..inside'.he was not able to ditch her'it was very difficult'he was getting angry on himself as he cud just kick of evry odr girl but he wasn't able to do it wid Manyata'had he started to feel it for Manyata??? (this was a week after the last epi of their soap.) Manyata ended the hug and looked at uday who was trying to do sumthing wid his eyes wid her soul'..she kept her hand on his cheek'. Uday melted at her touch'uday came very near to her'.he looked at her juicy..lush..fresh'dying for lips, and he cudn't control'he just dug into them as he held Manyata by her waist'.as for Manyata'.she was lost..she was dead'all for him'.she cudn't think of anything just uday's face was in her mind'she too responded and uday's soft kiss became passionate'.both after being breathless hugged each other'Manyata,collecting herself back after loosing her breath whispered in uday's ear huskily"thanx for giving such a beautiful anniversary gift.."

Uday came to his senses and felt very bad' he made his heart firm'. He kicked his heart off and locked it and threw it far away..into the sea behind them'.he broke the hug and said "correct yurself baby'.parting gift'"Manyata was shocked and looked as gud-joke-sweety-but-don't-do-such-thing-again."Manyata I am serious'.i want to break up wid u'for the whole world we may be in a relationship, but for me and mr.sisodiya we weren't'.this was just a paln to get tremendous fame for u and me which we hav got'.we are most wanted ones in the industry now..sorry babes'I just did it..i didn't mean it'sorry'" he said patting her cheek'manyata just pushed his hand of her cheeks and slapped him hard on his face'it was so hard for him dat his face nearly turned 90 degrees' uday needed it'as he was hit'it was like suddenly his heart came swimming from the seas and got itself back into its place'.at that very moment uday realized that he really luvd Manyata like anything'.there was a minutes silence as uday kept his hand on his left cheek and rubbed it,panting. Manyata just said"sorry dear'but this is to tell u that I will always luv u cum what may'.and this was the last time we eva met..thanx for teaching me to use my mind not my heart..i am going foreva..away..away from u. I sware..or rather I am sure'you will neva have guts to luv any1 except me'and wen u will realize that..it wud hav been too late dear'." She gave a small peck on his lips and a lone tear rolled down her cheeks signifying that for the last time she was using her heart'she ran away from there

End of flashback

Uday went back'took his car and rushed sumwher'.(this was a day or two after Manyata met shri and anna)

There was knock on the door. Shri opened it and shouted at top her voice"tum'get out u dog'."

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prankz aka sanju 😊


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update 3:

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part 4;

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part 5:

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part 6:

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hey guys... i am back. soory for the troubld caused by my os. i didnt mean to do all that. sorry if any peone's sentiments were hurt. i adont hav time just now to coorect the mistakes caused. but i am sure, i'll this weekend. sorry one's again i didnt mean to do all that. for now enjoy this if possible. iam very sorry about its length. its very short and boring. but the next will be blast. sure guys. sorry once agin

"shri plz… meri baat toh suno plz.. giv me I chance.." but before he cud complete shri had bamed the door on his face. "shri plz… areh gunhegaar ko bhi adaalat main ek baar safai deni ki ijajat hoti hain, fir mujhe kyu nai.. plz shri for manyata's sake..bahot jindagiyonka sawal hain shri plz.. Manyata keliye..plz…" he said to the closed door. Shri creeked open the door. And peeped out thru it as she heard him say for Manyata. "Kya hain??" she asked in a very rude tone. "Bhai andar toh aane do.. bada lecture sunana hain" he said gulping hard. "bin bulaye mehmano keliye mere ghar main koi jagah nai hain. Got it Udayveer singh??"she said. "Ohh cum on shritama plz.." she opened the door exerting her comp. anger on it. He walked in peacefully with small steps."see, I still luv her and I'll always luv her.i want her back. I'll kepp her happy anytime anywhere anyhow….by all means" he said apologetically. "waah"she said clapping"aur jhoote khwaab dikhao…aur tumhe kya lagta hain.. hum aankhe band karke dekhenge.. huh?? What do you think of urself???" he saw her with utter shock. He sat down"hey just get up baithne kaliye kya tere saasur ka ghar hain?? This is my house and you hav to ask me first.."she said trying to pull him up.he on the other hand very easily pulled her down and made her sit on the sofa. He said "now listen carefully………………" and he gave his long lecture..on listening to it. Shri had calmed down…she was impressed with his luv confession. "uske liye jaan de bhi sakta hu aur jaan le bhi sakta hu." She passed him a faint smile "bas jaan den eke baad meri atma dukhi aur atript rahegi." Smoke was coming out of shri's ears. "how can he…itna bada lecture jhaadke keh raha hain atma atript rahegi?? Areh kisiki aatma ko moksh mil jata aur ise??" he noticed her anger "hey hey…tum jaisa samajh rahi ho waisa nai hain…I mean marne ke baad uski raksha kaise kar sakunga, use pyaar kaise kar payunga??" shri's anger was reduced. She was ready to start world war 4. (ww3 was when shri came and lectured uday how ruthless and inhuman he was, after ditching Manyata.)

