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Posted: 14 years ago
tht was awesomee updatee,,
thet feelingss and their pain in being apartt
were shown beauitfull..
thnx 4 pm😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
sorry for the late comment ...lovely os ...thnx for the pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
Sorry for the delay in commenting, but I finally got around to checking my PMs and saw your PM, and actually did a little happy dance before reading.

I...I..just...I...I am actually rendered speechless by how amazingly beautifully that entire chapter was written. It was...actually no joke, amazing. I know I should probably come up with more adjectives, but honestly, your chapter has wiped my brain clean, and I am literally alost grasping at straws to explain how much I loved it.

Starting from how he let her in, to how he craved to be closer to her, to how the fear of leaving nagged the back of both their minds, to how the urgency of being together the last time drove them forward. That slap. I gasped out loud, and I love how you hinted at the anger that started in Arnav - because that is so ASR. But then you showed that he realised that he did not want this moment to go away, he realised she was leaving soon, and wanted her - wanted all of her.

You write their love scenes so beautifully, that it brought a tear in my eye at how amazingly well it was written.
Great work!
I am in love with your writing and your attention to detail :)

~K
Edited by Krani - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
I just found this and read it all in one go. This is beautiful ff and it is beautifully written. I really want to thanku for writing such wonderful work. I will start rules of attraction now and I just know that I am going to love that too. The last update made me cry, I just hope it wouldn't be the last time. Please on me whenever you continue.
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Posted: 14 years ago
amazin parts
congo for new thread
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Posted: 14 years ago
Have just started reading Cherished Wounds ... really love the story and the way you write ... ⭐️
Edited by Kishmish - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
I actually cried reading this...Its s0 much full 0f p0tential heartbreaks and n0t t0 menti0n the heartbreaks that hav already 0ccurred...the characters hav been p0trayed s0 str0ng and s0...real. This is n0 fairytale st0ry, n0 damnsel in distress n0r this is the acti0n packed drama with very much m0rally s0und her0ine facing the hardships 0f life that can 0nly 0ccur in their lyf...The hardships here in this st0ry is real and the l0ve sh0wn is s0 pure and beautiful yet c0mpletely practical...cud u plz pm me??
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Posted: 14 years ago
That was intense and beautiful...but with a air of sadness. He didn't tell her to stay and kept going on about how this was the last time.

Beautifully written.
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Posted: 14 years ago



CW#17| Grief


[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=An9lue176Og[/YOUTUBE]



Khushi scrunched up her eyes, slowly opening them, as the soft sunlight dazzled its way into them. As soon as she took in the beautiful surroundings of the shikara, the events of the night before flooded her mind, she turned around to find the other side of the bed empty. Her fingers moved from under the shawl she was draped in and over the white bed sheet. It was still warm, but there was not a single crease on the other side. Almost as is if...last night hadn't happened, Khushi thought. She heard voices outside the boat, not Arnav's gruff but Aakash's mild tones. Almost on a cue, he entered the boat, his face impassive.

"Hi," Aakash mumbled, the tight smile on his lips giving away the tension lurking in his eyes. "What's wrong?" Khushi let slip the question whose answer she already dreaded to hear. So when moments later Aakash's words rattled out into the air, a dull pain settled, slowly but permanently in her heart. "He left. Arnav, his father...Azaan, he had a cardiac arrest, earlier this morning." Aakash wanted to say much more, but he couldn't form one complete sentence, as the sudden turn of events weighed down upon him. So he walked towards her form that was leaning against the bedpost drawing in much needed support and enveloped her in his own trembling arms. Khushi didn't cry, she could just hear her own shallow breaths and feel Aakash's hands caressing her hair. The tears would come eventually, she knew. She could already sense them aggregating somewhere behind the throbbing pain in her head. But as Aakash spoke again, she decided she would acknowledge that pain later. Later, when she would be alone.

