"...he headed for his room.Of course, there was nowhere else he could take her." Two things came to my mind...'POSSESSIVENESS' [He feels like he owns her in every way.] and 'CONTRADICTION' [The same person is the reason for her sorrow and her comfort.]
"No. I must. I have no choice. He bent down and lifted her again and crossed the distance towards his bed." Here again his worry and concern are clear... "A BEAST'S HELPLESSNESS." I know how difficult is to create such a situation.No doubt Linny, you have done it amazingly...
"The moonlight from the open window caressed her face and she seemed to glow despite being unconscious. Sleeping like a heavenly thing. Like one he was not supposed to touch'.." There is an aura around her always.But the darkness brings it more brightly and that's the time when Lord Arnav feels it... I think your light and shadow theory is valid here too...
Chapter-101
"The morning smelt rich and virile." Of course it has to be, otherwise how could they confront each other or everyone after such a horrible incident...? It should be virile because the two souls were in a place where they really belong to...
"Who cut my hand?" she retorted determinedly, standing near the bed and glaring at him, "Who put me in a state that I would faint? YOU!! So you're dead right I am a fool to be speaking to you when I should be smacking the daylights out of your ego!"... That's it...I could see her anger, protest, self-respect and all other intense emotions here... A clash between two stubborn souls was awesome...
Chapter - 102
The sweet nectar of brother sister bond was oozing out of the comb...I think this is the first time you show the deeper phase of his love to his sister in our FF...I enjoyed it a lot... He can do anything for his Di.. I really felt for First Lord...Lady Anjaly's each words pierced to his heart..But her words also show how profound is their relationship...We can express our such grief to someone who that much attached to our heart...
Chapter- 103/104
"...he spun on his feet and raced for the stable." What does this adeptness show..?? Is it about 'how did he want to pacify his sister as soon as possible..?' or 'to complete the distance between him and the other soul[Khushi] whom without he would be incomplete...'
"Her hair had come loose and they enveloped her, keeping her face and form away from prying eyes." I don't have any reason, but I liked the way you presented her in front of Lord Arnav...
"You do not apologize in words," corrected Kushi."...Did she really tell that..?? Wow... That was great...For fraction of a second we could see that she already knew him... But see this..."Lord Arnav stood up, his eyes suddenly very cold, "You think I don't know what it is like to die inside?"Kushi stared at him: his voice, his words...they all sounded so unlike him."... Here she is completely unaware of his inner turmoil..Again a CONTRADICTION...
"Nothing is wrong with me, Di. It's the world that is in the wrong. It only gives more reasons to pain."...It's just a fact... The one who thinks different 'll be always wrong in the eyes of whole world..They can be easily CAST AWAY by the world...
Chapter-105
"Last night at the castle" is simply the best...Each and every dialogues are really meaningful and precise too...You have managed to mould this chapter in the best shape... That's all I can say...
"I do not justify," said Kushi sadly, "I only attempt at reasoning."
"Reasoning? But why?"
"To let my mind retain its sanity," said Kushi and then she looked at her mistress, her eyes beginning to fill, "I am often burdened by the hurts he bestows upon me but if I must remain strong here," she pressed a hand at her heart, "I must reason however absurd and wrong they might in veracity be."... The theory of REASONING you applied here made me speechless...
"Kushi''I am nothing when compared to what you have let your heart become. You are indeed a girl of great value. For what you are inside is what makes your life worth living."If just three sentence can define Khushi then this is it...👏...Linny I don't have enough words to praise you girl...😳
"He is immune to feeling but not devoid of..."What a great attempt to portray Lord Arnav by Khushi...It was just superb...👏
"She found him, sitting on the floor, his back leaned against the footboard of his bed."We can imagine that situation..I thought about my mind then if I would be sitting there like him... What all things can make me sit like that...? that was really difficult to me...
"Lord Arnav sighed and leaned towards his sister, laying his head on her shoulder. She inclined her head against his and caressed his hair with one hand while the other still held his hand." I feel the same comfort First lord felt at that time...I so relaxed... I think this chapter is the end of that squall... am I sound sensible Linny..??
"You hate her," explained Lady Anjali, "But we adore her.".. CONTRADICTION...
Beside all this there many cute and minute scenes which caught my eyes...Like..."Lord Arnav walked towards her, his boots crunching on the scattered hay on the stable barn"...
"They remained in silence, watching the moonlight dance on their blankets and how it flitted when an owl or bat flew past the window outside."
"Her voice was gentle as she asked, "Did you tell her?"He looked away and, after a long pause, said, "It slipped."... and so on...
I think Its enough for now... I didn't proofread this before I posting becoz I'm in a rush, you know that right...? So there 'll be errors...Please bare with me Linny...
Once again I appreciate you and thank you for giving such a wonderful FF... Keep rocking..
Miss you sooo much Linny... Hope you are having a good time with your parents...😳
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