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Mrs.Salman Khan

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Posted: 14 years ago

#251

Hey i read the whole SS in one go..

Its jst amazingg!!! Evrbody write SS on Virman/Virika but u took a special jodi JeeMan..

I loved it!! And i was in tears while reading it..!!!!

I actually was imagining hw would they say it!!!

Its really heart touching!!!

Plzz add me in ur PM list

and pm me wenevr u update..

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Latika Gurung

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Posted: 14 years ago

#252

what a update dear...its amazing...loved it...:)sorry for late comment and really really thanx for ur pm...

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Posted: 14 years ago

#253

I finally read it😛 And i have to say, everytime you update, you always surprise me! The whole surprise element from M to J- (diya- alphabet- J's name- was a wonderful idea- and something i would expect from M's character- wouldnt it be awesome to have a similar scene on the show? especially since diyas have a great significance for the sisters (remember when M's diya burns out and J lights a diya to light her one- one of the most wonderful moment of the show-)

Woh khush hai toh hum sab khush hain…aur uski yeh khushi dekhne ke liye hum sab taras rahe the-something soo small and yet wonderful!! love this!

"Di jahan aapki baat ho wahan mujhe kisi se jaan-ne ya sunne ki zaroorat nahi padti- How fantastic is this?? man, love this-it fits to the whole aatma concept

I love the fact that you chose to end this part with these dialogues, it makes it even more special-"Meri Khushi tu hai… tu thik rahe hamesha, tu hasti rahe, aur mujhe kuch nahin chahiye bhagwan ji se-

Overall- a wonderful update- and the way you write, enables the reader to feel like they are there- at the scene- which is wonderful- another wonderful touch was you sharing that link which gave us an idea of the view- Sorry i took forever to read! Looking forward to your next update- keep up the good work😳

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Amii

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Posted: 14 years ago

#254

Take a bow, Neha!!!! Superb update; I was able to imagine and connect each and every word of yours; vivid images of Hrishikesh and Ganga Ghaat came in front of my eyes as if I was watching this as part of an episode! Will we ever see the enactment of such wonderful work of yours on tv? Just lazy with my posts otherwise I honestly love reading your posts and SS. And I should take a moment to comment on this another wonderful post of yours although I intended to do it right when I saw it but again work demanded my time and attention- here it is:

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/ek-hazaaron-mein-meri-behna-hain/3105016/unerasable-memories-bring-them-back

I saw this post first thing after waking up as I checked the forum and I could notice my eyes getting teary for that every second when I scrolled down till the end of the post! Easier to connect to emotions when you see them being projected on screen; however; these pictures spoke volumes and I really wondered where have those moments gone and will we ever get them back? They are classic Jeeman scenes that are now engraved in our memories and in our hearts! So thank you for such wonderful posts and especially on weekends, they serve as a great entertainment and reminder of the essence of the show or atleast what it was slated to be!!! Thank You, Neha!!!

Thought I should comment before heading to week long vacation as I probably forget all about it when I come back! So cya in a week and will look forward to catching up on your posts!!

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abc123s

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Posted: 14 years ago

#255

Hey pls continue... Amazing ff.

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NEHA KASHYAP

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Posted: 14 years ago

#256

Part 9

"aap mujhse naraaz hain??"

...

"Main jaanti hun aap naraaz hain mujhse... Main..woh aapse.."

"Main tumse naraaz nahin hun Jeevika.. Main khud se naraaz hun..naraaz hun toh main iss haalaat se... Naa chahte huye bhi maine tumhe bohat dard diya hai..."

"Aise mat kahiye... mujhe koi shikayat nahin hai aapse...Aapko pata hai na Manvi kya hai mere liye... Uski yeh haalat aur uss din achanak se itni saari baaton ka pressure itna zyada ho gaya tha ki mujhe kuch bhi samajh nahin aa raha tha... Manvi ko wapis paa ke bhi Mujhe aise lag raha tha maine kuch kho diya hai... bas usi sab ke chakkar mein maine aapko itna kuch keh diya... Par main jaanti hun ki aapne mujhe kyun itni badi sachayi nahin batayi... M sorry Viren ji"

"Nahin Jeevika...tum kyun sorry bol rahi ho? Sorry mujhe hona chahiye, mujhpe itna vishwas jo tum karti thi use maine tod diya... kahin na kahin maine tumhe bohat hurt kiya hai... ho sake toh mujhe maaf kar do..."