"Khushi your train will leave in a few hours. We should be heading to the Station." Khushi nodded, telling him that she would be out in a few minutes. Half a second later when she heard the door being closed softly behind her, she moved from over the bed towards the tinted glass window of the boat. She saw her blurry reflection on the glass and couldn't stop herself from thinking that before he had left he had taken care to dress her properly, not leave a hair was out of place. Combed, they were loosely tie into a messy, but otherwise beautiful braid.

But yes, I do love you.

My father is the most important part of my life.

Mechanically, she walked towards the door, and exited the place that would bear in its drapings and immaculate furnishings, the bittersweet memories of two people, for a long time.

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The cold wind bellowed through the valley, weaving through Khushi's hair, washing over her face, and unintentionally bringing back memories of days that seemed to her, occurred years ago. The air, biting cold chaffed at her lips, making her shiver, partly in apprehension, partly due to an unacknowledged reason of distress.

"You should leave now, Khushi. It's a long journey ahead." Aakash said for the umpteenth time that morning, trying to ignore the pleading, tormented look of Khushi's face. They had been waiting, sipping coffee, in silent hope that Arnav might come. Hoping that he would once show his face, or even call. Somehow, Khushi couldn't make herself leave before seeing him for one last time. An hour went by, bringing forth the wake of another. He didn't come.


"Can't I go and meet him once?" Khushi let out a barely audible whisper. "The Base is too far from the Station Khushi, it will take a lot of time." Aakash said, resignedly.


When an hour later, Aakash asked her to leave, she blinked away the fresh batch of stinging tears, and asked the driver to start the jeep.

The engine came to life, and with the faint blaring of the radio, Khushi left the place that had changed her in unexplainable ways for a lifetime.

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Aakash scuttled through the hospital corridors and entered the room, apprehending the sight that might greet him once he came to face the occupants of that room.

What greeted him was a disheveled Arnav, his face buried in his hands, as his bloodshot eyes shot up to meet Aakash's face. "He'll be fine in no time, Arnav. Try not to worry." Aakash held Arnav's shoulders, trying to reassure him with his words. "Anjali, have you seen her?" Arnav asked, his face mirroring shades of anger and those of grief. "She was here for hours before you reached. I told her to leave for some time and get some rest." Arnav nodded, walking towards the curtained windows of the hospital room, his eyes contemplating of both the past and the future. His eyes misted up, before his words came out in raspy stammers.

"Maybe if I'd been here, none of this would have happened." Aakash swallowed a nonexistent lump down his throat, his mind registering what Arnav meant. He spoke, although knowing, that none of what he would say, had the chance of changing the way he was thinking. "Arnav, you being here or not wouldn't have stooped the attack. Don't blame yourself unnecessarily." Aakash watched as the man across him sighed heavily, his hands harshly brushing away the dampness under his eyes. They both stood immobile in the gloomy room, not knowing what to say, what to feel, not acknowledging for the moment the question, the answer that needed to be asked and heard, eventually. When about an twenty minutes later Aakash offered to get him some coffee, sauntering out of the door, Arnav's hoarse, choked voice halted him abruptly.

"Aakash..?"

The words were not needed to be spelled out properly. That dull, pained look in his eyes that gave way to a few more tears, made Aakash answer almost immediately.

"Khushi left a while ago. She waited for you. For almost three hours."

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A/N- I know this is short, but it was necessary. That last chapter and moreover the first phase of CW needed closure, this is it. Thank you!:)



Edited by mistyrains - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Yayyy I am first...Sona, thanks for sending me the link...You are a sweetheart!!!

Awww This made me sad, their pain and the eventual future that they had to embark on, with or without each other.
His father was a very important part of his life, and he couldnt have neglected that, but I hope he doesnt blame himself or their relation for what happened to his father.
I can only imagine how Khushi must be feeling, torn between the man she loves and the future that lies in front of her, she so wanted to meet him, but she couldnt. He wanted to see her too, but circumstances prevented both of them.
It was so sweet of Arnav to dress her up be before leaving from the shikara. He braided her hair, wow only a guy as sensitive as Arnav can do that.

Heart-wrenching and beautiful, honey!

Loved it!!

Edited by inspiringstars - 14 years ago

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