A Raghavi Poem: Woh Pal

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Dear Friends 🤗,

Had penned down this one quite some time back... after the Raghav-Siya engagement which all went wrong... ...

I know the story has moved forward with Raghav trying to overcome the heartburn... Sorry for the late post...

This is written from the point of view of Raghav

Bashers, a humble request : Please stay away


Woh Pal

Woh pal jo humne sang guzaare,

Pal jo kabhi the sang humare,

Pal jo ab beeth gayen hain,

Ja baithen hain us kinaare...

Woh pal jinki yaadein,

Jeevan mein reh jaati hain,

Pal jo in aankhon ko,

Naye aansoo de jaati hain...

Bharkar jeevan mein mithaas,

Jeene ki aas dikhati hai,

Kabhi bankar woh saaye,

Har pal yuhin sataati hai...

Yaadon ka naam dekar,

Palon ko sulaya hai,

Badi mushkil se humne,

Is dil ko manaya hai...

Har pal mein aapki,

Yaadein basi hui hai,

Palkhon par aansoo hokar bhi,

Labon par hasi ruki hui hai...

Yeh zindagi kab tak humein,

Yun judah rakh payeegi?

Raat se ghiren ab par,

Kal subah ho jayegi...

Pal jo humne sang gujare,

Laut aayengen pal woh saare,

Aap bhi honge hum bhi honge,

Saath chalenge us kinaare.


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So Friends, was it worth the read?... Plz do leave ur comments... it means a lot 😊



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Posted: 13 years ago
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Sneha 🤗

This was a bit different from what u wrote earlier n I really loved it

my fav lines are...

"Har pal mein aapki,

Yaadein basi hui hai,

Palkhon par aansoo hokar bhi,

Labon par hasi ruki hui hai..."


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Posted: 13 years ago
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sneha...
i want one poem on raghav's pain...his heart break..
p.s loved this one!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: betty123

Sneha 🤗

This was a bit different from what u wrote earlier n I really loved it

my fav lines are...

"Har pal mein aapki,

Yaadein basi hui hai,

Palkhon par aansoo hokar bhi,

Labon par hasi ruki hui hai..."



Thanks Betty dear 🤗,

For commenting and...

Yes, this was written with minimal words... no heavy weighing words used... rather this was one of the crumpled sheets in my best friend's stomach ( my study room trash can)... was the first draft ... hadn't been in a mood to continue with the poem's next draft after all the prev episodes...

Rather the last two para were written after yesterday's episode...it gave me some hope...
Had hell of a time emptying my trash can... n now my study is a mess😕... All thanks to RAGHAVI... Gosh cant even loose my temper on them... I'm such a goner 😍

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: -vandy-

sneha...

i want one poem on raghav's pain...his heart break..
p.s loved this one!



Thanks for liking it Sweets 🤗

U want me to go back to a somber mood... asking one poem on raghav's pain...

Abi to umeed ki kiran dikhi hai yaar...

Raghavi ki kashti mein phir se aasuon ki bauchar?


Try karoongi...

Sirf Tere Liye
(HC's Anurag Style 😉)


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Posted: 13 years ago
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very , very beautiful 😍

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks Amira dear 🤗



Originally posted by: HarshadAnupriya

very , very beautiful 😍



Glad u found it beautiful HarshadAnupriya 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
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just beautiful sneha, really u rock man..👍🏼

As vandy di said, one poem on RAGHAV's heartbreak and pain, plsss.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: harshu.sundas

just beautiful sneha, really u rock man..👍🏼


As vandy di said, one poem on RAGHAV's heartbreak and pain, plsss.



Thanks Sun Sweets 🤗

Surely will come up with something dear...😃

Sirf Vandy di aur Tere Liye ( HC Anurag style) 😉... there i see Vandy di hurling her chappal for being repetitive with HC style 😆


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Posted: 13 years ago
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Ah Sneha what should I say..
You were awesome as ever di.Aapko bayaan karne ke liye alfaaz hi nahin hain mere paas..
As you always do...You have brought all the scenes and emotions of Raghav.
I love all your posts.Keep up the good work di!

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