"Bas kijiye Viren ji...mujhe koi shikayat nahin hai aapse... bas mujhse vaada kijiye aap mujhe chod ke nahin jayenge kabhi... main kisi ek ke bina bhi adhoora feel karti hun...Pata nahin main aap ko kaise samjhaun... Ismein koi doubt nahin hai ki main Manvi ko sabse zyada pyar karti hun...par iska matlab yeh nahin hai ki mujhe aur kisi se koi lagaav nahin hai... Har aurat ka wajood apne pati se hota hai... Pati aur bachon se woh complete hoti hai... dono mein se ek bhi door ho jaaye toh takleef utni hi hoti hai... Uss din aap mujhe aise yahan bina bataye chod ke chale gaye..na phone na kuch, aapko pata hai mujhpe kya beet rahi thi? Jab mujhe sahare ki sabse zyada zaroorat thi tab aap kyun mujhe yahan aise chod ke wapis chale gaye..? aap hi toh kehte ho na main FM hun..sabki fikar karti hun... toh jo meri fikar karta hai woh kyun aise muh mod ke chala gaya tha?"

"Main muh mod ke nahin gaya tha Jeevika... Main bas chahta tha ki tum jitna ho sake utna woh sab bura bhoolne ki koshish kar pao.. main yahan hota toh tumhe har waqt wohi yaad aa ta ki kaise main tumhare paas hota tha har waqt, par phir bhi kabhi maine tumhe Manvi ke bare mein nahin bataya... "

"Aur kya laga aapko k aapke jaane se mujhe bohat sukkooon bohat shanti milegi??? Kyun mujhe khushiyan adhoori si milti hain?? boliye viren ji? jab mujhe khush hone ki koi wajah milti hai tabhi ek udaasi uske saath khadi dikhti hai mujhe?? Manya ke paida hone ki khushi thi toh Manvi ke door ho jaane pe kahin kho gayi, ab jab manvi ke milne ki khushi thi toh aap ke paas na hone ka dard hota tha?? kyunki aisa hota hai mere sath?"

"bas Jeevika...Bas shaant ho jao... Maaf kar do mujhe.. kuch der ke liye main yeh sochne laga tha ki tum sirf Manvi aur Manya ke sath khush reh logi, meri kami tumhe shayad mehsoos na ho... main khudgarz ban gaya tha..yeh bhool gaya tha ki sabko sahara dene wali ko bhi sahare ki zaroorat hai..sabko pyar baantne wali bhi pyaar paane ki hakdaar hai... Maaf kar do Jeevika mujhe... Main vaada karta hun ki aaj ke baad tumhara sath kabhi nahin chodunga... I promise..."

It was then when he came to Hrishikesh for Manvi's birthday...And then things got settled... I was happy that everything was fine now.. Dheere dheere sab acha hota jaa raha tha... sach kehte hain agar bhagwan ji bohat saare gham den toh samajh lena chahiye ki khushiyan ab door nahin... par khushiyan paake bhi kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki gham kahin agle mod pe toh nahin.. Par ab maine khud ko prepare kar liya tha... Mannu ko door jaata dekh chuki thi jo ki sabse bada gham tha... usse bada gham mere liye koi nahin hoga jise main sehan na kar paaun... Bas ab ek kaam aur baaki tha... Wapis chandigarh jaana, Manvi ko leke...aur uski sari reponsibility Viren ji ne le li thi..Bua ji aur dada ji ko manaana and all... aur jab tak humein Hrishikesh rehne ko kaha gaya tha...

A whinning sound brought me back from my dreamland...I looked at Manya who started crying not finding me beside her...i went to her settling on bed..I patted Manya's head as I spoke my usual pacifying words to put her to sleep. As I slid her under my comforter,I smiled to see her yawn n her eyes drifting off to sleep. I looked into those eyes till they were absolutely closed, n then sighing a little,my face broke into a smile. I could not explain to anyone what I was feeling..the joy my heart experienced when I saw Mannu like this..perhaps it was the same with every mother..but still, it was different..I was wondering how my both babies always give same looks...
I thought to take a nap when I got a msg from Viraat which scared me.. I tried to call back but no one answered… I stepped out of the bed…closed the door slowly as not to wake manya up… I quickly walked towards the main door when I heard door bell…

There both were standing outside, waiting for the door to open….. Without wasting a minute I turned to her with an angry look on my face. Then I saw her foot wounded by the dressing on it.

"Dii..woh"

I cut her in between...

"Dekh kar ni chal sakti tu…kitni baar kaha hai ki bahar nikle toh sath mein raha hai kar… kyun tujhe har baat baar baar samjhaani padti hai manvi??"

She looked at me all shocked that How had I come to know that she had injured herself?

"Di aapko kaise…."(her mouth open, then something clicked and she turned around to look at Viraat angrily) "VIRAAATT…TUM bakwas karne se kabhi baaz nahin aa sakte na"

"Naa…Tumhe bhabi se daant khane ka shauk hai mujhe nahin… aur maine unse promise kiya hai ki main koi bhi aisi baat unse kabhi nahin chupaunga…"

"Dekh lungi tumhe main baad mein bhabi ke chamche…"

"Usse kyun keh rahi hai, daant khane wale kaam khud karti hai tu..ab baith yahan aur dikha kitni chot lagi hai.."

