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Posted: 12 years ago
#61
Gisel too much suspense is waiting for us!! Will you post the next part today?
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Posted: 12 years ago
#62
Highway between Chennai and Bangalore

The car shrieked to a halt as both of them fell forward, but thanks to their seat belts they are safe.
Thulasi, "Enaga achu?"
Tamil, "Theriya layai." trying to restart the car.
The car let out a couple of huffs and went dead 😲, "Cha! Seri, Deepa ka appa ku phone podu."
Thulasi, "Yen phone a kondu varala.🄱"
Tamil gives his phone to her. Thulasi tries calling, "Enaga coverage illa! 😲"
Tamil, "Super! Haem. Nadu rathiri. Verochodi irrukira highway. En azhalagana pondatti. Breakdown ana car. Kadavul ethu pannalum plan panni than pannuvaru pola. 🤣"
Thulasi smiles, "Ala paru. Ponga. Poi ethavuthu panna mudiyuma nu parunga."
Tamil, "Panna mudiyumai." bites his lips and winks at her šŸ˜‰.
Thulasi can not stop smiling, "Sir ku ena achu konja nalla? Ponga." and she pushes him.
Tamil gets of the car sighing and goes and opens the hood of the car and tries to do something,"Yema engineer pondatti. Va ma.šŸ˜†"
Thulasi gets of the car, "Ena?"
Tamil, "Nee than engineer, enaku ena car a pathi theriyum."
Thulasi looks at the parts intently. Tamil slowly hugs her from behindšŸ˜‰ . Thulasi jumps in shock,"Ena ga ithu? Nadu rothu laya?"
Tamil, "Appo carka ula parava illaya?"
Thulasi, "Something totally wrong."
Tamil, "Yen? Yena achu?" and looks at the hood.
Thulasi, "Nan car a solla la. Car driver a sonnein."šŸ˜†
Tamil smirks, "Ow! Yaru athu kala thuki podu rathu.😲"
Thulasi, "Kalu illan ga. Alankati mazhai." 😲
Tamil, "Seikiram car la yeiru."
Thulasi opens the car door but it doesn't open, "Unlock pannunga."
Tamil searches for the key and can not find it, "Aiyayoo! Car chavi ulla iruku." 😲
Thulasi looks at him angrily. Tamil smiles sheepishly.

Thodarum!


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Edited by Gisel - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#63
Hahaha super one Gisel... Im scared.. Alankatti Mazhai yaa? Bangalore nale im pei pudicha mathiri šŸ˜† Hope T&T wont meet Charu šŸ˜† Gooodd ā­ļø
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Posted: 12 years ago
#64
Super Gisellu, great jobšŸ‘ Tamil enge ponalum romance mood thaanšŸ˜†...but not in the serial.
Enne nadekepogutho...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#65
In serial, Tamil eppovumai romance mood thanšŸ˜›!
Thulasi than...grr..😔!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#66
Highway between Chennai and Bangalore

"Sollamallai yaar parthathu. Neenjodu than poo puthathu. Mallai sudigintrathai adi athu kathala. Thee culirkindathei adi ithu kathala. Intha matrangal unalai uruvanatha"
Praba lowers the volume of the car's stereo system and wipes the windscreen with a tissue because of the mist outside and AC inside the car.
Deepa is looking outside through the window.
Praba, "Deepa! College mudinji ja apporam ena panna pora? Placements ethavuthu varutha college la?"
Deepa turns to look at him, "Ama, adutha masam 2 companies la irunthu varanga placements ku."
Praba, "Oh! Good! Appo interview ku ellam prepare panniruya?"
Just then a truck over takes their car.
Deepa, "Illa. Nan placements ku ukara illa.😲"
Praba siping his coke, "En?" The truck moves slowly making it difficult for Praba to overtake it or even move at a normal speedšŸ˜•.
Praba puts his coke on the coke holder and honks at the truck.
Deepa, "MBA padikilanu asa padureinšŸ‘." slowly and carefully.
Praba, "Ada. Super idea! Entrance ku padi." Deepa chokes.
Praba offers her the coke. Deepa takes itšŸ˜‰. "Super college la admission vangiralam. Australia la poi padikiriya? Nan padicha college."
(Eschusme Suchi also studied there and left you, right?)
Deepa, "Australia va? Nenga lum varuveingala?"
Deepa puts the coke in the cokeholder, just as Praba changes the gear causing friction between their hands.
For a moment there is sheer silence😳.
Then, Praba nods no, "Inga business a pathuka vendama? Rendu varsham anga hostel la irunthu padichitu va. Nala exposure kadaikum."
Deepa, "Nenga varalana vendam."
Praba, "Ada. Admission time varuvein. Holidays ku nee India ku va."
Deepa, "Sorry ga. Neenga illatha edathila nan iruka matein."
Praba turns to look at her. Both of the look at eachother's eyes. (Road a pathu ottu!)
Deepa, "ENA GA!😲", Praba turns to see a car left in the middle of the road😔 and he is just inches away from it😲.
He swirls the car to the left. The car heads over a sloppy bumb.
He tries to handle the steering and in a haste presses the accelerator instead of the break😲. Deepa holds on to the side of the car with one hand and the other on Praba's seat, not making a sound. The car heads to a river. Both of them look at each other with terror😲
(Ippovum a? Road please! Sorry..plants..no..sand..whatever, look wherever you are going😔). Putting all his might Praba stamps on the break. The car halts. Both of them breathe out a sign of relief😊.
Praba, "Are you ok?" Deepa nods yes😳.
The car starts moving alarming them😲. Praba quickly puts the hand brake.
(I think that's the first thing you should have done!😔)
Praba, "Ippo entha perchanaiyum illa."
Both of them look out. In front of them is a river flowing rapidly with the moon bathing on it. Around them no lights, but pitch darkness.
Worst of all there is hailstorm.

