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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey guyzzz...i just tried to write a poemm for d first timme...i wil surely try 2 write more better den dis surely d next time!!...wht shud i improve more...u can suggest me fcoursee!

IN THE BAZAARS OF THANE!!

In the bazaars of Thane,

O my god what a crowd,

people go round and round,

buying things with no limits, and ends,

and at last the day ends,

With big big bill as they stand still...


And I see an old granny

Selling some things to earn the penny,

To buy her dream & her breathe...

with no limits, and ends.


And I see little kids,

Selling some things to earn the penny,

To buy the bread for their day,

And I wonder

Where is the limit and when this will end

With big big bill as they stand still...




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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow dear a new poem.its great
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice poem👏...Well described😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thnxxx..i wil try to write more bettter d next time!😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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@123poorva.
really very nice dear!! 👏feeling so good to see one more poet here..🤗

do write more in future..
but dear dont open new threads... i have already made a thread on this forum for poems where we all share our poems..
here is the link:

I'll be too glad if you post more of your amazing poems there...😊

after writing do pm me about notifying about that. i'll add the link og your poems in the index on page 1. :)

Jayati


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Posted: 12 years ago
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poorvvvsss you finalllyyy wrote something!!!!!!!!!!!! cheerio😃!!!!!!!!!!! i didnt know that you are such an aws poet!! idiot cant you tell me ??? we've talked so much and you cant mention that you've got an aws talent. these months we have been praising manali over her talent and you kept it a secret !!😡
wait till i meet u now😡!

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