I moved forward but She at once backed away.

"Nai di..itni zor se nahin lagi..sachi main thik hun..woh bas zara si paer mud gaya tha jab main ice cream lene bhaagi…"

I raised my eyebrows at her … "Muh band kar aur dikha mujhe" I bent down and took hold of her foot..

She closed her eyes, baring her teeth.

"Maaanviii…"

"Di ..Ghabrao mat..zayada dard ni ho raha…"

"Achaa?? Bhabi gaadi mein yeh chilaati aa rahi thi… mushkil se Dr Manan se iski bandage karrva ke laaya hun, werna yeh toh clinic mein ghus bhi nahin rahi thi…"

"Tum apni bak bak band karo..mera paer, meri chot, meri di…main baat kar rahi hun na…"

"Haan toh tum jo baat kar rahi ho us hisaab se tumhe chot lagi tak nahin.."

"CHUP KARO DONO….Kya baat hai… kyun ladte rehte ho.? Shadi ho gayi hai tum logon ki.. par bachon jaisi harkatein karte ho"

"Main toh bachi hi hun na di, aapki baby manvi, yahi budha hai aapka devar"

"Mannu"

"Dekha bhabi, aise baat karti hai yeh apne pati se"

"Haha pati, kabhi koi kaam kiya hai patiyon wala "

"Haan kiya hai naa…"

"Achaaa ?? batana zara kya kiya hai"

"Ummm..Umm…kiya yaad aa ni aa raha par kar sakta hun bohat kuch"

"Acha aur woh kya ?"

"Apni patni ko pyare pyare bache de sakta hun"

"KYAAA"

"Oye naughty…maarungi, aisi baatein aise openly nai karte…" I said

"Par yeh toh sach hai na bhabhi… par aapki behan na, pata ni kab badi hogi aur mere bachon ko duniya mein laayegi"

"Chiii bakwas band karo apni, aur jao yahaan se, mujhe aur meri di ko akela chod do… mujhe neeni karni hai di ki godi mein" She shouted at him settling her head in my lap…

"O madam, yeh humara ghar hai, yahan yeh tumhari di baad mein, meri bhabi pehle hai…"

"Tum na…."

"Mannu, gussa ni karte babu, chal tu eyes band karke so ja… (I turned to Virat) hmm toh devar ji ko bache pasand hain…"

"Bohattt… see, they bring a smile on our face when we are down….thats the best part..ab apni dono mannu ko hi dekh lo.." He said stretching the MANNU word for teasing Manvi..

"Di ise kaho chala jaye yahan se, main khoon kar dungi iska…"

"Khooni billi, nai jaunga, batao kya karogi… nai jaunga, yeh mera bhi ghar hai, mera bhi hall hai, meri bhi bhabi hai, " he said putting his head on my knee closer to Manvi's head..

"Viraaat…hattto… Yeh jagah sirf meri hai, tum sambhalo apna poora ghar aur yeh hall..saare kamre, sab lelo, mere liye yeh meri jannat hai…"

"Chal moti karvata hun tujhe jannat ki sair" with this he picked her up and took her to the main door and put her there on floor… "aaya maza"

"Chodungi nahin tumhe main virraaat….Ruko tum..."

I smiled looking at their antics...Waqt bhi kab karvat badal le pata hi nahin chalta… Laga tha main uss dard bhare daur se, uss takleef se kabhi ubhar hi nahin paaungi…ab shayad main kabhi aise has nahin paaungi jaise main Manvi se door hone se pehle hasti thi, uske saath, uske liye, mera har action, har reaction sirf uske liye hota tha, yeh ehsaas use door hone ke baad hua tha jab main kisi baat pe react nahin kar paati thi..sab kuch khokhla lagta tha… par aaj who hai toh sab kuch apna lagta hai..har cheez pe react karne ko mann karta hai phir chaahe who hansi aur ya aansoo… Manvi hai toh yeh duniya duniya lagti hai.. aur yeh sachayi hai , kuch cheezein hain shuru se mujh mein jo main badal nahin sakti…Jaise agar koi mujhse kahe ki Manya ki fikar karna ya uski itni care , use itna pyar karna chod de, toh who main nahin kar paungi, koi bhi maa nahin kar paayegi, waise hi main Manvi ke liye bhi nahin kar paaungi… Dono mein se kisi ko bhi kuch hoga toh takleef mujhe ek jaisi hi hogi… bilkul usi tarah jaise haath ki kisi ek ungli ko kaat do par dard barabar hi hoga… Kehte hain buri yaadon ko chaahe bhoolne mein time lagta hai par humein koshish karte rehna chahiye…buri yaadein sirf Dard deti hain, khud ko bhi aur apno ko bhi… Buri yaadon ka saaya chaahe jitna bhi bada kyun Na ho...Khushiyon ke chand lamhe hi unhe mita dete hain… Uss ek saal ke bure saal mein jo jo bhi hua, who kabhi bhulaya toh nahin jaa sakta, mannu se uss judayi ki takleef ab bhi hogi par uske paas hone ke ehsaas se badi nahin… Kehte hain na bichad ke milna ka sukh sabse pyara hota hai…Aaj who mere paas hai…Khush hai Mrs Manvi Vadhera ban kar… meri devrani ban kar…jitney rishte utne naam par mere liye who hamesha Meri Mannu hi rahegi…