Thodarum!


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Posted: 12 years ago
#67
Gisel... so well written with full suspense...
Deepa/Prabha soup scene was good. TPS mom is always a Nandhi to disturb themšŸ˜†.
TA eppavum romantic thaanšŸ˜›...What I loved in your script is appadiyay you portray the real character dašŸ‘. That is why it is very intresting to read ur FF and felt like watching thendral onlyšŸ˜‰. So TA/T caught in the alangati Mazhai... wow.
Deepa and Prabha too caught in the rain... but atleast they are in the car..šŸ˜‰.
Ippo who is going to come and save TA/T😲?? Will P/D meet TA/T??
Waiting for the next one... nicely written with suspensešŸ‘.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#68
ā­ļøgood one gisel...car scene of prabha n deepa such a natural one...even their convo fit their resp characters...
great going...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#69



In the woods by the highway

Thulasi, "Kadippa intha valiya poganuma?"šŸ˜•
Tamil, "Vera valli illa. Antha veetula inaiku night thangitu nalaiki kallaila ethavuthu pannalam.šŸ˜•"
He points to a lone house faraway.
Both of them are walking close to eachother and slowly.
Thulasi's shawl is over them shielding the hail😳.
They are walking through the woods.
There is no lights, only the full moon guiding them.
Trees whispering to each other, hustling and the wind is blowing really hard at them. An eerie silence occasionally interrupted by the owl hooting, dogs howling and a train on tracks very, very far away.
Thulasi squeezes Tamil's hand, "Vendam ga. Therumbi poirallam."
Tamil pats her hand, "Kavala padathe. Nan iruken." (Athuthan engalukku bayam!šŸ˜†) They walk further.They reach the house. Tamil, "Mara veedu a?"
Thulasi, "Yaravuthu irukkirangala?"
Tamil, "Theriyala. Iru pakirein." goes up the porch and knocks at the door, "Hello?"
Only silencešŸ˜•.
Thulasi waits in front of the house biting her nails.
Tamil knocks again and tries the handle.
The door opens with a creaking noice.
Tamil, "Veedu thoranthirukku ana yaarum illa!šŸ˜•"
Thulasi, "Vanga pogalam!"(Listen to her, Tamil)
Tamil motions her to follow her, "Vaa ulla poi irukalam. Kalailla kelambi iralam." Thulasi follows him unwillingly.
They enter the house and look around.
There is no light. Tamil moves his fingers over the wall to find a switch and puts on the light.
There are no rooms just a bed and a TV😲; it is just a cabin with a tubelight, which is still flickering.
Thulasi still not sure of the place around her, stays close to Tamil.
Tamil, "Enaku intha edum romba pidichirukku"
Thulasi looks at him in disbelief and crosses her hands, "Ena ga achu? Azhangati maalai la thalai la ethavuthu adi patiducha?šŸ˜›"
Just then there is lightening and thunders.
Thulasi gets scared and hugs Tamil tightly😳.
Tamil, "Sathiyama enaku intha edum romba...romba pidichirukku.šŸ˜†" hugging her back. Thulasi smiles.
Tamil lifts her chin, looks into her eyes, "Sorry. Enalathena ivalo kashtam😳."
The tubelight is still flickering😲.
Thulasi smiles, "Cha. Cha. Unga kuda enga irunthal enku santhosham than😳. Naragathilla kudašŸ˜•." and lies on his chest.
There is another thunder and the light goes out😲.

Edited by Gisel - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#70
Wow super part...just loved it...
great feel...(loved yr side comments...the spl touch with eschuseme ...)
Edited by vjayam - 12 years ago

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