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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Satluvsd3

sudha when u'l ...UPDATE...!???
please update soon!!!


Sorry guys, update will be only after monday.
Going out tomorrow and will be back only by monday.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Sudha-SK


Sorry guys, update will be only after monday.
Going out tomorrow and will be back only by monday.


okay!! 😭😭
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Posted: 13 years ago
😭🥺 why didnt i read this before???it almost brought tears to my eyes...n i didnt get a pm for part 1???😡
coming to the writing,
aaahhh...😳😳
wat do i say.im feeling numb right now.at first i didnt have a clue of what the story was about(as in why sharon is sad) but then i got drifted away in sharon's thoughts of her happy times with swayam.the kind of description👏 n the kiss...☺️
but then when i read the line he went to pune n never came bck i was all broken🥺
while reading part 2 i was all teary when the ending just made it for me.😊

p.s:swayam ko har halaat pe zinda rakhna plzzz.cant take a sad ending 😭
update soon...😍

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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome part. Well I hadn't expected that. Swayam met with an accident. And it's not that easy to let go of someone who was so close to your heart. It takes time and more than that courage. I can understand Sharon situation. Everyone has been through such a situation in life, where you're watching someone go away from you and there's nothing you can do about it. And worse than the pain of letting go is knowing the fact that there was nothing you could do to stop such a situation from arising. It just wasn't in your hands.

And there's nothing to be said about your writing skills. They just keep getting better and better by the day. It's really nice, the way you describe everything so finely.

Thank you for the PM (and the remainder). Sorry for being late.
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Posted: 13 years ago
Suds, very very sorry, I hav had a messy schedule this week...just taking a breather now so excuse the late comments ... first of all very relieving to know that Sharon is ok... in the sense that there was an apprehension she might harm herself...the path down memory lane was again touchingly described and it is a positive hope that you gav by showing Sharon carrying on...even tho numb to her own feelings, but living to giv joy to others...and thru her dance releasing pent up emotions, tho not exactly glad where u stopped but understandable...hope u update soon once ur bac😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
How come you call this an OS and drag it to a potential part three, Sudha? HOW? There's no shame in writing a full-fledged FF. It will help you dwell on your writing yeah, will make you tons better. 😳

This part is very beautifully written. It is by far the most expressive and emotional prose I have read from you so it won't be wrong to say that you've justified the nothingness of Sharon's life aptly. Nothingness is a greater form of suffering than pain.

She hoped her way back home, anticipating life just as today. - There's a tender bitterness in this sentence. Sharon is conflicted between appreciating and envying the state of this little girl. Beautifully penned, this entire paragraph!

And Swayum's proposal is so Swayum-like. It's genuine and cheesy and you've written the bit so well I could imagine it the clearest.

Wonderful update. (:
Sorry for the delay, I am.

-Kanks



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Posted: 13 years ago
Friends 🤗

Thank you so much for all the likes and comments, they encourage me to write more and better.
I am sorry that i am not able to reply to all your comments individually this time, as i got a lil busy and was away on a vacation. I just got back today and this update is written in a hurry and have not edited. The vacation was fun and equally tiring, so if the update feels small, the next one would make up for it.
But i still have tried to make it a nice read and hopefully you all will like it. 😉
The most important thing is its still not the end and i am officially calling it an SS now. 😳

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Posted: 13 years ago


The Phone call was difficult for her to handle, though the news of Swayam's whereabouts were shocking, deep down she knew she had never left hoping for this day to come, she froze and her brain failed to hear anything beyond his name, she left a sigh and the second her brain connected the dots and formed a mental image of Swayam struggling for his life, her pain gushed again. Shredding the Bitterness in her, she had long reconciled with her past. He was the perfect influencer to her life and she the obedient influence.

She was so close to giving up but this news awakened her lost soul and hit her with the ray of hope, only to be taken away abruptly causing an unfamiliar agony wrenching her inside out, as the fear tormented her beforehand.

The very love, which was deep hidden inside her heart, her soul, came rushing through her eyes. She didn't care to wipe away the pain, she saw, rather heard hope a moment ago and clung hard on to it.

