OS: The Making of Shyam

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OS: The Making of Shyam


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Posted: 14 years ago
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dam you have me stumped awesome os
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Hi dumas,

Thanks for commenting. It's my first OS so I thought I'd write about Shyam instead of Arhi. Glad you liked it.

Take care,

KF
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Posted: 14 years ago
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This was like watching part of a thriller on the big screen.

I like the way you give your story that flow which the show itself lacks, and what you produce seems to improve and make the story a lot more interesting. Makes it worth my precious time.

You have given us a rare inside look at the early part of the character Shyam's life, and how he underwent bullying by both adults and his equals.

You have opened the reader's eyes as to why he is, the way he is, where his venom comes from, how it originated, and how it was instrumental in pushing him to his limits..

I also love your title: The Making Of Shyam.

Brilliant. Short and very intriguing.

You should be writing for the big screen.

You are extremely talented and have the golden touch, which I didn't get a feel for, when I read the other writing on this forum.

You have made Shyam more interesting than any other character, in my opinion, he's got grit, he's got that evil side of him, and now we get a glimpse as to how Shyam became Shyam.

This was missing, and you provided it, making his character more mesmerizing, notable, one that stays with long after you finish reading about him.

Your writing is mature and well thought out, it reads more like a script made for the silver screen. I flatter you not, I am completely sincere in what I say.

It is my job to spot talent.

Please consider writing film screenplays if you have time.

Josh
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Mr.TalentScout

This was like watching part of a thriller on the big screen.

I like the way you give your story that flow which the show itself lacks, and what you produce seems to improve and make the story a lot more interesting. Makes it worth my precious time.

You have given us a rare inside look at the early part of the character Shyam's life, and how he underwent bullying by both adults and his equals.

You have opened the reader's eyes as to why he is, the way he is, where his venom comes from, how it originated, and how it was instrumental in pushing him to his limits..

I also love your title: The Making Of Shyam.

Brilliant. Short and very intriguing.

You should be writing for the big screen.

You are extremely talented and have the golden touch, which I didn't get a feel for, when I read the other writing on this forum.

You have made Shyam more interesting than any other character, in my opinion, he's got grit, he's got that evil side of him, and now we get a glimpse as to how Shyam became Shyam.

This was missing, and you provided it, making his character more mesmerizing, notable, one that stays with long after you finish reading about him.

Your writing is mature and well thought out, it reads more like a script made for the silver screen. I flatter you not, I am completely sincere in what I say.

It is my job to spot talent.

Please consider writing film screenplays if you have time.

Josh



Hi Josh,

Thanks so much for your kind comments on The Making of Shyam I am so glad you liked it. Yes, you are correct in your observation. The Shyam in my writing is very different from the one on the TV show. Mine is more diabolical. I don't think the Shyam on the show is as psychopathic as mine is. It is so gratifying to read that you like what I have done to change the character from the one we see on TV.

Actually I am working on editing my first novel. I'm a mystery writer by trade. I plan to publish my first mystery novel. It is in the editing stages right now and then I had planned on turning it into a movie script. So thank you very much for the encouragement. It is good to know that a professional in your field thinks my writing is worthy of scriptwriting for movies. I'm thrilled to say the least. Please keep in touch with your comments. It helps me be a better screenplay writer. Thank you.

Best wishes to you,

KF
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Posted: 14 years ago
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great update. You captured his mind perfectly to show why he is how he is.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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god. now i feel like he IS a mass murderer! arghhh
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Originally posted by: bmtdluver

great update. You captured his mind perfectly to show why he is how he is.



Hi bmtdluver,

I so glad you liked it. I appreciate your comments about the character. He's very different from the Shyam on the show. I thought it would be fun to write about his beginnings. Thank you so much for commenting. Appreciate it greatly.

Take care,

KF
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: malluangel

god. now i feel like he IS a mass murderer! arghhh



Hi malluangel,

That is exactly how I would want him to be perceived. Mind you he is totally different from the one we see on the show. I think mine is more of a psychopath or a 'mass murderer' as you put it. Thank you for your thoughts on this OS. Appreciate you taking the time. It's all pre-Khushi stuff and it's a different part of his life. His early years which I thought would be interesting to explore.

Take care,

KF
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Just read the OS!

This was wonderful..

Obviously, the fact that he killed a cat for revenge is not great, but the way you portrayed his ruthlessness, and his desperation.

It was beautiful.

You should consider getting published, seriously.

I loved your descriptive abilities, and I had goosebumps, no joke!

Please continue writing, and I'm angry you got such a little response! I'm referring this, if that's okay with you?

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