"Toh ab kya kare shritama?? Tumhi ek ho who can help me." "hmm…" she replied. And went in her thot mode.. after a few minutes, the bulb on her head glowed so bright that uday had to close and cover his eyes.(hehehe sarcastically) "kya hua?? Aisa kya soch liya??" he said as he analised her look. "chalo jaldi se we don't hav much time. Sirf 3 hafte hain…." She said. "kiske liye…"

He asked. "ofcoarse shaadi keliye. Manyata and akash rawat." "WHAT???? " uday sank down. He thot his world broke. Shri tried to pull hin "ughh..get up u dumbo. Car main dulhan jaise rona dhona kar lena." He looked at her with utter disgust as he rubbed of the fresh warm tears which had just taken birth in his eyes. With strong dtrmination of getting his dulhaniya back he went with shritama.

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The car screeched…. Shri got up hurriedly from her car and auctioned uday to follow her.

She knoked the door. And it was immediately opend by a servant who was very much busy in doing all the preparations. They both saw a lady and a gentlemen sanked leasurely in a couch. The man was ordering a servant "yeh invitations chapwane keliye de aana. Tell them it's a very urgent work." Shri got what the invitations were and she hurriedly said, "rukiye rukiye uncleji. Main jaate jaate wahan parse hi jaungi I'll get them printed." "nahi shri beta its ohk." He said "no no. dulhan ki dost hu. Behn jaisi hu itna toh I hav to do it." She said. "ohk ohk shri beta. Lajaiye." The lady said."thanx aunty" she replied. Uday appeard in the scene. Manyata's mom n dad wre the gentleman and lady. Uday had seen there fotos but neva met in real. Also manyata's mom and dad had heard about uday and Manyata and really liked uday. They wanted teir relationship to be turned into sumthing fruitfull. He walked in and touched their feet saying "Namaste mom Namaste dad." "jeete raho beta. Krishna teri jholi saada khushiyon say bhare." They said. they both still luvd him. Shri had to play an important role naow. She explained to them why they were there. To there gudluck, Manyata was not there, she had gone to giv the failed party. Her mom and dad were very happy on the confession they thot betr late thaen neva. But they told shritama that they had no problem. It was to be cleared with Manyata and akash. Uday and shri thot that telling Manyata wud spoil everything. They had discussions on it. It was decided to hav discussion with akash. Shri asked uncle how was the marriage decided. He told that. Manyata and akash were 2gedr in d college. They becam gud frenz as he was the only Indian there excluding Manyata. She frequently visited his house for diff. projects and so did akash. Akash's mother and father felt that they wudnt get a betr daughter-in-law than Manyata. Once they came wid shagun. Manyata's mom n dad knew that she luvs uday. We they askd her what she felt, she answerd "jaisa aap thik samjhe." With thousands of tears flowing down her eyes.akash ws not a bad boy,no not at all. He was gud. He might be betr than sum1 else. But uday was the best for Manyata and akash was not good than him. This was her parents view to. But kuch nai hone se yeh aisa hona is betr so they agreed. Shri and uday after listening to the story bid farewell to her parents with a heavy heart. Shri took the invitation and walked away.

They both wre cuming down nthe steps of manyata's bunglow, wen uday bumped into sum1. He was a boy, not man like uday. "ouch." Uday and the boy said. "sorry" the boy replied. He lukd at shri and he thot that she was familiar to him. He rememberd her as shri as Manyata had shown him the fotos of her frenz. "u r shritama rite??" he said. "what?? How do u noe me." She said giving him a wide berth.. "hey. I am akash rawat.manyata's fianc."he smiled and forwarded his hand expecting atleast 1 of them to shake it.

But uday was already fuming wid anger. He was red. Red as a red signal. His ears were giving out smoke.. his fists wre clinched. So tight that his short nails wre piercing his skin.

Shri was reminded of his words . "uske liye jaan de bhi sakta hu aur jaan le bhi sakta hu."

She cud just utter the words "uh oh…………" as she sensed the rise of world war 4, whose ide she dropped on hearing uday's safai

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"dekho we are getting married. So we hav to noe each odr's past. I had no one in my life before u. I am clear. What bout u??" akash asked her. "Manyata with teary eyed said…"haan………………………

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U hav completed reading. Soory its short. I didn't hav time as there were loads of relatives poring in my house. Sorry. I promise u a blast next time.th os will might be over within 3-4 parts

Thanx for liking it so mych

Sighning of

Urs lovely

Prankz aka Sanju.

Edited by iluvmanveer - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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it really touches my heart ā¤ļø plez cont it 😊
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its really gr88,veryy nicee,uday also realised dat he loves her,waitng tos ee how udayy pacfies manyta!!!!!! she is really hurtt!!!!!! do cntinue soon!!!!! pm me😊
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Awesome super duper
Too good too awesome
Loved it the most
I wish would happen in real lolzz
Please continue soon
I am down your feet in my head lolzz
Awesome work dear
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Great update dear, loved it to the core
please continue soon
do pm me
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Posted: 12 years ago
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thanx every1 for showering so much luv ova d os. I'll update as soon as i comp riting it.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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very nice
i love it
beautifully written
i love the whole concept

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Superb šŸ‘šŸ¼ Sanjana. I loved it. Awesome - and very well written. Please continue soon😊
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Awww awesome os love i think you should turn this os into a ss or ff... Ur first attempt was great love

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