Just like her vision her brain, her body was shaky and blurry. She didn't know what's next, after the news she just received. She knew she had to be next to him at the earliest possible, but how? She felt the walls caving in on her and crashed on the chair nearby in to light sobs. Her Senses felt his presence and she woke up pushing the walls of cynical thoughts away. She called in Rey and informed him everything she knew and even after his convincing, which she emphatically denied made her start to Pune all by herself. She composed herself and walked to the driveway and started her journey to meet her "hope", the only means she had left of a blissful life.

Soon enough she was on the Mumbai Pune Expressway, the dark and windy night made the drive all the more laborious. The trees from both sides of the road kept swaying in the wind, reminding her of her pendulum life drifting every minute to either side.

She entered the illuminated tunnel, hoping the next day morning rays would brighten her life, not in the least did she complain about the pain she endured, she was glad for the pain, it made her feel alive, revived her memory and reminded the fact he was for real. How can he be so perfect and she so lucky, was the thought that always lingered on her mind. She eluded any further thoughts of him and put a break on her baiting past and concentrated on the monotonous lifeless roads ahead.

The very hospital bed was the home to an inert Swayam. For the past few months he was addressed as the "patient in coma", before his identity was made known by the search team and his consciousness regained. His body was still idle but his heart raced an active pace and his thoughts all over the place. His brain still under the shock kept thinking about his angel in her engagement dress, with a tear strained face watching the sunset. The in numerous performances she did, and the battle she fought keeping his existence alive, everything added to a hazy dream to him.

With every passing minute and lights of clarity shining upon, his mind traveled to seconds before the accident. His unpleasantness of leaving, just days before his engagement, clearly vivid and the urge to reach back to his love equally evident. The last memory he had before the accident was of a bright light and her face, which he reached to touch upon and feel for one last time. The longer he stressed upon to know on what led to the mishap, more the delirium. The constant physical pain of his body hardly felt, his heart's burden, possessing his senses.

But there was something that resembled as the light at the end of a tunnel and he could envision the distance between him and her receding, to him the very life his lungs breathe was she. His thoughts drifting to the last time he met her, the struggle she was going through to keep a smiling face and bid a happy farewell. The feelings were mutual the thought of leaving her was eating him alive. She came sat next to him, placing her hand over his shoulders, reassuring and suggesting his move. He knew the longer the wait, the more painful the adieu. He engulfed her in a tight long hug and left not delaying a second leaving a forlorn Sharon.

Her dreaded journey came to the end and she reached the given hospital and enquired at the front desk and after knowing the room number quickly made her way to him. Every step she took felt more, heavier then before and the time stayed still. She feared what's in store, the next moment and opened the door to life and hope again. In the midst of all the medical equipment's and tubes running around, her eyes could see just his face, and the helplessness of not able to do anything dawned upon. To see him again was the light to her soul, but his given condition a black hole. She sat next to him, and caressed his hair daintily, not to disturb him.

She kept staring at his innocent face and drifted to sleep in no time.

The early morning sunrays made its way through the hospital blind's and her eyes opened to something she had left hoping for. She gently stroked his hand and felt his soft warm skin against her cold skin. The touch to him felt comforting and soft as the first snow, her alluring presence rendered the life he lacked and he opened his eyes to an angel enticing in soft sunrays.

The deepest grief they had felt in the past enabled the supreme happiness that sensed, while looking in to each other's eyes.

Edited by Sudha-SK - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Yeeeppp... 1st one to comment...^_^
kya baat hai sudha?? Aaj subeh-subeh treat??:):) lagta hai mera din accha jayega...:):P
anyways, comming to update, batana jaruri hai kya how much I liked it??:P
You always nail it in each n every update... U described Sharon's state of mind very well.. We got it preety well... I can understand how happy she must be feeling on seeing Swayam again... N Swayam... Poor lad... He was in coma.. Bt then too, he subcountiously thought about her only.. Wow... N thank god he's out of coma now...
Edited by Swayamonly - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

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I m sooo sory yar!!! Newayz it was an awsum update as usual and i cant thnk u enuf fr d pm!!! Hw can any1 pen down such strong emotions so prfctly is beyond me!!!! U r an awsum writer!!! Kip writing more!! Nd update sun!!
Edited by shreyasi28 - 13 years ago

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