''Ummm..mmm..'' as I heard Mannu's voice I got shocked, I immediately turned and saw Viren ji standing holding Manya..

"aap?? Aap Aa bhi gaye?? "

"Aapka hukum ho aur hum naa aayen..aisa hua hai kabhi Mrs Vadhera?"

"Hey bhagwan apne ise kyun utha diya..? abhi toh main sula ke aayi thi.."

"yaar maine thodi uthaya hai, main jab gaya room mein toh yeh jagi hui thi"

"Haan haan pata hai mujhe… aapko khelna hota hai iske sath par sambhalti toh hai nahin aapse… aur phir laa ke mujhe pakda dete ho… kitne kaam pade hain karne wale..ab kaam karun ya ya ise sambhalun..?"

"Acha meri maa, lao pakdao meri beti, main kaise bhi sambhaal lunga, tum jao apne kaam karo...huh"

"Pehli baat main aapki beti ki maa hun..aapki nahin… aur dusri baat aap ise nahin sambhaal payenge, who roti rahegi aur mera dhyan ismein laga rahega… dijiye idhar mere paas"

"Nahin tum jao..main apni princess ke sath khelunga… chalo chalo baby hum khelnge…" As he moved from there, Manya started crying looking at me as she wanted me to take her… "

"princess hum dono khelenge" he put her pacifier in her mouth.. " shhh rona nai…ache bache rote nahin"

Manya became quiet, her tears were still streaming down.

"Hamesha roti rehti hai…bilkul Maa pe gayi hai'' he said cleaning up her tears..

"KYAAA??" I asked staring at him

He turned around and gulped , " who..mm..woh main keh raha tha, manya bilkul tum pe gayi hai, I mean iski aankhein dekho, kitni pyari hain tumhare jaisi"

"Hmmm'' I glared at him and then walked to them and wiped her face and kissed her..

I made my way to kitchen thinking abt coming event.. I was going to be a big day for us.. I was still in my thoughts when i felt someone holding me from my waist..

booom...

"Aap bhi na.. dara hi diya tha mujhe.. Mannnu kahan hai?"

"Woh Maanvi aur Viraat ke paas hai.. maine socha ab woh so rahi hai toh uski jagah uski mamma ka pyar main le leta hun"

"Aap bhi na... Acha ghar pe sab thik hai?? aapne baat ki Dada ji se?"

"Iske baare mein hum kal baat karenge... Abhi toh aaya hun yaar... thoda sa dhyan apne pati pe bhi de dijiye Mrs Vadhera"

"Haan kyun nahin... chaliye khana laga deti hun..thak ho gaye honge aap..."

"Khana hum baad mein mil ke khaa lenge... Tum yeh sab chodo..chalo mere sath..."

"Arey par...kya kar rahe hain aap..neeche utaariye mujhe..."

"Nahin.. "

"Aaj nahin Mrs Vadhera...Bachna chaahen toh koshish kar ke dekh lijiye..Par hum toh aaj Aapko nahin chodne wale..."

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Sorry for the late update guys... But next one which will be the last one, i will do it soon..probably in 2-3 days... till then enjoy this one...its not up to the mark i know.. but things as usual didnt go well as i wanted them to.. Anyways cya all with next update..till then take care...

Love,
Neha..

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sania

@Krazzy4u786

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Posted: 14 years ago

#257

Awesome...loved it!!!
Continue soon & thanks 4 the pm!!

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Sameerakryan

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Posted: 14 years ago

#258

really good plzz continue soon

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kalpana

@jia123sagar

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Posted: 14 years ago

#259

awesome update

thanks

plz continue soon

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Richa Tiwary

@MTBT_12071316

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Posted: 14 years ago

#260

Wow!!!!! U r an amazing writter...splendid work dear
evrytym i think dat its d bst update 4rm yr side.bt u amazd me evry tym u update.i m in luv wid yr style of describing feelings of jeevika.i jst luv d viren jeevika convo nd d line"mannu ke bina duniya duniya nai lgti"nd many more lines bt i cnt list dem ol as d list is vry long, it will nt end
Bt i really enjoyd reading it.cont soon nd thanx 4 d pm

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